Title:           Re: Scarves
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First Edit:      Wednesday 20th of May 2015 12:53:08 AM CDT
Last Edit:       Wednesday 20th of May 2015 12:53:08 AM CDT

>scarves
You know, that was actually a comparatively hotly debated topic in the editing team. Deciding to pretty much go with colours that complemented their eyes was not originally the way it was (though it was all Tail's scarf that changed - Snap's was pretty much based on the socks PG gave her in a certain picture). So yeah, scarves.
 
>skyrim - Windhelm
Ehh, with the addendum that the scale would be way off, I suppose it's a decent comparison. Somewhere between that and Minas Tirith - larger, taller and more organized than the former, while being WAY smaller than the other. Also, walls designed around having further reaching artillery than can be easily brought to bear against it.
 
 
 
>Spitfire
Considering the Enclave's premier elite unit is still the Wonderbolts, I imagine the Enclave would attempt to link them to their pre-war compatriots (circumventing Rainbow Dash's unit entirely)... so I think they would have a lot of promotional material for the group from the Spitfire, Soarin, Fleetfoot and co era.
Also, she's a co-star in Snap's favourite movie (appologies there - a certain scene just had to be cut. Like 1k words for a passing reference, at best... the scene ain't gone, it'll pop up eventually, just not now), of course she knows who Spitfire is!
 
>Fade? A talon?
Now that, detective, is the right question.
 
>Not all food names
It isn't this particular case, but bear in mind the Rangers here are desperate enough to recruit from the area's populace, so the various lineages have become... relatively watered down, of late.
 
>Scribe
In the original, we never *actually* see Ranger-on-Enclave interaction. I think there's a lot of building room there, primarily around the mutual belief that they are both equal heirs to Old Equestria's technology - I think there has to be an element of respect there, as well as some shared knowledge of the others' capabilities (even just wartime documents would help immensely). At this point in the story, Red Eye is still a new enough factor that the Enclave has yet to truly consider him a threat - hell, that took them until the battle for Filly to really wrap their heads around.
 
>pegasus seductive superiority
It's a sort of dual standard, naturally - and you got the terminology exactly right, they are indeed considered exotic. I imagine Calamity got a lot of the same - and was seen as "the pegasus" a lot more than as himself, even among the (probably interested) mares he lived around, which is exactly why he ended up with Velvet - aside from the smokin' bod, she would have none of the preconditioned hatred for pegasi, and had a chance to see him for his own merits rather than for his exotic nature. Snap and Tail are simply passing through, and don't exactly have any compunctions against making use of some of the upsides of their situation when they're available.
 
>Snap's charisma
You know, I might have erred there, honestly. I had given her, I think, a four or five... but she kind of makes use of that a lot more than the stat warrants.
 
>Snap barter vs. Alloy barter
In this case, Snap also has enough situational knowledge to lean on - she had to rely on Bernard almost entirely to get their barding sorted out. I like that comparison, though. Very different styles, indeed.
 
>spag
Might have been a bit too much spaghet, there. Ech, it's written.
 
>/doing/
Um... yeah. Not gonna lie, I think that's going on the list of things I need to ctrl+f before posting any given chapter. I use that when editing from my phone, and I guess that one slipped through.
 
>Snoozing in the range hut
The range in question would be able to handle grenades off to one side, so there's a safe building (and a set of concrete barriers off to that side - though they don't make an appearance) that she was in. But oh man, once you've been around guns enough you can sleep through anything. My first range exercise ever (on basic), a couple guys had to do a whole bunch of reshoots (turns out both of their sights were completely fucked, but that's neither here nor there), and I received the order I think I will always remember: "Troops, be lizards." Warm day out, actually dry for once, couple guys putting rounds downrange fifty-ish meters downrange from us... I slept great.
 
>Snap Crafter bonding
Was also a good spot to remind the reader about Snap's capacity to actually teach things - it isn't a concept that can come up very often, I think it was a fun scene. Not super relevant to the chapter, but important for Crafter's own character development.
 
>bar description
Thanks! That's good to hear. It occurs to me that I kind of have a lot of fun with bars... their use, their design, the scenes within. I take a lot of pride there, though I don't quite know where it comes from... I just have fun with it. The differences (and simmilarities) of the Blaze versus the Breach... yeah, I had fun.
 
>preening
You know, you can sort of blame Tofu's offer of a vector for my birthday. It definitely helped solidify the scene's place in the chapter - it was also the nucleus for my being able to control the flow, and more importantly, the ending of Crafter's morning-after conversation with them.
 
>lewd
(do I hear an official chapter 8.5? More likely than you think. Among other things I plan to write/finalize, and upload as canon sidestories - "Beginnings" included)
 
>Tailwind's furs
For those colours, I've basically tried to match the colours in various art pictures. The one with her and the swooshey mane was the basis for her furs here, while Snap's portraits and the cover art were the basis for hers, respectively. Where I don't have a specific reason for doing things, there is some room to create a little artistic synergy with past artwork. Not that that means I'm gonna be dragged around by random fanart actually *trying* to do as such... but you get the idea. Artists also tend, when left to their own devices, to find colours that complement existing colour schemes quite well (see: Snap's scarf and its relation to PG's socks drawing).
 
>weapons
She takes what she can find ammo for (she used up the last of her original loadout against those raiders oh-so-long ago. Since then, she's been making do), though she has a definite preference for energy weapons. Tailwind is simply quite good with them, Snap takes an actual, tangible glee in possessing such weapons. If it were up to her and the rangers had one to sell, she'd have bought a magical energy shotgun in a heartbeat. Or two of them. They didn't, incidentally. Nor would they have sold them if they had.
 
 
>wrap up to the chapter, and first "book"
Oh, how sweet it is. There are a lot of things that were hinging on completing this chapter, and a whole set of other wheels are gonna start turning not too long from now. Blog-type things, and potential "deleted scenes."
 
>Someone in the chapter’s comment section made a good point: this story - so far, at least - has used personal character motivations to keep the plot moving, and that is a welcome change from the “I have to save the world” theme from other fics. However, her quest to figure out what happened to her father could easily lead to something bigger.
 
I ain't sayin' nothin. I like your outlook, though.