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#1 SwiftDagger

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    Misha_cupcake

Posted 17 January 2016 - 11:14 AM

I'm looking for criticism on my OC becaus i want to join rps but i want to know if the backstory and stuff is good c; 

 

Name: Swift dagger

Gender: Mare

Kind: Unicorn

Age: 20

discripsion :

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CM : Pencil whit light from it meaning is that she can draw very well

Backstory: Swift wase born in manehatten she lived there whit her mother blue sky's father orange sparkle and her younger brother green wind. on school she got bullied but she always find her peace in drawing one day she finnaly realised that and got her cutiemark afther finishing high school she went to a art school and learnt to draw more stuff when she finnisht it she went to ponyville and begin a little art shop

 

Thank you for the help ;D ~Greetz cupcake



#2 Super Ultra Uber C00l Dood

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Posted 17 January 2016 - 01:30 PM

Not bad. Not a terrible OC by any means, I like it.



#3 Night_Breeze

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    I can explain...

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Posted 17 January 2016 - 08:19 PM

Pretty good. On the short side, but so were mine when I first created them. Why 'whit' and not not 'with'? You did that twice, was it intentional? A couple commas would make it read easier.

#4 Tom Mosses

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    Allahu akbar

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Posted 18 January 2016 - 03:20 AM

hmm pretty cool just keep practacing!




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