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#1 catopia26

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 06:39 AM

Before I give you the plot number, I want to say that I only have a day or two before I have to submit this so I don't have a lot of time to do this. Any suggestions as to interior or minor changes on exterior would be greatly appreciated and all feedback is welcome.

The plot number is: s43

I thought I should say that this is my second attempt in case that helps any.

Thanks in advance! ~catopia26

#2 dazhito23

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 08:12 AM

Your exteriors are okay, but I recommend that you replace the materials for your outdoor chairs -- cobblestone isn't a viable choice for such furniture in the first place. Also, I'm a little concerned about the glowstone near the front door. I've never seen a Ponyville house with a source of lighting right next to the entrance. I also recommend that you replace the shrubs on your windowsills with something else.

The table in the living room can definitely look a lot better than how you have it right now. The materials are good, but you can improve on it to make it look more like a family table. /warp ikea has some good examples on such.

Many of the rooms are looking quite barren and dull. There's little variety in your furniture -- all of your chairs are a single type of wood -- and your walls make the house look unfinished. This is especially true for the hallway on the upper floor. Try spicing these rooms up with a bit more lavish decoration.

#3 BeTa77

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 08:14 AM

This forum's a neat idea, let's give this a shot.
So my previous points still stand from my last visit:
-Your shape is mostly correct. I suggest a "flaring(one block extend)" upper floor to give more dimension.
-The roof is strange and can be (possibly) fixed via taller attic walls
-Interior is much better! I suggest hiding the stars with a back wall, though.
-More variety in general with outside decor and block choice
-try more windows on attic floor

Edited by Aenvir77, 04 January 2013 - 08:16 AM.


#4 RunningWolf251

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 08:19 AM

Won't repeat suggestions, so I only have two to add to the previous ones.

One thing I can see that nobody else has mentioned is a lack of supports for the overhang above your main entrance. Mostly just a cosmetic thing, but there needs to be something there like the support on the back balcony area.

Also, in the attic, it seems a little bit cluttered. This is a combination of tight spaces and cobwebs. Anywhere that isn't necessary doesn't have to be accessible, but if you would like to keep those areas in there, I'd suggest opening up the tight spaces a bit.

Edited by RunningWolf251, 04 January 2013 - 08:20 AM.


#5 Ratty

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Posted 04 January 2013 - 11:28 AM

Just making a comment as the owner. This was the first Critique posted, and it was perfect! The request was well done, and showed effort was put into trying hard, and all the reviewers obviously put effort into those as well. This is just a great example of how I hope they all turn out.


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