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#1 TheEpicDiamondSword

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Posted 14 August 2015 - 08:33 PM

Name: Lightning Cloud

Gender: Male
Race: Pegasus
Age: 20
Appearance: A normal-sized stallion that has blue fur, and a light yellow mane and tail, and magenta eyes.
Cutie Mark and Special Talent: The cutie Mark is A gray cloud with lightning and rain coming out of it. He is usually good at controlling weather, mostly storms.

Personality: Lightning Cloud can be Mean and serious at times, but when you click and become friends with him, he can be lighthearted and kind. Lightning usually has mixed personalities, but he is really not a very average stallion.

   He got inspiration from racers all around Equestria, and trained to become an athlete. He is usually very competitive, and is not happy when people don't compliment him. He can be a sore loser at times, but he usually doesn't say a word when he loses games.
Biography: Lightning Cloud was the name because When he was born, his parents thought he was as soft as a cloud, and Lightning because the family had a habit of racing and other events, and they liked being fast as lightning. He was kind of shy back in the early days, but as he grew older he made lots of friends, and people remarked him because of his speed. He has a lot of fun at Flight Camp and even got his cutie mark right after he finished it one time. He was always hard-working, and could be lazy at times, but he can always be a true friend and is very helpful.

   When Lightning was about 16, he met a beautiful mare named Rainbow Dust. She was very sweet, and they started dating eventually, and very recently, they got married and are planning on having foals someday. Rainbow dust usually wore makeup and had teal fur. Her mane was also rainbow colored. Lightning Cloud became a lot more social after his marriage with Rainbow Dust, so he could always help in almost any situation.

    When Lightning Cloud was still a colt, he was in a group of 5 friends.The other 4's names were Glass Hooves, Blazing Blitz, Bulky Bones, and High Trot. Glass Hooves was usually the nerdy one in the group, Blazing Blitz was the faster one, usually competing with Lightning Cloud, You don't want to get into a fight with Bulky Bones, because he's called that for a reason. High Trot usually wasn't that much of the social one, and was pretty slow out of the 5. They are all around the same age.

   In conclusion, Lightning Cloud is very kind, pretty strong, and very fast, he could help in any situation, and can make friends wherever he goes, he doesn't struggle to express, and sometimes cares about his appearance, but overall, Lightning Cloud is just another kind Stallion.


Edited by TheEpicDiamondSword, 14 August 2015 - 08:40 PM.


#2 Rainbow Dash McStarley

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Posted 15 August 2015 - 12:15 AM

Please fix your capitalisation and grammar.

 

You have conflicting statements present, i.e. 'He was always hard-working, and could be lazy at times' and 'he is really not a very average stallion; ...but overall, Lightning Cloud is just another kind Stallion'.

 

Your background needs to be fit to Symphorian lore.




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