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#1 Squint

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 12:16 AM

Introduction

Daddy has always been my favourite.
Daddy says that when I was born, mummy and all the other ponies didn't like me because they were jealous. Daddy said I was special, and that other ponies wanted to be just like me, so they pretended to be mean to me. Daddy says it's all just a big pretend game, and I'm the best at pretend games.

When I was a little filly, I didn't go to school like all the other ponies. Daddy said that it was best that I stayed at home with him, because the other ponies might try and hurt me. My mummy once hurt me, but that was years ago and daddy says it doesn't matter any more because I'm a big mare now.

When I stayed at home with daddy while the other colts and fillies went to school, we would read books about the sky. I always liked the sky, but I didn't know how to fly until I was a big mare. My daddy liked the sky, too. My daddy's cutie mark was a cloud. He was a pegasus like me, and my mummy was a unicorn.
My daddy would always say that one day me and him could live together in Cloudsdale once he got enough money, and once we could fly.. We never got to live in Cloudsdale together, but that's okay because I know it's not his fault that we don't get to have our own cloud, and that's why I work hard doing mail deliveries to try and get enough money.

At the moment, my daddy lives in Miss Redheart's hospital because he doesn't feel well. I visit daddy a lot because Miss Redheart says that he needs me to visit him to help him remember. I talk to daddy a lot, and I tell him about my friends and about some of the pretend games we play. My daddy likes it best when I'm there, because that's when he smiles the best. I always give him the money I earn so that we can pay to buy somewhere in Cloudsdale. I always tell him we're going to live in Cloudsdale one day like he always said to me when I was little, but Miss Redheart says he doesn't remember that. But I know he remembers it, because he does his bestest smile when I say the word Cloudsdale. Cloudsdale is his favourite thing.


Chapter One - Cutie Marks and Clouds

My daddy loves the clouds. Sometimes I fly up and take pictures, then I bring them down and show them to him. That makes him smile, too. I like it when daddy smiles, it makes me smile too. Sometimes I show daddy my favorite things, too. I bake him muffins, and I blow bubbles for him. Sometimes I draw him pictures, too. I drew a picture of him flying up in the clouds once, and Miss Redheart put it on the wall opposite his bed so he can look at it. Miss Redheart says it helps him remember.

Daddy likes stories, too. So just like he used to tell me stories, I tell him stories. He says that my stories are his favorite. His favorite story is the one about how I got my cute mark, and the one about how I learnt to fly. I got my cutie mark all by my self. I was the last in my class to get my cutie mark, and so was my daddy. My mummy was the first in her class. When I got my cutie mark it was the morning, and I was getting up early so that I could watch the sunrise. I remember sitting on top of a hill in Whitetail Wood, and looking over to where the sun was coming up. I saw some bubbly, floaty things coming over the hill. They were so pretty, I just looked at them for so long I didn't get to see the sunrise. Bubbles are my favorite thing.

Some ponies say that the way I got my cutie mark was silly because it wasn't special. Everypony says I'm un-special, because I'm different. But I know they're only jealous, because that's what daddy says and my daddy is always right. My daddy is the most clever pony in Equestria, even if he can't fly like all the other pegasuses. Even if my daddy can't fly, he's still the best pony ever.

Miss Redheart is always saying that my daddy needs me because he needs to remember, but I know my daddy doesn't need me, but he just likes me to be there. Sometimes daddy forgets who I am, but sometimes he remembers. I like it best when he remembers, and Miss Redheart says daddy likes it best when he remembers too. Miss Redheart says that I keep daddy going, and that one day we can live together in Cloudsdale when he remembers.

I go to work every day, and I earn some money too. I give the money to daddy once I get paid, and then daddy saves it up to buy a cloud in Cloudsdale for us. I think that we're going to have enough money soon, that's what Miss Redheart says.

I want Miss Redheart to be right about that.


Chapter Two - Mummy

My mummy never liked daddy, she said that daddy was 'irresponsible'. Daddy says irresponsible is when you don't like to do things well, but I know that daddy isn't irresponsible. My daddy is friendly and kind and caring and he's the best daddy in all of Equestria.

Daddy says that my mummy gave birth to me when she wasn't very big. Most other ponies are big mares when they have a baby, but my mummy had a baby when she was a filly. Daddy said that mummy didn't like me at first because I was born too quickly. Daddy says that's why I'm special, because I was the strongest little pony in my class. That's why everypony was jealous; I was stronger than them.

My mummy would hit me sometimes. I still have a few bruises behind my ears from where she'd whip me with her tail... But mummy is gone now.
My mummy left when I got my cutie mark. The last thing mummy said to me was;
"See?! Bubbles. Utterly useless. She's the most useless mare in the world, I knew she would be."
And then my mummy just left... She packed up her special things and left the special shiny ring that daddy gave her. My daddy used to say that ring was like magic, and that it let mummy and daddy speak together in their heads when they were wearing it. Daddy told me that when he bought it he had to spend lots and lots of money, almost as much as a house in Cloudsdale would cost. Maybe even seven houses in Cloudsdale!

Daddy said that when mummy took that ring off it meant that she was going to leave Ponyville forever, and my daddy is right because she did leave Ponyville. I've never seen my mummy since she left, she didn't even write any letters. Daddy says she didn't write any letters because she joined a special club about silence that you're not allowed to write in because quills and pens and pencils scratch too loudly.

That's just about all I know about my mummy... The only other thing I remember is that she's a unicorn. I can't even remember her cutie mark...

I really want to meet my mummy. I want to tell her that... That I love her.

Chapter Three - Bubbly Eyes

People in my class when I was a filly used to make fun of my eyes.

Everypony else's eyes were all straight, but mine were all wonky and funny. I can see out of them both just fine, but everypony always thought it was silly... Especially Cheesecake and Honeyblossom. Cheesecake and Honeyblossom were best friends, and they were really close. They sat next to each other in class, and passed notes and everything. I always wanted to do that with somepony, but I suppose nopony right ever came along for me to pass a note to...

Cheesecake and Honeyblossom were the first to make fun of my eyes. My eyes have been like this ever since I was a tiny newborn filly, but nopony really noticed until they pointed it out... Everypony used to laugh, they thought my eyes were all funny. I laughed too, because I like laughing. And they kept laughing too, and ponies stopped wanting to play with me...

I never knew laughing could be such a bad thing.

Miss Sunny Skies always said that she liked my eyes, though. She said they were special, and she said I was special... Me and Miss Sunny Skies would play together sometimes. She'd help me with my homework, and we'd have lots of fun together. She'd spin the skipping-rope for me with her unicorn magic, too. She always told me, like my daddy would say, that they were only jealous. Their eyes were all normal, and mine weren't. My eyes were individual, and everypony else's eyes weren't.

But secretly I didn't think they were jealous at all... All because they didn't stop laughing. They'd say "Look at Derpy's eyes. I bet she can't even read yet!" "I bet she's dumb, too. She probably can't even count to five!" "Ew, look at her mane! It's all manky and weird. She really needs to wash it, ew!!"

Sometimes they made me cry...

But every time I got home from school and told daddy about this, he'd say the same thing. "Being a little filly isn't easy, Ditzy. Not many ponies get on with everypony at school, but you have to look over these days and think about the bright, fun ones that lie ahead. Maybe we'll get to Cloudsdale someday, and maybe mummy will come back. There is a place for you out there, Ditzy, and I'm going to do my best to find it for you. I love you, and I care about you even when other ponies don't."

That always made me smile when he said that. It always made me happy again, and then he'd rub me on the head and tell me it would all be okay.

Miss Redheart says he can't rub my head or tell me that anymore. He's too sleepy... And he's well on his way to going to the best place for him.
That's what Miss Redheart says.

Chapter Four - Bits

One day when I had got out of school, daddy and mummy told me that they needed me to work so they could get more bits. Mummy said that work might be too hard and difficult for a delick.. 'De-lick-wet' like me, but daddy said I could do it. Daddy had a friend called Stinky Rich - well, that's what I called him - who said that I could work for him. Stinky Rich said it might be hard, but her got me working as a delivery pony!

I really liked delivering things. I always delivered a smile to everypony as well as appley jam and other things. Daddy said I was really good at it, and told me I could keep a quarter of the money I got! So 15 bits went to mummy and daddy every day, and I got five to spend on what I liked. I loved working, and I still do even though now instead I work as a mailpony. I love delivering things, it's great fun and the smiles I get from them is the greatest reward.

It's the bestest job for me, too! I love to deliver mail and messages to everypony, and daddy says that they don't have time to be jealous of me if I've got to fly off to deliver more mail. Mail, mail, mail! Sometimes I get to talk to ponies, like Bon-Bon and Lyra. They're my best friends, they're so cool! Sometimes they tell me stories about Bon-Bon working in the garden, and about how Lyra's learning to walk like a humane! Lyra says it's hu-man, not humane, but I think it's cool anyway.

I tell daddy Lyra and Bon-Bon's stories, even when he doesn't remember me. He just lies there and smiles, and he always looks so smart. I sometimes give him hugs, too, but only when Miss Redheart says I can. Miss Redheart says I might hurt him if I'm not careful when I hug him... Sometimes he's too sleepy to hug. I don't get to hug him very much no more... But that's okay, because Miss Redheart says he'll go home soon.

Edited by Squint, 26 June 2012 - 06:48 PM.


#2 Kai ❤

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 12:23 AM

I think my heart just exploded. On a seperate note, when did Derpy become mentally unstable?

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 12:27 AM

I think my heart just exploded. On a seperate note, when did Derpy become mentally unstable?

I'm gonna go into that later. ;D

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 12:43 AM

Aww that is such a good story! >w<

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 09:19 AM

I'm gonna go into that later. ;D


Derpception?

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 11:11 AM

Derpception?

Eeyup. :3

#7 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 11:20 AM

I....I.....*falls over and rolls about*

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 11:40 AM

Eeyup. :3


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Posted 29 January 2012 - 02:55 PM

Update
I'm just going to get to writing chapter 1, bear with me everypony! <3

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 02:57 PM

*still rolling on floor*

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 09:10 PM

Chapter one is finished and posted! Sorry for it taking so long.

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Posted 30 January 2012 - 05:35 PM

Is anypony else reading this? (Sorry for double post, just bumping the thread.)

#13 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 01 February 2012 - 06:08 PM

I am

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Posted 01 February 2012 - 10:42 PM

Pretty good I couldent write any better

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Posted 09 February 2012 - 09:22 PM

*gets up and looks at filly derpy* hghgfggj *falls over*

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Posted 09 February 2012 - 09:58 PM

This is actually pretty neat! Keep going if you feel up to it! I would like to see more!

#17 Squint

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Posted 09 February 2012 - 11:57 PM

Sorry everypony!

I completely forgot about this for a while, I'll get right back on it as soon as I remember what I was planning on writing next.

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Posted 10 February 2012 - 12:36 AM

It Sounds Like My Little Dashie.

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Posted 10 February 2012 - 12:38 AM

It Sounds Like My Little Dashie.


Does it? Weird... I wasn't going for that...

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Posted 10 February 2012 - 07:05 PM

Its nicer then that.

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Posted 10 February 2012 - 09:35 PM

Awwwwwwwwwwww that was such a sweet story

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Posted 10 February 2012 - 10:37 PM

Chapter Two's up!

Thanks for reading, everypony. C:

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Posted 10 February 2012 - 10:41 PM

*cries with joy*

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Posted 28 February 2012 - 10:24 PM

I need an idea for chapter three, I'm all out. ;_;

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Posted 16 March 2012 - 12:46 AM

I have re read this 5 times, and It hurts to read sometimes. I always cry. I hate crying. You ever have that problem? You don't want to cry, but you do?

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Posted 16 March 2012 - 02:57 AM

I like it...it's cute but so sad T_T

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Posted 01 April 2012 - 10:54 AM

Plz continue! I love Derpy :)
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How Can't U love that face?

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Posted 08 April 2012 - 03:55 PM

PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE THIS PLEASE

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Posted 10 April 2012 - 08:51 AM

PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! sorry but i love derpy and this story

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Posted 14 April 2012 - 10:23 PM

So emotional! As far as fan-fics go, in my mind that ones up there with My Little Dashie <3

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Posted 17 April 2012 - 08:01 PM

Chapter three is up, readers.

And now I go off to revise astronomy and science.

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Posted 17 April 2012 - 11:51 PM

This story.... I like it. A lot. Good job.

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Posted 20 April 2012 - 03:07 AM

:o... That, that was... Please excuse me.

*Cries in a corner*

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Posted 20 April 2012 - 10:12 PM

:o... That, that was... Please excuse me.

*Cries in a corner*

Good cry or bad cry? ;_;

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Posted 03 June 2012 - 01:20 AM

good story

Edited by magnariffic1, 03 June 2012 - 01:21 AM.


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Posted 03 June 2012 - 04:17 AM

This is amazing :3

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Posted 03 June 2012 - 07:21 AM

do you mind if i continue it on aswell creating my own tangent and i wont plan on putting it up without sharing my ideas with you first.
i am the top story writer in my school.

Edited by SAB3R2, 03 June 2012 - 07:22 AM.


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Posted 08 June 2012 - 06:18 PM

your story is just such a good start i couldnt resist trying it myself

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Posted 14 June 2012 - 10:38 AM

/(^3^)\ cant stop smiling...


But I feel really guilty...

urgh, this was amazingly well written!

(See top face)

Edited by RoyalInBlue, 16 July 2012 - 01:05 PM.


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Posted 26 June 2012 - 06:49 PM

Added chapter 4, Eternal Winter helped me a bit with the storyline for it. :3

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Posted 26 June 2012 - 11:08 PM

yay

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Posted 17 July 2012 - 12:11 AM

Oh Celestia why... poor Derpy >3>


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