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#1 greebster

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Posted 16 September 2012 - 11:00 PM

I have been inspired by our lovely community to write an ongoing fan-fiction. The main interest of this story is that the Brohoof are secret guardians of Equestria. They essentially do the hard work nopony else wishes to do. I want you guys and girls to be in the story!
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The following Demo will represent the tale of Brohoof up to recent date, I will then proceed to write a full-blown novel, practically. But for now, read this to get involved:

Before Celestia's ascent to the throne, the land of Equestria was governed by the leaders of the three pony races. Having not lived in the province very long, the ponies were vulnerable to any enemies that lurked there. To protect their ponies, the three races agreed upon the making of an elite group as secret as the dark forces that sought to destroy them. It was decided that the group should be named the Brohoof, or 'Brothers of the Hoof.'

This daring team was managed by Kilorat, a young Alicorn with great loyalty to his ponyfolk. After many years of hardship, the new land was safe and the Brohoof faded out of existence, any mention of them was erased from record. For hundreds of years Equestria's citizens lived in harmony, until the day of Griffontide...
The day the sky turned red with the tint of war. Seven years later, the war still waged, a fight between Ponies and Griffons.

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Above the land of Equestria, the smoky sky had turned flinty-grey. As of the land itself, a vast plain of broken, mutilated corpses. Grass, once emerald green, now stained a morbid crimson of the blood of many. Weapons returned to the earth wence their ore had been prised, coated in sticky gore next to their owners. The blood gets everywhere, thought Beringor Bittermane to himself grimly. Sitting on a stump, he observed the aftermath of their final battle with anguish, their leaders call this victory?

He shook his head as fresh horrors returned unbidden to his mind. He remembered running through the Everfree forest with his wife, behind them a hungry fire chased, devouring everything in its path. Others had been travelling with them, only to perish in the heat and smoke. Dragons had attacked their camp, burning anything and anypony in sight, Beringor lost his son, Fleetfire Bittermane in the confusion. Whether dead or alive, he didn't know. However he feared the former.

Beringor stood up, no more fighting now. He unhooked his sword from his hoof and cast it down contemptuously. I Buckin' hate war, Beringor felt strength in that thought, never again would he wield a weapon. Looking east he smiled for the first time in years, time to go home. Well, if Canterlot can be called home, he mused; his wife and child were his home, currently one was missing, so a broken home at that.

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A truce was made between Equestria and the invading Griffon Dominion. Princess Celestia agreed to give land in the north to them which the griffons named The Griffon Kingdom. Equestria is weakened by Griffontide, unprepared for any abrupt attacks. Sadly an attack is exactly what they get. Princess Celestia gets an unprecedented visit by Chrysalis, queen of the changeling horde, disguised as a distant cousin.

Welcoming her warmly, Princess Celestia knew nothing of the hidden danger she was about to encounter. It occured to her one evening as she conversed with her supposed cousin, something was wrong. In suspicion, Princess Celestia used a powerful uncloaking spell to reveal Chrysalis's true form. Chrysalis knew she had been discovered and so she called her army down upon all of Equestria.

Confusion was wrought from that day, having already tried the Elements of Harmony, the Princess could only do one thing. She fired a Distress spell high into the atmosphere above the danger-ridden land of Equestria. Almost seconds later, light breached the sky in the east and an ancient spell awoke something that had slept for many years...

Princess Celestia looked out from her palace entrance and there stood the warrior of old, the legendary Kilorat! He held advanced technological weapons and was garbed in strong, yet light armour. That day, the land was cleansed of the Changeling plague and harmony flourished in Equestria once again. The Brohoof were vastly diminished in number, only one remained. Kilorat the leader.

The brohoof was rebuilt, new members joined and a foot-hold was reestablished in Equestria. Can they be prepared for what would come next, an enemy darker than the void? That is but another story...

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So thats the introduction essentially, now to become a character in the tale of the legendary brohoof, all I need is some basic information:

Character Name: (OC name and username, then I can pick the best of the two)
Nickname(s): (any honorific titles or playful names e.t.c.)
Race: (Griffon, Unicorn, Pegasus or Earth pony. You can suggest another race, I may approve or disapprove of it depending on its power)
Cutie Mark:
Special Skill: (needs to relate to your cutie Mark)
Description of OC: (picture or written or both)
Bio: (your OC's life until before joining the Brohoof Guardians)
Reason for Joining: (why do you want to help? How can you help?)
Favourite Weapon: (think steampunk or old school if you can, e.g. massive warhammer or a primitive machine-gun)


Characters will be the new members of the reformed Brohoof.
I should add that not all OC's will make the cut, so good stuff is needed!

Edited by greebster, 17 September 2012 - 06:22 AM.


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Posted 17 September 2012 - 01:48 AM

Golly gosh, this could really go somewhere, I'd better pitch my OC into the running.

Character Name- Quill Critique/ dtgenshiken7

Nicknames- (My OC has none)/ dtgen

race: Earth Pony

Cutie Mark-
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Special Skill- Training others in most things (trying to build on my habit of sub house critiquig, mebbe expand it into combat training?)

OC desription-
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Bio- Quill was a critic before the great war happened, but he always had a secret passion for training new blood, and to this end applied for a drill sergeant when the war broke out. To this day, he can usually be found training the new (yellowmane/CMC rank equivalent of this fic) in combat. His snarky attitude and apparent lack of experience induced by his rank poses a problem to some of the wittier yellowmanes, but that is silenced quickly enough.

Reason for joining- Quill enjoys training others, and making sure they have the needed preparation before going into battle, or pretty much any where. When the war broke out, he saw his chance to do something to help his nation, and always being a bit of a patriot, he decided he was needed.

Favorite weapon- Quill is particularly experienced in the field of sword fighting, He is usually practicing in his spare time, trying to perfect the method of fighting with a sword in your mouth or standing on your rear hooves. He is considering quitting.

(It's fine if I don't make it though, do as you wish.)

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 06:27 AM

(It's fine if I don't make it though, do as you wish.)


Accepted :)
I love the idea of having a sarge in the team, he's gonna be a fun addition. I won't depict him too sargy, I know how people feel about their OC's.

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Posted 26 September 2012 - 11:52 AM

I'll start asking on server if anypony would like to be implemented, then I'll check their oc bio if they've made one

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Posted 26 September 2012 - 06:36 PM

hmm... I'll give this a shot.

Character Name: Tech Sketch/ FaffleMaster
Nickname(s): Sketch, Faffle
Race: unicorn
Cutie Mark: two pencils overlapping in an X
Special Skill: Can draw intricate blueprints in the matter of minutes, good tactician, in small doses can use her magic to make the blueprint become real without any building required (only small things though.)
Description of OC:
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that's me, just instead of the music note on the cutie mark, it's another pencil
Bio: Sketch, an unstable wreck of a pony drew illustrations for books before the war. She was living in poverty until war broke out. She thought she could make a difference by providing blueprints for weapons and other machinery to the Guardians
Reason for Joining: She'd give anything to have something to do that felt worthwhile and important to other people. She thought she could just make a difference.
Favourite Weapon: Anything I can get my hands on. And I mean anything
NOTE: Fairly unpredictable and secretive. Can dip into sociopath behaviors when at her darkest.

Edited by FaffleMaster, 16 October 2012 - 11:46 PM.


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Posted 26 September 2012 - 07:13 PM

Character name: Flaming Night / flamingdeath13
Race: Unicorn
Cutie mark:
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Appearance:
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Bio: Flaming is a medical pony. Served as one of Luna's guards before the war. He fights because he has nothing to lose except his sister, moon mist.
Special tallent: Pyromacy
Favorite weapon: Fire magic

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Posted 28 September 2012 - 05:50 AM

hmm... I'll give this a shot.

Character Name: Tech Sketch/ FaffleMaster
Nickname(s): Sketch, Faffle
Race: unicorn
Cutie Mark: two pencils overlapping in an X
[color=#282828][font=helvetica, arial, sans-serif]Special Skill: Can draw intricate blueprints in the matter of minutes, good tactician


Stop right there, a tactical mind suits me. Welcome to the team Tech Sketch :)

Character name: Flaming Night / flamingdeath13
Race: Unicorn
Cutie mark:

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Appearance:
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Bio: Flaming is a medical pony. Served as one of Luna's guards before the war. He fights because he has nothing to lose except his sister, moon mist.
Special tallent: Pyromacy
Favorite weapon: Fire magic


I like this, plus we need a medic, especially one who could sear through a line of enemies :) accepted

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Posted 28 September 2012 - 10:04 PM

Hell yes!

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Posted 29 September 2012 - 10:04 AM

We still need more ponies

I've devised a first chapter. For those of you who want to know what's going to happen, here's a few tasters:

Main character: Fleetfire Bittermane (a pony who seeks answers to what happened to her family when she was just a child)
Characters:
Grief (diabolical servant)
Antibrony (the main threat of this story)
Players who've added their characters.

The first Chapter is called Two Fateful Journeys. It has already been written as Brohoof has not been intro'd yet.

I hope to start introducing the Brohoof in the next chapter, so please sign up soon :)
All characters will be equally depicted in depth, so you don't need to worry about being left out.

EDIT: I decided to rename Chapter One to Dual Departure.

Edited by greebster, 16 October 2012 - 09:50 AM.


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Posted 06 October 2012 - 09:15 AM

To whom it may concern



Character: Nova_Vokunah (You could replace the Vokunah part with Shadowhunter if you want)
Username: Gray__Wolf
Nickname: None that i can think of (feel free to add one if you can think of it
Honorific title: Vokunah (ShadowHunter),
Race: Unicorn
Cutie Mark: Supernova (represinting Purifying light)
Special Skill: Demon Hunter, Blade Master
Description of OC: picture because im lazy. http://imgur.com/BAYUN, Nova is the one on the right also ignore the wings. its an old drawing my OC has changed a bit over the years
Bio: Nova is the last of a long line of Vokunah, ShadowHunters the guardians of Equestria and were not talking about changelings or even dragons, no the creatures who's very names cause nightmares, the creatures that even Celestia herself couldn't deal with, things that make Nightmare Moon look like a kitten. that is what Nova deals with, so when Brohoof contacted him and told him of the evil threatening Equestra, he didn't hesitate.
Reason for Joining: an experianced Demon hunter with no reluctance to dive onto a knife to save somepony, i think Brohoof could find something for him to do. Even if it is just prepareing the new recrutes for the horrors to come
Favourite Weapon: A Crystal Long sword with an ornate gold handle and sometimes Lightning oh who am i kidding he Goddamn loves Lighting

Edited by Nova_StarHunter, 06 October 2012 - 09:26 AM.


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Posted 07 October 2012 - 07:22 AM

Character: Nova_Vokunah (You could replace the Vokunah part with Shadowhunter if you want)
Username: Gray__Wolf


I like the name, I like them all! Really imaginative character. I also like the lightning, I'll start a mood-board for weapons. ACCEPTED!

I'm also looking for Illustrators. Someone who is really good at drawing ponies, weapons and apparel. If you know anyone just give me a few points in the right direction. Thanks :)

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 07:33 AM

Character: Ocean Ice
Username: mjegs
Nickname: Ocean
Honorific title: No way!
Race: Pegasi
Cutie mark: Ice bolt
Favorite weapon: Katana
Special skill: Speed and trick flying
Bio: Ocean Ice is an intelligent, but he prefers having a good time instead of working hard at certain things. (Never wanted to become builder). He prefers to talk to others, socialize, and fight with his katana and superior aerial agility. He is a source of shenatigans, practical joker, and storyteller to cheer those around him up.
Appearance: profile pic

Edited by Ocean Ice, 09 October 2012 - 08:24 AM.


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Posted 07 October 2012 - 05:16 PM

I like the name, I like them all! Really imaginative character. I also like the lightning, I'll start a mood-board for weapons. ACCEPTED!

I'm also looking for Illustrators. Someone who is really good at drawing ponies, weapons and apparel. If you know anyone just give me a few points in the right direction. Thanks :)


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Posted 09 October 2012 - 06:29 AM

Character: Ocean Ice
Username: mjegs
Nickname: Rapid
Honorific title: No way!
Bio: Ocean Ice is an intelligent, but lazy pony. He prefers having a good time instead of working hard at certain things.


Your character has a few flaws I'd like to mention. First off, he is mentioned to be lazy. I suppose I can work with this, but the task you've left me with is working out how he can contribute to the Brothers of the Hoof. You'd need a much more accurate description for this biography, giving at least one reason why he joined the Brohoof and another for what skills he can provide, maybe his knowledge, be specific.

Finally, you forgot to provide a favourite weapon. At the moment your character has a few holes in his personality that I expect even he would appreciate to be filled. So, for now I have to reject the OC application. If you wish, take it back and edit it.

AH CAN DRERW


That's great!
If you want, I'll post a few examples to you by message, it's up to you if you draw them. I'll mainly be throwing out main character designs, fight scenes and epic landscapes. I believe a few of these I can draw, I'll most likely draw my own OC, personal aim of mine. If you wish, use digital means to help you. I tend to start of drawing a pony on paper, then transferring it to the PC and using Art Rage Studio 3 or something.

It would mean a lot to me, but consider it first, I don't want to make you feel forced.

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Posted 09 October 2012 - 08:23 AM

Ok, edited the submission.

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Posted 09 October 2012 - 11:55 AM

Ok, edited the submission.


Accepted, I can do something with this character now :)

Edited by greebster, 09 October 2012 - 11:55 AM.


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Posted 09 October 2012 - 10:21 PM

I've decided that Chronicles of Brohoof is only a temp title, I'm considering an alternative as of now.

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Posted 09 October 2012 - 11:49 PM

That's great!
If you want, I'll post a few examples to you by message, it's up to you if you draw them. I'll mainly be throwing out main character designs, fight scenes and epic landscapes. I believe a few of these I can draw, I'll most likely draw my own OC, personal aim of mine. If you wish, use digital means to help you. I tend to start of drawing a pony on paper, then transferring it to the PC and using Art Rage Studio 3 or something.

It would mean a lot to me, but consider it first, I don't want to make you feel forced.


I'd gladly do fight scenes. Epic landscapes might be a bit out of my range of expertise. If you'd like to check out what I can do here's my deviantART
http://fafflemaster.deviantart.com/

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Posted 10 October 2012 - 11:46 PM

I'd gladly do fight scenes. Epic landscapes might be a bit out of my range of expertise. If you'd like to check out what I can do here's my deviantART
http://fafflemaster.deviantart.com/


Wow! Well I am deeply impressed! I do believe I've seen your fan-comic if I remember correctly. I most certainly would like your help, if you're willing. It will be a joint effort :) Artist and Writer combining brain-power.

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 12:10 AM

Could you possibly design an image of the mane six stood next to the Everfree forest and my OC on front of them? It's a departure scene where they're saying goodbye to her. Essentially, they are in a park not too far from the tree-line of the Everfree Forest. They are next to a bench and a tree. These are only guidelines, use them only if you think you are capable. I can work around your background design if you change the picture.

The departure is before Fleetfire (my oc) meets the brohoof, for those who are wondering.

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 12:28 AM

Oc Name: DawnBreeze "Swift Hoof"
Username: GoldenLynx54
Cutiemark: Paintbrush...
Race: Pegasus
Specail Skill: Running and dodging (if Cutiemark talent, painting)
Description: She has a orange, braided mane with an orange RD tail (could just be wavy tail if no Mane 6 styles)
Bio: She lives in Ponyville, living by painting and selling. she was in Canterlot for the Royal Wedding, and wants now to help serve Equestria by fighting. She would be a good spy or messenger, but she is skilled with the bow. (Actually, she brings paint into battle to "change a spy's side" or for other purposes.). she has always yearned to help ponies more, not by selling them lovely things to spruce up homes, but to do some REAL good. Knows little bits of medics.
Reason: Put it up there XD But she wants to do real good, maybe save somepony's life, to get vital information for Equestria.
Weapon o' Choice: A bow, with arrows sharpened so just one can slice easily through skin, without getting caught on hide.

XD I doubt this will make it...


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Posted 11 October 2012 - 12:40 AM

Running and dodging (if Cutiemark talent, painting)
Bio: She lives in Ponyville, living by painting and selling. she was in Canterlot for the Royal Wedding, and wants now to help serve Equestria by fighting. She would be a good spy or messenger, but she is skilled with the bow. (Actually, she brings paint into battle to "change a spy's side" or for other purposes.). she has always yearned to help ponies more, not by selling them lovely things to spruce up homes, but to do some REAL good. Knows little bits of medics.
Weapon o' Choice: A bow, with arrows sharpened so just one can slice easily through skin, without getting caught on hide.


Your character is hugely defined in many unique ways. She almost seems like a Stealth Queen. The painting skill could be useful; camouflage.
The bow, extra sharp arrows, the excellent weapon for a sneaker. Ummm.... Hard one... ACCEPTED!

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 01:36 AM

Could you possibly design an image of the mane six stood next to the Everfree forest and my OC on front of them? It's a departure scene where they're saying goodbye to her. Essentially, they are in a park not too far from the tree-line of the Everfree Forest. They are next to a bench and a tree. These are only guidelines, use them only if you think you are capable. I can work around your background design if you change the picture.

The departure is before Fleetfire (my oc) meets the brohoof, for those who are wondering.


I think I can work with that. Do you have an image available for Fleetfire?

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 06:56 AM

I think I can work with that. Do you have an image available for Fleetfire?


Would this be deemed sufficient?
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She's also wearing a travel-pack in the description, just so you know :)

Thanks for helping, and feel free to draw it at your own speed :D

her skin is actually blue underneath, so if you could, just ignore that suit and design her 'naked' as it were.

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 10:46 AM

Character Name: Victus
Nickname(s): N/A
Race: Unicorn
Cutie Mark: Fist with crossed swords
Special Skill: Skilled in weaponry and war
Description of OC: Strong, smart,brave and clad in highly advanced power armour
Bio: Victus once belonged to a zealous order known as the Imperial Fists. The Imperial Fists served the god emperor in the Milky hay galaxy and battled many xenos creatures in an attempt to save ponykind(alternate pony race in a distant galaxy).

Reason for Joining: During a major campaign against a xenos race who worshipped chaos, Victus fought on the planet Farlon VI to wipe out this xenos race with his battle brothers. He fought bravely against many chaos scum and eventually engaged in combat with a demon. His superior melee skills and power armour helped him overpower the demon, but before the foul beast could be slain the demon cast him into a warp portal sending him far away.

The warp portal opened up over an unknown world(Equestria) and Victus fell to the planet surface(his power armour enabled him to survive the impact). Confused by this new world and with no way of returning he wandered its surface in search of his battle brothers. In his travels he came across a member of the Brohoof order and found their ideals similar to his order, eventually learning of this legendary warrior known only as Kilorat he joined the order in hopes that the great warrior god would send him back.


Favourite Weapon: Bolter and chainsword

Weapon Descriptions:

Bolter: Large and powerful firearm that fires explosive shells (image: http://images4.wikia...dard_Bolter.png)

Chainsword: Large sword with built in chainsaw (image: http://2.bp.blogspot...THQ Replica.jpg)

Edited by Volvonski, 11 October 2012 - 11:49 AM.


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Posted 11 October 2012 - 02:17 PM

Character Name: Victus
Description of OC: Strong, smart, brave and clad in highly advanced power armour
Bio: Victus once belonged to a zealous order known as the Imperial Fists. The Imperial Fists served the god emperor in the Milky hay galaxy and battled many xenos creatures in an attempt to save ponykind(alternate pony race in a distant galaxy).
Reason for Joining: During a major campaign against a xenos race who worshipped chaos, Victus fought on the planet Farlon VI to wipe out this xenos race with his battle brothers. He fought bravely against many chaos scum and eventually engaged in combat with a demon. His superior melee skills and power armour helped him overpower the demon, but before the foul beast could be slain the demon cast him into a warp portal sending him far away.


I like this character, good weapons and strengths. We discussed the reason why he joined at college, the whole loyalty aspect and such. He's the soldier of this team, but the style is great. ACCEPTED!

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 05:48 PM

Wow..l didn't think that would work too well... YA-..yay... Thanks, use my character well!

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Posted 12 October 2012 - 05:20 AM

Wow..l didn't think that would work too well... YA-..yay... Thanks, use my character well!


I have great plans for all characters :D

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Posted 14 October 2012 - 05:00 PM

Working on Chapter Three now people. It shall be called... Well I tend to name chapters after writing them, it's a reflective sort of thing. Story is really coming together now :D

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Posted 14 October 2012 - 05:49 PM

Yay! Very excited! I'll have the drawing done as soon as possible XD.

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Posted 15 October 2012 - 10:02 PM

OH and if you need any help with writing for something, I can help. Like how a character may react in a certain situation or something.

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Posted 15 October 2012 - 10:37 PM

OH and if you need any help with writing for something, I can help. Like how a character may react in a certain situation or something.


Thanks for all the help :)
I'll keep you in mind for scenario advice too :D

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Posted 16 October 2012 - 09:51 AM

Chapter Two is called: A Major Problem
See if you can guess why :mrgreen:
EDIT: Too late, I posted Part One

Edited by greebster, 16 October 2012 - 11:39 AM.


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Posted 16 October 2012 - 11:37 AM

Part One: New Friends, Old Foes.

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The first part of our epic adventure has been written! I hope you all enjoy reading this, I took time to write it up and maybe its been worth the effort.

Part One: http://www.brohoof.c...iends-old-foes/

Enjoy the read! Part Two is coming along nicely.

Edited by greebster, 16 October 2012 - 11:55 AM.


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Posted 16 October 2012 - 11:50 AM

Oh lawd, this is amazing. I love this! Can't wait to see where this goes :D

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Posted 16 October 2012 - 11:51 AM

Oh lawd, this is amazing. I love this! Can't wait to see where this goes :D


I moved part one to a new thread :) I'm glad you like it so far :D

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Posted 16 October 2012 - 04:30 PM

I still have need of other pony OC's. I may add them to the story and the Brohoof later as our adventure unfolds. A good example is if they run into a character along their path, this character expresses a Unique Skill and becomes a part of the team as a result

#38 Seras Victoria

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Posted 17 October 2012 - 05:54 PM

Character Name: Captain Silvershield (IOWrover101)

Nickname(s): Silver or Ghost ( Callsign From his old Commando days)

Race: He's a Pegasus but he's Alicorn Size due to him going through a Augmentation Process to make him a better soldier however he doesn't have and Magical powers he's just stronger and taller.

Special Skill: He's a natural leader with great Combat skills in both Close and Medium ranged combat, can use practically any weapon he picks up and can see situations from a different perspective and come up with Battle plans and Strategies in an instant. As he's Captain of The Pegasi Commandos he's got a lot of physical stamina and is quite muscular. Due to physical Augmentations he has increased strength, stamina, reaction time, speed and agility just sort of like the Spartans from Halo.

Description of OC: Posted Image

Silvershield has pretty much grown up around the Military, he joined up at a young age and became a Commando untill he eventually became Captain of the Division (if you want to see all the details i suggest you just read the Biography). Also i realise you cant see the Cutie mark but its a Winged Dagger like the S.A.S Symbol, he also has a Scar on the right side of his face.



Bio: http://www.brohoof.c...he-wonderbolts/ This is my OC, you can pretty much forget all about the Wonderbolts bit as now i have this OC and SilverWings as the Wonderbolt OC so he's not too OP also i want to add that since his Fiancee Flare went M.I.A after a battle with Discord he drinks Heavily and has trouble sleeping as he becomes depressed. However when he's in battle or he's occupied with something else then he stays focused and doesnt think about it, it's only when he's alone or has time to think about things so he keeps himself occupied with his work and finds himself jobs to do.

Reason for Joining: Silvershield can help in Many ways, he can support the group with his Tactical Genius, give them supplies and weapons and Acompany them with a Squad for protection. He's got all of his Division as his Disposle and he's owed a few Favours by other Military Personnel and so he can get pretty much anything or anyone they need...

Favourite Weapon: Diamond Edged Longsword, he also carrys a belt of throwing knives and a Rapid fire pistol with Armour piercing rounds (if possible though i'd like to give him the Chainsaw Lancer from Gears of War, its basically an Assault Rifle/Machine gun sort of thing with a Chainsaw where a Bayonet would be)

Edited by Captain Silvershield, 18 October 2012 - 06:40 AM.


#39 FaffleMaster

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Posted 17 October 2012 - 06:54 PM

Oh I updated some information on my character since I realized too late that I left her without any real personality descriptions XD

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Posted 17 October 2012 - 08:32 PM

Sounds exciting :D
Character OC Name: Thomas Redintegro
User Name: Tom_B_Stone
Nickname(s): Snip
Race: Pegasus
Cutie Mark:
Posted Image
Special Skill: Is extremely good with technology. Can hack into any system with ease. He can also easily repair/build simple things using available materials in a short amount of time.
Description of OC: A biege pegasus with (profile picture as face) and Daring Doo styled tail.
Bio: Born and raised in the outskirts of Ponyville where he quickly learned how to shoot a gun as a result of playing with his father's rifle. He later moved to Manehatten to work as a technician. His skills developed as he was asked to repair multiple things and control the various machinery in the building. He prefer walking to flying.
Reason for Joining: Can provide light support in the battlefield it minutes when it would've taken a longer time. He thought he could make a difference joining and defend his home.
Favourite Weapon: A steampunk bolt-action sniper rifle

Also I can do some drawing :D Here is my DA

Edited by Tom_B_Stone, 17 October 2012 - 08:59 PM.


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Posted 18 October 2012 - 09:12 AM

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Character Name: Captain Silvershield (IOWrover101)

Nickname(s): Silver or Ghost ( Callsign From his old Commando days)


ACCEPTED: good character

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Posted 18 October 2012 - 10:36 AM

Sounds exciting :D
Character OC Name: Thomas Redintegro

Also I can do some drawing :D Here is my DA


ACCEPTED: P.S. I'd appreciate more artists, so I'll pm you if anything comes up :)

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Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:35 AM

Chapter 3 is in progress, I'm going from strength to strength with the descriptive stuff :)
Other new OC additions will be implemented real soon

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Posted 20 October 2012 - 01:39 PM

OC / user: FireBlitz / mattbot12
Nickname: Blitz
Honorific Title: (cant think of 1 )
Race: Pegasi
Cutie mark: Fire ball
Talent: Can control fire
Weapon: 2 flame daggers
Description of OC: my Profile Pic
Bio: so fireblitz is not Ur normal Pegasi he actually a flame Pegasi a very rare breed they live near a volcano and nearly wiped out when the griffon and pony war was going on he is the only one left of his kind and the only memory he has left of his parents are his fathers flame daggers that have tremendous power when fully unlocked. fireblitz was searching for his parents when he found ponyville and he stayed there for almost 2 years but when a pony knocked on his door his life was changed forever and he was recruited into Brohoof.
Why you want to join: he wants to join to save ponyville from the pain and sorrow he and his race had to go threw and he also thinks it would be a good place to look for his parents
Why would i be good: Fireblitz has very good knowledge in surviving from all those years looking for his parents and his fighting skill and hunting skill also ties in with his survival skill
Hope you enjoy that!

Edited by mattbot12, 20 October 2012 - 01:44 PM.


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Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:08 PM

Hope you enjoy that!


I'm afraid your OC is too overpowered. He's a Pegasus with essentially what is magic.

DECLINED, look at the pony oc rules, they're somewhere in the Ponies section of the forum.

Edited by greebster, 20 October 2012 - 04:12 PM.


#46 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 27 October 2012 - 06:26 PM

I like your fanfic, so I don't see why not :D (Probably not gonna make it, but meh)

Character Name: Nightingale/Stardragon1000 (OC's full name is actually Nightingale Breeze, but she has always preferred Nightingale)
Nickname(s): Nah, unless you wanna think of one based on her personality
Race: Pegasus
Special Skill: Her cutie mark is for her musical ability, but she has an amazing memory, especially of patterns or codes, and has an eye for detail in plans and such and how effective they'll be. (Based off of remembering music and music writing) For these reasons, she's great with creating and executing plans.
Description of OC:
Spoiler

Bio: Nightingale was a regular pegasus who lived in Ponyville for most her life. When the war broke out and everything was thrown into oblivion she couldn't do anything, for she was too young to join the soldier's ranks. (She's probably going to be one of the youngest ponies there now) When the war was over, and she got older, she still couldn't let go of a burning desire to give help to those who need it.
Reason for Joining: When Nightingale saw for herself the dangers of Equestria, she knew that she couldn't sit and watch them. Her mind would not stop dwelling on the thought of these dangers hurting others. She was always one to act rather than sit back and watch, so she soon learned of the Brothers of the Hoof, or Brohoof, and set out to join their ranks.
Favourite Weapon: Wing Blades (A blade attached to the edge if the wing that can be used to slash at enemies)
Personality: Nightingale is a clever, practical thinking pony who prefers to keep to herself. However, she does enjoy company and can have intelligent discussions, despite her young age. One thing is her tendency to subconsciously shy away from company, and she tends to zone out a lot and become deep in thought, even if she's in the middle of a conversation (or planning, for she'll zone out to think about how to make it more effective)

I really hope this works...

Edited by stardragon, 27 October 2012 - 06:35 PM.


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Posted 28 October 2012 - 02:09 AM

I like your fanfic, so I don't see why not :D (Probably not gonna make it, but meh)

I really hope this works...


uh, I really don't know....

who am I kidding welcome to the team! ACCEPTED :D

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Posted 28 October 2012 - 03:00 AM

YEA! Party time!
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Posted 28 October 2012 - 04:29 AM

YEA! Party time!


I like your wing blades :D

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Posted 28 October 2012 - 07:10 PM

Thanks! Although I'll say it now, the idea isn't completely original. And her mane isn't black, it's just a dark shade of grey. And I based the fact that she's younger than most on the fact that I think I really am younger than most people on brohoof. And I talk way too much, so I'm gonna go now.

Keep up the great work! :D

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Posted 29 October 2012 - 08:28 AM

And I talk way too much, so I'm gonna go now.

Keep up the great work! :D


Sometimes talking is good! Thanks for the extra info :)

#52 iluvponies35

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Posted 30 October 2012 - 08:00 AM

still accepting? i got a OC:

Name: Sergent Blazing Orange.
Nickname: The Destroyer.
Race: Unicorn.
Gender: male.
Cutie Mark: bright red orange(the fruit) on fire.
Special Skill: good knowledge for using oranges as weapons (strange right?).
Description: (sorry no pic :() Mud Brown stallion with green-blue eyes and a red and yellow mane and tail, regular sized horn and draft horse sized body, mane is slightly messy with stray strands poking out from dreams haunted with nightmares but is ok enough to not make a pony stare.
Bio: Blazing lived a normal life in ponyville until a day 2 months after his 17th birthday when the war started and griffon scouts killed his mother and father leaving him for dead until defenders managed to find him in the ruins that was his former home. he was then nursed back to health. soon he decided to help with the war and also extract his revenge on the griffons.
Weapon of Choice: western six-shot, though he also has a slightly rusty longsword that has decapitated many a griffon.

enjoy!

Note: this is my first and only OC that was made just right now mostly cuz this fic sounds awesome, and i wanted to participate. "dont judge a book by its cover"

Edited by iluvponies35, 30 October 2012 - 08:14 AM.


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Posted 30 October 2012 - 09:29 AM

still accepting? i got a OC:
Note: this is my first and only OC that was made just right now mostly cuz this fic sounds awesome, and i wanted to participate. "dont judge a book by its cover"


Well, I must of course judge whether or not your OC is good enough to be in this story. To start off, the OC lived in Ponyville which is one of the places least affected by the Griffon war, meaning nopony died there. You can blame this solely on me of course. The second thing is, the Griffons are now Equestria's friends and allies seeing as the Griffontide is now over. Other problems now affect the land. Finally his nickname sounds a bit too OP, meaning his name doesn't really relate to him and makes him sound too powerful. So if it's not too much trouble, reconsider your OC biography and if you wish you can either get rid of his current nickname or give him a new, less cliché one.

So for now, I'm sorry to do this, your OC has been DECLINED. A small bit of improvement will do the job though :)

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Posted 30 October 2012 - 09:41 AM

Any idea on when chapter 3 is coming out? I'm not rushing you, just curious XD

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Posted 30 October 2012 - 10:03 AM

hopefully very soon :D

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Posted 08 February 2013 - 01:55 AM

Character Name: Thunderclap
Nickname(s): Thundy, or to some people, 'That insane person.'
Race: Alicorn
Cutie Mark: A thundercloud, with a lightningbolt coming out of it.
Special Skill: She controls lightning, and can control/channel it.
Description of OC: http://i45.tinypic.com/jajjv5.png
Bio: She was caught up in a scandal, when she was born. The Princess' didn't want a heir, so they sent her off to live in Appleoosa. She ended up finding out, and almost went insane. She's doing better now.. but she still had a few dark thoughts left.
Reason for Joining: I've never really used my OC, and she needs to be out more often. I'd love to see her in here.
Favourite Weapon: She has a black scythe, which when she strikes the ground with it, makes lightning strike in that spot. It sends tiny shocks of electricity, to whoever she touches with it.



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Posted 08 February 2013 - 02:06 AM

Sorry, but this thread WAS dead. No more OCs are being accepted for this particular story, now known as Harmonosphere.


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