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A small part of my upcoming fan fic of my mlp fallout OC


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#1 rossnub

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Posted 22 February 2013 - 05:20 PM

As he bows down one last time before getting the necklace that his princess depended on since a child he looked up to her one last time before she vanished. "Is there anything.. I can do my lady? Anything!" as he rose up from the dusty soil that embedded the ground from the 3 year long war staring into her eyes she said in a blunt response that he could sense worry in her heart "No my dear soldier take this before I change my mind, run from the battle!" As she flew up into the burning red sun that has been left wasted from the war a bellowing voice exploded from him before choking up. "My lad-" he could feel the deep sorrow of his beloved princess leaving him in the heat of battle with nothing more then this Sapphire blue pendant hanging from his neck. His scarred left eye leaving him ablaze for the burning passion of vengeance and the musty gray coat that was once blue knowing that he would be unable to protect his beloved anymore he put on his helmet once more going to the battle field that his soldiers desperately needed…..

 

That was just a small part of my Fallout OC's backstory. This was my first MLP themed fan fiction I wrote so let me know what you think.



#2 Guardian Selene

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Posted 22 February 2013 - 05:34 PM

Pretty good thou it sounds like it draws on the fallout fan fic (which I havnt fully read yet) Its hard to tell what princess your talking about, Celestia, Cadance, Luna, or an alicorn creature.  



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Posted 22 February 2013 - 09:39 PM

Pretty good thou it sounds like it draws on the fallout fan fic (which I havnt fully read yet) Its hard to tell what princess your talking about, Celestia, Cadance, Luna, or an alicorn creature.  

I'm really not too sure since Fallout takes place in the future. It wouldn't be Celestia. It could possibly be Cadence or Luna. But I was looking into making it sort of an older version of Twilight because she is supposed to be !Spoiler!

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so I wouldn't really picture Celestia around at that time. It could be Luna but I sort of want the forbidden love effect on these two characters (Cheesy I know) so it couldn't be cadence unless shining armor died in one of the battles when it started so Cadence is looking at the OC (Which would be stupid IMO because I have some battles with Shining Armor and my Fallout OC in the upcoming series) So I'm not too sure what it would be. I'm going to start the first part of the series probably tomorrow or later today.



#4 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 22 February 2013 - 09:50 PM

Well, in the fic, it's set in an alternate future where discord never reformed, and twilight didn't become an alicorn.



#5 Guardian Selene

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Posted 22 February 2013 - 09:52 PM

Oh I thought you were going some what off the Fallout Equestria fan fic (the one about little pip). Which had many alicorns that work under a alicorn queen. Luna and Celestia died keeping the fallout of the megaspell from instantly killing everypony in ponyville in that fan fic. And was set far into the future only having spike, voice recordings of older show ponies, and goul versions of someponies of the show.

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Posted 22 February 2013 - 09:59 PM

Wasn't the leader alicorn

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#7 Guardian Selene

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Posted 22 February 2013 - 10:02 PM

Shh I haven't read all the fan fic yet. I'm at the part little pip just escaped fillydelphia.


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