Jump to content


Photo

The Brohoof Part One: New Friends. Old Foes.


  • Please log in to reply
77 replies to this topic

#1 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 16 October 2012 - 11:50 AM

This story has been renewed as:


Harmonosphere

http://mlpf.im/harmonosphere


Edited by greebster, 19 November 2012 - 09:00 PM.


#2 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 16 October 2012 - 07:06 PM

This is really great so far! The descriptions are very, very nice.

#3 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 16 October 2012 - 08:46 PM

I'm glad you like it, I hope the others that have viewed it so far have too :-P

#4 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 16 October 2012 - 10:57 PM

Sweet mother of celestia, this fic is so good i am sure in time it will rival the fallout equestria series. Heck this is so good i can see a fan episode out of this, each sentence portrayed images that only harry potter would have accomplished( in other words the descriptive text was of professional quality and succeeded in enticing the imagination to provide images of what that scene would look like, something only really good books can do).

I swear though if you mess my character up i'll come to your house and murder your socks!.

Edited by Volvonski, 16 October 2012 - 11:08 PM.


#5 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 17 October 2012 - 06:08 AM

( in other words the descriptive text was of professional quality and succeeded in enticing the imagination to provide images of what that scene would look like, something only really good books can do).

I swear though if you mess my character up i'll come to your house and murder your socks!.


I love to write, if it's a dream of mine I intend on living it up. Leave my socks alone you sock-molester! P.S. Your character won't always be known as a clunking tin-man, it's described through Fleetfire's eyes. Soon he will explain himself, trust me. Damn you Warhammer fans.

Big question, should this be posted on another forum? I'm not aware of what the main fan-fic forums are called. I'll do a bit of research, but if anyone knows, give me some memo :)

Edited by greebster, 17 October 2012 - 06:09 AM.


#6 Seras Victoria

Seras Victoria

    A real man never dies ... even if he's killed.

  • Builder
  • 317 posts
  • minecraft:
    Seras_Victoria

Posted 17 October 2012 - 06:43 AM

This Fic is brilliant, i like how much you've gone in depth with it and i really like the feel of it, cant wait for some more chapters! I do have one question though, are you just putting Admins into the Fic or will you be putting in some builders too?

#7 Ocean Ice

Ocean Ice

    As crazy awesome as they come.

  • Pony
  • 50 posts
  • minecraft:
    Trollrilla

Posted 17 October 2012 - 07:47 AM

Great job on the fic!

#8 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 17 October 2012 - 09:26 AM

Are you just putting Admins into the Fic or will you be putting in some builders too?


Check out the 'chronicles of brohoof' on fanfics. You can add your OC there to have it added to the story later on :D

Great job on the fic!


Thanks :D

Edited by greebster, 17 October 2012 - 09:27 AM.


#9 Hieros Godhead

Hieros Godhead

    Coded Clouds and Paper Canyons.

  • Pony
  • 1170 posts
  • minecraft:
    CiderMakara

Posted 17 October 2012 - 11:28 AM

Stunning job, I love what you have done with the characters thus far!

#10 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 17 October 2012 - 11:28 AM

The logo is all thanks to our great and illustrious (literally) leader Volvonski. He's designing the cover art for the story and Fafflemaster is doing the Illustrations.

​That is... if you're OK with that

Edited by greebster, 17 October 2012 - 11:48 AM.


#11 Rhythmition

Rhythmition

    ...It's been a long time.

  • Pony
  • 781 posts
  • minecraft:
    flamingdeath13

Posted 17 October 2012 - 12:35 PM

This is great.

#12 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 17 October 2012 - 01:25 PM

This is great.


thanks :D

#13 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 17 October 2012 - 03:01 PM

Just realised that the use of chronicles is used wrong here, chronicles being a detailed account of historical and factual events in a chronological order which this story is not.

So instead i've made the logo as the brohoof saga,a saga being a long involved/detailed story or tale about heroic achievements(which is what our main hero fleetfire is doing, based on the short description greebster gave me).

Posted Image

Edited by Volvonski, 17 October 2012 - 05:58 PM.


#14 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 18 October 2012 - 07:59 AM

Just realised that the use of chronicles is used wrong here, chronicles being a detailed account of historical and factual events in a chronological order which this story is not.

So instead i've made the logo as the brohoof saga,a saga being a long involved/detailed story or tale about heroic achievements(which is what our main hero fleetfire is doing, based on the short description greebster gave me).

Posted Image


Strictly speaking, it is historical, but needn't be factual. I'll think of another name.

#15 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 18 October 2012 - 08:13 AM

Let the ponies decide!

#16 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 18 October 2012 - 01:41 PM

Aww EQD rejected this, which is strange because a lot of fanfics have OC's in them.

#17 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 18 October 2012 - 06:57 PM

IT's possible that it was rejected because it is related to our server instead of just being regular OCs

#18 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 18 October 2012 - 08:45 PM

It's still not right to just reject it even if the OC's came from here, it's not like we're basing all the OC's on people from here, we're merely using OC's from people here which i'm sure people have done in plenty of fanfics and had them up on EQD.

#19 Seras Victoria

Seras Victoria

    A real man never dies ... even if he's killed.

  • Builder
  • 317 posts
  • minecraft:
    Seras_Victoria

Posted 18 October 2012 - 09:36 PM

Yes but then again there are those people from EQD which are just generally depressing and can't see a good fic if Lauren Faust admitted it was good, they don't realise they missed a big opportunity here and it'll be great to see their reaction when this fic becomes huge which I'm sure it will be!

#20 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 19 October 2012 - 07:11 AM

IT's possible that it was rejected because it is related to our server instead of just being regular OCs


That could be it, I'll just explain that it's OCs from friends, which in truth you all are :)

Yes but then again there are those people from EQD which are just generally depressing and can't see a good fic if Lauren Faust admitted it was good, they don't realise they missed a big opportunity here and it'll be great to see their reaction when this fic becomes huge which I'm sure it will be!


Thanks Wrover :D I'll make it so

I'll resend the Story, explaining in detail that they are merely characters inspired by friends, that's only the truth after all.

Edited by greebster, 19 October 2012 - 07:13 AM.


#21 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 19 October 2012 - 08:48 AM

I did a full pre-read and grammar checked/edited the whole thing. I hope that this should be OK to submit to EQD now.

#22 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 19 October 2012 - 09:13 AM

OK, so I've resent the story. Grammar and all that stuff appears to be dandy, let's hope and wait now, eh?

#23 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 19 October 2012 - 12:11 PM

I hope you added that none of the characters are based on people from here, that may have been why they rejected it in the first place.

#24 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 19 October 2012 - 01:36 PM

I hope you added that none of the characters are based on people from here, that may have been why they rejected it in the first place.


I said that the characters are inspired by friend's OCs

#25 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 19 October 2012 - 01:51 PM

I said that the characters are inspired by friend's OCs

That might do it, just as long as they don't know who Kilorat is, or what brohoof.com is.

#26 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 12:20 AM

That might do it, just as long as they don't know who Kilorat is, or what brohoof.com is.


I sent the Fan-fic mods an email after my first one, they hadn't specified why my story was unsuccessful, here's their reply

We have rules against writing about people in the fandom, which your fic does, if I'm not mistaken (or their OCs, at least)

I'm assured that you can write using people's OC's, just don't say they're from a forum as such. I hope at least

I'll still continue to write, regardless of Equestria Daily and their rules. A story is a story, rules only constrain. I write this story for you guys, the lovely community of Brohoof :D

#27 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 01:29 AM

In the words of Professor Farnsworth, 'Good news everyone'

I have posted the story on fimfiction, I hope it is accepted there, it should do :)

#28 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 20 October 2012 - 12:58 PM

That's just a load of ********, so you can have OC's just as long as they're not from people who are on a forum?, and what if those OC's are from people who do go on forums and have used it there?.

Fimfiction is good and all but it won't get the high publicity that this story deserves, EQD has officially lost some respect from me.

#29 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:05 PM

I always had little respect for EQD. There was a time when I was sending pictures to them in hopes of being posted, but each one got rejected without an explanation as to WHY. Now, most of the art on EQD is incredibly good (Beyond my skill level) but then there are the few that...... aren't. So yeah the point is, I don't submit my anything to EQD. Or that entire post looks like rambling. Oh well.

#30 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:16 PM

I always had little respect for EQD. There was a time when I was sending pictures to them in hopes of being posted, but each one got rejected without an explanation as to WHY. Now, most of the art on EQD is incredibly good (Beyond my skill level) but then there are the few that...... aren't. So yeah the point is, I don't submit my anything to EQD. Or that entire post looks like rambling. Oh well.


I have to agree and sympathize with you there, it's a pain trying to get a true reason out of them. Fimfiction actually seems half decent though.


I think your art is a great rival for much of the artwork on EQD, you have a gift my friend :)

Edited by greebster, 20 October 2012 - 04:19 PM.


#31 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:26 PM

Awwww thanks :D

#32 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:34 PM

Awwww thanks :D


I just had a reply from Fimfiction. I failed...


But only because I forgot to publish the first chapter LOL! I resubmitted it though, so all's well! Look out for it on the newest stories list :)

#33 Golfmann

Golfmann

    Supreme Potentate

  • Builder
  • 2768 posts
  • minecraft:
    Golfmann14

Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:40 PM

I just had a reply from Fimfiction. I failed...


But only because I forgot to publish the first chapter LOL! I resubmitted it though, so all's well! Look out for it on the newest stories list :)

lol xD

#34 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 20 October 2012 - 04:47 PM

Marvellous!, i'll add it to my favourites and post a comment once it appears.

#35 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 05:13 PM

Excited for the next paaaart! Wheeeee!

#36 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 20 October 2012 - 07:06 PM

Ok this just pisses me off, they won't allow a great story like this but they will allow crap like this?: http://www.equestria...demon-king.html

Ok EQD that's the last straw, if i ever finally make Naponyonic Warfare i am not submitting it there, hell if i ever make anything pony related i'm not submitting it, simply because EQD doesn't deserve to have my work grace its pages.

#37 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 07:13 PM

http://www.fimfictio...ohoof:-Book-One

There we go :D

Ok this just pisses me off, they won't allow a great story like this but they will allow crap like this?: http://www.equestria...demon-king.html

Ok EQD that's the last straw, if i ever finally make Naponyonic Warfare i am not submitting it there, hell if i ever make anything pony related i'm not submitting it, simply because EQD doesn't deserve to have my work grace its pages.


They sent me an apology mail but I have some things I must change also. Here it is:

Our apologies; the fic box maintainer who told you this violated the rules was mistaken. He thought the characters were literally meant to be the members of that server. However, due to issues with capitalization, tense inconsistency, and comma use, this cannot be forwarded to the pre-readers. This does not count as a strike. Sorry for the confusion, and once it's been proofread a bit feel free to submit it again.

All the best,
The EqD Team

#38 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 20 October 2012 - 07:20 PM

That's more like it, they really should pay more attention to what is being submitted and not simply reject because of a misunderstanding.

#39 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 07:22 PM

That's more like it, they really should pay more attention to what is being submitted and not simply reject because of a misunderstanding.


Indeed, however they are still right. I need to sort out my grammar in some places and I'll resubmit it as soon as complete :)

#40 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 20 October 2012 - 07:26 PM

That shouldn't be a problem for such a talented writer such as yourself, i'm sure you'll have it all fixed post haste!.

#41 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 08:09 PM

That shouldn't be a problem for such a talented writer such as yourself, i'm sure you'll have it all fixed post haste!.


Indeedy-doo Almost there in fact :D

#42 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 08:19 PM

Now I'm even more excited for part 2! I very rarely like fanfics (Bland nouns, adjectives, verbs, dumb story) But I can't stop rereading this.

So good.

#43 Pankie

Pankie

    My favorite anime is Seinfeild!!

  • Builder
  • 191 posts
  • minecraft:
    PinkieBichSwag

Posted 20 October 2012 - 08:21 PM

am I in it?

can i be a princess?

hazzah!

#44 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 08:57 PM

am I in it?

can i be a princess?

hazzah!


erm no lol, go ahead and read it if you wish :D

Now I'm even more excited for part 2! I very rarely like fanfics (Bland nouns, adjectives, verbs, dumb story) But I can't stop rereading this.

So good.


You helped with this, saying that, you ALL did :)

Thanks for the support so far everypony, also thanks to you Faffle for volunteering to design illustrative content for the story :D
and to you too Volvonski for supplying a logo/name for the Stories

Edited by greebster, 20 October 2012 - 08:58 PM.


#45 Pankie

Pankie

    My favorite anime is Seinfeild!!

  • Builder
  • 191 posts
  • minecraft:
    PinkieBichSwag

Posted 20 October 2012 - 08:57 PM

erm no lol, go ahead and read it if you wish :D


>u<
so kewt!

#46 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 20 October 2012 - 09:01 PM

I recognise talent when i see it, and when i see it i'll do anything in my power to see that talent flourish, even if its the most simplest of things like logos, advice, names etc.

As others have said i look forward to the next part, just make sure you proof read it before submitting it anywhere this time.

#47 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 20 October 2012 - 09:21 PM

I recognise talent when i see it, and when i see it i'll do anything in my power to see that talent flourish, even if its the most simplest of things like logos, advice, names etc.

As others have said i look forward to the next part, just make sure you proof read it before submitting it anywhere this time.


I shall O great and powerful Volvo :D come on the server :3

#48 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 21 October 2012 - 08:25 PM

Chapter 3, currently named Decisions is in the process of being imagined and written as it were. I thank you again for your patience, more updates coming soon :D

#49 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 21 October 2012 - 10:58 PM

Still no sign of this story on EQD, they'd better not have rejected it again.

#50 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 22 October 2012 - 09:18 AM

I haven't received a reply since I last sent it off. Hopefully they are deeply considering it. My inbox seems devoid of life at the moment hehe :D

#51 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 24 October 2012 - 01:55 AM

Now I know what it feels like to wait for a fanfiction!

Now I feel bad and will update my comic soon.

#52 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 24 October 2012 - 06:30 AM

Now I know what it feels like to wait for a fanfiction!

Now I feel bad and will update my comic soon.


Not to worry, I'm progressing steadily through the design, my parents hear me talking to myself sometimes: that's me working up different scenarios and speeches as it were :D

Edited by greebster, 24 October 2012 - 06:31 AM.


#53 Quoth the Raven

Quoth the Raven

    I'm just here for roleplay

  • Builder
  • 1010 posts
  • minecraft:
    stardragon1000

Posted 27 October 2012 - 05:32 PM

This is amazing, Greebster! You have quite a gift, as stated previously in this thread. I'll be looking forward to seeing more from you!

#54 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 28 October 2012 - 02:10 AM

I promise, there's way much more where that is from, hopefully I will learn more along the way :)

And thanks, I'd like to think if people thought I have a knack for something it would be this :D

Edited by greebster, 28 October 2012 - 02:13 AM.


#55 Nova_StarHunter

Nova_StarHunter

    Writer

  • Pony
  • 15 posts
  • minecraft:
    Gray__Wolf

Posted 30 October 2012 - 11:55 AM

‘Nova Vokunah. He’s a renowned demon-hunter. He’s the brains on beasties and other critters you wouldn’t want to meet when the sun’s down. Not that it’s stopped him.’ Nova, a sapphire-mane Unicorn with a grey coat flashed Fleet an electric grin. He had as equally disturbing a love for lighting as Flaming had for fire...


I find this... electrifying.

10. Pun aside. this story = Epic. no stronger word...*DEEPBREATH* Amazing phenomenal incredible awe-inspiring ground breaking earth shattering awesome!!!!!!!!
Phew.. that took longer to type than it did to say
anyway just one small thing (it's not your fault, i didn't specify this.)
Hair should be "Cobalt" not "Sapphire"
now just one last thing.
20. Go To 10, Stop At Line End

Edited by Nova_StarHunter, 30 October 2012 - 12:00 PM.


#56 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 30 October 2012 - 08:36 PM

I find this... electrifying.

10.
20. Go To 10, Stop At Line End


I guess I was just running out of ways to describe the colour blue ^^
It's been edited. What do you mean by all the 10's and 20's. Stop at line end?

P.S. I resubmitted to EQD. Either they missed my story on their mail list or it didn't send properly, or I'm on a very big waiting list.

Edited by greebster, 30 October 2012 - 08:36 PM.


#57 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 02:08 AM

Hey everypony.
I finally received a reply from EQD. They have decided to not accept my story to the community because of two references, Antibrony/Brohoof. The good question is: must I really revise my story again, with a different name for our little army and for the enemy, or shall I just not bother with EQD? I'm not sure personally, but the rest of their report ensured me that my grammar could be better, that I also shouldn't need to go so heavily into detail at times. They mentioned that I had a slight "drawl" at times, in the way I wrote. I kind of understood what they meant there.

I've decided to rewrite and revise the story anyhow, with or without the names, it's up to you guys really :)
I like to think that my knowledge of writing has improved through this whole procedure, so either way you will have a better story to read.

#58 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 03 November 2012 - 02:30 AM

I suppose instead of just simply calling the order "Brohoof you could call it "The Order of the Hoof", that way it doesn't seem like its tied to this server and it still stays true to the original name.

As for the enemy name i suppose "The League of Adversae Equestri"(Anti Equestrian) seems most fitting, although you may have to rename the enemy character names a bit, so it doesn't seem as if its tied to minecraft or this server.

I for one would love to see this up on EQD, just as long as you have the grammar nailed down and slightly revised the story so it isn't so heavy on the detail then i don't see why you can't give it another try.

#59 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 02:33 AM

Thanks Vol, I will certainly give it my best shot :)

#60 Golfmann

Golfmann

    Supreme Potentate

  • Builder
  • 2768 posts
  • minecraft:
    Golfmann14

Posted 03 November 2012 - 03:21 AM

I agree with volvonski. Also, very clever names you came up with! I would be willing to try and help with grammar screening if need be.

Edited by Golfmann14, 03 November 2012 - 03:21 AM.


#61 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 03:32 AM

I agree with volvonski. Also, very clever names you came up with! I would be willing to try and help with grammar screening if need be.


I suppose I have a lot to thank you guys for, what with the server issues and challenges of personal strength (meaning that I felt down on the fact I didn't do as good as EQD wanted), I suppose with all the support you have all helped me become stronger in this skill and stronger in friendships. I no longer feel weakened by the fact that my work wasn't perfect, I'm happy now, knowing this will help me in my ambitions to be better at what I do.

And I will also keep you in mind for pre-reading golf :)


Let's make dreams happen.

#62 Golfmann

Golfmann

    Supreme Potentate

  • Builder
  • 2768 posts
  • minecraft:
    Golfmann14

Posted 03 November 2012 - 03:35 AM

I suppose I have a lot to thank you guys for, what with the server issues and challenges of personal strength (meaning that I felt down on the fact I didn't do as good as EQD wanted), I suppose with all the support you have all helped me become stronger in this skill and stronger in friendships. I no longer feel weakened by the fact that my work wasn't perfect, I'm happy now, knowing this will help me in my ambitions to be better at what I do.

Aw! :D <3

I know as a fellow fic writer, nothing is perfect. lol Even 5 chapters into my story I go back and doubt the integrity of previous chapters and revise here and there. If you just hang with it, work on editing a chapter here and there, and sleep on it for 2 or 3 days it always helps. Then come back and see if what you revised is really what you want. And if not, try going a different direction, and keep on picking away until you can't find anything else.

Edited by Golfmann14, 03 November 2012 - 03:36 AM.


#63 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 03:39 AM

Golfmann, you're the best :)
I will remember you for sure, the guy who told me to shut up that time on the Pony Scrolls thread, how things have changed. I deserved to be told that, I was being a complete snob, please forgive me for that past messup.
Thanks for your support and for the advice, I can tell for sure you know your fiction omnibus.

#64 Golfmann

Golfmann

    Supreme Potentate

  • Builder
  • 2768 posts
  • minecraft:
    Golfmann14

Posted 03 November 2012 - 03:46 AM

Golfmann, you're the best :)
I will remember you for sure, the guy who told me to shut up that time on the Pony Scrolls thread, how things have changed. I deserved to be told that, I was being a complete snob, please forgive me for that past messup.
Thanks for your support and for the advice, I can tell for sure you know your fiction omnibus.

Hahaha! I got all mad because I thought I knew all my Elder Scrolls. I think we both needed a little time to mature a tad. :D If there was any story about the magic of friendship, It would be about greebster and Golfmann.

For some reason i've always just been a walking thesaurus all my life xD I would be what you call an orthoepist. Proud of it!

By the way, how long did EqD take to respond to your fic?

Edited by Golfmann14, 03 November 2012 - 04:19 AM.


#65 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 10:15 AM

To

By the way, how long did EqD take to respond to your fic?


Must have been just under a month, I think :)
They have waiting lists...

#66 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 03 November 2012 - 02:13 PM

I've just realised that because the group is being changed the title of the story won't make sense, unless the battlecry of the order would be "Ordinis ungulam adunare, pro Brohoof!" (Order of the Hoof unite, for brohoof!).

Of course for that battlecry to work you would have to make up another character named "Brohoof", he could be the original grandmaster of the order who during an epic battle was injured and put in stasis for 1000 years. He would then appear later on as the order starts to break(for whatever reason, i'll leave that to you) and rally them against the enemy in one final battle(lord of the rings style).

#67 Golfmann

Golfmann

    Supreme Potentate

  • Builder
  • 2768 posts
  • minecraft:
    Golfmann14

Posted 03 November 2012 - 02:55 PM

I've just realised that because the group is being changed the title of the story won't make sense, unless the battlecry of the order would be "Ordinis ungulam adunare, pro Brohoof!" (Order of the Hoof unite, for brohoof!).

Of course for that battlecry to work you would have to make up another character named "Brohoof", he could be the original grandmaster of the order who during an epic battle was injured and put in stasis for 1000 years. He would then appear later on as the order starts to break(for whatever reason, i'll leave that to you) and rally them against the enemy in one final battle(lord of the rings style).

Didn't they have a problem with any reference to Brohoof? From greeb's explanation it seems they want zero reference to that sort of thing...

#68 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 03:38 PM

That is sadly correct, no sneaky references to Brony phrases or Bronies themselves

#69 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 04:23 PM

Then what of the Antibrony?

#70 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 03 November 2012 - 05:39 PM

Then what of the Antibrony?

I've already provided another name for them(previous page).

#71 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 07:17 PM

If you guys have names or ideas related to the main villain, please feel free to share, just keep it related it to Canon Equestria and MLP only, no Brony stuff included.

I also would appreciate suggestions for a new team name, the best will be picked of course.

Don't feel offended if none of your names are sold, I may have a unique name of my own if I come across one :)
We'll see how things turn out.

Edited by greebster, 03 November 2012 - 07:21 PM.


#72 Volvonski

Volvonski

    Former Admin

  • Banned
  • 786 posts
  • minecraft:
    volvonski

Posted 03 November 2012 - 07:48 PM

So we're not going to use "The Order of the Hoof" for the team?.

#73 Golfmann

Golfmann

    Supreme Potentate

  • Builder
  • 2768 posts
  • minecraft:
    Golfmann14

Posted 03 November 2012 - 07:59 PM

If you guys have names or ideas related to the main villain, please feel free to share, just keep it related it to Canon Equestria and MLP only, no Brony stuff included.


King Somber ROFL! xD

#74 FaffleMaster

FaffleMaster

    Electric Boop-aloo

  • Builder
  • 2320 posts
  • minecraft:
    FaffleMaster

Posted 03 November 2012 - 09:05 PM

I've already provided another name for them(previous page).


Just saw that...

yeah that seems close enough to the original intent of the name I think maybe.

#75 Golfmann

Golfmann

    Supreme Potentate

  • Builder
  • 2768 posts
  • minecraft:
    Golfmann14

Posted 04 November 2012 - 07:21 PM

for the first 4 chapters of my story I plodded through it one at a time just trying to connect the story and it took me about a week to write each one.... Today I just wrote 3 chapters in a row and now on the fourth....

I hope your experience has not been as frustration greeb xD

#76 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 05 November 2012 - 11:50 AM

I'm just so busy at the moment, but I promise to get back to writing soon :D

#77 greebster

greebster

    World's best mom!

  • Builder
  • 2530 posts
  • minecraft:
    greebster

Posted 09 November 2012 - 07:42 AM

I must admit I have been rather inactive of late, but my mind is well set on the task as of today. I promise to give you your new chapter very soon :)

#78 Quoth the Raven

Quoth the Raven

    I'm just here for roleplay

  • Builder
  • 1010 posts
  • minecraft:
    stardragon1000

Posted 09 November 2012 - 12:56 PM

I must admit I have been rather inactive of late, but my mind is well set on the task as of today. I promise to give you your new chapter very soon :)


yay


0 user(s) are reading this topic

0 members, 0 guests, 0 anonymous users