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#1 Walter

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Posted 22 April 2012 - 04:55 PM

STORIES ARE INDIVIDUAL; IF ONE PERSON'S STORY HAS THE SAME ELEMENT AS ANOTHER IT DOESN'T MATTER.

My OC Died in a custom version of Rainbow Factory.
So, My OC was in trouble with some pretty powerful groups, sort of like the mafia.
And he ended up in the Rainbow Factory. Rainbow was crazed enough that she did not recognize me.
(I was dating her.)

"Oh, WILL YOU STOP RESISTING?" Yelled Rainbow Dash at Walter.

Walter was currently on the floor, bloodied, legs broken. Pointing a gun at Rainbow, Rainbow pointing a gun at him.
The year was 2017, and a Technological Renaissance had undergone in Cloudsdale.
There were laser cannons and ion blaster cannons, But guns were still in use.

Walter's arm shook as he was holding the gun up at Rainbow, panting.
His breath showed in the cold, stuffy air of the Rainbow Factory.

Scootaloo had already been done with, and RD Hadn't died.

"I... I... I just... I just can't!" Walter yelled as he threw the gun down a deep chasm to the left of him.

"Now that's more like it!" Rainbow Dash boasted, closing one eye to aim at Walter.
"Any last words?"

Walter had caused quite some trouble with Rainbow, killing 15 of the black suited ponies as he tried to escape the factory.
Rainbow had been so fed up with him, She deceided just to kill him off herself.

"Yes. I do have some last words."

"Go on, then!!" Yelled Rainbow.

"I just want you to know, that, no matter what, I will always be there, waiting. Waiting for you to come back to me. Waiting..."

"For you to realize."

Rainbow had a confused look on her face, when suddenly, she realized. Her eyes softened as she slowly let loose her grip of the gun.
Walter, seeing this, knew that Dr. Atmosphere would soon shoot Walter himself.
Walter, despite his broken legs, climbed up, and hugged Rainbow.

*POW*

Blood spurted from the side of Walter's head.
He fell over, and a trapdoor opened under him.
Rainbow peered over the edge, and watched in horror as he fell to his death,
as the factory's automatic defense systems fired at him, and in a great flash of light and plasma, blew him to pieces.

Rainbow, right then and there, cried a grayscale rainbow right out that trapdoor.

Dr. Atmosphere realized what he had to do now.
He walked up to rainbow, pointed his .45 caliber revolver at her head, and...

*POW*

Rainbow fell down, was obliterated, and joined Walter, stretched out upon the sea beneath Cloudsdale.
In many, many little pieces.


#2 Rocarina

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Posted 25 April 2012 - 08:09 PM

We're remaking ,eh? Alright. REPOSTMAN AWAY
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#3 CaptainSnowman

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Posted 25 April 2012 - 08:15 PM

((Repost you say? I okay with that! Huzzah! Theme song time!))

MacFrosty, making life saving inventions out of household materials! MacFrosty, getting in and out of ultra sticky situations! MacFrosty, the colt's a friggin genius! MacFrosty!


MacFrosty stared intently at the supernuke. Fluttershy screamed in fear as she found out the room they were in was locked. "That bomb is going to explode in thirty seconds MacFrosty."

"Great googily moogily!" Dew Drop screamed as he stroked his long beard. "What are we going to do MacFrosty?"

"I have an idea! Fluttershy!"

"Yeah McFrosty?"

"Give me some of that modeling glue, that Celestia bobble head, and those crayons!"

"You got it MacFrosty!" Fluttershy yelled as she grabbed the objects and handed them to MacFrosty.

"Good good." McFrosty took the objects and started constructing.

Fluttershy looked at her watch as sweat rooled down her face. "Fifteen seconds MacFrosty."

"Alright!" *Snap* "Oh Dammit!"

"MacFrosty? What are you doing?" Dew Drop asked while still stroking his massive beard and smoking from a pipe.

"Huh... I'm drawing a funny mustache on the Celestia bobble-head."

"Wait... what?" Fluttershy asked in a confused tone.

"I glued the crayons together to make a multi-colored mustache."

"What about the bomb?" Fluttershy looked at him with a worried face. "How are you going to..."

MacFrosty hushed her with his hoof. "Shhhhhh... What if we just ignore the fact that there's a bomb and another colt here and get it on." MacFrosty winked at Fluttershy with a dirty smile.

"MacFrosty!?" She gasped in shock with a large blush. "Th-this isn't the time or place."

"What the buck?" Dew questioned MacFrosty with a disgusted face.

"Silence! Fine we'll do it some other time." He went back to drawing. *Snap* "Dammit! Hey... anypony got another cray"

BOOM

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MacFrosty!

#4 Walter

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Posted 04 July 2012 - 09:13 PM

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#5 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 16 July 2012 - 01:22 PM

Hmm, I had an Idea for a fic that ends Like so:

And so, Cider finally placed his pen on the table. His hoof began to shake as he closed his eyes. it had been a long journey, Such a long one, and if he needed something right now, it was the comfort that he would find in death. He slowly got out of his chair, legs shaking as he did so, threatening to collapse at any moment, but he did not reach for his cane. This would be his last journey, he wanted to do it alone. As he began to walk, images of his life began to flash once more, from the time he was born, up to now. It had been so long, he realised, since he had even smiled, and this was something he wanted to change. Strange, he thought, that after all this forgetfulness, after forgetting even what he was doing eating breakfast, his imminent death made everything sharper, almost razor-sharp. He could hear the chirping of the birds just outside, the laughter of the young colts and fillies as they played, the breeze ruffling down the street he lived on. A tear came to his eye as he realised how absolute death was. He wished there was another life to go to, where he might meet his beloved again, but the logical side in him rebuffed this. He finally reached his destination, the warm patch of the carpet just beside the living room window. He stood in the spot for a long time, then smiled. This was it. It was time to go. He closed his eyes, and felt his old heart begin to slow...

Edited by RoyalInBlue, 16 July 2012 - 01:25 PM.


#6 Jaylex

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Posted 13 August 2012 - 01:36 AM

hm I guess Silver and crystal die together, I'll tell you how.
The changeling's grabbed crystal and silver, They had thought the ponies had given up. But silver wasn't finished, he tore away from them and fired a magic missile, exploding on impact. The other changelings let crystal go to help their friends, as soon as she hit the ground they both ran into the everfree forest. The changelings almost immediately noticed them and took chase. When Crystal and Silver were alone, Crystal spoke.
"Silver, we're not gonna get out of this alive."
"Don't say that Crystal we're are gonna stay together."
"Not if they get to us! I...I know a spell that could save us."
"Really, well use it."
Crystal had a look of sadness on her face.
"The...The spell will turn us to stone and we can stay together until somepony breaks our gaze."
Silver was shocked for a while but then realized the situation they were in and agreed.
"Okay Crystal, how do we do it."
"You just have to look me dead in the eye and I'll use the magic."
So silver did what she asked, and their gaze didn't break not when a purple glow surrounded them, not when they started turning to stone, not even when changelings passed two lifelike statues.

#7 Virelen

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Posted 13 August 2012 - 02:20 AM

Vire stood on the balcony of the tower. This was it. The last stand againt Sprocket, the leader of the griffin gang that almost killed her. She backed up and aimed her shotgun at his head.
"Don't you dare fire that, Virelen!"
"Why not?"
"If you do, it will be the end of you!" Vire sneered and only slightly pulled the trigger.
"See you in Tartarus, Sprocket!"
"I'm sorry it has to end this way. I wish I could have negotiated it with you."
Vire pulled the trigger. She gasped as no bullets came out. Only smoke.
"What the-" Suddenly two griffins lifted her into the air.
"NO! PUT ME DOWN!" Vire tried to reload her shotgun, but it was jammed. The two griffins flung her gun away.
"NO!" She pulled a dagger engraved with a griffin skull in it out. She swung it at the two griffins, but to no avail.
"Vire, I wish I could give you a better death than this. But no one messes with the Sharp Beaks." Sprocket smiled and motioned the griffins to take her away. She screamed the whole way.
The griffins flew her over to the lake. She stared at it. She was breathless. Nopony hoped to die by drowning.
"No... NO YOU CAN'T DO THIS!"
"Say hi to Cerberus for me." Said Sprocket as he tied a huge stone to her leg. The griffins let her go, and she plummeted into the lake, unable to get out.
She tried to cut the rope but she grew weaker and weaker. Her life flashed before her eyes: The vault, her brother, the cave, the griffins.
She closed her eyes and felt the air leave her body.The last thing through her mind was an old phrase her mother had told her: "Don't fear, mommy's here to help."

#8 Jaylex

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Posted 13 August 2012 - 03:34 AM

Vire stood on the balcony of the tower. This was it. The last stand againt Sprocket, the leader of the griffin gang that almost killed her. She backed up and aimed her shotgun at his head.
"Don't you dare fire that, Virelen!"
"Why not?"
"If you do, it will be the end of you!" Vire sneered and only slightly pulled the trigger.
"See you in Tartarus, Sprocket!"
"I'm sorry it has to end this way. I wish I could have negotiated it with you."
Vire pulled the trigger. She gasped as no bullets came out. Only smoke.
"What the-" Suddenly two griffins lifted her into the air.
"NO! PUT ME DOWN!" Vire tried to reload her shotgun, but it was jammed. The two griffins flung her gun away.
"NO!" She pulled a dagger engraved with a griffin skull in it out. She swung it at the two griffins, but to no avail.
"Vire, I wish I could give you a better death than this. But no one messes with the Sharp Beaks." Sprocket smiled and motioned the griffins to take her away. She screamed the whole way.
The griffins flew her over to the lake. She stared at it. She was breathless. Nopony hoped to die by drowning.
"No... NO YOU CAN'T DO THIS!"
"Say hi to Cerberus for me." Said Sprocket as he tied a huge stone to her leg. The griffins let her go, and she plummeted into the lake, unable to get out.
She tried to cut the rope but she grew weaker and weaker. Her life flashed before her eyes: The vault, her brother, the cave, the griffins.
She closed her eyes and felt the air leave her body.The last thing through her mind was an old phrase her mother had told her: "Don't fear, mommy's here to help."

So thats how dolan dies

#9 Spoffingten

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Posted 13 August 2012 - 03:33 PM

Dying OCs? Sounds like a job for Spiffington!

Spiffington was encircled by the changelings, Princess Luna holding him tight. The black, holed creatures came closer and closer and closer some more.

"So, you think you've a lovely lunch ahead, haven't you? Well, I dare say you ought to reconsider..." Spiffington smiled, brushing Luna off and giving her a wink. The terrible changelings lunged at the two ponies ravenously. Spiffington's muscles tensed as he jumped forward, skewering one of the terrible creatures on his horn and then using magic to blow it to bits, black blood raining down. More changelings flew around Luna, and Spiffington simply shot balls of white light at them, and they burnt away. Luna cowered on the ground in terror. Spiffington felt a searing pain in his shoulder as a changeling bit into him, and then another changeling latched onto him. And another, and another. Spiffington tried to fight them off, with changelings blowing up from his holy magic. But he could only hold out so long. All seemed lost when...

"Splarch!" A changeling screamed as it was lifted off by a sparkling blue magical force, and another was impaled onto Spiffington's horn, kicked by and unseen hoof. Spiffington kicked off the rest of the changelings, and they were all writhing in pain. Spiffington was tired and bleeding, and he knew he'd meet his end when he saw the last changeling jump forward at him. But all was not lost! Luna jumped forward in the air behind Spiffington and grasped him tightly, lifting him into the air and escaping the final changeling. The two flew back to Canterlot Castle, as the night was still young...

Spiffington died of an awesoneness-induced seizure during a three-way with Celestia and Luna.

#10 Cleminjon

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Posted 20 August 2012 - 04:16 AM

Dying OCs? Sounds like a job for Spiffington!

Spiffington was encircled by the changelings, Princess Luna holding him tight. The black, holed creatures came closer and closer and closer some more.

"So, you think you've a lovely lunch ahead, haven't you? Well, I dare say you ought to reconsider..." Spiffington smiled, brushing Luna off and giving her a wink. The terrible changelings lunged at the two ponies ravenously. Spiffington's muscles tensed as he jumped forward, skewering one of the terrible creatures on his horn and then using magic to blow it to bits, black blood raining down. More changelings flew around Luna, and Spiffington simply shot balls of white light at them, and they burnt away. Luna cowered on the ground in terror. Spiffington felt a searing pain in his shoulder as a changeling bit into him, and then another changeling latched onto him. And another, and another. Spiffington tried to fight them off, with changelings blowing up from his holy magic. But he could only hold out so long. All seemed lost when...

"Splarch!" A changeling screamed as it was lifted off by a sparkling blue magical force, and another was impaled onto Spiffington's horn, kicked by and unseen hoof. Spiffington kicked off the rest of the changelings, and they were all writhing in pain. Spiffington was tired and bleeding, and he knew he'd meet his end when he saw the last changeling jump forward at him. But all was not lost! Luna jumped forward in the air behind Spiffington and grasped him tightly, lifting him into the air and escaping the final changeling. The two flew back to Canterlot Castle, as the night was still young...

Spiffington died of an awesoneness-induced seizure during a three-way with Celestia and Luna.


That's our Spiffington! *sitcom laughter*

Edited by Joniclem, 20 August 2012 - 04:17 AM.


#11 Turbo Maximus

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Posted 05 September 2012 - 10:36 PM

Fire Heart died stillborn...THE END

#12 Distortion_

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 08:44 PM

Tied up Distortion and his best friend sat at a table. forced to play russian roulette. First one up was Distortion, CLICK. no shot. his friend next, the friend screamed and pulled the trigger. no shot was fired. Distortion knew it was time. He sighed, and pulled the trigger, CLICK. Distortion sighed. there was an extremely little chance that his friend would live. BANG, his friend's chair fell over backward and blood spilled over the floor. Distortion was in shock. the terrorists grabbed distortion, and threw him against a wall, hooves tied together. three terrorists all holding guns pointing at him. Distortion looked up at the sky and smiled. Now the time has come to go, he smirked at the terrorists, "Fuck.. you.. assho.." He was cut off by the sound of gunshots. Distortion fell to the floor. The terrorists poored gasoline over his corpse and lit it on fire. Distortion was no more, the equestrian army, failing the job to save the hostages.

(sad music, camera pans away from fire)

#13 MaceWindows

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 08:58 PM

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It looked like the end. JC Dunton was surrounded by MJ12 troopers. He saw no point resisting, there was not much he could do. The floor ahead of him began to separate. Out of the newly created hole, a life support chamber rose from the ground. Inside was Bob Page, who had augmented himself and kept himself alive in the pod long enough to merge with Helios. He glared at JC.

"How pathetic." He said. "Even when working with the Illuminati, you STILL weren't able to stop me. Now I have you here under my control, ready to die by my command."

JC stared back into the eyes of Bob Page through his sunglasses.

He smirked. "You forget one thing Page..."

Page chuckled. "And what could that possibly be? What could possibly save you know?"

JC reached into his trenchcoat pocket, and pulled out a small metal cylinder. He looked down at it, and said,
"We're police."

He threw the riot prod towards Bob Page. It hit the main systems of the life support pod, shorting it out. Bob Page screamed.

"Helios! Do something!!" But Helios would not respond. He had decided already that JC would be the one to merge with.

The pod went critical and exploded. It killed all the troopers in the room. JC Dunton was hurt badly. He activated his health regeneration augmentation and was quickly back on his feet. He ran out of the facility as fast as he could. As he was escaping from the collapsing Area 51, he got a transmission from Tracer Tong.

"You did it JC! The net's going dark! No more transmissions of any kind! We'll start again! Live in villages! JC if you hear this, find us! FIND US!"

Then Area 51 exploded.

Edited by Ainsley Harriott, 10 September 2012 - 08:59 PM.


#14 Distortion_

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 09:08 PM

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It looked like the end. JC Dunton was surrounded by MJ12 troopers. He saw no point resisting, there was not much he could do. The floor ahead of him began to separate. Out of the newly created hole, a life support chamber rose from the ground. Inside was Bob Page, who had augmented himself and kept himself alive in the pod long enough to merge with Helios. He glared at JC.

"How pathetic." He said. "Even when working with the Illuminati, you STILL weren't able to stop me. Now I have you here under my control, ready to die by my command."

JC stared back into the eyes of Bob Page through his sunglasses.

He smirked. "You forget one thing Page..."

Page chuckled. "And what could that possibly be? What could possibly save you know?"

JC reached into his trenchcoat pocket, and pulled out a small metal cylinder. He looked down at it, and said,
"We're police."

He threw the riot prod towards Bob Page. It hit the main systems of the life support pod, shorting it out. Bob Page screamed.

"Helios! Do something!!" But Helios would not respond. He had decided already that JC would be the one to merge with.

The pod went critical and exploded. It killed all the troopers in the room. JC Dunton was hurt badly. He activated his health regeneration augmentation and was quickly back on his feet. He ran out of the facility as fast as he could. As he was escaping from the collapsing Area 51, he got a transmission from Tracer Tong.

"You did it JC! The net's going dark! No more transmissions of any kind! We'll start again! Live in villages! JC if you hear this, find us! FIND US!"

Then Area 51 exploded.

I cried a little, the ending was so sad.

#15 BeTa77

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 09:09 PM

During his life, Honda was just a normal, everyday Pegasus, trying to make ends meet. One day, he decided he was fed up was not making anything out of his life, so he went to search for some form of signification.
A few days later, he came across a unassuming pamphlet. "Be a hero and volunteer!" It stated. "Volunteer for Starlight's medical research in Amcitia., and become a hero today!"

With a wide smile, Honda takes the pamphlet and takes the long journey to the city. Upon arriving, he is greeted by Starlight, and is told to drink something resembling brine water.
Eagerly drinking it, Honda sees another test subject, and shortly before blacking in a rage out hears Starlight speaking to him.
"The Changeling blood should make both you and him go berserk. He has 90% concentration, and you have 70%. Good luck."
The warning came far too late for Honda, and he blacks out in a furious rage....


Honda regains lucidity, and sees blood all over his coat and mane. He looks around, and sees the body of the test subject, lying in a mangled heap on the floor of an arena. He sees Starlight inspect the body, and grin slightly towards it.
Honda backs away in horror, but he didn't realize exactly where was standing. He loses his balance, and has just enough time to figure out what he was falling into. An antimatter reactor!
The last thing he sees is the lava of the reactor...
I'll spare you the exact details of his death, but it is said the death was so violently quick that his next incarnation retained some of his memories.

Edited by BeTa77, 10 September 2012 - 09:10 PM.


#16 tudexd

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 09:14 PM

Spark was just walking around testing samples for anomalies and stuff when a bridge fell on him... He dammed that yellow shirt to hell.....

#17 imnotparanoid

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 09:27 PM

RIP parry noid, death by MORTAL KOMBAT
Dun dun dun dun dundun dun dun dun dun dundun dun dun dun dun dundun dun dun dundeee dun
TEST YOUR MIGHT

#18 Distortion_

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 09:52 PM

I can do better then be killed by terrorists! Let's do this brain, we shall come up with a cool death.

Distortion wakes up to a shock, he was in a plane on his way to mexico to have the party of his life. Next to him were four friends. All of a suddon his stomache felt weird, as if he was on a rollercoaster. It was just then he realised the screaming of other ponies. He looked around, one of his friends was inpaled by a piece of plane, it was just then he realised the plane was going down. He stood up to find his friends, the screams of horror ringing through his ears. There was a blazing inferno behind him, he knew his friends were done for. As was he. A big explosion on the left wing of the plane made it go down quickly spiralling.distortion was now in mid air of the plane, feeling as if he was floating. The room spinning around and around. Half burning ponies crying and screaming everywhere. He could see his friend, face completely burned off, all he could see was empty eye sockets. Pure terror filled him. The front part snapped off and distortion only barely holding on a chair could see the ground of mexico far beneith him. A sudden roar of fire blasted him out of the plane and put him in mid air plummeting kilometers high toward earth. He looked at the ground coming closer and closer. Thinking to himself "so this is my final stop..". The terror had dissapeared from him, all he could hear was wind. It was a liberating feeling. He did not even fell the pain of the fire that burnt his wings and tail off. Humming a relaxing tune he reached the maximum falling speed. Land was just seconds away, distortion closed his eyes and crossed his arms. He splattered into a rock on the mexican coast leaving a small crater. Nothing but his scarf was found.


(good work brain!)

#19 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 10 September 2012 - 10:34 PM

(Brain, status report!

*arglblarglpeasinacan*

Perfect, let's write this!)

Quill stood in the plane, not quite sure about this. He held the supposed parachute, about 3 square centimeters of fabric labelled "Paranoids Parachuty parachute in his hooves. He had to yell over the sound of the wind, for the door was open.

"ARE YOU QUITE SURE THIS WILL WORK? ONLY IT SEEMS A LITTLE BIT SMALL"

General Paranoid stood tall, and smacked quill to the floor.

"ARE YOU DISOBEYING? ALL THE OTHERS JUMPED, WHY CAN'T YOU?"

Now Quill had to consider what he said carefully here. When HAD Paranoid ever meant him harm, or the like? Sure, there had been the time a stick of dynamite found it's way into his food rations, or the time he had been pushed into the lion cage at the zoo to 'learn how to fight', and there was CERTAINLY the time Paranoid had forced him to eat a whole jar of Laxatives and run a marathon before using the toilet...

"SIR, I THINK IT'S A MATTER OF TRUST."

General Paranoids eyes almost popped out of his head.

"A MATTER OF TRUST? FINE, TAKE MY DAMN PARACHUTE, NOW JUMP DAMN YOU WUSSY!"

Quill felt the comfort of an actual parachute on his shoulders, and the he was roughly jerked to the door of the plane. Miraculously, they were still in the green light zone, although Quill could have sworn they missed the drop zone and were now travelling solidly over the ocean.

"WHAT ARE YOU WAITING FOR, MOVE MOVE MOVE!"

Paranoids screaming in his ear caused Quill to jump a little in fright. Right off of the plane. As he fell, he saw Paranoid hand the Pilot a roll of pennies.

"YOU LYING MOTHERBUCKER!"

He turned back to the rapidly approaching Ocean. At least he had a parachute. He pulled the release cable. And was surrounded by several sheets of fabric, about three centimeters square, Labelled "Paranoids Parachuty parachute."

"AAAAAAAAAARGH-" SMACK.

Quill Critique was declared K.I.A after a particularly convincing report of insolence from his commanding officer, Paranoid.

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Posted 12 September 2012 - 07:36 PM

But... But... I don't want Nuclear MuffinCookie to die!

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Posted 13 September 2012 - 01:03 AM

FLEETFIRE'S LAST FLAME

Broken shafts of moonlight breached the inner sanctum of ancient Everfree Redoubt. Carved deep within the cold walls that time had neglected, shadows of the past flickered abnormally like a withered flower thrown into the fire. Fleetfire stood alone in a circular chamber, a warm glowing lamp hanging from her jaws. She set the lamp aside and took a closer observation of the wall, she needed to know why her destiny had brought her to this tenebrous place. It seemed to Fleet that even the shadows were garbed with veils of their own.

The writing on the wall was beyond Fleetfire's ability to translate, she'd have to return with a book on the language in due course of time. Before she could even turn to leave, a cold point of metal pressed firmly against her head. 'Your time is nigh, my old foe,' a disembodied voice from behind her said. Instinct overcame her and she spun 180 degrees, knocking the barrel of a gun away.

Dropping to the ground, Fleetfire rolled under a nearby cracked marble pulpit and sprung out the other side, her crossbow trained upon the attacker. 'Who the buck are you?' she snarled angrily at the shadow-wrapped figure. She heard movement behind her, shotguns being ratcheted. She lowered the crossbow slowly. 'Why it's me Fleet. Your nemesis, Galdiran. You stole my money and then decided to give it all away! I'm here because we have a score to settle.'

Fleetfire felt guns prodding roughly against her flanks and her back. Swallowing uneasily, she moved her hand over her bag of steel bolts. 'If I remember correctly, that money was stolen before I stole it,' she replied slowly. She slipped three bolts discreetly up her sleeve and tried to show a defiant face, even though her heart was hammering like it would explode forth from her chest.

Galdiran stepped from the shadows, he looked almost as ancient as the sanctum itself, his mane was white and he wore ashen leather armour, overall his appearance reminded Fleet of wintery blizzards. 'I cannot allow anypony who knows my secrets to live Miss Fleet, so die well.' He backed away as the guns moved up to her cranium, she had to time this right to live.

Before a single gun could fire, she spun her crossbow round, knocking all of the guns off target and causing panicked firing. Galdiran's men were clearly unprofessional thought Fleetfire as she fired three bolts in quick succession into three of them. There were another two guards stood further back in the shadows to her despair, both who were ready to fire if she so much as moved.

Despairingly, Fleetfire dropped her crossbow and threw herself down in the hope of using the stone furniture as cover. But even as she did, she felt a heavy impact hit her in the stomach, knocking the wind out of her. She tried to stand, but when she tried waves of pain caused her to scream. There was no mistaking it, she'd been shot.

Fleetfire knew Galdiran would want to finish her off, however she wasn't planning on letting him walk out alive. She rifled hurriedly through her pockets until she came across some magic explosive. Tears leaked down her face, pretty sure her wound wouldn't kill her, but more so that it was a hindrance. Fleet set the magic explosive to react to any fire or sparks. 'Such a pity' spoke a voice from behind her 'I guess heroes don't win out in the end, miss Fleet.'

A gun pressed sharply against the back of Fleet's head. She suddenly felt unduly calm, 'Please remind to actually give a motherbuckin' shit sometime, Galdiran. There's a special place for you when your life is spent.' If he felt unnerved Galdiran didn't let it show in what he said next, 'I'm pretty sure there is, but for now you only live once.' Fleetfire closed her eyes, her heart calmed and, as she smiled, she began to sing.

'O when the fire burns all around,
When hearts turn to stone,
If life is plucked up from the ground,
and carelessly just thrown.

Hearts will grasp the right,
Be strong we will prevail,
Souls will fight the night,
And thus the darkness fail.'

She ended the song and Galdiran fired. And so Fleetfire died.

The ensuing explosion caused the Everfree Redoubt to collapse, making it a famous ruin, Fleetfire's Last Flame.

Edited by greebster, 13 September 2012 - 01:05 AM.


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Posted 13 September 2012 - 06:10 PM

I want to redo Sharp's story. owo

Sharp sat up. It was raining out the window. He awoke to a crash of lightning. He turned, in a confused manner.
"Hey, guys! He's awake!"
"What? He's still supposed to be sleeping for the next three months! We're not ready yet!"
"Put him back to sleep!"
"How do you do that?"
"Fill the room with Neurotoxin!"

Sharp spun around in the bunk bed to see vents pouring green gases into the room. He covered his mouth and jumped out of the bed.
"He's trying to escape!"
"He'll pass out soon enough..."
Feeling drowsy now, Sharp continuously tried smashing through the metal door. Something was different, however. It had a... a feeling to it.
Clasping his forehead with one hoof and his mouth with the other, he collapsed to the ground.
"Go collect him and put him back into bed."
"Why not contain him in a stasis chamber?"
"Those are only prototypes, and they respond to movement. He'd escape in no time flat."
"When will he be leaving?"
"I don't know if he will at all…"
Sharp dreamt of his journeys. He had done so much... What had even happened? Why was he here? Wait, where WAS he?
Sharp woke up, but didn't open his eyes. He counted from three in his head and jolted out of the bed before anypony could take notice. He pulled with all his might on the metal door until he heard a click. He heaved it open and dashed out, not having any idea where he was headed.
He smashed through guards in attempt to escape. He wished he knew where he was, or anything at all. At least he knew who he was this time.
A door. A wooden door. There was finally a way to escape. He ran up to it and pulled it open. A fresh breeze blew through it. He slowly steped outside.
Free. He was free. But there was nowhere to run. Nowhere to go. He grasped his forehead. It was pounding. It hurt. He was deeling pain. It was so strange. He had been damaged before, but he had never felt true pain.
"Sharp!" An odd mare ran up and embraced Sharp tightly. "You're okay! I thought you would never wake up! Do you remember what happened?"
Sharp stood there null. I don't even remember you; nevermind what happened!
"Oh, were you dreaming?"
His eyes widened. Dream?
"It's okay. Everything's alright." She hugged him again. He was a bit surprised. Outside of the dream, he could feel her touch. He enjoyed it.
Professor Burner almost appeared from nowhere as he said "That's cute, Mara."
Mara's face was flushed. "Bunsen! Please! Don't...kill...the moment."
"Alright, alright. But I thought robots couldn't feel."
"So did I." muttered Sharp.
"Wow, you talked twice in one day. That's a new record." Mara smiled.
"Yeah, I just had such a weird dream... I was in this... facility, where I could feel everything. Pain. I felt pain. I couldn't comprehend it." Sharp was still sort of confused.
"That's because after we lost power, you and I were transferred into Organic bodies, but you had to be put to sleep for thatr. You don't remember? That's why you could feel me. Look, I have our original robot bodies over here..." She pointed out two dead robots against the wall.
Sharp was in shock. He was a normal pony.
Mara smiled. "You'll get used to it. Don't worry, I'll be with you through the whole thing..."

Meanwhile, out of the dream, Sharp's life systems failed, and shut down permenantly.

Edited by Rocarina, 13 September 2012 - 08:35 PM.


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Posted 06 October 2012 - 10:29 AM

i'm lazy as hell so ill just say this one thing
Zombies. that is how my OC would die, he hasent yet but if he does it will be zombies

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Posted 14 October 2012 - 02:28 AM

Comet Chaser, was watching one of the comets that are very rare to find, while taking notes, He noticed that the comet was getting closer, amd closer, Comet knowing what will happen, tried to escape, his left hoof was caught in some thorns, and couldn't move. He just closed his eyes.


*SPLAT*

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Posted 28 October 2012 - 10:51 AM

i was sat at home playing brohoof when admin ring

'oc is kill'

no

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 06:16 AM

*Le struggling to think of how my OC would die...

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 06:29 AM

--Equestrian Research Vessel Solace--

Orbit stared at the malfunctioning controls.

No... NO DAMMIT! If my ship continues, it-

He blinked. There was one way, one way only. But-

"C.O.R.E., transfer what's left of the controls to the main deck."

He stared at the rapidly approaching planet, and thought about the colonies on it. Beside that, a camera pointed towards Lenity, Solace's sister ship. And his brother. He would never see them again. But what was one life compared to the millions down below?

Orbit flicked a cover, revealing a slider.

REACTOR OVERRIDE

"It's been an honor serving with you all." Glancing at his brother's ship,Orbit saluted. "Fare thee well."

He overloaded the ship's reactors. All of them.

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 06:37 AM

*Le struggling to think of how my OC would die...

Same...

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 06:38 AM

Comet Chaser, was watching one of the comets that are very rare to find, while taking notes, He noticed that the comet was getting closer, amd closer, Comet knowing what will happen, tried to escape, his left hoof was caught in some thorns, and couldn't move. He just closed his eyes.


*SPLAT*


O.o

I just realized, how this fits fine with my OC's death.
I'm sorry...

#30 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 06:44 AM

Ah, I need better backstories... how am I supposed to do this? I suppose this will work for now

Amber was strolling through Ponyville when suddenly, she exploded. And then exploded again!

Well, I guess so!

END

Edited by stardragon, 30 November 2012 - 06:44 AM.


#31 High Orbit

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 06:52 AM

Ah, I need better backstories... how am I supposed to do this?


I normally think around something related to my OC's talent.
In fact, my OC was never made for normal ponyville RP's, so converting the abnormalities, such as his cutie mark (The earth, BTW) makes for nice backstories.

As for the death, make it related to your OC's talent, maybe? The strangest talents can be turned to the most noble deaths most of the time.

Wait, what am I saying-

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 07:01 AM

I normally think around something related to my OC's talent.
In fact, my OC was never made for normal ponyville RP's, so converting the abnormalities, such as his cutie mark (The earth, BTW) makes for nice backstories.

As for the death, make it related to your OC's talent, maybe? The strangest talents can be turned to the most noble deaths most of the time.

Wait, what am I saying-

You're saying some great ideas, that's what.

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 07:09 AM

In which case-

CIDER'S LAST NIGHT OUT.

Cider was busily chugging at the bar. It was three in the morning, but hey! It was saturday, why not? As he drank. and drank. and drank and drank and drank, he felt inebriation settle on his person, sapping his movements and judgement like a strangely metaphorical leech.

'I think I've *hic* had eenough f-for *hic* now, I should *hic hic* be going.'

He stumbled out of the bar, and into the street. The night was still, and the sun was teasing the once-starry sky with whispers of morning. he stumbled down the road, in the direction he hoped was the one his house was in as well, turning occasionally, until he stumbled across something certainly not his house, but intriguing all the same. There appeared to be some sort of gang brawl going on, with two large groups of ponies duking it out ferociously. Blood was spilled and teeth were knocked out, and Cider felt his mind shift into full stupid gear.

'HA! You all fight *hic* l-like mares! I *hic* bet that not a ssssingle *hic* one of you w-w-wimps could *hic* hit me ONCE!'

Swaying slightly, he surveyed the new situation unfolding before him.

Bother.

Cider was found a few days later. Cause of death was listed as "Head trauma, alcohol poisoning, failing kidneys and general stupidity."

#34 High Orbit

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 07:17 AM

Merp.

Perhaps a medical condition in which required your OC to regularly ingest alcohol to keep himself sane? Think the Mint-als in Fo:E.

Might not fit the canon then, but meh, I'm having trouble meself thinking of a backstory that doesn't require him realising the meaning of his Cutie Mark just as he dies. Or in fact, a canon backstory explaining his mark at all.

Edited by High Orbit, 30 November 2012 - 07:17 AM.


#35 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 07:18 AM

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 07:34 AM

I read all of the stories, but mine is the best. Alternate reality of The Trotting Dead RP.


Kandy shot her rifle twice, the trotter fell to the ground.
Kandy was a survivor in the zombie apocalypse, with one other. His name was Flaming. They survived together, as daughter and father. Kandy shot another one, dead. She was really good a gun, but better with medicine. Flaming was bit 6 months ago, and she has kept him alive. Just as Kandy thought she was safe on the rooftop, another one crept up behind her and bit her wing. "AHHHHH, F-FUCK!" She yelled as she was dragged down from the building. "FLAMING, HELP ME!" She screamed kicking the zombie off, her wing falling off with it. Flaming heard her screams and ran over, holding her hoof in his. "D-dad, what do I do?" Kandy said with tears. Flaming got tears, there was no way he was strong enough to lift a teenager. He looked her in the eyes and said, "Kandy, I love you as my daughter. I'm sorry, I don't have any solutions to this." Even though Flaming was a unicorn, his magic hadn't work for 5 months. Kandy nodded and said. "I love you too, also take care of that wound. Kandy said as she tossed her gun and saddlebag up onto the rooftop. Kandy looked at Flaming, and got tears in her eyes again. "I-i'll miss you, Kandy." After hearing those words, Kandy let go. Flaming couldn't see her die, his eyes so filled with tears. All he had left of her was a bloodied saddle bag with a candy corn picture on it, and her rifle. He never felt the same without her.

THE END

#37 iluvponies35

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Posted 30 November 2012 - 07:56 AM

Blaze's Last Stand.

Spoiler



err...yeah...guess i kinda overdid it a little....oh well

Edited by iluvponies35, 30 November 2012 - 07:56 AM.


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Posted 03 December 2012 - 12:56 AM

*Le struggling to think of how my OC would die...


Still thinking



Just say it they were red shirts

#39 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 03 December 2012 - 01:19 AM

Just say it they were red shirts

wait what?

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Posted 03 December 2012 - 01:25 AM

So you're not familiar with Star Trek.

Ok so there is this thing where for some reason everybody who wears a red shirt just dies. It just happens they always die.



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Posted 11 December 2012 - 05:00 PM

Here's the alternate way for my OC to die.

As Fleetfire hopped into the blue portal, she saw a cube fall from the ceiling and into the orange portal at the other end of the test chamber. She spun to avoid it but it was too late, the cube crashed into her snout and knocked her out cold.

When she reawoke, she found herself bobbing up and down between orange and blue portal ends. The vertigo caused her to vomit, it stayed in the portal with her to her further displeasure. She tried to pull herself out of the portal, but her hooves weren't designed to grip and she flailed around instead. PinkoS's voice emanated from somewhere within the test-chamber, 'oh dear. My test-subject is trapped, I was right. You are a useless piece of garbage, but don't feel offended'

Fleetfire ignored the voice and tried again to pull herself out, but to no avail. She suddenly remembered the portal gun, she looked around In the oval of orange-blue light. It was not in the portal with her. She looked out of the portal and saw the gun resting rather neatly on top of the companion cube that had rendered her unconcious. A sentry bot stood with its back to the wall, it was looking keenly at her. She swallowed nervously. 'Are you there?' the sentry asked in a surprisingly soft and feminine voice, a stupid question Fleetfire thought. PinkoS spoke again, 'let me see if I can access the main terminal for this room, hopefully it is not destroyed like the other things you have broken.'

Fleetfire ignored this too, she had grown used to PinkoS's random and unecessary comments, but she hoped the darn android would hurry up! A minute later and there was still no response. Fleetfire sighed irritably, if PinkoS didn't help her out soon, she would-

'Did that work?' PinkoS asked in her subtle tone. Fleetfire looked around, as far as she could tell, she was still inside the portals bobbing up and down between the two. Then, without any warning, the floor plate on which one of the portals had been placed slammed into the ceiling. With the other portal blocked out, Fleetfire found herself on the test chamber floor, she sighed with relief. Fleetfire did a dancing jig right under the mechanics of the floor plate which came slamming back down into place.

Fleetfire didn't have time to evade it and her body was crushed into mincemeat beneath the panel. PinkoS sighed happily, 'a job well done, wouldn't you say, test pony?'
When no response was elicited from Fleetfire's crushed corpse, PinkoS made a mechanical "mhm" noise and said, 'you never talk really. To the next test chamber then?'
The android finally decided to observe the CamBot and what she saw made her diodes buzz with shock.

'Well shit!'
PinkoS proceeded to make friends with a squirrel who got confused and tried to eat some "nuts" on her main compatibility drive. It then received an electric pulse from PinkoS's security system, shocking PinkoS too in the process and causing the furry tree animal to inherit her characteristics and speech capability.

Stay tuned for Portal 3 "In a Nutshell."

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Posted 11 December 2012 - 05:21 PM

This is how my OC would die.

Since he is living in manehattan he sometimes get in touch with the manehattan maffia, situated in the Corleone compound, he also managed to keep them kind of away but the maffia had interest in his business.

Time went past and I got some business friends who appeared to be in the maffia. Now here is how my OC would die.

Something should have happened that would have made the maffia extremely mad at me. They would just come and visit me in my office at the top floor of the HorseShoe building. They would forcedly take me to the roof of the building and throw me off. To fall to my death on the Manehattan streets.

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Posted 27 December 2012 - 06:20 AM

Blitz Last Stand

"sir that would cause everypony to die" The trooper says worriedly

I know, but it will be the only way to stop the war" LB says back to the trooper

"well if you say so" The trooper walked of

A tear had droped from LB's eye, he walks to the HQ and yells

"everypony to the battlefeild"

"But sir we have to ready the bomb....."

"i don't care"

"SIR YES SIR" all the troopes run out of the door and head for the battlefeild

LB walkes over to the bomb and sets it to launch in 1 hourer

"im so sorry" LB says crying

He walkes out the door and heads for the battlefeild. when he gets there he ordes his troops to go head on and destroy anything in there path, LB runs out and follows the troops, the enemy picks them of 1 by 1 then LB relises he is the only one left. The Bomb launches up into the air and back to the ground creating a massive nuclear explosion KABOOM. the bomb releses a massive mushroom cloud and LB slowly pulls out the flag and he stabs it into the ground. he drops to the ground anable to breath and his eye site slowly fades

" goodbye everypony"

LB dies next to the flag

Edited by jaydencooper, 27 December 2012 - 11:15 AM.


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Posted 27 December 2012 - 12:46 PM

Got it! Here's how my OC would die! So many edits!

 

WARNING! Involves swearing


Micro had made a bad reputation in Manehattan. Not the good-bad, the bad-bad sort of reputation. Popping up in the Police Departments often, court was a common thing and not to mention she was a lone wolf when it came to gang fights. She was one of the most well known gang-fighters around. However, this time it was more than just a gang fight. Cameras were focused on her wherever she went, and the awkward feeling that she was being watched popped up and stayed up for the past few weeks. It was coming. She didn't know what, but she knew it was coming. Every night, she'd keep her 44. Magnum on the bedside cabinet, with her G36c next to it. At the side of her dresser she had a large cupboard filled with guns and ammunition. If you'd like a list then i'll give it to you. Her rifles and pistols that she had were part of the costly crew. She had:

  • G36c
  • 44. Magnum
  • P228 (Supressed and Laser Sighted)
  • M1014
  • M40a5 (Fitted with a Bipod and a 8x-zoom scope)
  • Beretta PP-2000

Like I said, these guns cost alot. Anyways, moving on to how it happened.

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Microburst's death

 

 

Chapter 1

Spoiler

 

Chapter 2 soon!


Edited by Nighthawk & Microburst, 22 February 2013 - 01:07 PM.


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Posted 27 December 2012 - 01:27 PM

sounds cool as

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Posted 27 December 2012 - 01:44 PM

I eat a piece of bacon a month after its eat by date.

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Posted 27 December 2012 - 01:49 PM

I eat a piece of bacon a month after its eat by date.

lol

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Posted 03 January 2013 - 05:26 AM

My pony Spark was in the royal equestrian military and on the day when Celestia, Luna and a large force of the military marched to the Crystal empire to take it back from Sombra the all powerful. It seemed like the battle was in their favor when all of a sudden Blasts started coming from Sombra's castle. The blasts were coming from a fire shooting cannon. The blasts were taking many of the military's men down and 1 bolt was heading straight for Princess Luna when Spark jumped in front of the bolt before it got too close to hit her. Luna had seen the bravery of this soldier and ran over to his flaming body which she then doused with a bucket given to her by another recruit. "What is your name brave stallion?" luna said. "Spark your majesty." He said as he coughed up some blood. "Your name will be sung through generations to come." Luna told him as she held his head up. "My daughter Aestine..." He said as he began to fade. "I will take your daughter in to my fortress on the moon. She may live there with me." Luna said. "Thank you princess. Tell her that I love her." Those were sparks last words before he died. Any comments on the fic? Anything I can do better?

#49 Microburst

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 03:42 PM

Maybe a little less stereotypical?

Edited by Microburst, 04 January 2013 - 03:42 PM.


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Posted 04 January 2013 - 03:51 PM

Oen dai, Blerzer was walk to teh spaec ships. He tod him mum dat he want go on ships. Burt mum said "NO! YOU WILL BE KILL BY CHANGELINGS!"

At one pont, he blieved her. Bt as he got oldered, he stahped.

Blerzer ran to da ships and flew ont o teh spaec base of the P00T which had ben overrun and ded.

Blerzer blasted down the dor and teh changelings shouted "BLERZER IS GONG KILL US DED!" and Blerzer shot tem with his gawn that he suddenly had.

Teh Cyber changeling fired teh rawkit missiles at Blerzer and the roof fell

"NAO! I MAST KILL TEH CHANGELINGS!" Blerzer shouted.

"Nao Blerzer..." teh rado stuttered "U ARE TEH CHANGELINGS!"

And then Blerzer was a zombeh.

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 10:36 PM

I love how I spent half the time posting about how I can't come up with any ideas. And then I make up the longest story.

Edited by Microburst, 04 January 2013 - 10:36 PM.


#52 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:59 PM

Bu Blerzer is beast ded story iss gud.

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Posted 06 January 2013 - 02:34 AM

I love making robotic ways to die. ouo

 

Sharp trudged through the charred building, his head down in grief. It wasn't simulated. This was real pain. Real anger and sadness pumped through his rubber veins. He eventually found who he was searching for, despite how he knew what condition that the pony he was seeing was going to be in long before he had found them. Across what used to be a room from him stood a record player, weakly playing the song "Honeybee". The song's lyrics skipped slightly, restarting at "You didn't have to smile at me. Your smile's the sweetest that I've ever seen." He could feel a liquid dripping down his face from his eyes, following the groove that was created when his two faceplaces were bolted together. He didn't bother to check if it was a tear or oil. He knelt down on his front hooves as the song played "Hello, Goodbye, T'was nice to know you. How I find myself without you, that I'll never know." His face broke into a small but pained smile as he nuzzled the pony's unrecognisable face. More of the unregistered liquid poured down his face in thick streams as he lay down next to the pony. "I let myself go. But what do I know? Now you have to go." the speakers played the last lines of the song as Sharp lay his head on his hooves next to the pony, ceasing all programs. He hadn't allowed himself to live without his Honeybee.



#54 Virelen

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Posted 12 January 2013 - 06:47 AM

my last OC death post was made way before my OC was even given a backstory or personality, so here's a new, more developed one.

 

Spoiler

I didn't wanna post this but I just had to.



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Posted 12 January 2013 - 06:51 AM

Oh my god ;w;

I cried at that



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Posted 12 January 2013 - 07:39 AM

shadows kill my oc



#57 2th Shenanigans

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Posted 12 January 2013 - 08:23 PM

Here's an alternate death for my OC

 

sargus's oc was rooming across the streets of ponyquestria. bUT there came som flying saucers and explosnos and EVERYTHING was shinying.

it was attack of FROGS. the frogs where going everywhere and if you touched the frogs you became frogs and the frogs made anything they touched FROGS

so oc was ran across streets tryin to find FROG VACCCINE. he did no find any thouh and got find by frogs

but he ascaped using ninga powers. he went to his frond MR. SIR and asked

 

"how does kill frog?"

"YOU ARE THE FROGS"

 

he became the frogs. then MR. SIR became frogs. the end



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Posted 14 January 2013 - 02:14 AM

Hmmmmmm. my pony, how should she die? Uhm let me think. Hmmmmmmm.

#59 GoldenLynx54

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Posted 14 January 2013 - 02:26 AM

Flash's New Life
I walked down the streets of Ponyville, flickering street lamps revealing my shadow. My hooves kicked the dirt road, while I thought hard about my recent move here. Life in Ponyville was simple, but it was rather boring. Suddenly the street lamps turned off. My hot pink eyes searched desperately for light, somewhere she could see. But there wasnt any light.
A hard hoof konked my head, and I fell over, faintly clinging to conciousness. I heard the sound of buzzing wings and two pairs of blue eyes stood out in the darkness. Changelings. Now I slept.
When I awoke, I was in a dark underground cave. Lots of buzzing wings surrounded me, and my pink streaked mane stood out. Fear was all I could feel. All I was sure of was that I was scared. Soon the faint glow of a Changeling's horn lit up the millions of dark faces. I screamed, only to get stuck in a sticky goo. My wings glued to my side, there was nothing I could do.
"See you soon, Flash. Welcome to the hive." I opened my eyes. Two glowing blue eyes.

Good? it isnt really a death, but meh. Plus it is pretty much the only one NOT including guns.

Edited by GoldenLynx54, 14 January 2013 - 02:27 AM.


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Posted 18 January 2013 - 02:46 AM

So I was playing Call Of Cthulhu (With ponies of course) with a couple of friends and a fail a successful evade roll. This is what the DM told me.

 

 

  "The creature rushed to you. You are paralyzed and the creature successfully  rip your torso open with its sharp nails causing your guts to spill out of your body. As you kneel to the ground hopelessly trying to gather your bowls you die of shock"



#61 adambigaxe1

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Posted 22 January 2013 - 01:51 AM

"I will fight till the end to take you bloody humans down... I swear that by my DIEING BREATH!" The prince of stars isn't letting his kingdom down without a fight, "so are you ready cowards? ARE YA?" Lumous stood in a tilted fashion in front of the army which had come from his home planet, that cold, dry, heartless place. He knew what he had to do, but should he give it up? The precious life of which has been oh so deer to him these many years? He knew for sure none of the royals were truly immortal, he had known that since he had first moved the stars. Even the magic of gods had limits, his sisters are much more powerful than him and they could take over the stars while he's in the eternal herd, his dear wife and her, scratch that, OUR 5 friends would live forever due to their souls being linked with those indestructible jewels of harmony. He knew they would miss him but If he left Equestria for those damned humans then there would be no point in living anyway, Realizing what he had to do he flew up, eyes white and horn glowing as he unleashed a tsunami of energy at the army, vaporizing every single soldier that was there, he then flew up and breached the atmosphere at mind blowing speeds, a ring of fire behind him as well as a trail of fire following him. He cast a spell and his whole body was set ablaze in a white hot fire as he cut through the ships' engines destroying each ship in a bright ball of flames. He the cast his final spell and he was surrounded in a large ball of white hot flames and yellow magical energy the size of the earth itself and slammed into the planet vaporizing every thing that was once there. He fell back into equestrian with black fur and his mane had stopped flowing in its usual fire-like fashion. Once he had arrived he was already to fare gone.

"Prince Lumous used an un imaginable amount of magic, so much so that he also began to drain his own life force! this much magic usage was thought to be impossible! I am so sorry for you all's loss, he was a great stallion," and with that his family left the hospital in a wave a tears.



#62 adambigaxe1

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Posted 29 January 2013 - 01:13 AM

well... anyone else? D:



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Posted 29 January 2013 - 01:23 AM

That story made my eyes bleed. Not in the good way.

Still, I laughed at the idea of breaking canon that much and I saw your protagonist as an evil murderer who was killing humans who hadn't ever even fought a war before, and then breaks there home planet apart simply because they entered Equestria.

Xenophobia at it's best folks!

Oh, and if you want a completely honest, non-exaggerated critique, say so. Be fun to explain the actual pros and cons/

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Posted 29 January 2013 - 01:55 AM

you don't have to be a jerk, Its my first draft and the full story isn't even done yet, I just wanted to post a small portion of it... also the humans were murdering millions of ponies simply because of land, resources and because they couldn't grasp the idea of REALLY close aliens...



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Posted 29 January 2013 - 03:09 PM

Just so ya know, I was joking in most of that post. That's the reason I said "if you want a completely honest, non-exaggerated critique" Though I can say this, the story will be really boring if THAT's the ending.

 

And I still think your character is a murdering guy who killed all humans cause a few weren't friendly to them.



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Posted 29 January 2013 - 06:54 PM

>implying OCs have to be involved in fanfiction

>implying OCs have to be killed during the events of said fanfiction

 

Death isn't canon anyway.


Edited by BalefireCatalina, 29 January 2013 - 06:57 PM.


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Posted 29 January 2013 - 07:45 PM

And lo the lord did looketh over his flock and found them wanting, it was in this moment that he knew what he had to do.

 

And so it was thus that he held aloft his goose cane plunger above the hushed masses of needful eyes and did doth declare:

 

"Thou must put originality into thine original character"

 

With his judgment called the lord then smote and smote again and kept smoting until ever OC laid at his feet slain by their own hubris and plunger to the head.

 

Then the lord turned to the remainder of his flock and wiped away the tears of authors too attached to their blasphemy and they did whisper:

 

"Why"

 

And thus did the lord look upon them with the apathy of a limbless turtle and doth then declared a second time but with different words:

 

"Take a few classes in creative writing, it might do you some good"

 

Thus thine lord and savoir did ascend to the heavens upon the backs of winged turtle necked gophers and the world was flooded for a thousand years with purple kool-aid from an unrelated incident.



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Posted 29 January 2013 - 07:52 PM

Hahaha! Oh Caventh, you hurt my feckin' ribs.

Caventh, if you don't write the Ten OC Commandments, I will.

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Posted 29 January 2013 - 07:56 PM

Thus then did Cave-Moses spaekth:

 

"Hey guys I had the commandments lying around here somewhere but then I got drunk and tripped out on magic bushes"

 

And so his flock was forced to waiteth as Cave-Moses did gather his robes and hide what remaining boose and illicit goods he had lest the Egyptian Police roll up and arrest his beard.


Edited by Caventh, 29 January 2013 - 07:57 PM.


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Posted 29 January 2013 - 08:03 PM

Hue. You should write a fic on this crossover.

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Posted 29 January 2013 - 08:18 PM

reading some of this stuff I'm starting to think the most original way for one's OC to die is of old age. 

 

or: "my OC died when a piano fell on his head when he was shopping for groceries."

 

then again, miss sparkle taught us that ponies tend to survive those things.



#72 Guardian Selene

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Posted 29 January 2013 - 08:34 PM

I have not decided on if North will die, but I have written something for an old RP that has her die. I was too lazy to submit the idea to the creator of the RP.

 

Northern Crescent and her squad where to evacuate Luna form Canterlot but where to late to save her. They buried there Princess and headed for the Evac. Site in the Everfree forest but all the shuttles launched leaving several lunar troops behind. As they watched the ships fly to the moon a crackle over the radio stating that all ships coming from Equestria will be destroyed. We watched the distance explosions in the sky. All of were disbelief that they would abandon us. The only thing keeping me going was Starlight. I spoke to all of the abandon Lunar troops and tried to rally them to a rumor I hear about a safe zone to the north. Only a few came with us, the rest stayed in hopes the shuttles would return. She had a rifle a side arm, combat knife, a radio, and other supplies.

The group was far north of ponyville when Starlight fell ill. North couldn’t handle losing her so she found an abandon house and are hiding in the basement. The others wanted leave Starlight behind but North wouldn’t allow it. They took Starlight’s gear and weapons along with North’s rifle and half of her gear leaving a few days’ food and water. North was trying her best to keep Starlight alive by finding her medicine, food, and water. The others sent North directions of where they went through the radio and she wrote it in a journal. One day the others told north to abandon Starlight and she got in an argument with them and she threw the radio at the wall breaking it. (So the journal doesn’t contain a map to the Safe Zone)

Starlight gets weaker and weaker and their running low on food and medicine. North only has 3 bullets for her pistol, a journal (its hope, the book contains directions of where the other commandos went while trying find the safe zone but is incomplete since North destroyed the radio) and gave her combat knife to Starlight. North state of mind is poor from watching her princess die, being abandoned by her people, and her only reason for living is Starlight which she is near death.

 

Depending on how a group/or pony acts toward North and Starlight will determine if North joins them, stays with Starlight, trades them the Journal for medicine, shots herself, or attacks the group/pony. I would of pushed for Starlight dies, North goes crazy and shoots two shots at the group and save the last bullet for herself option.



#73 RattlesnakeBites

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Posted 07 February 2013 - 02:40 AM

I just got a new OC ;D I'll post her death now.

 

I struggle a bit, watching the barrel shift from me to the young stallion next to me. I choke on the cloth wrapped around my face. I force a pleading look onto my face, looking at the young stallion. Shining Armor shakes his head. I get the message. No use. I look at the changeling, his dark face looming over me. "What a sad bunch. Two secret lovers, who will never share there next sunrise." I hear a mocking tone. The form of Princess Candance stands over me. "I thought we were sisters!" I meant to snarl, but it came out as "I thougat weht when siwtaws!" with the gag. A changeling removes it, as she smirks over me. She runs a hoof along my face. "You were never a princess. That's why we gave you up." She sounded so innocent.. but behind her loving eyes, was a messed up brain. "Please.. Don't hurt Shining." I say, looking at the stony face of my friend. We had more than a friendship.. Candance knew that. And she didn't like it. "No harm will come to him. We'll just alter his memories." She assures me. Like that's any better. I think. I look into her eyes. "You're such an as-" I say, but hear a small clicking. I had forgotten the bomb Shining carried. He was supposed to be delivering it to the Navy, but he got caught up in this terrorist ordeal. I look into his eyes. "Together?" I say, a hoof struggling out of the bonds. "Together." He agreed, taking my hoof. "What's going on.." Candance said, making the connection. Her purple eyes widened, as she understood. The same eyes I have, yet hers were filled with terror. It was too late. "RESTRAIN THEM!" I heard her voice, but just then, red flashed across my vision. I only had a moment of pain, thank Luna. All I felt was a burning sensation, then it was over. I saw my life, and death. The only thing they found of me and Shining, were two dismembered hooves. They were touching. Together.

 

//Cough cough edit// Backstory: Thunderclap was a princess, yet was shipped off to the country, fearing her powers would destroy everything. She had the power to bring Natrual disasters, so it would be dangerous. Candace was sent on a mission to kill her, so she would never know of her family tree. Shining, who was Thunderclap's boyfriend, came with her to find her family, and ended up blowing both of them up.


Edited by RattlesnakeBites, 07 February 2013 - 03:05 AM.


#74 Walter

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Posted 10 January 2014 - 12:29 AM

Hmm, I had an Idea for a fic that ends Like so:

And so, Cider finally placed his pen on the table. His hoof began to shake as he closed his eyes. it had been a long journey, Such a long one, and if he needed something right now, it was the comfort that he would find in death. He slowly got out of his chair, legs shaking as he did so, threatening to collapse at any moment, but he did not reach for his cane. This would be his last journey, he wanted to do it alone. As he began to walk, images of his life began to flash once more, from the time he was born, up to now. It had been so long, he realised, since he had even smiled, and this was something he wanted to change. Strange, he thought, that after all this forgetfulness, after forgetting even what he was doing eating breakfast, his imminent death made everything sharper, almost razor-sharp. He could hear the chirping of the birds just outside, the laughter of the young colts and fillies as they played, the breeze ruffling down the street he lived on. A tear came to his eye as he realised how absolute death was. He wished there was another life to go to, where he might meet his beloved again, but the logical side in him rebuffed this. He finally reached his destination, the warm patch of the carpet just beside the living room window. He stood in the spot for a long time, then smiled. This was it. It was time to go. He closed his eyes, and felt his old heart begin to slow...

Someone get this guy a publishing company



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Posted 10 January 2014 - 03:20 AM

Fleetfire was rushing along through her usual hectic schedule when, while hurrying to the market, aliens from outer space decided to abduct her (the aliens were hurrying to the market, not Fleetfire).
Fleetfire found herself in a strange metal vessel surrounded by strange and generically green aliens. One of then waved at her and said in a deep voice, "hello."

Fleetfire, unarmed by such a casual greeting, responded nervously with her own 'hello,' before blurting out a dozen questions. "What are you? Where am I? What do you want with me? What did you do with Elvis?"

The aliens all exchanged glances. Then one cleared its throat and introduced itself. "Hello Pony. My name is Zurg. Yes, I know. A generic alien name, but it was in the best baby names of stardate 314251526- the stardate actually takes up a lot of the book..."
The alien paused for breath, regarding Fleetfire with giant black pupils. "Don't worry. We're not here to probe you. That's another horrible stereotype that lesser technologically developed species invented. We just wondered if you would care for a spot of tea. Maybe some biscuits? Anything at all."
Fleetfire stared, her mouth hanging open. "No need to introduce yourself," the alien added matter of factly. "We've watched you all your life, so we have your full story."
If her mouth could have gone any lower at that point, it would have dislocated. "You've been watching me? Do you have any idea how creepy that is- wait, did you mention tea?"

Zurg nodded. "Jollop, fetch the tea will you? And some custard creams if you would. There's a good chap."
Fleetfire sat in a comfortable plush sofa next to Zurg who nodded at her and smiled encouragingly. "So Fleetfire," Zurg said, smiling his gratitude as Jollop brought the teas in on a small metal tray, accompanied by a plate of custard creams. "Tell me, what is your favorite colour. I don't believe we ever recorded that."
After a quick sip of her tea, which turned out to be sweet and refreshing, Fleetfire set down her china cup and replied to Zurg. "It is blue," she said, watching as a bespectacled alien nodded and scribbled something on a notepad. "Uh, do you do this often?"

With a cursory glance at the other aliens, Zurg answered with a shake of his head. "No, not really, but then we don't get out much. Besides, your government has strange policies against odd green fellows wandering around the place. As such we tend to keep to ourselves."
Fleetfire nodded. "Of course," she murmured.
"Listen," she added, as if they weren't already, "I would like to go home now if that's ok. It's just that I have a busy day to still get through, and I'd like it over with as soon as possible."
Zurg smiled his understanding. "But of course! We must get you home. Jollop, inform Grekk to head back down to the location where we picked up Miss Fleetfire."

Jollop bowed his head in acknowledgement. "As you wish, captain Zurg."
He walked down a corridor adjoined to the central chamber, leaving just Zurg and Fleetfire sitting together on the plush sofa. "Do you like cats," asked Zurg, in an attempt to break the ice that had formed in the awkwardness of light company. Fleetfire opened her mouth to speak just as Jollop returned. "We are back at the location as requested captain."
Zurg stood, thanking Jollop as he did. "Now, Miss Fleetfire, it has been a great pleasure. Have a good life!"
Fleetfire smiled, these aliens were actually very nice. "Well... thanks for having me, I guess."
She waved as they beamed her down into the marketplace of ponyville, just as a wagon carrying antique swords rattled through her receiving end. The only evidence to prove her demise was the long trail of blood that leaked out of the wagon as it clattered away.

The aliens monitoring the event were gobsmacked. The captain of the flying vessel rubbed his jaw awkwardly. "Well shit."

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Posted 14 January 2014 - 07:22 PM

Good god, that was one hell of a bump. One year and three days since the last post? Bloody hell Walter. That's gotta be a record.



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Posted 14 January 2014 - 07:25 PM

You'd be surprised.



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Posted 22 January 2014 - 05:08 PM

This sounds good. I might post one for my main OC soon.




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