Name: SciLight
Gender: Male
Race: Earth Pony
Age:31 (Pony Years)
Appearance: Wears a suit w/ a pocket and a pen, white fur.
Cutie Mark and Special Talent: The cutie mark is two Gray gears interlocking and next to a blue atom, the special talent is that I can create machinery and invent things very easily.
Personality: Smart, Friendly, and Nice. Not the most outgoing, but has a large circle of friends. Not the most sociable, but alright. Does not support magic, but does not like or dislike it. Oddly though, unlike the others in TechQuestria, does not hate magic. Is compatible with Twilight Sparkle and Fluttershy for friendships, but doesn't support magic, and had a dispute with Twilight Sparkle at the young age of 1 yr. old.
Biography: First off, I was born in Mane-Hatten. During the age of 1-3 yrs. old, I mostly stayed home, and I sometimes did random chores. During the age of 3-6 I sometimes traded toys and my lunch with my friends at school. from the age of 6- 13, I started to earn my own bits and I bought things for myself. (Now to my adolescence!) during the age of 13 - 15, I started to work a job as an assistant for the train conductor. I also sold apples and cherries.when I was 16-20, I was banished from Mane-Hatten and I fled to the equestrian forests and plains. When I was 20-25, I started to expand my resources into building a city. I named it TechQuestria! 25- 33, i am currently 31 years old, I am currently ruling over TechQuestria, and please stop reading my journal/ diary!
Other:
OK, this is the final fix!
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Posted 03 June 2014 - 08:01 PM
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Posted 07 June 2014 - 07:51 AM
The biography is too short in it's current form, your appearance section is lacking details as to the actual appearance of the pony. The personality section hinges on the supposed reader's knowledge of the magic hating society you created in another thread, yet in the biography you admit that your pony here is the founder and claims to not hate magic, and then founded a town that openly does? The biography also reads like a bulleted list of events at various age ranges and then randomly converts into a 4th wall breaking journal entry. Also why is the time period for living in techquestria predated to his 33rd year of life when he is only 31 years old at current?
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