Please Critique my Submission
#1
Posted 05 January 2013 - 04:56 AM
#2
Posted 05 January 2013 - 05:59 AM
- Triangle shaped roof
- Dynamic shaped outer walls
- Preferred Material for exterior
and interior Pros
- Preferred Furniture for bottom floor and some for the top.
Now lets go over the Cons, I'm sorry but I found a lot
- you have a giant cross shaped window in the front, which doesn't make the house look good. maybe size it down to just a 2x3,3x2 and or a 2x2?
- the bottom and top floors are very empty and with no interior walls, try adding some rooms inside.
- the bathroom upstairs has obsidian around it, which also, doesn't make the interior look good. maybe it will look better if you remove it?
- the upstairs floor is just 2 colored sandstone blocks in lines, try using different wood colors for both the bottom floor and top floor.
- you used a large amount of torches, try using glowstone or redstone lamps
- and the overall house needs more detail, try adding pictures, flower pots, leaves on caldrons and shelves.
I hope you look into these Cons and try to improve your house.
Good luck!
#3
Posted 05 January 2013 - 06:19 AM
#4
Posted 06 January 2013 - 02:31 AM
Exterior
> Roof is good except for the rear. It is very awkward where the taller section meets the shorter.
> smooth sandstone or sand may be more preferable than birch wood.
> although the frame adds detail to the walls, they are flat. Try having outcroppings in some areas. Be careful not to make "tumors".
> lack of vegetation (there's nothing but hedges surrounding the house) subtracts from its overall presentation.
> the windows on the right side have very strange shapes.
Interior
> The rafters on the 1st-floor ceiling look good.
> The wall-lighting is a bit strange.
> The entrance area is very plain.
> [SEVERE] I can see redstone torches in the ceiling. Seeing redstone stuff besides what is intended to be seen (dispensers, lamps, etc.) is never a good idea.
> The 1st floor in general is very bare and lacks detail.
> The furniture is very simple. Try /warp ikea for furniture ideas.
> the 2nd floor is more like an attic than actual living space.
> labeling rooms with signs is generally frowned upon both by builders and admins.
> Sandstone and sand aren't advisable for flooring material.
Recommendations
> Modify the shape of your house to make it less square.
> Modify the back of your roof so the lower and higher sections are less awkward at the junction.
> redo your interior layout.
Verdict
> This house will most likely not pass in its current state. Heavy revision is advised.
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