Greetings,
I have recently finished my submission house and am in need of critique.
It is located on plot 63 of the submissions world.
My in game name is niallgibson93.
Thanks.
Critique Request
Started by niallgibson93, Jan 04 2013 03:02 PM
3 replies to this topic
#1
Posted 04 January 2013 - 03:02 PM
#2
Posted 04 January 2013 - 05:50 PM
Any locations will be give relative to the front of your plot.
Exterior
> The spruce logs and sandstone create a very high contrast on the outside, whereas most Ponyville houses are whitewashed.
> With the previous statement in mind, materials like smooth sandstone or even sand would look more attractive than regular sandstone.
> The slope of the roof is a bit too gentle. You might be interested in a 2/1 slope instead of 1/1.
> The shape of the house is good, the log-patter is good as well.
> the 1st-floor windows on the left wall are a tad small.
> Your porch is made of stone-based materials. These kinds of blocks wouldn't be advisable for any kind of flooring.
> Besides the leaves, there is no vegetation. A garden in a visible area would help to alleviate the blandness of just having a house.
Interior
> Your first floor is a bit awkward and bland, especially the Dining area (top right, 1st floor).
> The fireplace is rather obtrusive, but I wouldn't worry too much about it.
> The kitchen is okay.
> The main area of the 2nd floor is lacking in color. Whereas you want a whitewashed look on the outside, the inside should have a bit more color variation (that doesn't mean rainbow carpets n' stuff like that).
> The walls of the bathroom are practically bare.
> The study is very bland.
> The bedroom also has the same problem.
> The attic is good--better than most I've seen, actually (attics are usually expected be boring and fairly empty, so your attic is pretty good as is).v
Recommendations
> the 1st and 2nd floor need better furniture (try /warp Ikea).
> The exterior is lacking some kind of decorative element to break from the monotony of sandstone and log walls (try a garden).
Verdict
I think this house will, at worst, receive an improve. Your house isn't that bad in terms of being a canon Ponyville house. You need to concentrate both on the interior and exterior in order to guarantee a pass. Good luck.
Exterior
> The spruce logs and sandstone create a very high contrast on the outside, whereas most Ponyville houses are whitewashed.
> With the previous statement in mind, materials like smooth sandstone or even sand would look more attractive than regular sandstone.
> The slope of the roof is a bit too gentle. You might be interested in a 2/1 slope instead of 1/1.
> The shape of the house is good, the log-patter is good as well.
> the 1st-floor windows on the left wall are a tad small.
> Your porch is made of stone-based materials. These kinds of blocks wouldn't be advisable for any kind of flooring.
> Besides the leaves, there is no vegetation. A garden in a visible area would help to alleviate the blandness of just having a house.
Interior
> Your first floor is a bit awkward and bland, especially the Dining area (top right, 1st floor).
> The fireplace is rather obtrusive, but I wouldn't worry too much about it.
> The kitchen is okay.
> The main area of the 2nd floor is lacking in color. Whereas you want a whitewashed look on the outside, the inside should have a bit more color variation (that doesn't mean rainbow carpets n' stuff like that).
> The walls of the bathroom are practically bare.
> The study is very bland.
> The bedroom also has the same problem.
> The attic is good--better than most I've seen, actually (attics are usually expected be boring and fairly empty, so your attic is pretty good as is).v
Recommendations
> the 1st and 2nd floor need better furniture (try /warp Ikea).
> The exterior is lacking some kind of decorative element to break from the monotony of sandstone and log walls (try a garden).
Verdict
I think this house will, at worst, receive an improve. Your house isn't that bad in terms of being a canon Ponyville house. You need to concentrate both on the interior and exterior in order to guarantee a pass. Good luck.
Edited by Laser_Lens_4, 04 January 2013 - 05:50 PM.
#3
Posted 04 January 2013 - 08:28 PM
I want to add that the overhanging for the attic bedroom is a little awkward. Typically, any supports for overhanging upper floors would be orthogonal (contains right angles). Yours is a little more like an obtuse triangle, so you might want to change that. Also, the glowstone near the roof is unnecessary -- no canon Ponyville house contains that kind of material, nor does the material used remotely look like glowstone.
#4
Posted 04 January 2013 - 11:57 PM
Oh! I forgot to mention that you should do one of the following: align the path with the existing door, or align the door with the existing path.
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