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theplatinumcolt
#262615
1 year ago
mkay, i know this is damn horrible. im just using this as a rough draft for metalhooves so he can help me with my writing.

sorry if its a waste of posting space everyone. if you like it, say so. if not... i still tolerate you :D
Anonymous
#262680
1 year ago
I actually liked it. A short, sweet story. Need to iron out some of the grammar mistakes, but a pretty solid one nonetheless in my opinion
theplatinumcolt
#262832
1 year ago
thanks anonymous :D
like i said, this is the draft so metalhooves can help me pave thru my mistakes, cause im gonna work on a totally different fan fiction, that is so utterly inspiring, it makes me smile just thinking about it :D
MetalHooves
#263169
1 year ago
Lesson three. Proofreading. Before you post something, proofread the FUCK out of it. Any minor errors like a lack of a capital letter at the beginning of a sentence, improper paragraphing, too few/many commas or anything like that can add up to a story that feels rushed, disjointed, or downright aesthetically unpleasant. It should be like a shirt. You can't be complacent with it being the right size and not looking like shit; if it doesn't have all the buttons or has too many loose threads, it's not gonna be something you wanna show off.

You've come a long way in very little time, grasshopper. I'm proud of you. I do believe your next story will be the full extent of your current writing talent. That's not to say you should quit; far from it. You keep writing until you outshine the best. It'll come with practice. Hell, look how far I've come; I went from gunk like "Mayoral Duties" [my shortest and least intricate fic by far] to "A Dark Sky" [my Dickensian magnum opus]
theplatinumcolt
#264110
1 year ago
okay, thanks sensei :D