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Is it a good idea?

  1. Yea! (3 votes [60.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 60.00%

  2. It looks complicated.. (Post why it looks complicated) (1 votes [20.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 20.00%

  3. No. (1 votes [20.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 20.00%

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#1 jimme neutron corndog

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 02:33 AM

I need votes if this is good or not, i already have it set up.

 

dont shove scientific facts here.. please "omg no sun we all die!!"

 

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"Its... Been a while.. Maybe.. 20 years? No... 25... Yes.. to be exact.. The sun... It was... Shrouded in darkness... It was an eternal night per say... The royal sisters tried everything.. They said it would be fine.... Yea we all trusted them.. It was cold lie.. After 3 years of trying.. The two royal sisters... vanished.. No trace.. No clues.. They just... Poof.. Dissapeared.. After that.. No more supplies came to towns, they all just.. Left.. Water, food soon started to diminish becouse of the shrouded sun.. Crops weren't growing.. We couldnt even eat grass! It.. The grass was pure black.. Poisonous grass.. Hay.. It.. Slowly started to drain dry.. Theres little of it now... But that matters little.. Some ponies.. Began to grow.. Awkward.. Disoriented.. Crazy... Some insane too.. Some of the towns and cities started to fall.. And all that was left.. Was.. Some dusty old ruins... The only safe place.. Is... The griffon kingdom.. Its.. A very strict.. And their very... secluded.. they don't show mercy for.. poor starving ponies.. No.. They inprision you.. They torture you.. You, sadly.. Are one of these poor ponies.. Left alone to die...  But.. Something happens.. You escape.. But you're still in prision grounds.. Get catched.. You're dinner to the griffons.. Or worse.. By the insane ponies that live outside of the griffon kingdom's empire... A note, survivor.. The sun is still shrouded in the griffon empire... Just that it isnt so tainted there, but still.. Be on the lookout..

 

You can start as an insane pony, a griffon guard.. Much more..

 

Application sheet

Name of OC;

 

Age;

 

Talent;

 

Race;

 

Appearence;

 

Personality;

 

Other;

 

Rules

Important

READ

RULE ONE; No godmodding

 

RULE TWO; No metagaming

 

RULE THREE; Standard server rules

 

RULE FOUR; No NSFW, Shipping is fine ;)

 

RULE FIVE; No overload of swearing, blood, gore etcetera

 

RULE SIX; No alicorns, changelings or crystal ponies, Griffons ARE Allowed

 

anything else this needs, tell me

 

RULE SEVEN; To be accepted you must follow these rules!

 


Edited by James the Sexy Cat, 15 October 2013 - 03:38 PM.


#2 jimme neutron corndog

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 03:24 AM

Added a poll



#3 jimme neutron corndog

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 03:57 AM

Post if you votedw, please Dont just vote to try and be funny. Thats for shenanigans.



#4 Coloratura

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 04:21 AM

Are we filling out the app now or later? Otherwise, it looks pretty good.



#5 RunningWolf251

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 04:23 AM

It seems alright, but all the ...'s make it somewhat difficult to read through the story, though I understand what you're trying to get across. I would usually skim through something laborious, but I read through it a couple times to be sure I got it all.

 

One major question I have is what is the end goal of the story? Where or what, aside from surviving, are the main characters trying to get to, accomplish or achieve? Removing the shadow from the sun? Finding the princesses? Vault or safe haven?

 

Also, if food is gone, are you implying that some of the denizens have taken up cannibalism/carnivorism?

 

Post if you votedw, please Dont just vote to try and be funny. Thats for shenanigans.

One of your poll answers is shenanigan-like, so expect people to pick it solely because of that reason.


Edited by RunningWolf251, 15 October 2013 - 04:24 AM.


#6 jimme neutron corndog

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 04:28 AM

It seems alright, but all the ...'s make it somewhat difficult to read through the story, though I understand what you're trying to get across. I would usually skim through something laborious, but I read through it a couple times to be sure I got it all.

 

One major question I have is what is the end goal of the story? Where or what, aside from surviving, are the main characters trying to get to, accomplish or achieve? Removing the shadow from the sun? Finding the princesses? Vault or safe haven?

 

Also, if food is gone, are you implying that some of the denizens have taken up cannibalism/carnivorism?

 

One of your poll answers is shenanigan-like, so expect people to pick it solely because of that reason.

I was trying to get it as first person, if its bothering any one else i'll change it.

 

One of the main objectives IS removing the shadow

 

Yes. Cannibalism is a thing.

 

:l thats my fault now. :twilightsheepish:


Edited by James the Sexy Cat, 15 October 2013 - 04:29 AM.


#7 jimme neutron corndog

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 02:49 PM

One more yes and i'll make the OOC/Application thread



#8 jimme neutron corndog

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Posted 15 October 2013 - 03:39 PM

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