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#1 Hieros Godhead

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Posted 31 January 2013 - 01:49 AM

I really want builder now that I've gotten this far into building my sub house, so I'll take any chance to improve it. To that end, and & all builders available to critique my sub house, if you're willing would you pop on down to /w s51 and give it a look? It would be awesome, and anyone who wants to would be greatly appreciated!

 

Also, don't be nice. I know there are flaws, but I'm not sure what it is about them that I should fix. If there is something you find, shoved it in my face. Otherwise I mightn't fix it in time.



#2 dazhito23

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Posted 01 February 2013 - 02:27 AM

Huh.  Wasn't aware you became CMC, but let's get down to business.

 

Exteriors:

 

That fountain near the front of the house is a bit out of place.  I don't recall seeing Ponyville houses with fountains of that size near any sort of houses.  If you are trying to create a bird-fountain, then it should be smaller.

 

I feel that chimney is far too large.  Trim the size or get rid of it entirely -- many Ponyville houses lack chimneys in the first place.

 

It's probably just me, but your roof looks a bit off.  Because it's one gigantic roof, the two roof sections that form the long-side doesn't seem to mash well together.  You're using the right shape, though, so perhaps you can re-do one section of the roof.  I'm sorry, this is the best I can explain my problem with your roof without being too specific.

 

Interiors:

 

The dining room table could look a lot better if it wasn't the fence-and-pressure plate style -- that style is only good for smaller tables.  I probably need not remind you of this (considering you have actually critiqued other CMCs during your tenure as a whitemane), but /warp ikea has good examples of large tables.

 

I'm not very comfortable with the non-square rug on the second floor.  I've never seen one like that in my entire life, and there doesn't seem to be any point of it being such an irregular shape.  The stuff you used to make the rug is fine, but the shape is weird.

 

I have no idea what purpose your attic serves, other than housing an additional bedroom.  Unless you can give your attic more life, try and move the bedroom to the second floor and get rid of the attic entirely; attics are not mandatory in making a house.

 

Overall, it's not a bad house.  Just some smaller things that might make your house less impressive.



#3 Lazaruz95

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Posted 02 February 2013 - 07:53 PM

Alright, this is already badly overdue compared to when it was requested since real life got in the way, and me outright forgetting, for which I apologize.
Also, I am very much likely to turn nit-picky in this (since I will admit I badly wanna see you pass ^^),
so do take the things I say with a healthy ammount of salt in regards to the critique.
 
Exterior

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Interior
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General Advice/Critique

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Prediction

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For my remaining critique, I believe dazhito has already touched on it, and I do not want to repeat them for the sake of avoiding clutter.

 

 

 

I hope this has been of use, as I will admit there isn't much here that is flat out wrong.

Just things that shouldn't be done.

 

Good luck, and I sincerely wish you pass :)

 

(All of this, can, on request, be expanded upon in person, as to in its entirety show where problems are, withouth cluttering the thread with screenshots)


Edited by Lazaruz95, 02 February 2013 - 07:57 PM.



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