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#1 Rori

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Posted 20 February 2013 - 02:35 AM

mostly, just getting the story background up and running

 

plan:

Spoiler

 

so yeah, that's the "simple" plan for it right now.

you can get yourself or your own OC to be in this.

 

mine will be one of the main characters.


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#2 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 20 February 2013 - 03:05 AM

I'll be pretty interested to see where this goes, I certainly haven't seen an idea like this yet! Keep up the good work!


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Posted 20 February 2013 - 03:37 AM

Not really falling in love with the plot, but If you make it turn out to be good then hey, I'll read it.



#4 red475

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Posted 20 February 2013 - 05:18 AM

No offence, but the plot, so far of course I can't wait to see where you take this, seems a bit dry. I don't know, maybe it's just me, but the plot seems like it needs a better spine. It is an interesting idea however and would love to keep reading.

 

Keep up the good work :)



#5 Rori

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Posted 05 March 2013 - 02:25 AM

i now have wrote chapter one!

 

check it out here:

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#6 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 05 March 2013 - 03:09 AM

Huh. Seems a bit short, but the first chapter is really for setting things up. I like the descriptive language, and this looks like it could go some really great places! Can't wait to read more!



#7 Seabreeze

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Posted 05 March 2013 - 07:34 AM

5 paragraphs is not a chapter either.



#8 Rori

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Posted 06 March 2013 - 10:11 AM

5 paragraphs is not a chapter either.

i must realy suck at story writting then...

*facedesk*

i tried.

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#9 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 06 March 2013 - 11:03 AM

tsar just has high standards, pretty good ideals, but you're just starting out, come practice you'll meet his standards.



#10 Seabreeze

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Posted 06 March 2013 - 11:38 PM

tsar just has high standards, pretty good ideals, but you're just starting out, come practice you'll meet his standards.

 

Not really, I just don't see the point in beating around the bush trying to be nice. 

 

Crack open any book written for children with ages in the double-digits, none of them have chapters like this. 



#11 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 06 March 2013 - 11:40 PM

I don't want to turn this into an argument tsar, I completely agree with all your points, but I was raised, and am part of a youth group dedicated to helping people better themselves not by breaking them down, but by building them up and inspiring confidence in them to broaden their horizons. It's just a different way of looking at things, I completely respect your views and ways of looking at this. It is really quite small, but given practice and support, she has as much a chance as any to become really good.



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Posted 07 March 2013 - 02:44 AM

ooh!  This seems to be a neat idea.  Go ahead and throw flaming in if you want

 

Name: Flaming Night

Age: 19

Race: Unicorn

Appearance: Pastel Grey coat, Crimson Mane and tail, flame cutie mark.

Personality:  Soft spoken and quiet.  Enjoys setting things on fire and is terrified of heights.



#13 Rori

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Posted 17 March 2013 - 09:32 PM

ooh!  This seems to be a neat idea.  Go ahead and throw flaming in if you want

 

Name: Flaming Night

Age: 19

Race: Unicorn

Appearance: Pastel Grey coat, Crimson Mane and tail, flame cutie mark.

Personality:  Soft spoken and quiet.  Enjoys setting things on fire and is terrified of heights.

i just decided to keep writing this fanfic..

 

thankyou. this will help with the plot a bit. i just have to remember what this fanfic's about again XD

 

i will come back with the rest of chapter one tsar, for your "gratitude"

it was unfinished anyways. i have read MANY stories where the paragraphs are tiny. not even 11 sentences or whatever.

sentences are unlimited in size and length. it depends.

(story is still being written, so await that, and btw, your OC wont come in until later... you can be my room-mate)



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Posted 28 March 2013 - 12:39 AM

Hmm, this could either tank or it could be outstanding. Try and get a few people to proofread it and maybe get a co-writer. I'm interested to see where this is gonna go. Just remember this key rule: Take your time! Trust me, if you rush through chapters and just put scraps together, it'll be terrible. I know from experience. Wait until you have a solid idea of what to write next. And also, if you have a small chapter that's written really well, that's not bad at all! Remember, quality over quantity. Just do your best and I'm sure at least a few people will like it!



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Posted 30 March 2013 - 08:32 PM

5 paragraphs is not a chapter either.

hey, sorry about my little rage back there,

but i get what you mean now...

i did make it very short, and i will keep working on it as soon as i can get some free time.

really sorry... D:




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