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#1 WolfXPony

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Posted 18 April 2016 - 08:04 PM

Please come view and comment my 1st try for becoming a builder. thank you.

 

plot is s80

 

greetings WolfXPony


Edited by WolfXPony, 18 April 2016 - 08:24 PM.


#2 R9000

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Posted 19 April 2016 - 01:33 AM

Hi,

Sorry, but we're rejecting this house. You've definitely got the right idea, your style just needs refining. I'm fairly confident you'll pass next time as long as you practice and take a look at the criticism below:

 

-Your exterior is interesting, but needs work. Your roof is too simplistically shaped, it should be more of a gentle 'A-frame' than an upturned 'V' shape.

-You have a huge 3-block overhang on one side of the house. Not only is there nothing really supporting it, but this extreme of an overhang is unrealistic, even for pony houses.

-Your small outside 'leaf awning' doesn't quite fit the ponyville style - only few houses like Fluttershy's use leaves for a roof.

-Most of your interior could use more decoration and style. For example, most of your furniture uses the same wood as your floor, meaning it blends in. Try to use the different wood colours in Minecraft to your advantage.

-Random 'naked' blocks of glowstone sitting on the floor do not make good lighting sources. Please try to make them look more like lights you'd find in a real house, as you've done with others.

-Your bathroom seems vast for the amount of furniture in it. Consider only making rooms large enough to accommodate the furniture you need to put in them, or otherwise fill them with useful items.

-Your attic contains nothing but chests and empty space. Please try to put some more interesting stuff up there, like old furniture, shelves, a little reading corner, etc.

 

Good luck on your next submission, and make sure to practice lots before you attempt it.




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