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#1 butts

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 07:48 PM

Hello! I would love it if some builders would critique on my submission house!
The warp is: /warp s78
I have until 1/8/13 (Tuesday)
Thanks! :D

Edited by I<3Rainicorns, 05 January 2013 - 07:49 PM.


#2 Lazaruz95

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 10:40 PM

(Never given this form of critique a shot untill now, so here goes, and I am kindof stealing my critique format from Laser_Lens because YOLO :P)

Exterior

- The basic materials for a ponyville themed house is there, which is allways something.

- For the sake of appearance, and "realism", the overhang is in need of support as with physics, it would be snapped right off, right now

- The roof could use a redesign, as having it 2 blocks thick and with a triangle shape, gives a rather sloppy appearance.

- The overhang, at this moment feels more like an "addition" to the house, then an actuall part of it as it is a rather jarring break in the style (lacking the "corner frame", among other things), and not even being consistent from the floor part to the roof in terms of size.

Interior

- Right at this moment, the interior is lacking two vital rooms that would lead you to an instant fail (from one of the requirements to my understanding)
Those being a kitchen and bathroom.

- The main room is effectively just a couch and a fireplace (the latter missing a chimney, mind you).
Try to develop this room further, decorate it and redesign it to include more, as right now it comes across rather bland and unappealing

- Second floor breaks of from the stairs in a rather akward fashion as it feels more like a sidetrack on your way to the attic, then an actuall floor.

- Second floor in general comes across as a very quick job, flooring cuts through the walls, rooms layout is slightly confusing to navigate and most rooms feel under developed.

- While it is nothing solid in terms of build standards, I would advice against using colored wool for an entire floor, and instead keep it to imitate the occasional carpet, not the entire floor.

- Using one singular item for the attic space is something I would not advice, as it generaly gives the room a very booring look.
Think more into what you want the room to be used for, and what one would expect to find in it.
(An attic used for storage could for example contain discarded everything from discarded, or storaged furniture, to personal mementos)

Prediction

Since this does not meet one of the important requrements for a submission house (That it is able to support someone living in it),
It is most likely going to fail.
In a dream scenario, it would be given an improvement, but it is highly unlikely.

Please give the notes I wrote down some thought, and rectify them as soon as possible since the time you have to work on this is running out.

Edited by Lazaruz95, 05 January 2013 - 10:43 PM.



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