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#1 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 05:53 AM

I have been wanting to write this one for a while

Its going to be based after Kkats Fallout Equestria world
Now there are a lot of these Fallout Equestria Fanfictions floating around, and this one I have been thinking about before I began putting it into writing.

My only fear is rejection, but I always tell myself no writer was ever immediately liked by all "Trial and Error"

So this one would be my trial before I began moving from Fanfictions to novels or short stories.
Writing has always been a love of mine, and since I can't draw I can describe

NOW then on to my idea
I have yet to settle on a name but one that keeps coming up is
Fallout Equestria: The TimeLords Curse
It follows Martyr, a unicorn captured by a raider tribe up near New Trottingham. he joins up with them and begins his life as a raider.
Little by little he has flashbacks of his past with his father who had been killed in a building explosion saving settler ponies from certain death.

Turns out his father was a Timelord an ancient tribe of ponies with the curse of longevity and regeneration that originated back before the time of Equestria. Martyr also happens to have an hourglass cutiemark which is passed down through the Timelord gene.

The Timelord Cutiemark holds death, anyone getting close to a Timelord becomes surrounded by horrible unlucky occurrences almost always leading to death of the companion or them leaving due to stress or other reasons.

Martyr has a choice, reverse the curse of the timelords by traveling into the nuclear winter that became the old home of the three Waring tribes of old, or continue his existence alone and forgotten.

Why I wanted this to take place during Fallout Equestria is beyond me I just have a mental boner for Post-Apocalyptia.

So tell me what you think Bronies and Pegasisters, does it seem like a solid fanfic (As far as fanfics go)

~Thank you

#2 DJ P0k3m0n

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 06:09 AM

yea to me it sounds good i like post apocalyptia stuff and when u say timelord it reminds me of my fav show dr who so putting the two toghther sounds like a winner to me the story line sounds great too

#3 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 06:26 AM

Thats the basic idea, that there is Doctor Whooves who I believe was from a different dimension getting stuck in the pony world as the TimeLord SPECIES. The Timelord Family-tree is a version that is changed from the Timelord Species due to Wibbly-Wobbley-Timey-Wimy-Stuff and alternate dimension eggs o3o.
Here at Alchemists United we don't worry about time and space we just let it rip!

#4 DJ P0k3m0n

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 06:46 AM

lol yea and the name really got my attietion im not a big reader but i would love to read this dude

#5 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 07:06 AM

Thanks, first I gotta finish my final and then I should begin typing it.
I carry a note pad around to help when ideas come up so I'm not limited on time
Like right now, Procrastination is a helluva drug =.=

#6 DJ P0k3m0n

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 07:09 AM

lol masterpeices arent made in one day lol it takes time but i could never right stuff like that i can barly pass my ged with the essay lol

#7 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 07:24 AM

Writing have never been real hard for me, my problem is staying on topic. Its kinda like going off on your own tangent rant about Doritos brand chips and then realizing the essay is about modern american business politics. The you have to delete the last 4 pages and UGH work work work

#8 DJ P0k3m0n

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 07:29 AM

lol thats actually some of my problem at essays another is how to word it right and nice way of putting that lol made me laugh i needed that lol

#9 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 07:48 AM

No problem, anytime -_-

#10 DJ P0k3m0n

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 07:57 AM

lol yea man between my bro and his friend making fun of me cause i like mlp and me not able to go to my first comic-con that really made my day thanks lol

#11 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:06 AM

Well shit, I'm sorry! No Comic-con SUXS
HERE!!
Its dangerous to go alone
TAKE THIS!
Smile!

#12 DJ P0k3m0n

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:12 AM

lol pinkie pie always knows wat to sing to make somepony smile huh lol that was nice i liked that

#13 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:17 AM

My pleasure once again ^-^ Least I could do for a fellow Brony in need of a smile!

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:18 AM

i wish i could find ppl in mississippi like u and all other bronies lol

#15 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:21 AM

I'm sure there must be someone, just gotta look in all the right places. Like here on Brohoof, sadly I am on west coast of a'Merican soil.

#16 DJ P0k3m0n

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:23 AM

west coast like calaforna sorry for the spelling lol

#17 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:27 AM

C captain!

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:27 AM

lol wow heard its nice over there lol

#19 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:33 AM

Depends on what you think is nice for weather. I have been living here my whole life its easy to take it for granted.
So yeah I could say the weather here is awfully nice.
If it where up to me though I would live somewhere it snowed and rained constantly, I don't know Rain always makes for something of a change.
Course living in snow and rain for years I would rather have sunny days.

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:36 AM

it never snows here we get lucky to see snow ive seen snow only twice and it wasnt really alot

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:45 AM

D: well then, Southern Cali gets almost no snow cept for the mountain region. Other then that we got mostly good weather.
Awesome one last paper to do then I may finally sleep >3< Celestia only knows how much I love sleeping.

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:47 AM

lol yea im nocturnal lol im like a coon lol or a possem lol

#23 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:53 AM

Hahaha :3 Awesome, I enjoy sleep to much to stay up to late unless I am forced to. Like right now =w= damn paper not going to write it self, shame it can't do that.

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 08:55 AM

it would make life easier lol wat time is it there cause it 254 am here lol

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 09:00 AM

Its 1:00 here now
I'm almost done with the last one now Ugh finally almost done

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 09:02 AM

lol of the whole thing

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 09:05 AM

Yeap of the whole thing then I can sleep DX

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 09:08 AM

nice now u have an awsome sleep lol

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 09:10 AM

I will, and thanks

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Posted 19 January 2012 - 09:11 AM

lol ttyl man

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Posted 25 January 2012 - 08:24 PM

Dont fear if YOU like it its good

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Posted 25 January 2012 - 08:54 PM

ok this is SO off topic

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Posted 25 January 2012 - 10:44 PM

-takes the entrance to this topic and wondering where is the story now-

#34 EquestrianAlchemist

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Posted 26 January 2012 - 05:52 AM

Being worked on, I'm only one pony.

I currently HAVE the pilot chapter finished in writing, now its a matter of re-typing it and then editing the rough draft.

I'm putting my time into this and its going to be posted on FIMfiction.net

~I will let you ponies here know when its released, from there I will continue writing.

I will make it as entertaining as I possibly can, I'm no Kkat.
I will also post it as fast as I can, I wanna be able too have time and work on this while still keeping up with a demand if there is one

Thank you for your patience.

~Currently in the middle of finals, one more day and I shall be golden to work on it, I expect this posted and up by Friday night.

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Posted 26 January 2012 - 05:55 AM

school comes first dude take ur time

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Posted 27 January 2012 - 02:03 AM

GOOD NEWS EVERYPONY!!!

The pilot is done all I need to do is proof read and edit parts that need editing

Soon it will be up on FIMFiction.net and I will post something here as well leading to it.


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