
Warp: s53
The real deal.
Again feel free to say anything you don't like or could be improved on.
Builders/nonbuilders any suggestions are helpful.
I will try to be on the server as much as possible asking for opinions.
Thanks in advance!
Posted 29 November 2013 - 09:49 AM

Warp: s53
The real deal.
Again feel free to say anything you don't like or could be improved on.
Builders/nonbuilders any suggestions are helpful.
I will try to be on the server as much as possible asking for opinions.
Thanks in advance!
Posted 29 November 2013 - 04:24 PM
Alright, I had a look at your house, here's a few things I think of it and some suggestions:
Exterior:
Materials:
- You've chosen good materials for your house, can't see any random stuff.
- You got patterns in your walls, by using more than one type of sand-based material (IMHO you can still improve the pattern you have, but it's great to see that you've taken the time to add them).
- Some of your walls are rather boring to look at, especially the long sand-based ones. Consider adding some wooden support beams in them, to improve the overall look at structural integrity of the house.
- You might want to rethink how you've used the trapdoors and buttons on the logs. IMHO, It looks a bit silly.
- The wall with the swing (East side), you've removed some of the logs forming the outline. I'd suggest you rework that part a bit, right now the house would be more prone to damage over time (The structural integrity is weakened).
Overall, the materials you've used goes together rather well. I'd suggest working a bit more on improving patterns a bit in your walls to get rid of some of the plainness you have, as well as improving the structural integrity.
Shape:
Usually I'd make a lot of comments of how to improve the shape of a house. On your house, I can't, because I can't see much that needs to be changed.
The only thing I can suggest is that on the bottom floor, you try to add something else to the shape so you avoid that L-shape you got going. A good rule of thumb is that if you can name the shape, you can improve it. Adding a small section somewhere can work in your favor, but if you feel the results will be worse with an addition, then by all means don't add it. Far too often added extensions looks like a "tumor", ugly and out of place.
Your overhangs looks nice, the way you transit from the first to second floor looks rather well done, and your roof is working rather well.
Now, speaking of the roof, here's a few things you can do with it:
- Your roof hangs two blocks out away from the walls, one is more than enough and might quite possibly will look better.
- On that long, plain section on your roof, it might be possible to add something to make it more interesting to look at.
Windows:
- The amount of windows you have seems to be alright, perhaps a bit low. It wouldn't hurt to add a couple more or so.
- The size and shape of your windows are excellent.
- Your windows are placed a bit too systematically. See if you can randomize the placement a bit, break up the patterns slightly
- In that overhang with the balcony, it feels like you added the windows just because you could, the one on the west side feels like it's a bit redundant.
Decoration:
- You have a good amount of nice colors on the outside!
- Your hedge only runs around a small part of your house, I like that. Your hedge surrounds only the parts it needs to, which looks good.
- You got a lot of various decorations, such as flowerbeds and furniture and leaf vines hanging from the roof.
- The use of the actual vine block is questionable, and a bit frowned upon. I'd suggest not using you absolutely need to. IMHO, the vine block subtracts more from a house than it adds to it.
- While it's great that you've added flowerbeds, know that you can use more types of vegetation than just flowers in them. We got many types of vegetation which goes rather well in there.
- *IMHO, your chimney is too large.
- The amount of leaf blocks you have on the roof is rather decent, perhaps a bit on the "too much" side.
- You've used a lot of leaves on the house, perhaps a bit too much? Maybe you can variate with some other forms of decorations?
* This is highly depending on personal preference. I myself prefer chimneys that are at most 1*2 in size, the optimal being 1*1.
Overall:
The exterior of your house looks rather well-made in my opinion. It gives a nice first-impression of your house, which I must admit is the reason I'm writing this review. There's still a number of things you can improve on, but so far you're on the right track. The amount of details you've placed on the outside is nice, however, adding more wouldn't hurt. For example, adding some form of pond can look nice (Note: Your plot is next to a river so a pond might not make much sense, but I mention it just as an example. There's many other ideas to explore).
Interior:
I must admit, after seeing the outside I was looking forward to see the inside. While not what I expected, it still looks rather nice.
Entrance:
This place has received some attention, which is always great to see. Though, there's some things which can be improved on still.
- The entire left wall is quite plain and empty, with only two tiny paintings to decorate it.
- The stairs up to the second floor is a bit awkward to navigate in. The one stair block in the corner is the main issue there.
- Possibility of adding more entrance-related furniture is still open
Overall, the decorations in there looks rather decent.
Kitchen / dining room:
- Your benches looks rather nice, but double-slabs looks a bit weird, IMHO (Hint: /i 43:8).
- Your stove looks very nice, creative design. Though, smoke seems to have few places to go other than out into the kitchen.
- *Your flooring in the kitchen doesn't feel like a floor.
- Overall, the furniture feels nice, but the chairs might need a tiny upgrade. Two of them looks rather odd.
- You can see the underside of the cake from below the "table". The cake is simply balancing on a pole.
- *Your sink is filled with water. A sink with water means usually one of two things: It's in use, or it's clogged. I can't see anyone using it. (Comment: Hoppers can make nice sinks, same with tripwire hooks.)
- There's no way to operate your fridge. It's also empty. Adding items to containers helps create the illusion someone lives in the house.
- *The potted flower (Leaf in cauldron) doesn't have any water to drink from. Perhaps adding water to it can look better?
- *Buttons as the handle for drawers on the benches? To me, that looks rather weird.
* Again, depending on personal preference.
Living room:
- Fireplace doesn't seem to be able to lead smoke out of the living room and out into the chimney.
- There's not a whole lot of different furniture in here, perhaps you can add some more types fit for a living room?
- It feels like you used the two paintings next to the window to cover something up.
- The stairs to the attic is very awkward to navigate in for the same reasons as the other staircase.
- The wall next to the staircase looks rather awkward.
Bedroom:
- The carpet under the door doesn't work as intended. The door killed the middle part of it, which looks nothing but silly, IMHO.
- The wall above the door and next to the bed looks rather empty. Perhaps you can add more there?
- The furniture in the bedroom looks very nice!
- Still possible to add more bedroom-related furniture.
Attic:
- It would be easy to fall down the staircase if you're very tired after visiting the bathroom. Adding some safety features would be recommended.
- Rather odd choice of color for the carpet. I'd suggest using colors that's a bit more similar to each other
- Generic workspace, looks rather alright. I like it.
Storage room:
- Not a cobweb-filled, dark room with only chests in it!
Bathroom:
- A very odd place in the house. Why, of all places, put such an important room in the attic?
- Overall, the bathroom looks decent.
- Still possible to add more bathroom-related furniture.
- The birch/spruce-combination on the wall looks weird, I'd suggest a rework on that.
Overall:
Overall you seem to have a good control over the furniture and placement of said furniture. You got an eye to details, but seeing more of that wouldn't hurt.
It's great seeing that you don't use the same material for everything, and you don't use too many different materials either.
Definitely on to something, but there's still room for improvement.
I'd highly suggest that you attempt to rework the stairs and the walls where the stairs are in the living room, as that's a rather awkward place to walk in. The way you have handled that also looks rather sloppy, truth be told.
I'd suggest looking around at Ponyville for more ideas for how to solve the various issues, as well as for getting more ideas for furniture and various details you can add.
While definitely not a bad house, there's still room for improvement here and there.
Hope this can help, and good luck with your test!
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