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#101 Snowkitty24

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Posted 12 October 2012 - 10:40 AM

Golden, I didn't make this thread for people to critique for me.


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Posted 12 October 2012 - 10:46 AM

Then why didn't you say that in the introduction? Posted Image


Think of it this way: If someone makes a skin shop, you don't take requests for them. When I make a thread where I critique OCs, I don't want people doing it for me. It's just common sense.

Edited by Jasplosion, 12 October 2012 - 10:49 AM.


#103 Snowkitty24

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Posted 12 October 2012 - 10:52 AM

Think of it this way: If someone makes a skin shop, you don't take requests for them. When I make a thread where I critique OCs, I don't want people doing it for me. It's just common sense.


Oh. *facehoof* I'm stupid sometimes.

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Posted 12 October 2012 - 11:24 AM

Oh. *facehoof* I'm stupid sometimes.


It's okay, we all have our derp moments :)

#105 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 12 October 2012 - 11:55 AM

Jas, you really should edit the title, saying "Get your OC critiqued" is like an invitation for critics like moi to do our thing, try "I can critique your OC's" or something that individualizes the critic, or this is just gonna keep happening.

#106 Snowkitty24

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Posted 12 October 2012 - 12:01 PM

Welllll... Since this is suppose to be about critiquing peoples OCs, then can you please critique my previous OC that I posted?

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#107 Night_Breeze

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Posted 16 October 2012 - 07:23 PM

I haveent decided if this is final, but--

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there seems to some 'earth pony' with my name on FB, but I was the first on Deviant Art; so I win

http://tux-peng.devi...t.com/#/d5i3leb

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#108 Defective

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Posted 17 October 2012 - 05:26 AM

My OC, Arrow, is a ponified version of my long-time android OC, Aaron.
I'm not entirely sure he'd blend in too well as a BG pony due to his "fake" wings and silly socks, but overall, I'd like feedback anyhow. c:
(The blue is a bit too intense in this picture, I admit - it's much closer to the hue of the humanoid image below.)

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#109 ǝzɐןb ʍoquıɐɹ

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Posted 17 October 2012 - 05:34 AM

Oh, oh! Do me! Do me!
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This is Kandice, a 14 year old pegasus. (She doesn't have the bandage on normally, this pic was for an RP)

#110 Blazuhira Miller

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Posted 24 October 2012 - 02:24 PM

Alright, I'll show you an OC that wasn't made by me, but I want to see your reaction, the guy who made the OC didn't make the art.

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#111 jimme neutron corndog

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Posted 24 October 2012 - 02:59 PM

Oh man i like the shadow of it and the color, but i can't critique since is jas tread.

(anyways i suck at critiques.)

#112 Floottershy

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Posted 24 October 2012 - 03:30 PM

I'm new here but I wanted to see what you think of my ponysona/OC. His name is Cloudy Sky and works for the ponyville weather team.

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Posted 24 October 2012 - 04:46 PM

This OC is a WIP, the image isn't finished, but I made sure to add all the things I thought'd be necessary for you to get an idea of it.
The tail follows the same style as the mane. I wasn't sure about the eyes, so any suggestions for that in particular would be helpful. :)

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Posted 25 October 2012 - 10:50 AM

Alright, I'll get to all of these soon.

#115 Pinksy π

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Posted 25 October 2012 - 01:22 PM

o god i cant beleive im asking this but i dont want to make a mistake

Somepony please remind me what "OC" stands for i just cant remember

#116 castle13oblivion

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Posted 25 October 2012 - 04:25 PM

o god i cant beleive im asking this but i dont want to make a mistake

Somepony please remind me what "OC" stands for i just cant remember

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#117 Pinksy π

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Posted 25 October 2012 - 09:28 PM

derp okay

*Le random picture appears*

Just a little something i put together with the pony creator and a little custom backround and i would love critique cause there are a couple of things that throw me off

1st of all i fear my colors are to bright I'm looking at them now in slight disapproval,

2nd i fear i may have picked one of the most generic hair styles EVER!Before thinking about that (what can i say I'm my worst critique)
anyways cant wait to hear suggestions on how to make it better if you want character back round just let me know ill hook you upPosted Image

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Posted 27 October 2012 - 12:24 PM

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Fairly nice, I can see that you made sure to use pastel colours which is good. I can't say much about the eye colour or...really anything else, but the body colours are good.

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There are two problems with this OC.
1. Using overly dark colours
2. Using a mane from one of the Main 6 ponies.

If you just replaced the colour with something lighter, like a nice grey, and switched out the mane for another one other than RD's, it would be fine.

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I like this OC. I mean, of course the wings are a bit silly and the socks are not very canon like, but the fact that you made your own mane and tail design is nice.

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I think the contrast between the colours is a bit too much, and the eye colour needs to differ more from the mane colour.

Alright, I'll show you an OC that wasn't made by me, but I want to see your reaction, the guy who made the OC didn't make the art.

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I'm going to ignore the fact that it is an Alicorn, and focus on the visual aspects of the OC. The coat colour is too dark. That's about it, since just changing the coat colour would greatly improve this OC.

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Would fit in rather well as a background pony in my opinion, not much I can really say to improve it.

This OC is a WIP, the image isn't finished, but I made sure to add all the things I thought'd be necessary for you to get an idea of it.
The tail follows the same style as the mane. I wasn't sure about the eyes, so any suggestions for that in particular would be helpful. :)

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The body colour is way too bright, change that for a start.



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The purple is a bit too dark, switch that out for a brighter variant. Pegasi don't usually look great with watches since they're constantly flying around and shit like that.

#119 Pinksy π

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Posted 27 October 2012 - 05:34 PM

Fairly nice, I can see that you made sure to use pastel colours which is good. I can't say much about the eye colour or...really anything else, but the body colours are good.



There are two problems with this OC.
1. Using overly dark colours
2. Using a mane from one of the Main 6 ponies.

If you just replaced the colour with something lighter, like a nice grey, and switched out the mane for another one other than RD's, it would be fine.



I like this OC. I mean, of course the wings are a bit silly and the socks are not very canon like, but the fact that you made your own mane and tail design is nice.



I think the contrast between the colours is a bit too much, and the eye colour needs to differ more from the mane colour.



I'm going to ignore the fact that it is an Alicorn, and focus on the visual aspects of the OC. The coat colour is too dark. That's about it, since just changing the coat colour would greatly improve this OC.



Would fit in rather well as a background pony in my opinion, not much I can really say to improve it.



The body colour is way too bright, change that for a start.





The purple is a bit too dark, switch that out for a brighter variant. Pegasi don't usually look great with watches since they're constantly flying around and shit like that.

ok thanks lol ill do that

#120 ǝzɐןb ʍoquıɐɹ

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Posted 27 October 2012 - 06:28 PM

I've decided to make kandy's eyes purple, how is that?

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Posted 27 October 2012 - 11:29 PM

Yeah, that would be a good change to make. Also, figus, please don't quote extremely long posts.

#122 Pinksy π

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Posted 28 October 2012 - 02:49 AM

sorry that was my bad

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Posted 28 October 2012 - 08:05 PM

Ah, seems so obvious now you point it out, thanks. xD
I toned down the mane colours as well, also, would it be better if I used just two colours?
This OC was actually based on previous generation pony. :P
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Posted 31 October 2012 - 11:37 PM

I'm back with another OC
give your completely honest opinion EVERY LAST FLAW STATED
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I can't figure out a cutie mark yet

#125 castle13oblivion

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Posted 01 November 2012 - 02:25 AM

I'm back with another OC
give your completely honest opinion EVERY LAST FLAW STATED
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I can't figure out a cutie mark yet

sorry for the intrusion on the critique, but i would like to put my 2 cents in.
the colours are nice pastels, but i feel you have used quite a few cool colours. (this could be intentional, but it is my opinion :P)
i did something similar with my OC, where the tail and mane dont quite match up. (though i do like their individual shapes)
other than that, i would say this is a fairly canon OC

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Posted 06 November 2012 - 02:54 AM

I'm hoping my new OC will go over better in this thread...
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#127 Golfmann

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Posted 06 November 2012 - 04:45 AM

Just wondering... what are good color schemes for stallions. I'm grappling with myself over scheme because all of the ones i try look freakin ugly

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#128 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 06 November 2012 - 05:42 AM

I'm working on developing a ponysona. This is a picture I found and edited to my taste. Hope this works!

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#129 castle13oblivion

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Posted 06 November 2012 - 04:55 PM

Just wondering... what are good color schemes for stallions. I'm grappling with myself over scheme because all of the ones i try look freakin ugly


a pastel colour would work with any gender, it could be because of the mane colour you chose to go with it. post your work here, and we can help you

#130 FaffleMaster

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Posted 07 November 2012 - 12:56 AM

Just wondering... what are good color schemes for stallions. I'm grappling with myself over scheme because all of the ones i try look freakin ugly


I usually go with slightly darker pastels for stallions. To make them more masculine. I've found that earthy/ warm colors are also excellent for earth ponies. Cool colors seem to look good on pegasi, and most anything looks nice on unicorns.

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#131 John Smith

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Posted 07 November 2012 - 01:43 AM

how does this look?

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Please tell me i didnt buy stuff from that guy in the alleyway again..

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Unfortunately the OC creator does not have a huge variety of clothing so my OC is clothless but here he is:



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#132 Microburst

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Posted 08 November 2012 - 01:31 AM

I got another one. Nighthawk is the name of this one.
I'm gonna guess theres something wrong with either the mane colour or the tail.
Or the fact you can't tell whether the white circle is the moon or not.
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#133 castle13oblivion

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Posted 08 November 2012 - 04:12 AM

I got another one. Nighthawk is the name of this one.
I'm gonna guess theres something wrong with either the mane colour or the tail.
Or the fact you can't tell whether the white circle is the moon or not.
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I would say you have the same problem I had, where the tail doesn't quite match up with the mane. You should add one with highlights on the tip like your mane, or have a mane that has a stripe in it? I'm not going to say the mane and coat don't go well together, but they do seem a bit off. Maybe lighten up the coat a bit?

I seem to be taking over the critiquing here, if you want me to gtfo jasplosion, let me know

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Posted 08 November 2012 - 10:15 PM

How about now?
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#135 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:00 AM

How about now?
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Looks like Jas has left this thread, so have a critique!

The colors are nice, the consistent tone and the sharp mane and tail styles work well with the color of the hair.

His cutie mark seems a little bit plain, but it's a cutie mark and it's a good one. From an aesthetic standpoint I'd suggest adding darker spots and shading the moon to make it appear something other than egg white.

other than that, his design is nicely plain, the shading of the mane looks a lot nicer than a lot of two-tones I find, both can work but this is a lot safer.

All in all, he is a pretty good design, somewhat strange for being grey but hey, it works with the colors.

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:16 AM

I didn't leave, I was just waiting for some spare time to critique. Jeez, it's only been a few days since I last posted. Nice work anyway, but in future check with me first if you want to assume control of the critiquing.

Edited by Jasplosion, 09 November 2012 - 01:22 AM.


#137 High Orbit

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:22 AM

I need help on Orbit's scheme, seeing as it's obviously too dark brown, but lightening it up would draw attention away from his wings. Any suggestions?

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And before you ask, yes, the hooves are funny, but that's not that important.

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#138 John Smith

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:25 AM

I need help on Orbit's scheme, seeing as it's obviously too dark brown, but lightening it up would draw attention away from his wings. Any suggestions?

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And before you ask, yes, the hooves are funny, but that's not that important.


I like it the way it is its appealing yet cute

#139 High Orbit

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:30 AM

Um, that's because this picture was focusing on taking cuteness to the max. Fold his wings, and you get a drab horse. Thing is, if I change his colour scheme when he has his wings folded, it won't show up the red tip-feathers with wings outstreched. And I can't change the tip-feather colour, because it's already embedded deep within my OC's universal backstory.

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 01:33 AM

Um, that's because this picture was focusing on taking cuteness to the max. Fold his wings, and you get a drab horse. Thing is, if I change his colour scheme when he has his wings folded, it won't show up the red tip-feathers with wings outstreched. And I can't change the tip-feather colour, because it's already embedded deep within my OC's universal backstory.


.....Well have you ever heard the saying: accept what you have or make do with what you got

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 03:07 AM

Actually, if the coloring of the character is causing problems for certain poses, you should PROBABLY change it. A characters coloring needs to be able to work with every position.

tipped feathers in general are frowned upon I believe too.

Also just wondering, doesn't accepting what you have and making do with what you have basically mean the same thing and go hand in hand? You can't really have either or....

anyway, this is Jasplosion's thread so I should probably stop leaving critiques when he will get to them.

Sorry Jasplosion XD

Edited by FaffleMaster, 09 November 2012 - 03:08 AM.


#142 High Orbit

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Posted 09 November 2012 - 03:19 AM

The colour scheme should be drab for the coat though. I like the idea of being plain on the outside, but beautiful on the inside.
I do know tipped feathers are non-canon, but then again, Orbit wasn't built for canon RP's. I just want to get as close as I can to canon without having to change too much.

Also, the new colour (If any) must be fit for my Minecraft skin as well, as I tried replicating Orbit's yellow-orange-gold hair in Minecraft, but ended up getting blinded whenever I third-personed.

#143 castle13oblivion

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Posted 11 November 2012 - 06:17 AM

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her cutie mark is this, but the snakes are red and blue:
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Edited by castle13oblivion, 11 November 2012 - 06:18 AM.


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Posted 12 November 2012 - 07:44 AM

Since some people decided to critique the others for me (I don't mind as much, but it has just been a bit ridiculous with the amount recently) I will only do these ones unless you state that you would also like my opinion.

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This pony looks like it would fit in a lot better if it were say, a generation 2 pony. The eyes blend with the coat colour far too much, and overall it just looks too brightly coloured and needs to be a bit less garish.

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The coat colour is, yes, too dark, and the eyes need to be a colour that doesn't match the mane as much as it does at the moment. The wings are strange, being a tri-coloured compound. Brighten up the coat, maybe make the mane and tail a bit lighter.

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This is a really small image, try getting larger ones next time.

The mane matches with the coat nicely, but the orangey part of it needs to be a bit darker. I need a higher resolution image, really, because I can barely even see the colours of those eyes.


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The pink and cream contrasts way too much, consider darkening the cream to a colour that doesn't stand out as much. Also, the green eyes look a bit strange when coupled with your colour scheme.

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Pretty nice. The two toned mane works well with the white. I don't see much to really improve upon with this OC.

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The coat is still way too bright. I know it's based off a previous gen, but this looks like ponified glass of orange juice :P . Just consider darkening the coat, or switching it out for an entire new colour, and it would be an improvement.

Edited by Jasplosion, 12 November 2012 - 07:53 AM.


#145 Snowkitty24

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Posted 18 November 2012 - 03:04 AM

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I made this OC for my bf and im wondering if you could critique this too? I hope its not too bad :D

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Posted 18 November 2012 - 11:43 AM

I just finished making this OC and I'm not quite sure of the colours. So what do you think?

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#147 Snowkitty24

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Posted 19 November 2012 - 10:46 PM

I just finished making this OC and I'm not quite sure of the colours. So what do you think?

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If I may put my 2 cents in, I personally think your OC has a solid color choice, and looks like it could possibly be in the show. Nice work ^ ^

#148 Virelen

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Posted 20 November 2012 - 04:53 AM

I found this OC today and I wanted to know what you thought of it.
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"Princess CyberHoof Hoshiko"

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#149 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 20 November 2012 - 06:25 AM

How about this filly here I made?
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Posted 20 November 2012 - 06:26 AM

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Nice body colour, although the hair is a bit too bright and neon-ish.

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Quite nice, although the magic colour blends into the hair a bit too much.

I found this OC today and I wanted to know what you thought of it.
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"Princess CyberHoof Hoshiko"


Absolutely horrible, and if this isn't a joke OC I am kind of worried for the future of OCs.

Oh and the yellow eyes and metal legs and tail makes her look like Vriska

#151 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 21 November 2012 - 04:55 AM

Hay you forgot me! XD

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Posted 21 November 2012 - 06:10 AM

Gah, sorry! You ninja'd me by one minute, and I didn't see your post x3

How about this filly here I made?
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Nice. The two toned hair works okay, perhaps not the best, especially on the lower part of the mane where it meets the neck. Perhaps change it to a more orangey shade of pink, if that makes sense.

#153 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 23 November 2012 - 02:57 AM

Here, have another pony
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Posted 27 November 2012 - 08:46 AM

Hey Jas. here is my OC. now before you critique it I would like to state a few things before you might think it's wrong.

I made this OC to look like it stands out a bit. Therefore the two mixed colours of dark blue/purple with magenta in the mane. The socks and scarf are made to enforce this a bit. Magenta is a colour that can really make your picture stand out when mixed with a dark colour.
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Posted 27 November 2012 - 11:24 PM

I'm sorry guys, I'm having a lot of issues with my internet, if you need any more info just go to my profile. Anyone can take control of this thread if they like until my return.

#156 castle13oblivion

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Posted 29 November 2012 - 05:07 AM

i have revised and resized my second OC cutie mark is the same.
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Posted 30 November 2012 - 05:24 AM

Imma post my new OC

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Cutie mark is any generic picture of a golf ball and tee you can think of...

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Posted 04 December 2012 - 07:51 PM

Here's the handsome colt, Tempo!

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:24 AM

I totally forgot this thread existed.
ONTO THE CRITIQUES

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I think you should lose the jacket, since ponies aren't usually seen with clothes on all the time, unless it has something major to do with your backstory or something. Everything else is okay, perhaps you used too many colours, but that might just be me.


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I think the horn looks a little out of place, the tail could match up to the mane a little better, something, just something, is making the OC look a little weird to me. It might be that I haven't see that many colts that are that buff without the neck thing that Big Mac has, I can't find a picture of it but I think you know what I mean. I dunno. Something just feels off.




I'm going to ignore that it's an alicorn, because I'm pretty sure most people here already know how I feel about alicorns (hint: I don't like them at all).

The glasses, jacket and wristband all seem out of place, as well as the hooves, since most pegasi/alicorns/whatever don't spend that much time on the ground, I don't think it would have hooves like that. Also the buffness. Most pegasi are pretty small, so they can fly around and do shit like that. Overall, I think you should ditch the accessories, and try and make your OC a different race. Alicorns, especially buff male ones, are not usually considered to be anywhere near the canon.

Alright, now that I have those out of the way, I'm reopening the thread for more OC critique requests!

(Also, if any admins are reading this, I think the thread would be better suited in the main Ponies board, because this thread doesn't have that much to do with actual art, and more with ponymaker critiques).

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:40 AM

I think the horn looks a little out of place, the tail could match up to the mane a little better, something, just something, is making the OC look a little weird to me. It might be that I haven't see that many colts that are that buff without the neck thing that Big Mac has, I can't find a picture of it but I think you know what I mean. I dunno. Something just feels off.


I can't do anything about the horn or anything. I used General Zoi's maker. The side view doesn't do it justice. This is better and up to date with cutie mark:

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:46 AM

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He looks a lot better here, it may have been the eyes that had put me off a little on the first one, and he looks a bit less overly buff.

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:48 AM

He looks a lot better here, it may have been the eyes that had put me off a little on the first one, and he looks a bit less overly buff.

Told you ^^ This is courtesy of DefectiveTurret.

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 03:59 AM

How is my OC?
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and here is an image i drew:

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#164 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 05:29 AM

All right, I guess now I can show you my ponysona Amber! (The scarf in the first picture is there as more of an add-on in that one than a permanent accessory for her, since in the second picture you can see she doesn't have it.)
Another note, her magic is kind of a soft, light pink, though I have yet to make a picture of her using it :/

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This one here was a picture completely intended for shenanigans, when I shipped myself with the companion cube X3
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Posted 05 January 2013 - 06:39 AM

Mine? Sorry I can't put a cutie mark on it.

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 07:13 AM

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Like always, I think having clothes that are always on your OC just doesn't fit into the canon. Especially if it's a really warm, wooly jumper like that one looks like. Red and black hair doesn't usually mesh with most ponies, but I feel it works here.

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I think there isn't much to change with this one. Her colours all mesh well together, and not having the scarf as a permanent thing is a good idea.

Nope, nothing to say really. Nice job.

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I think OCs that rely heavily on one colour don't work too well, yours looks like he would be found in the chocolate stand at a supermarket. Try changing up his colours a bit so he doesn't blend together so much. Also, he's a bit thin, so maybe try using a different head than that. It looks like it's barely balancing on his neck.

#167 iluvponies35

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 09:14 AM

Meh, I might as well do this too.

What do you think?

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 09:29 AM

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I think you used a bit too much orange and it's all a bit too bright, the horn is the sharp variant which is almost exclusively found in alicorns, the hooves are strange, but I've always disliked those hooves, they just don't look normal to me. As always, accessories such as glasses always look out of place. The white muzzle looks out of place as well.

Oh, and you've used both RD's mane and Twilight's tail, neither of which match up well and both make it seem slightly unoriginal.

To sum up what you need to change
-Pastels, and less orange
-Accessories feel gimicky
-Hooves like that never work
-Muzzle is strange
-Mane and tail could do with changing

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 07:04 PM

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I wonder what you think of Lavinia she was my first OC and I'm wondering if there's anything I should change about her.

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#170 FaffleMaster

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 07:10 PM

pppft okay I give in. Here's my OC, Tech Sketch
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Posted 05 January 2013 - 08:06 PM

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Also tell me what to call her pls. Her cutie mark is an accordion, because accordions are pretty cool.

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I wonder what you think of Lavinia she was my first OC and I'm wondering if there's anything I should change about her.

>Broken horn
>Mechanical leg

Though you pulled it off awesomely in the RP, I'm still wondering about these two points.

#172 Npaws

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 08:24 PM

Alright new OC model. I know you told me to change the colors but I think this design goes together. Posted Image

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Posted 05 January 2013 - 09:47 PM

>Broken horn
>Mechanical leg

Though you pulled it off awesomely in the RP, I'm still wondering about these two points.

The Broken Horn was an accident that happened shortly after birth she has no memory of it the Mechanical Leg: She lost her leg in a workshop accident and spent her time constructing a replacement that runs on steam energy it's still a prototype.

#174 Quoth the Raven

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Posted 06 January 2013 - 12:52 AM

I know that this OC probably isn't going to go over too well because of her color scheme and her height, but I still wanna hear what you have to say.

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Posted 06 January 2013 - 03:23 AM

Edited because something terrible happened and the post got mangled.


Edited by Jasplosion, 06 January 2013 - 04:20 AM.


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Posted 06 January 2013 - 03:32 AM

What the....



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Posted 06 January 2013 - 03:52 AM

I know... weird..



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Posted 06 January 2013 - 04:20 AM

I don't know what to do about this, sorry guys. I'll try and post it again later and see if it works that time.



#179 castle13oblivion

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Posted 06 January 2013 - 07:33 AM

Heres another one for you, sorry for the small size.

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Posted 06 January 2013 - 09:09 AM

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Just gonna leave this here

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Posted 06 January 2013 - 09:25 AM

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I don't really like that hoove style, although it seems to be becoming a theme in my distaste for various aspects of an OC, I think this OC is fairly nice, if a little bland, and the pupils are weirdly dilated which just seems strange. Is this a kingdom hearts themed pony? Because that cutie mark suggests so. I think you should just ditch the hooves and change the eyes.

 

 

 

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Now here is a tall colt  done right. Unlike most tall colt OCs I see, his head doesn't look like it's about to fall off at any moment now from the sheer weight bearing down on his neck. The blue mane and tail complement the bley coat well, and match each other, too. The cutie mark also complements the bley. I don't think there is anything you should change, really.

 

It's nice to see that there are a lot of people on brohoof who understand how to make a nice OC, contrasting the few who enjoy red and black zebra-striped monstrosities. So I'd like to congratulate you all with this stock art of a trophy I found on google images.

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gud werk guise



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Posted 06 January 2013 - 10:52 AM

Hi

can I have your Opinion on my OC

 

Name: Hooviano *If you don't get the hint I will explain (Hoo- as in Hoof, -iano as in Piano)*

Cutie mark: Piano Keys

Talent: Playing the Piano, and some other instruments

Attitude: Nice, friendly, Can't lie *Bad liar (Like me I can't tell a lie in RL)*

 

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BTW! I am working on a Background story atm, I can't tell you it atm, it's a WIP :D



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Posted 06 January 2013 - 11:29 AM

Heres mine

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Don't be too harsh jas, or I'll make you wish you could die.



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Posted 06 January 2013 - 11:55 AM

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I think the hooves look really out of place, I've never seen any like that in the show, and the RD mane and tail could be swapped out for something more original. The colours are all okay, and work well enough. Everything else is okay, usually having a large head like that on a small body doesn't look so good but it works well here. 

 

Heres mine

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Don't be too harsh jas, or I'll make you wish you could die.

 

 

He's unique, I'll give you that. Usually I don't think accessories work but it's a monocle and a cape, I guess he has a 80's villain feel. I like it, maybe because that blue and purple complement each other so well. 

 

Don't hurt me.

 

Confound this new format, I can't post a new reply.


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Posted 06 January 2013 - 12:16 PM

Might as well throw my hat into the ring, so to speak.  Haven't settled on a cutie mark yet, so still blank.  Note that I'm in the 'Earth Ponies have Earth Magic' camp, so what backstory I have reflects this.

 

Crystal Spire (still working on the name, but I keep coming back to that one so it'll probably stick) is an Earth Pony petricultrurist--the scientific term for rock-farmer.  He specializes in grown-to-order crystal structures for use in enchanting, sculpture, and various industries like clockworks and electronics.  Earned his cutie mark by re-growing a quartz crystal he accidentally shattered while sorting out deliveries on his parents' farm, he managed to fuse it back together without a single imperfection in a couple hours but was exhausted by the effort for a few days.  Currently working as an armorer for the Royal Guard, since his talent and schooling lets him find and seal tiny flaws in the structure of metals.  Fun geology fact: metals are also crystalline structures like gemstones, just less brittle.

 

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The safety glasses are enchanted to be shatterproof in case of an accident.



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Posted 06 January 2013 - 12:33 PM

Might as well throw my hat into the ring, so to speak.  Haven't settled on a cutie mark yet, so still blank.  Note that I'm in the 'Earth Ponies have Earth Magic' camp, so what backstory I have reflects this.

 

Crystal Spire (still working on the name, but I keep coming back to that one so it'll probably stick) is an Earth Pony petricultrurist--the scientific term for rock-farmer.  He specializes in grown-to-order crystal structures for use in enchanting, sculpture, and various industries like clockworks and electronics.  Earned his cutie mark by re-growing a quartz crystal he accidentally shattered while sorting out deliveries on his parents' farm, he managed to fuse it back together without a single imperfection in a couple hours but was exhausted by the effort for a few days.  Currently working as an armorer for the Royal Guard, since his talent and schooling lets him find and seal tiny flaws in the structure of metals.  Fun geology fact: metals are also crystalline structures like gemstones, just less brittle.

 

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The safety glasses are enchanted to be shatterproof in case of an accident.

 

I like the colour scheme. Usually I don't like those hooves but since he is a rock farmer, it makes sense that his hooves would be like that (I always associated those hooves with ponies who work, e.g. Big macintosh). I also usually try to tell people that accessories look out of place, but you have a viable reason for them which is explained in your OC's backstory, so I don't mind here. Kudos for coming up with an original story. 


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Posted 06 January 2013 - 02:54 PM

Admins are getting in on this ^^ sweet!



#188 castle13oblivion

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Posted 06 January 2013 - 07:05 PM

I don't really like that hoove style, although it seems to be becoming a theme in my distaste for various aspects of an OC, I think this OC is fairly nice, if a little bland, and the pupils are weirdly dilated which just seems strange. Is this a kingdom hearts themed pony? Because that cutie mark suggests so. I think you should just ditch the hooves and change the eyes.

 

Yes, this is a Kingdom Hearts pony, thanks for noticing. Being so, it is a Nobody pony, it has no heart. Therefore, that's why I went with the bland colours and the white iris.

 

(I could throw my Heartless pony into the mix, though this one is nowhere near canon :P)



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Posted 06 January 2013 - 07:20 PM

I wasn't expecting to receive such positive results, thank you! Also, is bley a term for the brown-grey color that my OC's coat is?



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Posted 07 January 2013 - 05:12 AM

I wasn't expecting to receive such positive results, thank you! Also, is bley a term for the brown-grey color that my OC's coat is?

 

Bley is the name given to the mix of blue and grey, actually. 



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Posted 08 January 2013 - 07:06 AM

I've got so many ponies...

These are two OCs I designed for some friends. The one on the left is based off of this dinosaur. The right is a panda pony.

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 09:27 AM

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I never really thought red was a good body colour for an OC, since it makes it stand out so much. I think you should have gone for a less jarring colour. The other one is a bit bland, but I guess if it's a panda pony then it's pretty much bang-on. 



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Posted 08 January 2013 - 08:50 PM

Spudsworth. (Cutie Mark subject to change if I decide to change it)

 

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 09:03 PM

jas. you skipped me back in december! :(



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Posted 08 January 2013 - 09:28 PM

Here is my OC Pendulum Swing, *No there is no Cutie Mark pic, as I have trouble drawing and nobody drew it the way I imagined it.

 

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Here is a my normal PS thing I share with people:

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 10:06 PM

Well may put mine here

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Posted 09 January 2013 - 06:05 AM

SO! I fixed my OC, no longer and Alicorn and finally came up with a cutie mark to go with him. Thoughts? 

 

 

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Posted 10 January 2013 - 02:11 PM

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I don't think I can say much else other than that is by far the classiest OC I've ever seen. 

 

jas. you skipped me back in december! :(

 

You posted just before I left, sorry D:

 

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I think you could have chosen a better colour for the hooves, something about them being the same colour as his hair feels strange to me. Everything else is pretty much fine.

 

 

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I think you should just use yellow in the mane, and leave the other two colours out. It would look a lot better, especially since that's a really nice blue you used for the body.

 

 

 

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I still think your OC has too many accessories. Why did you use Fluttershy's eyes if it's a colt?  You should remove shoes, the sweatbands and the glasses. Also, you should choose a shorter horn. Sorry if I sound too harsh, but there are still a few things wrong with this OC.



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Posted 10 January 2013 - 06:19 PM

I still think your OC has too many accessories. Why did you use Fluttershy's eyes if it's a colt?  You should remove shoes, the sweatbands and the glasses. Also, you should choose a shorter horn. Sorry if I sound too harsh, but there are still a few things wrong with this OC.

 

Haters gon' hate! Nah jus' kiddin'. 

The horn DOES bug me, I kinda wish that pny creator thing allowed me to fix it, also clothing... Because what I honestly want is him wearing a shirt underneath the vest and black arm bands. Hence the "shoes" I hate being unable to draw as well as I design on photoshop. I'm kinda thinking of ways of getting around it though... As for the eye, I mostly liked the eye shape, yet not the eyelashes. I'm actually close to full on editing out the entire thing on photoshop myself at some point whenever I have the time to sit down and go completely OCD on that thing. 



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Posted 10 January 2013 - 06:58 PM

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I don't think I can say much else other than that is by far the classiest OC I've ever seen.

One of the best critiques I've seen.




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