Page Three |
My fiction is publicly available on web sites that allow readers to post public comments about what they have read. These comments are an indication of the views of ordinary readers. In the interests of shameless and blatant self-promotion, I reproduce here those comments that have been complimentary. These comments are already publicly available.
Hung Over |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
The reflection of the club and drugs scene is well done. As is the confusion we have all felt due to intoxicants in our time. The sex is casual, but the story expands on the unwanted side effects both of the sex and by implication the �club scene�. The writing is nicely detached which matches the style of the piece Clare�s final decision is nicely observed. |
|||||||||
I Remember Erewhon |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
Lush Stories |
Lyrical. Mystic. Touching. Why are you not doing this professionally? |
||||||||
International Cowgirl |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
Lush Stories |
Excellent!!!
Great hot story. You just added fun back into the
Olympics. Waiting for the 300 man marathon. Great idea. Great
read and very well done. |
||||||||
Lush Stories |
This is a very interesting story. The introspective nature of the story I found enjoyable. The metaphor of a sex athlete for any other field that you feel you have reached your peak in is also good. I can see the same type of ideas and emotions going on in the head of anyone ready to leave a job they have done for a long time. Maybe I'm reading too much into it. |
||||||||
Koochy |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
The Erotic Scream |
Natalia |
Classy You really are a writer! Real atmospheric. I was amused to hear a Brit say, Fucking A. Kind of a more universal term than I thought. |
|||||||
The Erotic Scream |
Wicked! Do you know...I think I was at this party :) Impressive writing and hot pierced lesbian sex! Sums up North London parties brilliantly. Loving your work. |
||||||||
Anonymous |
THAT IS
SOME VERY GOOD WRITING
I enjoyed getting lost in the details as they come out. Your sentences so clearly describe actions as thoughts occur I could see her moving to kiss her new lover. That description, "tasting sweat and navigating the contours of the hard reddish skin of the aureole of motherhood," just awed me. |
||||||||
Lush Stories | Bugs | This piece is so good that I am at a loss for words. Raw emotions, poetic prose. Hot action and a hint of sadness. Nice writing. | |||||||
Lonely as a Cloud |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
Anonymous |
Refreshing even while sad. Nice to see something that takes a somewhat different view of things. |
||||||||
Love Is Blind |
|||||||||
Rajah Dodger |
Awwwww... A lovely little story, elegantly described. |
||||||||
True Love
It is not often that I read a story where the essence of true love is demonstrated. The closing lines of this story indicate exactly that. This is good writing.
|
|||||||||
Thank you so much!
I enjoy reading about fictional but realistic people who have persisted in overcoming life�s adversities to their great benefit. Could I be that strong?
|
|||||||||
Beautiful reflections. . .
|
|||||||||
Anonymous |
Probably not the best reason to like it
|
||||||||
Wonderful
|
|||||||||
Lush Stories |
A great story. I liked that you made the characters full and real and made their disabilities simply a part of who they were. The focus on the love and romance, while allowing their disabilities to remain in the background, show how they were like any other couple emotionally. |
||||||||
Lush Stories |
Good writing...great character development...enjoyable read. Being blind myself, I appreciated the job you did on making her blindness an important element in the story. |
||||||||
Night Out |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
Anonymous |
A
beautiful story
This
is really a beautiful tale, which captures the essence of Modern
British Youth, its present and future! I cannot wait for the next
installment! One very minor caveat; your portrayal is a bit too
sanitized. Next time, don't worry about offending the audience! Tell it
like it REALLY is! |
||||||||
Not Naked in School |
|||||||||
Anonymous |
Cool Very original. |
||||||||
Anonymous |
Oppoite of the Nudist A great
twist on the idea of nudism. |
||||||||
Dressed in School?
Bradley Stoke did a humorous short on this variation - where a girl had to go to school clothed and not let anyone touch in a world where everyone was nude and highly sensual. |
|||||||||
One Snip Short |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
Rajah Dodger |
Very cool story! Enjoyed it! |
||||||||
Anonymous |
I think that your story was romantic and beautiful in its own right. Good job. Keep on writing!
|
||||||||
Anonymous |
Read the Title of the Story Good
Lawdy Lawdy, do none of the readers read the Titles of the Tales?
|
||||||||
Interesting
Well written, like the character development, subtle clues that only added to the story.
|
|||||||||
Party Slave |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
Steve150177 |
Not
a jill/jack off story, but ... This
story clearly illustrates the 2nd reason that real (as opposed to
consensual) slavery is always evil. |
||||||||
Peace Returns |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
Anonymous in USA |
I hated it-in a backwards kind of way
It took me a few paragraphs (ok, more than I�d like to admit) but this was a very original way to explore a life spiralling out of control.
Very consistent and well done
|
||||||||
Anonymous in nedewS |
!taerG
.levels
many so on backwards was that, Wow. |
||||||||
Anonymous |
Great Writing
This is great writing, and one of the most original pieces I've read.
|
||||||||
Anonymous in USA |
GREAT STORY
What a powerful story. Another take on the downward spiral. This should be required reading for everyone who has ever taken that first step. |
|
|||||||
Reality |
|||||||||
|
|||||||||
X Wives |
JoJo Jinx |
I just read a new Bradley Stoke�s story over on ASSM. He calls it Reality but really it is about virtual reality.
|
|||||||
Sliding Sideways |
|||||||||
Lush Stories | Sitting | Loved this. I enjoyed Sliding Doors (the movie) but this was just perfect. A great idea and I love how you altered events... or did you?! Excellently written! |