Golden, I didn't make this thread for people to critique for me.
Then why didn't you say that in the introduction?
Posted 12 October 2012 - 10:40 AM
Golden, I didn't make this thread for people to critique for me.
Posted 12 October 2012 - 10:46 AM
Then why didn't you say that in the introduction?
Edited by Jasplosion, 12 October 2012 - 10:49 AM.
Posted 12 October 2012 - 10:52 AM
Think of it this way: If someone makes a skin shop, you don't take requests for them. When I make a thread where I critique OCs, I don't want people doing it for me. It's just common sense.
Posted 12 October 2012 - 11:24 AM
Oh. *facehoof* I'm stupid sometimes.
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Posted 25 October 2012 - 04:25 PM
Original Charactero god i cant beleive im asking this but i dont want to make a mistake
Somepony please remind me what "OC" stands for i just cant remember
Posted 25 October 2012 - 09:28 PM
Posted 27 October 2012 - 12:24 PM
Alright, I'll show you an OC that wasn't made by me, but I want to see your reaction, the guy who made the OC didn't make the art.
This OC is a WIP, the image isn't finished, but I made sure to add all the things I thought'd be necessary for you to get an idea of it.
The tail follows the same style as the mane. I wasn't sure about the eyes, so any suggestions for that in particular would be helpful.
Warning: High resolution.
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Posted 27 October 2012 - 05:34 PM
ok thanks lol ill do thatFairly nice, I can see that you made sure to use pastel colours which is good. I can't say much about the eye colour or...really anything else, but the body colours are good.
There are two problems with this OC.
1. Using overly dark colours
2. Using a mane from one of the Main 6 ponies.
If you just replaced the colour with something lighter, like a nice grey, and switched out the mane for another one other than RD's, it would be fine.
I like this OC. I mean, of course the wings are a bit silly and the socks are not very canon like, but the fact that you made your own mane and tail design is nice.
I think the contrast between the colours is a bit too much, and the eye colour needs to differ more from the mane colour.
I'm going to ignore the fact that it is an Alicorn, and focus on the visual aspects of the OC. The coat colour is too dark. That's about it, since just changing the coat colour would greatly improve this OC.
Would fit in rather well as a background pony in my opinion, not much I can really say to improve it.
The body colour is way too bright, change that for a start.
The purple is a bit too dark, switch that out for a brighter variant. Pegasi don't usually look great with watches since they're constantly flying around and shit like that.
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Posted 01 November 2012 - 02:25 AM
sorry for the intrusion on the critique, but i would like to put my 2 cents in.I'm back with another OC
give your completely honest opinion EVERY LAST FLAW STATED
I can't figure out a cutie mark yet
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Posted 06 November 2012 - 04:55 PM
Just wondering... what are good color schemes for stallions. I'm grappling with myself over scheme because all of the ones i try look freakin ugly
Posted 07 November 2012 - 12:56 AM
Just wondering... what are good color schemes for stallions. I'm grappling with myself over scheme because all of the ones i try look freakin ugly
Edited by FaffleMaster, 07 November 2012 - 12:57 AM.
Posted 07 November 2012 - 01:43 AM
how does this look?
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Posted 08 November 2012 - 04:12 AM
I would say you have the same problem I had, where the tail doesn't quite match up with the mane. You should add one with highlights on the tip like your mane, or have a mane that has a stripe in it? I'm not going to say the mane and coat don't go well together, but they do seem a bit off. Maybe lighten up the coat a bit?I got another one. Nighthawk is the name of this one.
I'm gonna guess theres something wrong with either the mane colour or the tail.
Or the fact you can't tell whether the white circle is the moon or not.
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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:00 AM
Looks like Jas has left this thread, so have a critique!How about now?
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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:25 AM
I need help on Orbit's scheme, seeing as it's obviously too dark brown, but lightening it up would draw attention away from his wings. Any suggestions?
And before you ask, yes, the hooves are funny, but that's not that important.
Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:30 AM
Edited by High Orbit, 09 November 2012 - 01:30 AM.
Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:33 AM
Um, that's because this picture was focusing on taking cuteness to the max. Fold his wings, and you get a drab horse. Thing is, if I change his colour scheme when he has his wings folded, it won't show up the red tip-feathers with wings outstreched. And I can't change the tip-feather colour, because it's already embedded deep within my OC's universal backstory.
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I just finished making this OC and I'm not quite sure of the colours. So what do you think?
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Posted 20 November 2012 - 06:26 AM
I found this OC today and I wanted to know what you thought of it.
"Princess CyberHoof Hoshiko"
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How about this filly here I made?
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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:24 AM
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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:40 AM
I can't do anything about the horn or anything. I used General Zoi's maker. The side view doesn't do it justice. This is better and up to date with cutie mark:I think the horn looks a little out of place, the tail could match up to the mane a little better, something, just something, is making the OC look a little weird to me. It might be that I haven't see that many colts that are that buff without the neck thing that Big Mac has, I can't find a picture of it but I think you know what I mean. I dunno. Something just feels off.
Edited by Golfmann14, 05 January 2013 - 03:40 AM.
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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:48 AM
Told you ^^ This is courtesy of DefectiveTurret.He looks a lot better here, it may have been the eyes that had put me off a little on the first one, and he looks a bit less overly buff.
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I wonder what you think of Lavinia she was my first OC and I'm wondering if there's anything I should change about her.
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Posted 05 January 2013 - 09:47 PM
The Broken Horn was an accident that happened shortly after birth she has no memory of it the Mechanical Leg: She lost her leg in a workshop accident and spent her time constructing a replacement that runs on steam energy it's still a prototype.>Broken horn
>Mechanical leg
Though you pulled it off awesomely in the RP, I'm still wondering about these two points.
Posted 06 January 2013 - 12:52 AM
I know that this OC probably isn't going to go over too well because of her color scheme and her height, but I still wanna hear what you have to say.

More shenanigans pictures:

Edited by stardragon, 06 January 2013 - 08:36 AM.
Posted 06 January 2013 - 03:23 AM
Edited because something terrible happened and the post got mangled.
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Posted 06 January 2013 - 03:32 AM
What the....
Posted 06 January 2013 - 03:52 AM
I know... weird..
Posted 06 January 2013 - 04:20 AM
I don't know what to do about this, sorry guys. I'll try and post it again later and see if it works that time.
Posted 06 January 2013 - 07:33 AM
Heres another one for you, sorry for the small size.
Threxa:
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Posted 06 January 2013 - 09:25 AM
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I don't really like that hoove style, although it seems to be becoming a theme in my distaste for various aspects of an OC, I think this OC is fairly nice, if a little bland, and the pupils are weirdly dilated which just seems strange. Is this a kingdom hearts themed pony? Because that cutie mark suggests so. I think you should just ditch the hooves and change the eyes.
Now here is a tall colt done right. Unlike most tall colt OCs I see, his head doesn't look like it's about to fall off at any moment now from the sheer weight bearing down on his neck. The blue mane and tail complement the bley coat well, and match each other, too. The cutie mark also complements the bley. I don't think there is anything you should change, really.
It's nice to see that there are a lot of people on brohoof who understand how to make a nice OC, contrasting the few who enjoy red and black zebra-striped monstrosities. So I'd like to congratulate you all with this stock art of a trophy I found on google images.
gud werk guise
Posted 06 January 2013 - 10:52 AM
Hi
can I have your Opinion on my OC
Name: Hooviano *If you don't get the hint I will explain (Hoo- as in Hoof, -iano as in Piano)*
Cutie mark: Piano Keys
Talent: Playing the Piano, and some other instruments
Attitude: Nice, friendly, Can't lie *Bad liar (Like me I can't tell a lie in RL)*
BTW! I am working on a Background story atm, I can't tell you it atm, it's a WIP ![]()
Posted 06 January 2013 - 11:29 AM
Heres mine
Don't be too harsh jas, or I'll make you wish you could die.
Posted 06 January 2013 - 11:55 AM
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I think the hooves look really out of place, I've never seen any like that in the show, and the RD mane and tail could be swapped out for something more original. The colours are all okay, and work well enough. Everything else is okay, usually having a large head like that on a small body doesn't look so good but it works well here.
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Don't be too harsh jas, or I'll make you wish you could die.
He's unique, I'll give you that. Usually I don't think accessories work but it's a monocle and a cape, I guess he has a 80's villain feel. I like it, maybe because that blue and purple complement each other so well.
Don't hurt me.
Confound this new format, I can't post a new reply.
Edited by Jasplosion, 06 January 2013 - 11:56 AM.
Posted 06 January 2013 - 12:16 PM
Might as well throw my hat into the ring, so to speak. Haven't settled on a cutie mark yet, so still blank. Note that I'm in the 'Earth Ponies have Earth Magic' camp, so what backstory I have reflects this.
Crystal Spire (still working on the name, but I keep coming back to that one so it'll probably stick) is an Earth Pony petricultrurist--the scientific term for rock-farmer. He specializes in grown-to-order crystal structures for use in enchanting, sculpture, and various industries like clockworks and electronics. Earned his cutie mark by re-growing a quartz crystal he accidentally shattered while sorting out deliveries on his parents' farm, he managed to fuse it back together without a single imperfection in a couple hours but was exhausted by the effort for a few days. Currently working as an armorer for the Royal Guard, since his talent and schooling lets him find and seal tiny flaws in the structure of metals. Fun geology fact: metals are also crystalline structures like gemstones, just less brittle.

The safety glasses are enchanted to be shatterproof in case of an accident.
Posted 06 January 2013 - 12:33 PM
Might as well throw my hat into the ring, so to speak. Haven't settled on a cutie mark yet, so still blank. Note that I'm in the 'Earth Ponies have Earth Magic' camp, so what backstory I have reflects this.
Crystal Spire (still working on the name, but I keep coming back to that one so it'll probably stick) is an Earth Pony petricultrurist--the scientific term for rock-farmer. He specializes in grown-to-order crystal structures for use in enchanting, sculpture, and various industries like clockworks and electronics. Earned his cutie mark by re-growing a quartz crystal he accidentally shattered while sorting out deliveries on his parents' farm, he managed to fuse it back together without a single imperfection in a couple hours but was exhausted by the effort for a few days. Currently working as an armorer for the Royal Guard, since his talent and schooling lets him find and seal tiny flaws in the structure of metals. Fun geology fact: metals are also crystalline structures like gemstones, just less brittle.
The safety glasses are enchanted to be shatterproof in case of an accident.
I like the colour scheme. Usually I don't like those hooves but since he is a rock farmer, it makes sense that his hooves would be like that (I always associated those hooves with ponies who work, e.g. Big macintosh). I also usually try to tell people that accessories look out of place, but you have a viable reason for them which is explained in your OC's backstory, so I don't mind here. Kudos for coming up with an original story.
Edited by Jasplosion, 06 January 2013 - 12:33 PM.
Posted 06 January 2013 - 02:54 PM
Admins are getting in on this ^^ sweet!
Posted 06 January 2013 - 07:05 PM
I don't really like that hoove style, although it seems to be becoming a theme in my distaste for various aspects of an OC, I think this OC is fairly nice, if a little bland, and the pupils are weirdly dilated which just seems strange. Is this a kingdom hearts themed pony? Because that cutie mark suggests so. I think you should just ditch the hooves and change the eyes.
Yes, this is a Kingdom Hearts pony, thanks for noticing. Being so, it is a Nobody pony, it has no heart. Therefore, that's why I went with the bland colours and the white iris.
(I could throw my Heartless pony into the mix, though this one is nowhere near canon
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Posted 06 January 2013 - 07:20 PM
I wasn't expecting to receive such positive results, thank you! Also, is bley a term for the brown-grey color that my OC's coat is?
Posted 07 January 2013 - 05:12 AM
I wasn't expecting to receive such positive results, thank you! Also, is bley a term for the brown-grey color that my OC's coat is?
Bley is the name given to the mix of blue and grey, actually.
Posted 08 January 2013 - 07:06 AM
I've got so many ponies...
These are two OCs I designed for some friends. The one on the left is based off of this dinosaur. The right is a panda pony.

Posted 08 January 2013 - 09:27 AM
I never really thought red was a good body colour for an OC, since it makes it stand out so much. I think you should have gone for a less jarring colour. The other one is a bit bland, but I guess if it's a panda pony then it's pretty much bang-on.
Posted 08 January 2013 - 08:50 PM
Spudsworth. (Cutie Mark subject to change if I decide to change it)

Posted 08 January 2013 - 09:03 PM
jas. you skipped me back in december! ![]()
Posted 08 January 2013 - 09:28 PM
Here is my OC Pendulum Swing, *No there is no Cutie Mark pic, as I have trouble drawing and nobody drew it the way I imagined it.
Here is a my normal PS thing I share with people:
Posted 08 January 2013 - 10:06 PM
Well may put mine here
Posted 09 January 2013 - 06:05 AM
SO! I fixed my OC, no longer and Alicorn and finally came up with a cutie mark to go with him. Thoughts?
Posted 10 January 2013 - 02:11 PM
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I don't think I can say much else other than that is by far the classiest OC I've ever seen.
jas. you skipped me back in december!
You posted just before I left, sorry D:
I think you could have chosen a better colour for the hooves, something about them being the same colour as his hair feels strange to me. Everything else is pretty much fine.
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I think you should just use yellow in the mane, and leave the other two colours out. It would look a lot better, especially since that's a really nice blue you used for the body.
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I still think your OC has too many accessories. Why did you use Fluttershy's eyes if it's a colt? You should remove shoes, the sweatbands and the glasses. Also, you should choose a shorter horn. Sorry if I sound too harsh, but there are still a few things wrong with this OC.
Posted 10 January 2013 - 06:19 PM
I still think your OC has too many accessories. Why did you use Fluttershy's eyes if it's a colt? You should remove shoes, the sweatbands and the glasses. Also, you should choose a shorter horn. Sorry if I sound too harsh, but there are still a few things wrong with this OC.
Haters gon' hate! Nah jus' kiddin'.
The horn DOES bug me, I kinda wish that pny creator thing allowed me to fix it, also clothing... Because what I honestly want is him wearing a shirt underneath the vest and black arm bands. Hence the "shoes" I hate being unable to draw as well as I design on photoshop. I'm kinda thinking of ways of getting around it though... As for the eye, I mostly liked the eye shape, yet not the eyelashes. I'm actually close to full on editing out the entire thing on photoshop myself at some point whenever I have the time to sit down and go completely OCD on that thing.
Posted 10 January 2013 - 06:58 PM
I don't think I can say much else other than that is by far the classiest OC I've ever seen.
One of the best critiques I've seen.
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