| MetalHooves #168237 1 year ago |
Same comments I made on the first apply here.
The next chapter features a fight scene! well, ish! |
| DaisyHead #168315 1 year ago |
^metallica reference. oh you |
| MetalHooves #168364 1 year ago |
^ Couldn't help myself. XD |
| Beard #169614 1 year ago |
Interesting. Are you dropping the "Cult of Nightmare Moon" angle? |
| MetalHooves #169632 1 year ago |
^There's not enough info to discern that in the first part, is there? ;) |
| your_waifu #186291 1 year ago |
okie dokie lokie i read this part
pretty much what i said in the last one. you could make these back stories more effective by staggering them throughout the story. and rely on the actions and words of the characters, and the actions and words of the characters reacting to and talking about them to characterize them. i think i might be repeating myself at this point. i can't remember. i mean, take this as an example. how are charger and blitz going to deal with rainbow dash? the way they handle the situation will tell the reader stuff about them. pretty much it. i'm off to bed. gotta work and all that inane garbage. oh. i'm totally adding detrot and clopton to my personal officially unofficial fanon map of equestria (and beyond). there can never be enough pony puns. never. |
| MetalHooves #190840 1 year ago |
^ Oh yes. I'm trying to think of more for future settings. |
| your_waifu #191021 1 year ago |
here borrow some of mine
-Maretreal -Richmount -Clopenhagen -Mexicolt City it's a fun game to play with your friends at parties, while on the road, or spending a night in jail |
| Lockstep #191029 1 year ago |
I'm using Whinnyapolis in one of my fanfics, in passing. |
| Lockstep #191039 1 year ago |
^Oh yeah, and I was going to use Detrot but I Googled it and UD says something about gang violence. |
| MetalHooves #196593 1 year ago |
Detrot and Clopton are notoriously violent cities.
Waifu, I'm totally stealing Mexicolt city. I may use Roan Island or Mareyland in the future, but I doubt it. I've always been more fond of Califoalnia myself. :P |
| your_waifu #196714 1 year ago |
i decided not to use state/province names as cities (at least for equestria). i'm thinking of calling los angeles Applewood. or maybe Cherrywood. some kind of fruitwood. idk |
| MetalHooves #204253 1 year ago |
Haywood. :P |
| your_waifu #204307 1 year ago |
that was actually my first idea! but it wouldn't make sense. "Holly" is a kind of plant, and "Hollywood" is wood from a holly. applewood would be wood from an apple tree
or maybe i'm just thinking about this too much |
| MetalHooves #213540 1 year ago |
^ You are. But judging by what I've seen from you so far, it won't be a problem. |
| Anonymous #213556 1 year ago |
Halterwood! |
| Anonymous #213558 1 year ago |
Lol, "blueball blitz" |