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#1 Insanecrusader16

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Posted 30 August 2015 - 07:41 AM

So awhile back, me and associate of mine started a story on FIMfiction called Agents of SCALE

 

as the title (unsubtly) alludes to, its Equestrias spin on "Agents of Shield"  

 

its not finished and i am currently put it on hiatus so i can work on other projects and also to focus more on School

 

if anyone has an interest, there more than welcome to read what we have!     

​(i also wish the emojis on this site were similar to the ones on FIMfiction) 

 

www.fimfiction.net/story/181217/equestria-agents-of-scale

 

criticism is fine as long as it's constructive

 

i know not everyones gonna like it.


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#2 Insanecrusader16

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Posted 31 August 2015 - 03:52 AM

has anybody read it?



#3 frost73ite

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Posted 19 March 2016 - 02:49 AM

Read the story so far. Overall, I liked it. Good blend of Shield style story and double blind missions with MLP style story telling. I thought for my taste the death scene was a bit graphic even for Shield, and definitely for MLP. Other than that, the story is interesting and compelling. The style of speech of the cannon characters really is captured well, as are the personalities (as far as they're seen) of the ponified Shield agents.

 

On a critical note, there are several places through the chapters where the grammar or spelling are off by just enough to disrupt the natural flow of the storytelling. Half of the spelling errors are the use of a homonym for the correct word. The rest of the spelling errors are incorrect usage (tense) or improper use of prefix or suffixes. I'd recommend having another person do a read-through to make spelling and grammar corrections/suggestions.

 

Despite that, it is well done, and I would love to see more of this fanfic when you and your coauthor have time to get back to it.




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