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Is this roleplay a good idea?

  1. Yes (Please post why below) (4 votes [66.67%])

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  2. No (Please post why below) (2 votes [33.33%])

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#1 Jay Gatsby

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 03:08 AM

THE ACADEMY

 

This idea came to me quite randomly, like most my ideas do. ADHD seems to give me the advantage of randomly catching strokes of creative genius, but also gives me the disadvantage of them quickly flying right back out. My procrastination and laziness also stops me from producing new ideas, so it takes a lot of mental effort to push my ass up and type something. But then I thought 'Why push myself up to make a RP that people will possibly not like' then after I thought that, I thought 'Wait.. What do people like anyway?'. So, I decided to do two things. The first was to make this thread before I posted a whole new RP (with a poll I'd like you all to answer and comment on please), this would help me get a general idea of what people thought of the roleplay before I posted it. The second was to modify the original idea that popped into my head, so that it would fit the poll Eris generously made. That poll told us what people like, so without further walls of text, here's the idea

 

The Story:

 

This is a story that takes place far in the future of ponykind. In the early days of space exploration, the entire planet of Earth joined together to form Epsilon, a nation that was every previous country put into one, for the purpose of venturing out into space. The decision to unite worked well, ponykind had spread across the stars in multiple colonies on different worlds. However, very much like the discovery of the new world, colonies soon wanted to form into separate nations. This was actually accepted by the original Epsilon, as long as all the countries stayed in a allied power, known as the Alliance. The plan's intentions seemed well, but the clause put multiple restraints on the new formed nations, making them still the equivalent to colonies. For more separation, and more freedom, the large tension exploded into what was the worst war of all ponykind. The Alliance was split into two, one half being the original Epislon and a good portion of countries siding with it, and the other being Omicron, a alliance that formed between the nations that wanted complete freedom. Epsilon's greed for power, and Omicron's irrational reasoning, turned into a bloody conflict that eventually ended at what was truly a stalemate. Omicron got their wish, the nations were completely free of The Alliance that Epsilon originally created, however, they still stayed under their own, much more fair Omicron alliance.

 

Although the war ended, another war was always predicted, because of how the Epsilon alliance still had plenty of power, and that there was no true winner. Both sides lost with their casualties, the whole reason Epsilon let up is because of this, but they still had plenty of fight left in them. That's why there is a fear that they are planning to come back and reclaim the land they lost, because they weren't put all the way down. It was a fear that made both sides build up a large military, similar to the cold war, thinking the conflict would eventually start again. One of the most productive forms of soldiers for the war, was bringing them through an academy.

 

The academies were Omicron's idea. Large military institutions formed for the training of cadets from ages 6 to 12 for future service. Some strict, and others forcing service after education, they had different policies, but all the academies proved one thing; young children could be trained to be lethal weapons in the war when they grew older. They would be trained in anything that was in galactic combat, such as being a pilot, engineer, navigator, or captain for a ship, or maybe fighting and knowing the battle on land. The academies made future armies, usually in a space station in the upper atmosphere of a lowly inhabited planet, so that the terrain could be used for training. The story will take place in one of these academies, and you're character will be a filly or colt that was shipped of to this boarding school, from where ever there home was in the Omicron alliance. They will train, but also, they will have time to interact, since the planned academy isn't going to be strict military.

 

The Set-Up:

 

The set-up is simple. The roleplay will start with your OC joining everyone else in a new company. A company is a group of foals in a team that often perform tasks together, and live closely in the same hall. The first posts of the RP will be about moving into the new company from your old one, unlike Freshman Year, this will not be your first day, your OC will have a fair idea of how everything already works on the station. From there, your character will team up with the rest of the characters in the story, and work as a team with them. All different professions will have to come together, and work together on 'Missions' that will happen often, where a new challenge is given to the company to complete in a certain amount of time. This can be a puzzle that takes 5 minutes to complete, or a journey to the planet below that will require 1 week of survival. This is the only thing you, as the player, are mandatory to participate in. When your character goes to his/her own special classes for their profession, is up to you.

 

 

The Poll:

 

So you ask, where does the poll come in? I took each field everyone in the poll, and inserted it into the FULL story. These groups are; School RP, Passive RP, Sci-fi RP, Survival RP, and Discordant. Bellow is how each part is in the story

 

Sci-Fi: If it isn't obvious enough, this is set in the future. It will have futuristic things in it. Being that this story was sci-fi, it was very hard to fit medevil in somehow, but it got a low amount of votes on the poll anyway. However, it won't be too much sci-fi, and most of your OC's professions in the academy won't NEED to revolve around it. If you want your OC to be something sci-fi related, this is why it's this type of RP. Though, this is the most present branch of roleplay, so if you hate sci-fi, the RP may not be for you.

 

Survival: Missions in the roleplay will be conducted where survival will be needed on the planet below. This is also a kinda 'Lord of the Flies' set-up, a lot of the time, kids are not going to have adults around at the station. The academy will be self automated in a lot of parts, so kids can fight, and stand their ground. This isn't the same as living in the wild though, not even close, and there will be SOME discipline. Depending on your OC's profession, he/she can also have to go to a survival class, that teaches everything about surviving in the wild.

 

Passive: Foals! Aww, sweet colts and fillies. We honestly can't make them fight too much, or really have too much violence, can we? For those who will have their OC's fight, have their OC's fight! But nothing requires the other characters to fight with each other, they can just live a average life style in their rooms about the station. One thing though, if you want a passive roleplay out of this, you have to set up your OC as such. Just like in Survival, your OC has to have a profession that doesn't require anything violent, which, there are plenty of those.

 

School RP: It's a boarding school, with professions. Your OC will take classes, based on their skills. Enough said, really.

 

Discordant: Your OC can be a cyborg. Wait, what? A sci-fi roleplay allows your OC to have technologies that can give them the powers in Equestria they never had. Also, your OC does have a 'power' in a way with his or her profession. Your OC can be training to run a entire armada, or do nuclear physics. These are foals that are geniuses, unique, 'special', to be able to get into a school like this. So your OC can have powers, and abilities, a normal foal never had. When I say this, I don't mean they can have super powers, but their large mind and technology can surely make it seem so

 

 

 

Tell me what you think, if I get positive response, I'll make the roleplay

 

 



#2 Seabreeze

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 05:21 AM

I think the name should be more generic.



#3 Jay Gatsby

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 11:12 AM

I think the name should be more generic.

Agreed. I'll think of something else

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 11:28 AM

Personally I don't think I'd enjoy it. Mashing every genre of RP together to make a god-tier RP doesn't mean it'll actually be good, it just complicates it far too much and really creates too many limitations for it to be run as an RP. I'd definitely enjoy this if it was a story, but I wouldn't enjoy playing a character in it because I'd have to incorporate them into this very specific world and as an RPer I'd find that difficult.

 

Also, Sci-Fi and School RPs really aren't my thing.



#5 Jay Gatsby

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 12:24 PM

Personally I don't think I'd enjoy it. Mashing every genre of RP together to make a god-tier RP doesn't mean it'll actually be good, it just complicates it far too much and really creates too many limitations for it to be run as an RP. I'd definitely enjoy this if it was a story, but I wouldn't enjoy playing a character in it because I'd have to incorporate them into this very specific world and as an RPer I'd find that difficult.

Also, Sci-Fi and School RPs really aren't my thing.

There is hundreds of genres of RP/stories (RP and story are almost the same thing), I'm only taking 5 of those and putting them into one roleplay. Some are more presents then others, and some of them just came in the story I originally planned. The only two changes I made to the story, was making the characters foals instead of teens (Which, I truly though made more sense anyway) and introducing this idea of missions. The missions idea is actually a really good idea in my eyes, it gives everyone something to do, other then just interact and live life. It gives actions, suspense, bonding, and teamwork, between the characters, in a controlled environment. Academies would probably do this anyway, if you think about it

I really don't like the word 'mash'. It sounds like I just put a ton of things together, when I only took 5, in a disorganized mess. I didn't purposely make this roleplay to fit everyone, at the start it was really close, and I made a few changes. Your opinion is your opinion, but what type of roleplay YOU like shouldn't affect if you think it's a good set up or not for everyone else

I wouldn't call it god-tier either... They're kids, and they really don't have super powered minds, they are just above average and very skilled at what they are good at. Being able to fly a spaceship isn't godlike at all, this goes back to missions, for them to be extraordinary, they need teamwork

#6 RunningWolf251

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 12:42 PM

From reading the story, there's not a lot to really grab my attention and bring me into the story. It just seems like both sides are in some pointless generic struggle yet there's nothing to make me want to pick one side over the other and they don't seem to be fighting for a whole lot other than to be quarrelsome. Perhaps if you looked at something like the Monolith from STALKER you could take one side and give it a pretty good basis for a fight. That said, here's my thoughts on Omicron: They're a generic nationalist revolt, not much interesting going on there. They seem to be more like the type of folks who'd break apart and then start doing more guerilla/terrorist actions against the Alliance after they've tried to reclaim their colonies from Omicron. If you like the idea of making them more of a baddie, their reason for a fight is that they've found some hidden secret on a planet that they colonized and while they don't know exactly what it is, they do know that it holds great potential for construction/destruction. The Alliance doesn't know about it, but Omicron wants to ensure the Alliance doesn't know about it until they've had a chance to discover it's true purpose. Through your plot, the characters could be introduced to it and even inside Omicron there could be competition to try and get a chance to use this to either take over the Omicron or to take over the Alliance. I suppose you could say it's much like the Sith faction in Star Wars, where there is constant competition among the members for the objects of power and all the while their enemies are bearing down on them.

 

The Alliance, on the other hand, seems far more disciplined than Omicron, but they currently have no real thing to set them apart. They are also just a generic faction on a homeworld that's more developed than these other factions. Their technology and access to manpower and tools is much better, so they are better equipped and after they've learned (through espionage or through an information leak of some sort) of Omicron's artifact, they too begin construction of what would amount to a capital ship to finally return and destroy Omicron. By the time this sort of end-game thing comes about, Omicron will have gotten their ship constructed with the artifact and they will meet and, depending on how much effort each academy has put into their lessons (i.e. which one has accomplished more) it can determine which side will win. Or you can avoid that end-game altogether and do something else, so long as you have some sort of ending planned.

 

You don't have to use this story, but you probably do need a bit more than just saying two sides are warring over land with no real motivation. Also, through trying to mix all the different poll answers together, you've made a strange combination of a casual story and a linear story. It'd be best to pick one style over the other instead of trying to manage both together. Lots of potential for your story here, looking forward to what you think and what you can come up with.

 

Perhaps also expanding or shifting the ages upwards a bit to include later teens would be beneficial as well. And you've mentioned that it's a military academy but it isn't strict during a war? Even outside of war, military academies are strict considering they're trying to weed out any who aren't up to the task. It might be less strict for the Alliance since they're more developed, but Omicron would be hard-pressed to get good, strong bodies in uniforms to defend them from whatever the Alliance will throw at them.


Edited by RunningWolf251, 11 June 2014 - 12:46 PM.


#7 Jay Gatsby

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 01:10 PM

From reading the story, there's not a lot to really grab my attention and bring me into the story. It just seems like both sides are in some pointless generic struggle yet there's nothing to make me want to pick one side over the other and they don't seem to be fighting for a whole lot other than to be quarrelsome. Perhaps if you looked at something like the Monolith from STALKER you could take one side and give it a pretty good basis for a fight. That said, here's my thoughts on Omicron: They're a generic nationalist revolt, not much interesting going on there. They seem to be more like the type of folks who'd break apart and then start doing more guerilla/terrorist actions against the Alliance after they've tried to reclaim their colonies from Omicron. If you like the idea of making them more of a baddie, their reason for a fight is that they've found some hidden secret on a planet that they colonized and while they don't know exactly what it is, they do know that it holds great potential for construction/destruction. The Alliance doesn't know about it, but Omicron wants to ensure the Alliance doesn't know about it until they've had a chance to discover it's true purpose. Through your plot, the characters could be introduced to it and even inside Omicron there could be competition to try and get a chance to use this to either take over the Omicron or to take over the Alliance. I suppose you could say it's much like the Sith faction in Star Wars, where there is constant competition among the members for the objects of power and all the while their enemies are bearing down on them.

The Alliance, on the other hand, seems far more disciplined than Omicron, but they currently have no real thing to set them apart. They are also just a generic faction on a homeworld that's more developed than these other factions. Their technology and access to manpower and tools is much better, so they are better equipped and after they've learned (through espionage or through an information leak of some sort) of Omicron's artifact, they too begin construction of what would amount to a capital ship to finally return and destroy Omicron. By the time this sort of end-game thing comes about, Omicron will have gotten their ship constructed with the artifact and they will meet and, depending on how much effort each academy has put into their lessons (i.e. which one has accomplished more) it can determine which side will win. Or you can avoid that end-game altogether and do something else, so long as you have some sort of ending planned.

You don't have to use this story, but you probably do need a bit more than just saying two sides are warring over land with no real motivation. Also, through trying to mix all the different poll answers together, you've made a strange combination of a casual story and a linear story. It'd be best to pick one style over the other instead of trying to manage both together. Lots of potential for your story here, looking forward to what you think and what you can come up with.

Perhaps also expanding or shifting the ages upwards a bit to include later teens would be beneficial as well. And you've mentioned that it's a military academy but it isn't strict during a war? Even outside of war, military academies are strict considering they're trying to weed out any who aren't up to the task. It might be less strict for the Alliance since they're more developed, but Omicron would be hard-pressed to get good, strong bodies in uniforms to defend them from whatever the Alliance will throw at them.

That's... A really good idea. It makes the story more complex and interesting. I'll make these changes when I get home and try to fix things

#8 RunningWolf251

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Posted 11 June 2014 - 10:37 PM

I was thinking earlier and I figured if you were going to go with the idea of Omicron being guerilla style fighters, you could check into the main faction of Red Faction: Guerilla. They're pretty much the same deal, only on Mars.




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