Good evening! I'm Ruler and I'll be critiquing you today. I am very hard on people about their houses, so please don't take anything I say personally, I have nothing against you at all.
A + Is a good thing, a - is a bad thing, and a + - is a personal preference that may/may not be good or bad.
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Exterior.
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- Wow, I warped and my mouth literally fell open a bit. It looks like a fancy modern resort! Much less windows, the front shape is very circular in places, I gave it the name Circle Resort. I would stick to a bit of a less round shape, a box is not good, but a lopsided x or a unique shape is a good area to start with.
- Like previously stated, much less window! A 1x5 (l x h) Is much, much too tall. Keep the height below 4. Also, the windows are chaped to fit the building, keep it at square windows. Ideal size is a 3x2 (l x h) or a 2x2.
- The house is much too tall, I would say don't go above 25 blocks, as I believe 24 is the rule for canon Ponyville.
- The roof shape throws me off, I like even roofs that connect nicely with a point, and this is definitely not that.
- The back left corner of the house is not supported at all, very dangerous, give it a support beam or something! Same with the balcony, support, or it would collapse.
- That flat roof area bothers, you shouldn't have a flat space on the roof that large, or at all. The roof should be nice and sharp, like so,
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- The windows lack some nice flower pots, and nice flowers. Pretty it up and add to the exterior appeal.
- Don't use glass blocks for windows, use panels instead. Blocks are too thick and ugly.
- As previously said, lose the round areas of the house. They are not what you would see in Ponyville at all, please try to look at /w ponyville again.
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Interior.
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- I really like how you tried to make it open concept, but it didn't work out very well. Honestly, I think that you should close it off more. I wouldn't want to just walk in the house and plainly see the entire first floor.
+ You did well with furniture ideas.
- There just isn't ENOUGH furniture. It gets repetitive and boring. Also, tip, I wouldn't use furniture of the same color of the floor, they blend too well.
- Less walls of books.
- The stairs could use some railings, for safety of course.
- The kitchen is a bit boring and barren. Add some pizazz, like flower pots and such. To make it colorful.
+ - Never have liked piston tables to be honest. I'm not a fan of it, sorry.
- The second floor hallway is so empty, add some furniture.
- The lighting shouldn't be glowstone in the floor, some nice upper lights would be great and pretty.
- The bedroom has potential, I think if you added more furniture it would be great.
- The bathroom is in the attic? I wouldn't want to walk all the way up there just to pee at midnight, I would trip on those stairs.
- Again, less books. A lot less books. So many book walls. Replace them with actual furniture and make it feel like you didn't just want to fill space with a wall of books.
- You need a lot more attic clutter, there isn't enough clutter up there and it should be really full. It's a STORAGE attic, it should be full of stuff.
- The whole house is just so empty feeling, it feels like a newly renovated house that hasn't been moved into yet. It should feel like a family could live there happily and have a great home and be a healthy family. Fill it up with furniture and make it feel cozy.
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Verdict.
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This house would not pass, the shape is too off and awkward to feel right for Ponyville. I recommend you work on house shape, roof shape, and interior design before you try for builder. Go look back at /w ponyville, and use logblock to check each house. Don't go off houses from before mid 2013. Good luck on your next practice house.
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Cheers,
-Ruler
Edit : I may add more things, I realize I got a bit lazy.
Edited by Rulerofblocks, 04 August 2014 - 02:39 AM.