Chapter one is gonna be finished soon
But still need to make some grammar checks
Any chance for a preview?
Posted 25 September 2012 - 01:23 AM
Chapter one is gonna be finished soon
But still need to make some grammar checks
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Thank you finnanLooking good so far!
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Edited by MidnightBloom, 30 September 2012 - 03:07 AM.
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Posted 30 September 2012 - 03:57 AM

Sorry images wont show up hereAnother idea right here! Think its my last one or second to last one..... xD
Name: Dark Shadows
Alias: Shad
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Cutie Mark:
Talent: He designs vehicles and weapons for the zebras and often tests them personally in the middle of a battle
Personality: Generally shy and timid Shad can be thrown into a rage if someone mentions the prospect of the zebras failing which makes him a great fighter
Bio: Nopony is certian of who Shad is or where he came from. He just showed up as a young colt on a zebra mare's doorstep and was raised to be a fighter.
Skills: Engineering and tinkering
Equipment: A full tool kit and at least one of the weapons he designed. He can hit hard with his hammer
Link for cutie mark the cutie mark is the bottom middle imageAnother idea right here! Think its my last one or second to last one..... xD
Name: Dark Shadows
Alias: Shad
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Cutie Mark:
Talent: He designs vehicles and weapons for the zebras and often tests them personally in the middle of a battle
Personality: Generally shy and timid Shad can be thrown into a rage if someone mentions the prospect of the zebras failing which makes him a great fighter
Bio: Nopony is certian of who Shad is or where he came from. He just showed up as a young colt on a zebra mare's doorstep and was raised to be a fighter.
Skills: Engineering and tinkering
Equipment: A full tool kit and at least one of the weapons he designed. He can hit hard with his hammer
Sorry images wont show up here
Appearance: http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Cutie mark: http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Edited by MidnightBloom, 30 September 2012 - 03:57 AM.
Posted 30 September 2012 - 04:11 AM
Posted 30 September 2012 - 06:22 AM
No princes in skyrim.Last Idea
Name: Shadow Raven
Alias: Prince Rave
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearancehttp://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Cutie Mark: Same as this guy's http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m
Talent: Striking fear into the hearts of anypony who gets in his way
Personality: Selfish, bratty
Bio: Shadow Raven also known as Prince Rave is a dark teenage colt who will stop at nothing to be an army commander like his father even if that means murdering the current one. Prince Rave has blood on his hooves from more than one pony who got in his way climbing up the rank ladder until he reaches his goals.
Skills: Amazing magical ability, harsh war instinct
Equipment: His black cape. A diamond sword.
Posted 30 September 2012 - 07:20 AM
If it isn't too late here is my OC
Name: Azule Storm
Alias: Zula
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Appearance: Pink with cyan hair
Cutie Mark: Two blue tornados
Special Talent: Amazing speed and rouge weather skills
Personality: Much like Rainbow Dash she will always be there for her friends but she sometimes jumps to conclusions and resorts immediatly to aggresivness and doesn't try to solve a problem peacefully.
Bio: Azule Storm was born to a family of rouge weather ponies who worked for the dark side and was expected to carry on in the family business of bringing bad weather to the good guys. Zula quickly realizes she is not evil and runs away from her home in hope to find somepony to take her in. When she meets her friends she is a spy because her family did not know she ran away until they find out her true nature then she races away taking some thunder cloud seeds with her.
Skills: Weather taming, archery, damage doing (derp derp), and always being there for her friends
Equipment: Bow, arrows, Metal staff (seemed like a good edition cuz metal is a conductor lol)
This is my idea if it isnt too late!
Also got plenty of other of bad pony ideas!
Two members of a pegasus family. Sounds interesting. One good the other one is a bad OC.Here is one of my bad pony ideas.
Name: Warring Dawn
Alias: Dawny
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Appearance:http://images.search...umb=pB5arjQmh/m (sorry for the excessive link!)
Cutie mark: Battleaxe
Talent: Being a badass filly
Personality: Pretty evil in war she is never seen without her axe EVER she is one of the family members of Azule Storm and has become sworn enemies with her sister and if they ever meet its pretty much a fight to the death.
BIO: She was raised in a rouge weather family who works for the bad guys (apparently zebras) and frikin loves her job she is seen jumping around on thunder clouds for the fun of it (derp derp) she was in the first battle you mentioned and developed a lust for blood over the years she spent hard at her job.
Occupation: Warrior
Skills: Being badass with her axe and stray thunderclouds and never trusting anypony but herself
Equipment: Axe sometimes a bow and arrows
Edited by hxfthxft, 30 September 2012 - 07:22 AM.
Posted 30 September 2012 - 04:16 PM
If you misread he is not a REAL prince he is just called the prince because of his bratty nature sorry if that was unclearTwo members of a pegasus family. Sounds interesting. One good the other one is a bad OC.
Both ACCEPTED!Spoiler
About the Last OC finnan is right. No princes in Skyrim! Sorry but this OC is REJECTED
Thank you for posting
Posted 30 September 2012 - 04:27 PM
But I do watch my brother play ALOT so I know enoughAnd I have a slightly vague understanding of Skyrim because the majority of my knowledge about it comes from sitting on a couch watching by brother play it until I fall asleep out of boredom from not doing anything so forgive me if I saw something with wheels while groggy from one of my naps
Posted 30 September 2012 - 06:31 PM
Ok I admit that I should have read the text a bit better but still the OC is a bit OP. Saying that he strikes fear in anypony who gets in his way? Well even i could make an OC that has a talent to kill everyone with just looking at him.And I have a slightly vague understanding of Skyrim because the majority of my knowledge about it comes from sitting on a couch watching by brother play it until I fall asleep out of boredom from not doing anything so forgive me if I saw something with wheels while groggy from one of my naps
But I do watch my brother play ALOT so I know enough
Posted 30 September 2012 - 07:21 PM
Ok i was thinking about it and i'll show you just the tiny part of the story. It's just the beginning. Don't be surprised if you find some grammar fails. The story hasn't been reviewed yet.
Spoiler
Edited by Thunder Strike, 30 September 2012 - 07:23 PM.
Posted 30 September 2012 - 08:01 PM
Thank you for the preview Playack. I hope you will like the first chapterLooking good so far hx!! I went ahead and fixed a couple of things that were nagging me in it. :3
Only a couple of small errors, I went ahead and changed word/grammar to red (They are fixed), and for words I removed I added a blue dash. Coming along very nicely, I think I found about 4 errors. One last thing, Try not to use fragment sentences as often, You have a couple of sentences that are just a few words. Try adding commas there more or less, just try not to overuse them.
EDIT: I also added green to a spot where a comma could have gone.
P.S. I cannot tell you how well this turned out for the first draft.
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Posted 04 October 2012 - 08:05 PM
Character name: FrostFire
Alias: Icecold
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Female
Talent: Can create a blizzard around her.
It's doesnt make much damage but it's so dense that you'll have to get really close to her to see her.
It's actually used for cover. For a short time she can make it so cold that it drains stamina but for a really short time.
Appearance:Spoiler
Personality: Not many know FrostFire personally. She lives in the far north on the Chilly Mountains. Most ponies think she's evil. Probably because she has took many lives of other ponies. The Chilly Mountain is a dangerous place to live and most ponies are not friendly there. She just tries to keep others away from her. Doesn't trust many ponies, that's why she seems so mean.
She is actually friendly if you approach her with the right attitude.
Bio:
She has mastered the frost magic. Knows the best way to use it and when. Knows what creatures resist and fear it. Lives with a small group of other ponies in a cave on the Chilly Mountains.
Her mother was an archmage and her father an adventurer.
Occupation: Mage
Skills: Destruction spell (frost), Enchanting, Alchemy
Equipment: Daedric dagger, her fathers sword
Armour: Her mother's archmage robes
(Tell me what you think of it, you guys will need to judge it now)
Posted 05 October 2012 - 12:54 AM
Edited by Ocean Ice, 05 October 2012 - 12:54 AM.
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Posted 05 October 2012 - 08:15 AM
OC is not bad. An assassin type of character. Nightshade is a flower used in alchemy to make potions like Damage Health, Damage Magicka Regen, Lingering Damage Stamina, Fortify Destruction and you just made a group of itCharacter name: Ocean Ice
Alias: Nightbane
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Male
Talent: He is extremely deadly in a swordfight with his scimitar
Appearance: profile picture
Personality: Ocean Ice is calm and collected. To some he appears cold and distant, but to others he is a good friend and voice of wisfom. He hides many secrets from those around him. The Nightshade assassins guild he is the head of maintains some level of secrecy. The identies of its members, including himself are unknown to the authorities. The guild maintains strict rules and guidelines to keep innocents safe from harm. The target is the only thing that should get hurt. The Nightshades are the shadows of the underworld, having recently spread to new cities.
Bio:
He has mastered the art of stealth. He knows hand to hand combat adeptly and is good with his scimitar and throwing knives. He lives in Ponyville and owns a general store, a front for the headquarters of the assassin's guild started by his father. He is the leader of the guild and the mention of his alias Nightbane and the Nightshade Guild strike fear into the hearts of the criminal underworld.
His mother was a shopkeeper and his father an assassin.
Occupation: Assassin
Skills: adept Sneaking, master hand to hand combat, and master swordsmanship
Equipment: Scimitar and some throwing knives
Armour: His father's assassin's robes
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Those would be OPYou should use Alicorns!!
Posted 06 October 2012 - 06:01 PM
You should use Alicorns!!
Posted 06 October 2012 - 06:03 PM
9GAG?!?!?!?
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Edited by Nova_StarHunter, 07 October 2012 - 12:14 PM.
Posted 07 October 2012 - 01:53 PM
Wow and wow only!!!!
also if your still looking for OCs..... *CoughcoughspoilerCough*Spoiler
if you need any more infomation/a longer bio/a better OC descp/OC picture just let me know.
oh and i was hopeing to get Nova in as a main char/companion to the main char
But i would be happy for him to go just about anywere
Edited by hxfthxft, 07 October 2012 - 01:56 PM.
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Posted 07 October 2012 - 09:55 PM
A nice warrior OCI see we are lacking on zebras so here
Name: Zip
Alias: N/A
Race: Zebra
Gender: Female
Appearance: http://imgur.com/a/rvQGR#0
Personality: Quite war hardened attitude. She rarely shows any sign of emotion and only even shows even anger unless her one of her fellow soldiers is stuck down. She feels it his her duty to avenge those who fall in battle.
Bio: She was born to be an expendable soldier. She grew up to be a less than expendable soldier. While training she hit the target before all the others with her bow and arrow. She was a natural with enchanments and religional things from the very beginning. She has won herself a spot on the front lines of the battle more than once and chipped her ear in one of the more recent battles and continued on like it had never happened.
Occupation: Soldier
Skills: Archery, swordsmanship
Equipment: A bow and an extra smaller quiver than her large main one
Posted 08 October 2012 - 10:13 AM
How can he have closed so many oblivion gates? they only appeared during Oblivion and were all closed either by the main character or the final battle, either way it doesn't work.
Of course, that's my elder scrolls knowledge making me hate that idea, I must hate it if it goes against canon.
Posted 08 October 2012 - 10:08 PM
Edited by HyperRandomness, 09 October 2012 - 02:42 PM.
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Posted 09 October 2012 - 12:24 PM
Personality is ok...Time for me to submit an OC!
Name: Point Seeker
Alias: Hi-Score (or Score, for convenience of time.)
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Male
Appearance: (will post below)
Cutie Mark: Crosshairs (displayed below)
Talent: Blind marksmanship (will explain under skills)
Personality: Point can’t take anything seriously, even if it is explained thoroughly to him. Everything is always a game to him, so it is very common for him to start competitions, compete against ‘rivals,’ or keep score. Whenever presented with a ‘dire’ situation, he often finds ways to make it fun.
Bio: Point grew up in a regular family... and by regular, I don’t mean regular at all. Sure, he grew up with a normal lifestyle and didn’t do anything huge, but he still didn’t live that normally.
For starters, Point is blind. He was born blind and his parents had to teach him everything the hard way, including how to describe ‘colors’ and the looks of things. Much of this didn’t make sense to him at the time, but he learned to live with these verbal descriptions.
At a time in his life, Point learned how to perform mystical arts and practices. He was a horrible failure at first, but quickly grew accustomed to magic within a few weeks and was levitating objects effectively. He once tried to levitate his house, but ended up straining himself so hard that he needed to spend six days in a hospital to recover.
During his lifetime, he grew more and more powerful in the ways of magic, but still came nowhere near as close as powerful as many of the magicians in his hometown. Instead of trying to out-perform them based off of overall strength, he came up with an idea. Being blind was very difficult to manage, what with always tripping over your own hooves, so he decided to infuse magic into the very air surrounding him. His first attempt resulted in another hospital visit, but his second attempt produced something worthwhile. The magic solidified itself whenever it hit any solid object, which would cause Point to detect that object similarly to the way one could see an object, but without colors. He used this ability from that moment on in order to see the world around him, and improved it so he could see farther and farther. Also using this ability, he improved his abilities with ranged weapons and became quite proficient in their usage.
Point’s father, Score Seeker, was a famous prankster and owner of a small store known as ‘Pranks ‘n More.’ A lot of the time that Point spent with his father was taken learning new tricks and ways to have fun.
At several points in his life, Point was taught how to make any situation fun. The first time he was taught this was during a paintball game. His entire team had been eliminated and it was down to four versus one, with Point being the ‘one.’ “Anytime, anyplace, a fun moment will always await!” was his Father’s old saying. He put this into action by dancing. He literally took to dancing in the middle of a paintball game, and he confused the remaining four enemy squad members, giving him just long enough to shoot them all down before they reacted. He was the talk of his block for several hours thereafter, but the fame faded.
From that point forward, Point decided to always have fun in whatever he did. In doing so, he ground it into his system and eventually found himself incapable of not having fun.
To this day, he works as a travelling mercenary... whatever that means. At the time, he wasn’t sure what it meant, and he never really had any job experiences with it previously, but he found it fun so he took up the title and set out.
Occupation: Travelling Mercenary
Skills: Magic ‘sight’ (described in Bio), solidifying magic (mostly used for weaponry), heightened agility, and Blind marksmanship.
Equipment: Vest, saddlebags, glasses (without lenses), an old bow his Father bought for him, and a quiver.
Other: This character will be friendly.
(Can't seem to upload an image, so here's a link: http://smiley177.dev...t=10:1349733994)
I feel like I should edit this slightly... maybe.
Ok i don't want to say this OC is bad but if you want to make a general it needs to be WAY better than this. I planned a general in my story but if you want to make it yourself it needs more then just a short text. Needs more of... just everything. And i never asked for this but in this case i have to, i need a picture for this OC.Since you are in need of zebras since they are a possible enemy, have this.
Spoiler
The Nightshades can offer to train the main chars in stealth and hoof to hoof combat if they decide to join the Nightshades. The Nightshades are sworn enemies of the zebra empire, often capturing supplies and weapons from them.
Edited by hxfthxft, 09 October 2012 - 03:58 PM.
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Posted 09 October 2012 - 02:41 PM
Reviewed and now it's betterMy goodness. The way my brain works baffles me sometimes. "What's this? You're making a pony for Skyrim? Here, let me give you the least-skyrim-related ideas I can muster up."
Nyeh.
Anyway, I've revised my character and I think it is now moderately presentable. In fact, it actually makes sense now, so I'd appreciate it if you give it another look!
Posted 09 October 2012 - 02:44 PM
Reviewed and now it's better
ACCEPTED!!!
Edited by HyperRandomness, 09 October 2012 - 02:44 PM.
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You would know that if you played the game greebster which you obviously havent
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Posted 13 October 2012 - 02:15 AM
FUCKIN AMAZING Post more fimfic! NOWGood news guys. My story got approved on FIMFiction
http://www.fimfictio...ls-V:-Equestria
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Posted 18 January 2014 - 03:43 PM
Character name: Lavender Shower
Alias: Breton (meh...I don't know...)
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Female
Appearance: She has a tan coat, spiky dark blue mane and tail, and her eyes are weirdly different colors. Her left eye is a whitish blue, as if there were cataracts in it, and her right eye is a reddish orange, like a blazing inferno. She catches a lot of attention from a few stallions, much to her annoyance.
Cutie Mark: It is a purple orb.
Talent: She can conjure up almost any spells, and summons an Atronarch of any element.
Personality: She is a bit playful, not always the smart one but she is quite intelligent, responsible and kind.
Bio: *ahemahemahem* Her parents were killed by bandits when she and her older brother were roughly fifteen, which makes her run away with her brother, Sky Climber. As five years went by, she learns highly advanced magic and masters them in Whiterun, helped by some old mages. Her brother, too, learns the ways of two-handed weapons. By the time on her 20th birthday, she and her brother went their separate ways. She mainly lives in Whiterun, where she is liked by many ponies and sometimes tasked by the king whom gives her important missions. She mainly uses blades instead of staffs, and uses her magic if necessary. She is known to be one of the heroes in Skyrim for battling dragons.
Skills: Destruction, Conjuration, Restoration, Illusion.
Equipment: As her being a battle mage, she is not a newbie in wielding weapons. She wields a Dragonbone Greatsword, the Ebony armor, and a Forsworn bow with Forsworn arrows.
Posted 22 January 2014 - 03:54 PM
Errrr
You're about a year late
Also there is no king in whiterun, there is like one real mage in whiterun, and only the dragonborn can truly kill dragons.
Hey Hx, you should continue this.
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