| >> | No. 289 File 129869897749.jpg - (32.76KB , 604x588 , 1297231221131.jpg ) Hey, readin the story now, really liking it. Some constructive criticism though - be careful with your tenses - it jumps from past to present a wee bit. Also, you say about pinky maybe enjoying having mer mane set on fire that >"even with the unicorn it's be a close thing" - I thought Pinky was an earth pony? I teach English, so can't help but point out little things like that, sorry! But this is just little stuff, the rest is really cool ^_^ I've only just started reading, and just wanted to let you know that it's really awesome, I really like it - the bit where Twilight blushes had me get all uncomfortable and twitchy like it was me, very well don |