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#1 niallgibson93

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 03:02 PM

Greetings,

I have recently finished my submission house and am in need of critique.

It is located on plot 63 of the submissions world.

My in game name is niallgibson93.

Thanks.

#2 Luna Lens

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 05:50 PM

Any locations will be give relative to the front of your plot.

Exterior
> The spruce logs and sandstone create a very high contrast on the outside, whereas most Ponyville houses are whitewashed.
> With the previous statement in mind, materials like smooth sandstone or even sand would look more attractive than regular sandstone.
> The slope of the roof is a bit too gentle. You might be interested in a 2/1 slope instead of 1/1.
> The shape of the house is good, the log-patter is good as well.
> the 1st-floor windows on the left wall are a tad small.
> Your porch is made of stone-based materials. These kinds of blocks wouldn't be advisable for any kind of flooring.
> Besides the leaves, there is no vegetation. A garden in a visible area would help to alleviate the blandness of just having a house.

Interior
> Your first floor is a bit awkward and bland, especially the Dining area (top right, 1st floor).
> The fireplace is rather obtrusive, but I wouldn't worry too much about it.
> The kitchen is okay.
> The main area of the 2nd floor is lacking in color. Whereas you want a whitewashed look on the outside, the inside should have a bit more color variation (that doesn't mean rainbow carpets n' stuff like that).
> The walls of the bathroom are practically bare.
> The study is very bland.
> The bedroom also has the same problem.
> The attic is good--better than most I've seen, actually (attics are usually expected be boring and fairly empty, so your attic is pretty good as is).v

Recommendations
> the 1st and 2nd floor need better furniture (try /warp Ikea).
> The exterior is lacking some kind of decorative element to break from the monotony of sandstone and log walls (try a garden).

Verdict
I think this house will, at worst, receive an improve. Your house isn't that bad in terms of being a canon Ponyville house. You need to concentrate both on the interior and exterior in order to guarantee a pass. Good luck.

Edited by Laser_Lens_4, 04 January 2013 - 05:50 PM.


#3 dazhito23

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 08:28 PM

I want to add that the overhanging for the attic bedroom is a little awkward. Typically, any supports for overhanging upper floors would be orthogonal (contains right angles). Yours is a little more like an obtuse triangle, so you might want to change that. Also, the glowstone near the roof is unnecessary -- no canon Ponyville house contains that kind of material, nor does the material used remotely look like glowstone.

#4 Luna Lens

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 11:57 PM

Oh! I forgot to mention that you should do one of the following: align the path with the existing door, or align the door with the existing path.


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