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#101 Snowkitty24

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Posted 25 September 2012 - 01:23 AM

Chapter one is gonna be finished soon
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But still need to make some grammar checks :D


Any chance for a preview?

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Posted 25 September 2012 - 11:34 AM

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Posted 28 September 2012 - 07:37 PM

OK just to let you know, i neded a Divine of justice for my fic and i choose Jutsy for it. Then i needed a Divine of love like Mara in Skyrim. I have choosen to use another admins for it. The admin has to be a girl IRL and since Laza told me that Calisto and Philly were the only girls he knows, i flipped a coind to choose. Cali won.
That was just to inform you guys.
Now i need Talos God of war and Governance. I'll let you guys decide since i'll include him later in the fic.

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Posted 29 September 2012 - 01:02 AM

i thiiiiiiiiiiiiink

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Its romanian for war (thanks google translate o.o!)

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Posted 29 September 2012 - 01:13 AM

Talos should be Tarbomb. even his NAME sounds like war, other than always zapping a certain somepony...

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Posted 29 September 2012 - 07:51 PM

Ok i was thinking about it and i'll show you just the tiny part of the story. It's just the beginning. Don't be surprised if you find some grammar fails. The story hasn't been reviewed yet.
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Edited by hxfthxft, 30 September 2012 - 07:24 AM.


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Posted 29 September 2012 - 07:54 PM

Looking good so far!

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Posted 29 September 2012 - 08:03 PM

Looking good so far!

Thank you finnan :D
I'll do my best so you guys can enjoy reading it.

Edited by hxfthxft, 30 September 2012 - 07:23 AM.


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Posted 29 September 2012 - 08:27 PM

yay, skyline is in the first part!

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 02:45 AM

Is it too late to create a new oc? ^.^

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 03:16 AM

If it isn't too late here is my OC

Name: Azule Storm
Alias: Zula
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Appearance: Pink with cyan hair
Cutie Mark: Two blue tornados
Special Talent: Amazing speed and rouge weather skills
Personality: Much like Rainbow Dash she will always be there for her friends but she sometimes jumps to conclusions and resorts immediatly to aggresivness and doesn't try to solve a problem peacefully.
Bio: Azule Storm was born to a family of rouge weather ponies who worked for the dark side and was expected to carry on in the family business of bringing bad weather to the good guys. Zula quickly realizes she is not evil and runs away from her home in hope to find somepony to take her in. When she meets her friends she is a spy because her family did not know she ran away until they find out her true nature then she races away taking some thunder cloud seeds with her.
Skills: Weather taming, archery, damage doing (derp derp), and always being there for her friends
Equipment: Bow, arrows, Metal staff (seemed like a good edition cuz metal is a conductor lol)


This is my idea if it isnt too late!

Also got plenty of other of bad pony ideas!

Edited by MidnightBloom, 30 September 2012 - 03:07 AM.


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Posted 30 September 2012 - 03:35 AM

Here is one of my bad pony ideas.
Name: Warring Dawn
Alias: Dawny
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Appearance:http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m (sorry for the excessive link!)
Cutie mark: Battleaxe
Talent: Being a badass filly
Personality: Pretty evil in war she is never seen without her axe EVER she is one of the family members of Azule Storm and has become sworn enemies with her sister and if they ever meet its pretty much a fight to the death.
BIO: She was raised in a rouge weather family who works for the bad guys (apparently zebras) and frikin loves her job she is seen jumping around on thunder clouds for the fun of it (derp derp) she was in the first battle you mentioned and developed a lust for blood over the years she spent hard at her job.
Occupation: Warrior
Skills: Being badass with her axe and stray thunderclouds and never trusting anypony but herself
Equipment: Axe sometimes a bow and arrows

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 03:57 AM

Another idea right here! Think its my last one or second to last one..... xD
Name: Dark Shadows
Alias: Shad
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearance: Posted Image
Cutie Mark:Posted Image
Talent: He designs vehicles and weapons for the zebras and often tests them personally in the middle of a battle
Personality: Generally shy and timid Shad can be thrown into a rage if someone mentions the prospect of the zebras failing which makes him a great fighter
Bio: Nopony is certian of who Shad is or where he came from. He just showed up as a young colt on a zebra mare's doorstep and was raised to be a fighter.
Skills: Engineering and tinkering
Equipment: A full tool kit and at least one of the weapons he designed. He can hit hard with his hammer

Another idea right here! Think its my last one or second to last one..... xD
Name: Dark Shadows
Alias: Shad
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearance: Posted Image
Cutie Mark:Posted Image
Talent: He designs vehicles and weapons for the zebras and often tests them personally in the middle of a battle
Personality: Generally shy and timid Shad can be thrown into a rage if someone mentions the prospect of the zebras failing which makes him a great fighter
Bio: Nopony is certian of who Shad is or where he came from. He just showed up as a young colt on a zebra mare's doorstep and was raised to be a fighter.
Skills: Engineering and tinkering
Equipment: A full tool kit and at least one of the weapons he designed. He can hit hard with his hammer

Sorry images wont show up here

Appearance: http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Cutie mark: http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m

Another idea right here! Think its my last one or second to last one..... xD
Name: Dark Shadows
Alias: Shad
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearance: Posted Image
Cutie Mark:Posted Image
Talent: He designs vehicles and weapons for the zebras and often tests them personally in the middle of a battle
Personality: Generally shy and timid Shad can be thrown into a rage if someone mentions the prospect of the zebras failing which makes him a great fighter
Bio: Nopony is certian of who Shad is or where he came from. He just showed up as a young colt on a zebra mare's doorstep and was raised to be a fighter.
Skills: Engineering and tinkering
Equipment: A full tool kit and at least one of the weapons he designed. He can hit hard with his hammer


Sorry images wont show up here

Appearance: http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Cutie mark: http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m

Link for cutie mark the cutie mark is the bottom middle image

Edited by MidnightBloom, 30 September 2012 - 03:57 AM.


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Posted 30 September 2012 - 04:11 AM

Last Idea
Name: Shadow Raven
Alias: Prince Rave
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearancehttp://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Cutie Mark: Same as this guy's http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Talent: Striking fear into the hearts of anypony who gets in his way
Personality: Selfish, bratty
Bio: Shadow Raven also known as Prince Rave is a dark teenage colt who will stop at nothing to be an army commander like his father even if that means murdering the current one. Prince Rave has blood on his hooves from more than one pony who got in his way climbing up the rank ladder until he reaches his goals.
Skills: Amazing magical ability, harsh war instinct
Equipment: His black cape. A diamond sword.

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 06:22 AM

Last Idea
Name: Shadow Raven
Alias: Prince Rave
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearancehttp://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Cutie Mark: Same as this guy's http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Talent: Striking fear into the hearts of anypony who gets in his way
Personality: Selfish, bratty
Bio: Shadow Raven also known as Prince Rave is a dark teenage colt who will stop at nothing to be an army commander like his father even if that means murdering the current one. Prince Rave has blood on his hooves from more than one pony who got in his way climbing up the rank ladder until he reaches his goals.
Skills: Amazing magical ability, harsh war instinct
Equipment: His black cape. A diamond sword.

No princes in skyrim.

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 07:20 AM

If it isn't too late here is my OC

Name: Azule Storm
Alias: Zula
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Appearance: Pink with cyan hair
Cutie Mark: Two blue tornados
Special Talent: Amazing speed and rouge weather skills
Personality: Much like Rainbow Dash she will always be there for her friends but she sometimes jumps to conclusions and resorts immediatly to aggresivness and doesn't try to solve a problem peacefully.
Bio: Azule Storm was born to a family of rouge weather ponies who worked for the dark side and was expected to carry on in the family business of bringing bad weather to the good guys. Zula quickly realizes she is not evil and runs away from her home in hope to find somepony to take her in. When she meets her friends she is a spy because her family did not know she ran away until they find out her true nature then she races away taking some thunder cloud seeds with her.
Skills: Weather taming, archery, damage doing (derp derp), and always being there for her friends
Equipment: Bow, arrows, Metal staff (seemed like a good edition cuz metal is a conductor lol)


This is my idea if it isnt too late!

Also got plenty of other of bad pony ideas!

Here is one of my bad pony ideas.
Name: Warring Dawn
Alias: Dawny
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Appearance:http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m (sorry for the excessive link!)
Cutie mark: Battleaxe
Talent: Being a badass filly
Personality: Pretty evil in war she is never seen without her axe EVER she is one of the family members of Azule Storm and has become sworn enemies with her sister and if they ever meet its pretty much a fight to the death.
BIO: She was raised in a rouge weather family who works for the bad guys (apparently zebras) and frikin loves her job she is seen jumping around on thunder clouds for the fun of it (derp derp) she was in the first battle you mentioned and developed a lust for blood over the years she spent hard at her job.
Occupation: Warrior
Skills: Being badass with her axe and stray thunderclouds and never trusting anypony but herself
Equipment: Axe sometimes a bow and arrows

Two members of a pegasus family. Sounds interesting. One good the other one is a bad OC.
Both ACCEPTED!

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About the Last OC finnan is right. No princes in Skyrim! Sorry but this OC is REJECTED

Thank you for posting :)

Edited by hxfthxft, 30 September 2012 - 07:22 AM.


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Posted 30 September 2012 - 04:16 PM

Two members of a pegasus family. Sounds interesting. One good the other one is a bad OC.
Both ACCEPTED!

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About the Last OC finnan is right. No princes in Skyrim! Sorry but this OC is REJECTED

Thank you for posting :)

If you misread he is not a REAL prince he is just called the prince because of his bratty nature sorry if that was unclear

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 04:27 PM

And I have a slightly vague understanding of Skyrim because the majority of my knowledge about it comes from sitting on a couch watching by brother play it until I fall asleep out of boredom from not doing anything so forgive me if I saw something with wheels while groggy from one of my naps

And I have a slightly vague understanding of Skyrim because the majority of my knowledge about it comes from sitting on a couch watching by brother play it until I fall asleep out of boredom from not doing anything so forgive me if I saw something with wheels while groggy from one of my naps

But I do watch my brother play ALOT so I know enough

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 06:31 PM

And I have a slightly vague understanding of Skyrim because the majority of my knowledge about it comes from sitting on a couch watching by brother play it until I fall asleep out of boredom from not doing anything so forgive me if I saw something with wheels while groggy from one of my naps


But I do watch my brother play ALOT so I know enough

Ok I admit that I should have read the text a bit better but still the OC is a bit OP. Saying that he strikes fear in anypony who gets in his way? Well even i could make an OC that has a talent to kill everyone with just looking at him.
And it's a bad idea to place that into his talents. It's better to say that he's a bruttal killer that is known all around Equestria. Then it would make more sense that he's feared by everyone. But making that as his talent... that's not right. The OC is still rejected.

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Posted 30 September 2012 - 07:21 PM

Ok i was thinking about it and i'll show you just the tiny part of the story. It's just the beginning. Don't be surprised if you find some grammar fails. The story hasn't been reviewed yet.

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Looking good so far hx!! I went ahead and fixed a couple of things that were nagging me in it. :3

Only a couple of small errors, I went ahead and changed word/grammar to red (They are fixed), and for words I removed I added a blue dash. Coming along very nicely, I think I found about 4 errors. One last thing, Try not to use fragment sentences as often, You have a couple of sentences that are just a few words. Try adding commas there more or less, just try not to overuse them. :)

EDIT: I also added green to a spot where a comma could have gone.
P.S. I cannot tell you how well this turned out for the first draft. :D

Edited by Thunder Strike, 30 September 2012 - 07:23 PM.


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Posted 30 September 2012 - 08:01 PM

Looking good so far hx!! I went ahead and fixed a couple of things that were nagging me in it. :3

Only a couple of small errors, I went ahead and changed word/grammar to red (They are fixed), and for words I removed I added a blue dash. Coming along very nicely, I think I found about 4 errors. One last thing, Try not to use fragment sentences as often, You have a couple of sentences that are just a few words. Try adding commas there more or less, just try not to overuse them. :)

EDIT: I also added green to a spot where a comma could have gone.
P.S. I cannot tell you how well this turned out for the first draft. :D

Thank you for the preview Playack. I hope you will like the first chapter :)

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Posted 02 October 2012 - 10:48 AM

Actually, that doesn't sound like a bad game at all. Dovapony.... FUK U AL!!! (Dragon shout)

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Posted 04 October 2012 - 07:00 PM

Character name: FrostFire
Alias: Icecold
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Talent: Can create a blizzard around her.
It's doesnt make much damage but it's so dense that you'll have to get really close to her to see her.
It's actually used for cover. For a short time she can make it so cold that it drains stamina but for a really short time.
Appearance:
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Personality: Not many know FrostFire personally. She lives in the far north on the Crystal Mountains. Most ponies think she's evil. Probably because she has took many lives of other ponies. The Crystal Mountain is a dangerous place to live and most ponies are not friendly there. She just tries to keep others away from her. Doesn't trust many ponies, that's why she seems so mean.
She is actually friendly if you approach her with the right attitude.
Bio:
She has mastered the frost magic. Knows the best way to use it and when. Knows what creatures resist and fear it. Lives with a small group of other ponies in a cave on the Crystal Mountains.
Her mother was an archmage and her father an adventurer.
Occupation: Mage
Skills: Destruction spell (frost), Enchanting, Alchemy
Equipment: Daedric dagger, her fathers sword
Armour: Her mother's archmage robes

(Tell me what you think of it, you guys will need to judge it now)

Edited by hxfthxft, 05 October 2012 - 02:44 PM.


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Posted 04 October 2012 - 08:05 PM

Character name: FrostFire
Alias: Icecold
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Talent: Can create a blizzard around her.
It's doesnt make much damage but it's so dense that you'll have to get really close to her to see her.
It's actually used for cover. For a short time she can make it so cold that it drains stamina but for a really short time.
Appearance:

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Personality: Not many know FrostFire personally. She lives in the far north on the Chilly Mountains. Most ponies think she's evil. Probably because she has took many lives of other ponies. The Chilly Mountain is a dangerous place to live and most ponies are not friendly there. She just tries to keep others away from her. Doesn't trust many ponies, that's why she seems so mean.
She is actually friendly if you approach her with the right attitude.
Bio:
She has mastered the frost magic. Knows the best way to use it and when. Knows what creatures resist and fear it. Lives with a small group of other ponies in a cave on the Chilly Mountains.
Her mother was an archmage and her father an adventurer.
Occupation: Mage
Skills: Destruction spell (frost), Enchanting, Alchemy
Equipment: Daedric dagger, her fathers sword
Armour: Her mother's archmage robes

(Tell me what you think of it, you guys will need to judge it now)


I'd certainley give it a pass

Appearance is lovely
Bio, while short (something I'm even quite guilty of :P) instead leaves plenty of room for development in the fic, something I like
Personality, is a pass

Add her in!
(also, you're the writer, our word realy doesn't matter if you want a certain OC in the fic :P)

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Posted 05 October 2012 - 12:54 AM

Character name: Ocean Ice
Alias: Nightbane
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Male
Talent: He is extremely deadly in a swordfight with his scimitar
Appearance: profile picture
Personality: Ocean Ice is calm and collected. To some he appears cold and distant, but to others he is a good friend and voice of wisfom. He hides many secrets from those around him. The Nightshade assassins guild he is the head of maintains some level of secrecy. The identies of its members, including himself are unknown to the authorities. The guild maintains strict rules and guidelines to keep innocents safe from harm. The target is the only thing that should get hurt. The Nightshades are the shadows of the underworld, having recently spread to new cities.
Bio:
He has mastered the art of stealth. He knows hand to hand combat adeptly and is good with his scimitar and throwing knives. He lives in Ponyville and owns a general store, a front for the headquarters of the assassin's guild started by his father. He is the leader of the guild and the mention of his alias Nightbane and the Nightshade Guild strike fear into the hearts of the criminal underworld.
His mother was a shopkeeper and his father an assassin.
Occupation: Assassin
Skills: adept Sneaking, master hand to hand combat, and master swordsmanship
Equipment: Scimitar and some throwing knives
Armour: His father's assassin's robes

Edited by Ocean Ice, 05 October 2012 - 12:54 AM.


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Posted 05 October 2012 - 01:12 AM

Cool Good luck i love the Elder Scrolls Series :)

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Posted 05 October 2012 - 08:15 AM

Character name: Ocean Ice
Alias: Nightbane
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Male
Talent: He is extremely deadly in a swordfight with his scimitar
Appearance: profile picture
Personality: Ocean Ice is calm and collected. To some he appears cold and distant, but to others he is a good friend and voice of wisfom. He hides many secrets from those around him. The Nightshade assassins guild he is the head of maintains some level of secrecy. The identies of its members, including himself are unknown to the authorities. The guild maintains strict rules and guidelines to keep innocents safe from harm. The target is the only thing that should get hurt. The Nightshades are the shadows of the underworld, having recently spread to new cities.
Bio:
He has mastered the art of stealth. He knows hand to hand combat adeptly and is good with his scimitar and throwing knives. He lives in Ponyville and owns a general store, a front for the headquarters of the assassin's guild started by his father. He is the leader of the guild and the mention of his alias Nightbane and the Nightshade Guild strike fear into the hearts of the criminal underworld.
His mother was a shopkeeper and his father an assassin.
Occupation: Assassin
Skills: adept Sneaking, master hand to hand combat, and master swordsmanship
Equipment: Scimitar and some throwing knives
Armour: His father's assassin's robes

OC is not bad. An assassin type of character. Nightshade is a flower used in alchemy to make potions like Damage Health, Damage Magicka Regen, Lingering Damage Stamina, Fortify Destruction and you just made a group of it :)
The only issue i have with your OC are the throwing knives. To use them it requires a mod. And i don't want the story to become to much Assassin's Creed.
The story would have too much assassin characters. I was the first one who made a mage character.
But overall the OC is good :)
ACCEPTED!

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Posted 05 October 2012 - 01:01 PM

Found a better pic of my OC :D
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Posted 06 October 2012 - 05:40 PM

You should use Alicorns!! :D

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Posted 06 October 2012 - 05:58 PM

You should use Alicorns!! :D

Those would be OP

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Posted 06 October 2012 - 06:01 PM

You should use Alicorns!! :D

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Posted 06 October 2012 - 06:03 PM

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Posted 06 October 2012 - 06:06 PM

Honestly i wasn't looking at the logo just the picture. I google'd "BUUURN" and this was the first pic. I just didn't give a buck...

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Posted 06 October 2012 - 08:55 PM

Chapter 1 is finished!

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Post and tell me what you think :)

Edited by hxfthxft, 06 October 2012 - 10:38 PM.


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Posted 06 October 2012 - 10:37 PM

Just to make it clear. If you still have an OC to submit, you still can. I still accept OC ideas.

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 12:09 PM

Wow and wow only!!!!
also if your still looking for OCs..... *CoughcoughspoilerCough*
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if you need any more infomation/a longer bio/a better OC descp/OC picture just let me know.
oh and i was hopeing to get Nova in as a main char/companion to the main char
But i would be happy for him to go just about anywere

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 01:53 PM

Wow and wow only!!!!
also if your still looking for OCs..... *CoughcoughspoilerCough*

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if you need any more infomation/a longer bio/a better OC descp/OC picture just let me know.
oh and i was hopeing to get Nova in as a main char/companion to the main char
But i would be happy for him to go just about anywere


I assume you meant the one on the left on the picture. The black pony. The OC is good. By a Katana you mean the Bolar's Oathblade from the game. Yep one of my faw swords in skyrim :)
The backstory if fine, it may make him a bit OP but i can change that a bit in the story. OC is good :)

ACCEPTED!!!

Edited by hxfthxft, 07 October 2012 - 01:56 PM.


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Posted 07 October 2012 - 02:04 PM

How can he have closed so many oblivion gates? they only appeared during Oblivion and were all closed either by the main character or the final battle, either way it doesn't work.

Of course, that's my elder scrolls knowledge making me hate that idea, I must hate it if it goes against canon.

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 02:42 PM

Don't worry finnan, if i see that something is not cannon i don't include it ( sorry should have mentioned it ) the main thing for me is the OC.

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 02:46 PM

Yeah, the OC is fine besides that backstory.

BTW, I may be making another OC, that'll be bad, or neutral.

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 02:50 PM

Cool :D can't wait to see it :)

Btw i'm waiting for FIMfiction for approval and i'll probably post it on EqD

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 09:39 PM

I see we are lacking on zebras so here


Name: Zip
Alias: N/A
Race: Zebra
Gender: Female
Appearance: http://imgur.com/a/rvQGR#0
Personality: Quite war hardened attitude. She rarely shows any sign of emotion and only even shows even anger unless her one of her fellow soldiers is stuck down. She feels it his her duty to avenge those who fall in battle.
Bio: She was born to be an expendable soldier. She grew up to be a less than expendable soldier. While training she hit the target before all the others with her bow and arrow. She was a natural with enchanments and religional things from the very beginning. She has won herself a spot on the front lines of the battle more than once and chipped her ear in one of the more recent battles and continued on like it had never happened. DO NOT THINK SHE IS OP. SHE IS JUST A SOLDIER.
Occupation: Soldier
Skills: Archery, swordsmanship
Equipment: A bow and an extra smaller quiver than her large main one

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Posted 07 October 2012 - 09:55 PM

I see we are lacking on zebras so here


Name: Zip
Alias: N/A
Race: Zebra
Gender: Female
Appearance: http://imgur.com/a/rvQGR#0
Personality: Quite war hardened attitude. She rarely shows any sign of emotion and only even shows even anger unless her one of her fellow soldiers is stuck down. She feels it his her duty to avenge those who fall in battle.
Bio: She was born to be an expendable soldier. She grew up to be a less than expendable soldier. While training she hit the target before all the others with her bow and arrow. She was a natural with enchanments and religional things from the very beginning. She has won herself a spot on the front lines of the battle more than once and chipped her ear in one of the more recent battles and continued on like it had never happened.
Occupation: Soldier
Skills: Archery, swordsmanship
Equipment: A bow and an extra smaller quiver than her large main one

A nice warrior OC :) I guess by swordmanship it's one-handed and two-handed. Nice OC
ACEPPTED!!!

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Posted 08 October 2012 - 10:13 AM

How can he have closed so many oblivion gates? they only appeared during Oblivion and were all closed either by the main character or the final battle, either way it doesn't work.

Of course, that's my elder scrolls knowledge making me hate that idea, I must hate it if it goes against canon.


He didnt his family did
and this was 200 years earlyer his family was MUCH MUCH larger
and no he wasnt alive at the time
Also there were 100 gates in the game and his family did its job soo well that only those 100 were heard of

Hope that covers your questions

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Posted 08 October 2012 - 10:08 PM

I dun goofed!
My brain immediately forgot that this was about Skyrim the moment I started writing it.
Revised! Sorry!

Name: Point Seeker

Alias: Hi-Score (or Score, for convenience of time.)

Race: Unicorn

Gender: Male

Appearance: (will post below)

Cutie Mark: Crossed-out eye

Talent: Ability to see without sight (conjures semi-solid illusory magic to detect his surroundings)

Personality: Point can’t take anything seriously, even if it is explained thoroughly to him. Everything is always a game to him, so it is very common for him to start competitions, compete against ‘rivals,’ or keep score. Whenever presented with a ‘dire’ situation, he often finds ways to make it fun.

Bio: Point grew up in a regular family... and by regular, I don’t mean regular at all. Sure, he grew up with a normal lifestyle and didn’t do anything huge, but he still didn’t live that normally.
For starters, Point is blind. He was born blind and his parents had to teach him everything the hard way, including how to describe ‘colors’ and the looks of things. Much of this didn’t make sense to him at the time, but he learned to live with these verbal descriptions.

At a time in his life, Point learned how to perform illusion magic. He was a horrible failure at first, but quickly grew accustomed to magic within a few weeks and was disguising objects effectively. He once tried to make his house become invisible, but ended up straining himself so hard that he needed to spend six days with a local medicine man to recover.

During his lifetime, he grew more and more powerful in the ways of magic, but still came nowhere near as close as powerful as many of the magicians in his hometown. Instead of trying to out-perform them based off of overall strength, he came up with an idea. Being blind was very difficult to manage, what with always tripping over your own hooves, so he decided to infuse illusory magic into the very air surrounding him. His first attempt resulted in another medical visit, but his second attempt produced something worthwhile. The magic semi-solidified itself whenever it hit any solid object, which would cause Point to detect that object similarly to the way one could see an object, but without colors. He used this ability from that moment on in order to see the world around him, and improved it so he could see farther and farther. Also using this ability, he improved his abilities with ranged weapons and became quite proficient in their usage.

Point’s father, Score Seeker, was a famous prankster and owner of a small store known as ‘Pranks ‘n More,’ which had gag items from blunt arrows coated with foul-smelling liquid to powder that produced smoke on ignition. A lot of the time that Point spent with his father was taken learning new tricks and ways to have fun.
At several points in his life, Point was taught how to make any situation fun. The first time he was taught this was during a game of 'foul play.' For those of you who don't know, 'foul play' is a game invented by ponies around Point's hometown that uses blunted arrows to 'tag' ponies. If you get 'tagged,' you're out and have to wait until the game is over.
His entire team had been eliminated and it was down to four versus one, with Point being the ‘one.’ “Anytime, anyplace, a fun moment will always await!” was his Father’s old saying. He put this into action by dancing. He literally took to dancing in the middle of a serious game, and he confused the remaining four enemy squad members, giving him just long enough to shoot them all down before they reacted. He was the talk of his block for several hours thereafter, but the fame faded.

From that point forward, Point decided to always have fun in whatever he did. In doing so, he ground it into his system and eventually found himself incapable of not having fun.

To this day, he works as a travelling mercenary... whatever that means. At the time, he wasn’t sure what it meant, and he never really had any job experiences with it previously, but he found it fun so he took up the title and set out.

Occupation: Travelling Mercenary

Skills: Magic ‘sight’ (described in Bio), solidifying magic (mostly used for weaponry), heightened agility, Archery and Illusory magic.

Equipment: Vest, saddlebags, an old bow his Father bought for him, and a quiver (hooks to left side of his saddlebags for easy access).

Other: This character will be friendly.
His hind left leg has a very slight limp when walking.

(Can't seem to upload an image, so here's a link: http://smiley177.dev...t=10:1349793037)

Edited.

Edited by HyperRandomness, 09 October 2012 - 02:42 PM.


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Posted 09 October 2012 - 08:42 AM

Since you are in need of zebras since they are a possible enemy, have this.
Spoiler

The Nightshades can offer to train the main chars in stealth and hoof to hoof combat if they decide to join the Nightshades. The Nightshades are sworn enemies of the zebra empire, often capturing supplies and weapons from them.






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Posted 09 October 2012 - 12:24 PM

Time for me to submit an OC!

Name: Point Seeker

Alias: Hi-Score (or Score, for convenience of time.)

Race: Unicorn

Gender: Male

Appearance: (will post below)

Cutie Mark: Crosshairs (displayed below)

Talent: Blind marksmanship (will explain under skills)

Personality: Point can’t take anything seriously, even if it is explained thoroughly to him. Everything is always a game to him, so it is very common for him to start competitions, compete against ‘rivals,’ or keep score. Whenever presented with a ‘dire’ situation, he often finds ways to make it fun.

Bio: Point grew up in a regular family... and by regular, I don’t mean regular at all. Sure, he grew up with a normal lifestyle and didn’t do anything huge, but he still didn’t live that normally.
For starters, Point is blind. He was born blind and his parents had to teach him everything the hard way, including how to describe ‘colors’ and the looks of things. Much of this didn’t make sense to him at the time, but he learned to live with these verbal descriptions.

At a time in his life, Point learned how to perform mystical arts and practices. He was a horrible failure at first, but quickly grew accustomed to magic within a few weeks and was levitating objects effectively. He once tried to levitate his house, but ended up straining himself so hard that he needed to spend six days in a hospital to recover.

During his lifetime, he grew more and more powerful in the ways of magic, but still came nowhere near as close as powerful as many of the magicians in his hometown. Instead of trying to out-perform them based off of overall strength, he came up with an idea. Being blind was very difficult to manage, what with always tripping over your own hooves, so he decided to infuse magic into the very air surrounding him. His first attempt resulted in another hospital visit, but his second attempt produced something worthwhile. The magic solidified itself whenever it hit any solid object, which would cause Point to detect that object similarly to the way one could see an object, but without colors. He used this ability from that moment on in order to see the world around him, and improved it so he could see farther and farther. Also using this ability, he improved his abilities with ranged weapons and became quite proficient in their usage.

Point’s father, Score Seeker, was a famous prankster and owner of a small store known as ‘Pranks ‘n More.’ A lot of the time that Point spent with his father was taken learning new tricks and ways to have fun.
At several points in his life, Point was taught how to make any situation fun. The first time he was taught this was during a paintball game. His entire team had been eliminated and it was down to four versus one, with Point being the ‘one.’ “Anytime, anyplace, a fun moment will always await!” was his Father’s old saying. He put this into action by dancing. He literally took to dancing in the middle of a paintball game, and he confused the remaining four enemy squad members, giving him just long enough to shoot them all down before they reacted. He was the talk of his block for several hours thereafter, but the fame faded.

From that point forward, Point decided to always have fun in whatever he did. In doing so, he ground it into his system and eventually found himself incapable of not having fun.

To this day, he works as a travelling mercenary... whatever that means. At the time, he wasn’t sure what it meant, and he never really had any job experiences with it previously, but he found it fun so he took up the title and set out.

Occupation: Travelling Mercenary

Skills: Magic ‘sight’ (described in Bio), solidifying magic (mostly used for weaponry), heightened agility, and Blind marksmanship.

Equipment: Vest, saddlebags, glasses (without lenses), an old bow his Father bought for him, and a quiver.

Other: This character will be friendly.

(Can't seem to upload an image, so here's a link: http://smiley177.dev...t=10:1349733994)

I feel like I should edit this slightly... maybe.

Personality is ok...
Bio: The first part is ok.
-In the second part "perform mystical arts and practices" - what do you mean by this? I know of illusion, destruction, conjuration and alternation spells.
There are no hospitals in Skyrim. I think you mean shrines where you can get blessings.
- In the third part again the hospital. Can you please tell me what magic is he using from the 4 i mentioned above that allows him to "see". You could place that in Talent.
- In the fourth part. Paintaball... srsly. Is there even a mod for that? He kinda reminds me of Cicero in this part.
- In equipment there are and never been glasses in the game.

Yes this character needs to be edited. A lot... Srsly this is not even close to Skyrim. It kinda is for the fallout OC thread. The picture is not good. i never said i need a picture but it helps me a bit. But that picture is not meant for this story.

Sorry but this OC is DENIED!!!

Since you are in need of zebras since they are a possible enemy, have this.

Spoiler

The Nightshades can offer to train the main chars in stealth and hoof to hoof combat if they decide to join the Nightshades. The Nightshades are sworn enemies of the zebra empire, often capturing supplies and weapons from them.

Ok i don't want to say this OC is bad but if you want to make a general it needs to be WAY better than this. I planned a general in my story but if you want to make it yourself it needs more then just a short text. Needs more of... just everything. And i never asked for this but in this case i have to, i need a picture for this OC.

This OC is not approved but it's not denied it just NEEDS TO BE EDITED!!!
If you have everything, you can post again or you can cancel this request it's your choice :)

Edited by hxfthxft, 09 October 2012 - 03:58 PM.


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Posted 09 October 2012 - 02:33 PM

My goodness. The way my brain works baffles me sometimes. "What's this? You're making a pony for Skyrim? Here, let me give you the least-skyrim-related ideas I can muster up."

Nyeh.

Anyway, I've revised my character and I think it is now moderately presentable. In fact, it actually makes sense now, so I'd appreciate it if you give it another look!

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Posted 09 October 2012 - 02:41 PM

My goodness. The way my brain works baffles me sometimes. "What's this? You're making a pony for Skyrim? Here, let me give you the least-skyrim-related ideas I can muster up."

Nyeh.

Anyway, I've revised my character and I think it is now moderately presentable. In fact, it actually makes sense now, so I'd appreciate it if you give it another look!

Reviewed and now it's better
ACCEPTED!!!

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Posted 09 October 2012 - 02:44 PM

Reviewed and now it's better
ACCEPTED!!!

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Posted 10 October 2012 - 10:27 AM

Good news guys. My story got approved on FIMFiction :D
http://www.fimfictio...ls-V:-Equestria

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 12:35 AM

You would know that if you played the game greebster which you obviously havent


You can either never be as rude as you were here, or you can stop using our forum.

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 07:26 PM

Woot woot for hxf. FIMFiction is a big deal!
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This is how bucking happy I am for you right now!

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Posted 11 October 2012 - 07:39 PM

Thank you MidnightBloom ^_^

Edited by hxfthxft, 11 October 2012 - 07:39 PM.


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Posted 13 October 2012 - 02:15 AM

Good news guys. My story got approved on FIMFiction :D
http://www.fimfictio...ls-V:-Equestria

FUCKIN AMAZING Post more fimfic! NOW

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Posted 13 October 2012 - 08:34 AM

I haven't been looking at this for a while, but I got to say, AWESOME first chapter Posted Image

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Posted 13 October 2012 - 09:22 PM

Awesome is right, I hope for more!

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Posted 13 October 2012 - 09:27 PM

ARTHUR!!!! You builder now!!!

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Posted 14 October 2012 - 11:42 PM

WE NEED A NEW CHAPTER.

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Posted 15 October 2012 - 02:44 AM

I commented on it hxft on fimfiction :epicsmiley:

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Posted 15 October 2012 - 05:30 AM

There will be a new chapter don't worry. Did anyone except Golfman see the story on FIMFiction?

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Posted 15 October 2012 - 05:41 AM

I have yet to start frequent FIMFiction but I skimmed it on there.
So.....eeeyyuuuup

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Posted 27 October 2012 - 11:54 PM

Yes Oz builder now EPIC DERP MODE

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Posted 28 October 2012 - 08:59 PM

When are we getting a new chapter???

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Posted 30 October 2012 - 05:02 PM

Sorry my internet provider was a meanie and my internet was down for a while + my computer was broken

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Posted 04 November 2012 - 04:42 PM

So..... all better now and ready for more chapters?

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Posted 05 November 2012 - 11:37 PM

Can I be a pegasus? Please?

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Posted 18 January 2014 - 03:43 PM

Character name: Lavender Shower

Alias: Breton (meh...I don't know...)

Race: Unicorn
Gender: Female
Appearance: She has a tan coat, spiky dark blue mane and tail, and her eyes are weirdly different colors. Her left eye is a whitish blue, as if there were cataracts in it, and her right eye is a reddish orange, like a blazing inferno. She catches a lot of attention from a few stallions, much to her annoyance.
Cutie Mark: It is a purple orb.
Talent: She can conjure up almost any spells, and summons an Atronarch of any element.

Personality: She is a bit playful, not always the smart one but she is quite intelligent, responsible and kind.  
Bio: *ahemahemahem* Her parents were killed by bandits when she and her older brother were roughly fifteen, which makes her run away with her brother, Sky Climber. As five years went by, she learns highly advanced magic and masters them in Whiterun, helped by some old mages. Her brother, too, learns the ways of two-handed weapons. By the time on her 20th birthday, she and her brother went their separate ways. She mainly lives in Whiterun, where she is liked by many ponies and sometimes tasked by the king whom gives her important missions. She mainly uses blades instead of staffs, and uses her magic if necessary. She is known to be one of the heroes in Skyrim for battling dragons.
Skills: Destruction, Conjuration, Restoration, Illusion.
Equipment: As her being a battle mage, she is not a newbie in wielding weapons. She wields a Dragonbone Greatsword, the Ebony armor, and a Forsworn bow with Forsworn arrows.   

 



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Posted 22 January 2014 - 03:54 PM

Errrr

 

You're about a year late

 

Also there is no king in whiterun, there is like one real mage in whiterun, and only the dragonborn can truly kill dragons.

 

Hey Hx, you should continue this.




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