
| AdrianBrony #463430 10 months ago |
also, yes I realize featherstone is a real name. I have a bit of a story about why I like that name but that isn't a discussion for here and now. |
| Littlecabbit #463433 10 months ago |
I wouldn't see why not, but then again I never really dissliked any OC that wasn't a mary-sue |
| AdrianBrony #463446 10 months ago |
really this is just sop I can get an idea where the parameters for "too far" seems to be in the opinions of most people. |
| RepentantAnon #463463 10 months ago |
experiment! if the commenters arent calling out for your blood it must mean you're doing something right :D |
| AdrianBrony #463466 10 months ago |
I really was trying to start a discussion not really for application purposes. just to satisfy my curiosity. |
| Flutterguy #463471 10 months ago |
I like when the actions of the character are what makes the story enjoyable, not the character itself.
The OC is fine, just nake him cooler... About %12 cooler. Do not over do it Actually i do not understan all of the OC bashing in this fandom (Seriously, i do not think we will end as the sonic fandom, like, EVER), maybe that is the reason i do not make my own (that, and i am lazy) Overall, I do not see anything wrong with him |
| MaroonBunyip #463474 10 months ago |
Sounds and looks good to me. |
| Littlecabbit #463479 10 months ago |
Yes, as long as the OC can remain a fun character to read about without actually outshinning the Mane six, then I don't see anything wrong with it. |
| Flutterguy #463481 10 months ago |
My fucking keys derped my comment |
| Lockstep #463482 10 months ago |
This OC doesn't cross any lines--in fact, it's a bit dull.
When it comes to OC backstory, you may want to try sticking to their cutie mark stories, just like the mane cast has. Otherwise, we learn about them from their jobs and interactions with others in context. Show, don't tell: an OC that isn't in an actual story/comic doesn't need to exist. |
| AdrianBrony #463485 10 months ago |
#463471
yeah the fic itself is more about what is done and how they react than "look at my character" he was intentionally on the duller side ebcause he has a more laid back and outgoing colleague. that and the dullness is part of the comedy of the fic. I should probably link the fic for better context on the character. |
| AdrianBrony #463488 10 months ago |
#463482
he WAS in a fic. he was made for a fic and his backstory really doesn't come into play other than the fact that he was in an academy at one point. he is only presented this way for the sake of brevity. |
| your_waifu #463494 10 months ago |
god i'm tired of this
the line is drawn at the purpose. if the character exists to tell a story then it's a character. a tool. let me repeat that. a tool there is nothing wrong with liking your characters. but i've done horrible things to characters i've lovingly fathered in my head and on paper for years simply because that's what the story demands. this is the difference between a character and a sue. a sue is the author. its only purpose is to fulfill the authors dreams. fuck i'm just ranting. this character is perfectly fine adrian. hell, from your description it probably could have been spiced up a little. |
| Anonymous #463496 10 months ago |
Get this character to become popular in a fan-fiction, then everyone will hate it. |
| your_waifu #463498 10 months ago |
oh i got permaninja'd. w/e. |
| AdrianBrony #463503 10 months ago |
#463494
he was just that, a tool for my fic. I really should have mentioned he was actually used for a fic and not jsut to exist. |
| Lockstep #463533 10 months ago |
@AdrianBrony: I thought about putting a disclaimer on my post saying it was just a general statement, but decided not to. Yes, I read that your character was in a fic, so it's perfectly OK.
All I'm saying is "backstory" should only go as far as a cutie mark story. Other than that, a good OC is developed in-story, just like the canon ponies. Bad OCs, like your_waifu said, exist for the sake of the creator's self-insert fantasies. |
| your_waifu #463553 10 months ago |
you know, the truth is the greater majority of fan created characters are going to be sues because that's what the author WANTS them to be. it's less often you see someone who just wants to write a fun story.
the purpose of a fanfic with origonal characters should be within the following: expand upon the world, tell a story within the unique qualities of the world, portray the world in a unique way (subvert the worlds troopes, alter the scale of idealism and cynicism, alternate universe) damn sues give stories that just want to entertain a bad rep. |
| Flutterguy #463681 10 months ago |
Just some tips to avoid a making a mary sue:
DO NOT make your character have too much in common with you (Avoid politics and some ethics entirely if you can) For example, my favorite personal fictional character (Has nothing to do with MLP and never wrote the history, so he is just inside my head) has much in common with me, mostly in how we treat other people but if he were to know me personally he just would kill me because of my beliefs and ideas, i also would love having his "powers" IRL but the shit i make it put with and the drawbacks thay carry make me reconsider it BADLY ------ To make sure that your character is not an idealised version of yourself, you have to: -Make the story -Now replace the character with yourself (adaptating everything so it makes sense to you. Ex: if you are an straight man and your character is a straight woman involved in some kind of romance, you could change the sexes) -Does your character makes the same stuff with their abilities or when it interacts with other characters as you? If yes DO something about it ------- Mortality test: -If the planet that your character lives in is destroyed, could the explosion kill it? -If a meteor fall on him he dies? -If a Satellital laser hits him he dies? -Continue until "Can be beaten to death by a normal individual?" -If at any point (the higher ones especially) you answer "No", then ask yourself. How could you go around this (Ex: "A supernova can not kill my character but the chemical compound that their enemies can access freely is extremelly deadly to him." Is a borderline case but it can be good if done well) --------- Powers : What can your character do? (Regardless of the answer) Awesome... But what are the drawbacks? (Ex: My character can reality warp like Q but he needs weeks to recharge his powers and cause him severe pain, he also is pretty fragile or at least is as mortal as you and me. My character can regenerate faster than Wolverine but he consumes calories like CRAZY when he does so he could be cuted until runs out of matter to recompose himself) -DO NOT FORGET to make these disadvanteges to actually BE A PROBLEM for your character ---- That is all i got for now, i am by no means an expert in writing and sorry about the possible ENGRISH |
| Flutterguy #463688 10 months ago |
*cutted |