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#1 AKingGamer

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:01 PM

Let me know what you think.

The main idea of the story is: Lightning goes off on a quest to find his Cutie Mark. He finds multiple villages with problems and tries to help them out. He finds a Manticore terrorizing a village and decides he wants to help them get rid of it. (Here's where people are probably gonna rage) He struggles massively fighting against the Manticore when he finally realizes that he wants to protect everypony. He get's a massive strength boost due to his passion and he pushes the Manticore back into the Everfree forest, saving the village from absolute destruction. This also leads to him getting his Cutie Mark. He is the youngest pony in his class to get his Cutie Mark. Although when he went off on his adventure he was on vacation. He went back to his hometown of Cloudsdale and everypony saw his Cutie Mark and wondered how he got it. He replied that he had "beaten" (more like scared off but yeah.) a Manticore and realized how much he wanted to protect others. And that's the story summed up for you. Let me know what you think.

P.S. Fluttershy BEFRIENDED the Manticore so why not have somepony be able to scare it off?

#2 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:13 PM

weeeeeelllllll...... If he is the first to get his cutie mark, then he is less special.

#3 AKingGamer

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:13 PM

Yeah, A LOT less special than before XD

How is it so far though? Good? Bad? In between? Godmoddy? or otherwise?

Edit: How come Fanfiction story topics are hardly visited? I'm probably just being impatient though.

Edited by AKingGamer, 17 February 2012 - 08:22 PM.


#4 CoolRainbowDash12

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:26 PM

it is a cool story but heard it TWENTY TIMES :l <---- Poker Face

#5 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:26 PM

Well.... Godmoddy, he scares a manticore away as a filly, maybe he could get his cutie mark after vigorous training in everfree and then he gets rid of the manticore?

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:31 PM

Fair enough, I was thinking during the story about his older self XD but I already typed it and stuff, so Yeah as a colt he does some vigorous training, maybe beats a Cockatrice? I think the Manticore should only be when he's older. But yeah, classic hero story. It's a bit Godmoddy if he can "defeat" a Manticore as a colt. Alright, vigorous training and maybe a Cockatrice.

#7 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:32 PM

Maybe Fluttershy could find him and he learns how to defeat a cockatrice.

#8 AKingGamer

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:38 PM

lol with THE STARE! XD I dunno I don't want my char to be a colt while the mane 6 are not fillies. I want him to be the same age (roughly) as them, and Fluttershy wouldn't know how to beat a Cockatrice at such a young age. I think I might just have him beat up some random wildlife like wolves and what not. I dunno.

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:40 PM

:l :l :l <------- Poker Face3

#10 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:41 PM

Find a sword in a cave and learn to use it, he saves old ponies from timberwolves and eventually become really powerful

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 08:45 PM

I'm likin' it. Sure, finds a sword in a cave, an old really rusty sword, then saves some ponies from wolves, and then realizes he's good at that. Cutie Mark appears, he goes off get's his sword fixed up, goes back to Cloudsdale until he grows up, then goes on an epic adventure to protect/save Equestria! I love that story line. It may have been used a couple of times, but you know what? I don't care, it's my character, and as long as it's not God moddy. It should be fine.

#12 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 09:02 PM

Maybe, but I think he should become friends with some other ponies and they become a group, they maybe haven't got their CM's and they slay evil to get them, sound good?

#13 AKingGamer

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 09:06 PM

Cool, cool. Should I make these other characters? Or should I take some from the show or others (with permission)?

#14 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 09:13 PM

I would be more than glad to make some for you.

#15 AKingGamer

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 09:14 PM

Ah thanks! That'd be great! :D

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 09:16 PM

I will make 3.

#17 AKingGamer

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 09:20 PM

Alright. That sounds good. Thanks again!

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 10:05 PM

LOL LOL LOL LOL

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 10:09 PM

LOL LOL LOL LOL

Please, stop.

#20 AKingGamer

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 10:29 PM

Yes please. Spamming isn't cool. that's like, about 20% uncool. And I won't tell you what percentage it already was lol

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Posted 18 February 2012 - 05:01 AM

pretty cool story so far, but iwhat does he look like? and what is his cutie mark, a shield to represent his passion for protecting others maybe?

Edited by plankmonkey, 18 February 2012 - 05:03 AM.


#22 AKingGamer

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Posted 18 February 2012 - 02:29 PM

His Cutie Mark IS a shield, but it also has a sword on it too. His passion for defending others (hence the shield) gives him the strength to do so (hence the sword). And since he's fast at doing it, the sword is engraved with a lightning bolt.

Also, a picture of him can be found here: (I took the liberty of actually getting the pic instead of just linking you there :D) Posted Image

Edited by AKingGamer, 18 February 2012 - 02:31 PM.


#23 Spatt

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Posted 18 February 2012 - 05:17 PM

thx you told me all i needed to know, still pretty cool so far

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Posted 19 February 2012 - 03:33 AM

Awesome

#25 AKingGamer

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Posted 19 February 2012 - 11:03 PM

Thanks! He has a few outfits as well, I just haven't gotten to drawing them! XD

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Posted 20 February 2012 - 10:26 PM

is it just me or did you draw him with the exact same hair style as EVERY final fantasy main character?

#27 AKingGamer

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Posted 21 February 2012 - 02:47 AM

lol Coincidence maybe? XD

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Posted 21 February 2012 - 04:39 AM

not sayin its a bad thing, just looks so similar.

#29 AKingGamer

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Posted 22 February 2012 - 02:03 PM

lol, I went for the spiky hero hair, which, should pretty much be copy righted by Square Enix, because of how many times they've used it. I just like the hair style that's all. And that's probably why it looks so similar.


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