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#1 Glacier Frostclaw

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Posted 22 September 2014 - 02:03 AM

So, back in February 2012, I started writing a story, that eventually got put on hold for an RPG project that never made it far off the ground. I don't remember EVERYTHING about how the story was going to go, but I remember most of it and have been debating whether or not to go back and rewrite what I have, then finally finishing the story for the people that had interest in it over two years ago. What do you all think?

 

 

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#2 Seabreeze

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Posted 22 September 2014 - 02:36 AM

The setting feels really contrived, your description is almost entirely going through a long convoluted storyline to set up a fairly basic "what if" AU plot. Your description shouldn't be giving us the boring backstory, it should be about what actually happens in your story. As it is there isn't really anything to grab the attention of a would-be reader.



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Posted 22 September 2014 - 02:42 AM

The setting feels really contrived, your description is almost entirely going through a long convoluted storyline to set up a fairly basic "what if" AU plot. Your description shouldn't be giving us the boring backstory, it should be about what actually happens in your story. As it is there isn't really anything to grab the attention of a would-be reader.

yeah that's why I was thinking of rewriting it. fleshing out the settings, reasons and Rune himself (cuz lets be honest, he's about as bland as plain oatmeal)



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Posted 22 September 2014 - 03:10 AM

Well I guess it might be an interesting comparison for you to see how your skills have improved, but if I'm going to be honest, it sounds like a pretty generic story to me and I'm not really interested in it.



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Posted 22 September 2014 - 03:21 AM

Well I guess it might be an interesting comparison for you to see how your skills have improved, but if I'm going to be honest, it sounds like a pretty generic story to me and I'm not really interested in it.

eh not everyone likes the same kind of story. who am I to judge. lol




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