
| Edef #430196 10 months ago |
White text on black background = no |
| TheXIIILightning #430198 10 months ago |
TL:DR
... At least for now XD |
| Anonymous #430199 10 months ago |
So yeah. This. Kinda embarrassed I wrote this. Wanted to try doing something different, and I've never written a romance scene before (read damn few, too, for that matter. They're not common in my preferred genre) so I kind of wanted to try, and... I ended up with this. I was trying a couple more experiments at the same time, like seeing if I could manage to not mention one character's name in a two-character scene and exploring the concept of xenophilia from multiple perspectives, and a couple of other things, which may have been a bit much. That's not a self-insert character, by the way; I don't look like that, and I rolled on a random appearance chart. Not that I really expect you folks to believe that, but there it is. |
| Lance #430206 10 months ago |
Oh my god those fucking tags |
| Detective_Chmilewsky #430242 10 months ago |
I enjoyed it. |
| lobo1192 #430316 10 months ago |
Actually... i find this to be pretty sweet. I approve |
| Anonymous #430321 10 months ago |
Enjoyable if hammy. You have a good grasp of emotion but are lacking in technical description of building the physical scene and interaction. The film adage applies "don't tell, show". It's a good exercise to break from omniscient perspective from time to time. |
| The_Walhi_Llama #430338 10 months ago |
Not bad. Good job |
| Lockstep #430345 10 months ago |
The writing's of better quality than most I've seen. I skipped over the make-out stuff, but the rest was well done.
Advice: Read the dialogue out loud (or at least in your mind) to make sure it sounds natural, as if a person would actually speak that way. Be especially careful with how Dash would speak. Be concise and make the presentation readable. Break up the paragraphs so they aren't so intimidating. Good work! |
| Anonymous #430372 10 months ago |
TL;DR
Tonight I'm gonna have myself a real good time I feel alive and the world it's turning inside out Yeah! I'm floating around in ecstasy So don't stop me now don't stop me 'Cause I'm having a good time having a good time I'm a shooting star leaping through the skies Like a tiger defying the laws of gravity I'm a racing car passing by like Lady Godiva I'm gonna go go go There's no stopping me I'm burning through the skies Yeah! Two hundred degrees That's why they call me Mister Fahrenheit I'm trav'ling at the speed of light I wanna make a supersonic man of you |
| Anonymous #430459 10 months ago |
I glance back at this, expecting to see a flamefest in the comments.
I am instead shocked to find actual germane, constructive criticism. More than any of the stuff I've posted on FFN has acquired. Color me shocked. Not enough for me to actually claim credit for this abomination, but pleasantly surprised nonetheless. |
| Lance #430489 10 months ago |
After I finally got around to reading it...
I want to see where this goes. where does it go? I like closure and I like this. +1 for you dear Anon |
| Anonymous #430775 10 months ago |
Doesn't really go anywhere, sorry, Lance. I wrote it just as an exercise, messing with a kind of scene I'd never done before. FYI, I was doing stuff like inverting gender roles in Equus sapiens courtship, which is why Dash is coming off like a guy that's been shot down so often he doesn't really try anymore, plus taking a stab at why most fanart of humanized Dash is flat-chested. I'm actually really pleased by the reception it's gotten; I'd figured inter-species shipping would get me flamed to a crisp.
Also; gorram, I nearly forgot to log out before I posted this! |
| Lance #430823 10 months ago |
aw well that's a bit depressing, but I can see your imagery well. As the forever skeptic I was unsure going into this, but everything went better than expected.
It's good and you should feel good |
| Doctor_Whooves #430879 10 months ago |
Seems legit. |
| Anonymous #431321 10 months ago |
No lei un Carajo! |
| Anonymous #431912 10 months ago |
T'was cute! |
| Detective_Chmilewsky #431973 10 months ago |
Will there be a follow up? I liked the idea of interspecies interaction ((doesn't have to be intimate interaction)) between human and pony. |
| Anonymous #432028 10 months ago |
This was really good. |
| Wafflecannon #432053 10 months ago |
It was pretty cute.
There's nothing else that I can really say in terms of criticism that hasn't already been said. White on black text, paragraphs, etc. I kind of like the idea of a human accidentally bumbling into pony social faux pas. It helps us get a feel for the society. |
| Lance #432088 10 months ago |
My god Anon, I think you must have submitted this in between trolls clocking in. Everyone has pretty much something nice to say.
HOW IS THIS ON THE INTERNET? SOMETHING LIKE THIS THAT USUALLY GETS SO MUCH HATE UNSCATHED? I THINK YOU BROKE THE INTERNET MAN. I THINK YOU BROKE THE WHOLE THING. |
| Doctor_Whooves #432195 10 months ago |
^ Well, there seemed to be some trolls in the tags. And a couple people expressed their opinions in dickish ways.
But on the whole, yeah, it seems to be less of a troll-fest than I'd have ever expected a fic about interspecies romance (even one that limits itself to such a tame activity as kissing) to be. But I did enjoy this. It was cute... and hell, I think I'd go for it if I were stuck in that world. I don't really care if something's human or not, as long as it's intelligent and cute in some way or other (doesn't need to be a humanoid way). |
| Dribbles #432200 10 months ago |
I like the pony taboos mentioned here. You clearly thought deeply about this. It's also a sweet story.
I second Lance's request for a continuation. |
| Anonymous #432279 10 months ago |
*pomf* |
| gorutsuki #432412 10 months ago |
it was good, I found it sweet and enjoyable |
| Lance #432884 10 months ago |
Doctor, I actually found this before it had comments and I'm thinking this Anon added those tags themself. |
| Anonymous #433227 10 months ago |
Wow. Heh. Thought the discussion was done; guess I was wrong! And thanks, y'all, I'm pleased that this effort has been so well-received! I'm really, honestly shocked that this was actually liked; coming from someone who'd never even thought about writing anything romantic, nor read anything of the sort (the closest I normally read to a "love scene" is chainswords making tender(izing) love to heretic torsos!) (Oh god that sounded way too Freudian I should delete it but at the same time its kinda funny) I'd expected the result to be more like a blind quadriplegic trying to paint a landscape! Addressing everyone who's posted since my last:
@Lance: Thanks, glad I could surprise you! @Detective_Chmilewsky: I hadn't really planned any kind of followup, but after the reception I got from this, I'll certainly post it if it gets written! (Anonymously, of course. Still a little embarrassed about even writing this) @Lance: It seems the internet is indeed broken, at least for now! :-P @Doctor_Whooves: The tag trolling was all me. Heh heh. I'd expected a huge flamefest reaction, and was all set to laugh at it. oh_the_huge_manatee, etc. :-D Turned out to be unnecessary, but I still find the tags funny. I'm odd like that. I'm glad you enjoyed it! @Dribbles: Par for the course when writing speculative fiction, IMO. When presenting a nonhuman species, I think it's a good idea to carefully consider both physiology and psychology, and the potential interactions thereof. In this case, the nonhumans in question can be very humanlike... but at the same time, very alien, both physically and mentally. Byproduct of a couple of other stories I was writing in the setting. @Anonymous: Pomf? @gorutsuki: Glad you liked it! @Lance: Got it in one. Thanks everybody! :-) |
| Lance #433389 10 months ago |
No prob. Props where props is due
oh, and *pomf* is the defacto sound effect for unfurling wings, so basically: wingboner. ![]() |
| Anonymous #433520 10 months ago |
Ah! Okay, I have been enlightened. Thanks.
*insert GI Joe "And Knowing Is Half The Battle piechart here* |
| AdamNovagen #433765 10 months ago |
Hm. Quite well done that, actually. The cross-species concept is still a bit weird for me, but presented in this light it's much less off-putting. The idea of Dash being extraordinarily strong was a bit odd to me, though; I mean, I would've expected that of APPLEJACK, but not Rainbow Dash. She's built for extreme speed, not so much power. To each his own, though, and it worked well enough in the context of the story. |
| Anonymous #433991 10 months ago |
Dash seems competitive with A.J. both in strength and endurance, beating Applejack outright and without notable effort when they arm-wrestled in Fall Weather Friends. A.J.'s definitely got stronger back legs, but the fact that Rainbow's able to keep up with an Earth Pony noted for strength and endurance seems to put her way outside the norm for a pegasus.
That's my read, at least. |
| Anonymous #434009 10 months ago |
^This also isn't counting the end of Sonic Rainboom, where Dash pulls a bare-minimum fifty-nine hundred gee turn while carrying three other ponies. That's a huge outlier, though. |
| Anonymous #434015 10 months ago |
^four, sorry, forgot to count the nameless third Wonderbolt. And those G-forces go way up if you derive speed by measuring her Mach cone. |
| Anonymous #434047 10 months ago |
This was great. Comments are odd. Not one person questioning another person's sexual preferences. I would like to add toe MOAR pile. More please. Go where you want to go with it. It was really cute. |
| Karazor #434055 10 months ago |
^Just for fun, I went off and ran the equations again, based on Dash's mach cone just before the Rainboom. For interested parties, she's travelling about Mach 5.2, which means she's pulling about 161,000 G's. Assuming the four ponies she was carrying weigh 100 pounds each, she was exerting over eight thousand tons of force.
No wonder four of 'em can pull trains without notable effort. |
| Anonymous #434072 10 months ago |
Holy crap, dude, didn't realize it was quite that high. |
| Karazor #434096 10 months ago |
Oh, derp, I come in here planning to make a comment, and wind up doing physics equations. *facepalm* Such a nerd...
Anywho, it wasn't bad. Not quite my thing, but pretty well-written nonetheless. |
| Lance #434147 10 months ago |
@Karazor Don't worry, it happens to the best of us nerds.
There have been times someone puts up the cover to a Playboy and we begin to discuss the variety of clouds and whether the ones on the right are cumulonimbus or just cumulus that lead into nimbostratus. We do that. E'ryday we nerdyin' |
| Anonymous #434238 10 months ago |
@Karazor Um, I... hadn't really meant to imply that. I figure that was just a temporary magic boost or somesuch. Kind of off-topic, but interesting nonetheless. Thanks! |
| Anonymous #436411 10 months ago |
Hm... many anonymous posts. Uploader here, I was #238 and #520, too.
@AdamNovagen Sorry, missed your post with the superman posts following it, ha! The reason I was emphasizing how strong Dash was has to do with the way I was envisioning the Equestrian magic system. Hold on, 'cause this is long-winded. Seems like each subtype has a particular way of employing magic. Unicorns are the most overt, using actual spells and whatnot. Pegasi probably use it to lighten themselves for flight, as well as things like weather manipulation, cloud walking, etc. Earth ponies don't have obvious magic effects like those, but rather than just making them untermenschen, I figure they have their own inherent magic that boosts their strength and stamina. (hence the train ponies) Rainbow seems more or less even with Applejack in Fall Weather Friends... but they were mostly competing in strength and endurance tests. Applejack's inherent magic was giving her a boost, but Rainbow would have been running on pure muscle, since her own inherent magic doesn't do a thing for her in those areas. TL;DR: Way I see it, Dash is crazy-strong for a pegasus, about as strong as A.J., but without a magic boost to help her out. Glad you liked it, even if I didn't quite tie my explanation into the story well enough. |
| AdamNovagen #437661 10 months ago |
@Anon 611 (not using ^ because ninjas, ninjas everywhere) Ah, now that clears up a lot and makes a good degree of sense, actually. Following your train of thought, it's perfectly logical that yes, pegasi should naturally be built with less PHYSICAL toughness for the plain and simple reason that they're biologically constructed for flight. Makes a lot of sense.
Speaking of which, I have a theory you may find interesting, regarding an actual rationalization for the wing-boner. Now, however we look at it, a pegasus just doesn't have anywhere NEAR a good enough wing-to-body-size ratio to enable flight; to allow them to fly, they'd need a lot more strength, for one thing, but adding the necessary muscle mass to the wing would render it aerodynamically useless. However, if the wing boner is taken as "scientific fact," then how about this: it actually evolved as the very MEANS by which they're able to fly. Think about it: a circulatory phenomenon like a male erection could well give the wings the extra stiffness and strength required to allow them to support the pegasus' body in flight. We also "know" that the wing-boner is stimulated from the area where the wing actually connects to the back, general in the underwing and "middle shoulder" spots; these areas would shift with every flap of a pegasus' wings, causing the required stimulation and inducing the wing-boner to allow flight! Such is my theory, at any rate. Any more "grounded" rationale for a pegasus' simply leads us to the conclusion that it is an eagle... Piloting a blimp. |
| Anonymous #438946 10 months ago |
Uploader here.
@AdamNovagen: Warning, incoming long-ass reply! It's an interesting concept, though I can see a couple of problems with it. Unless unless I misunderstand you, it sounds like a biomechanical high-pressure pneumatic system. That's kind of hard to envision for a biological creature, unless they're trending way toward the "Tyranid" side of the spectrum! You'd need thick-walled pistons to contain the pressure, high-speed biological pumps to build it up, plus sets of heavy-duty valves with an extremely rapid cycle rate to enable the wings to flap fast enough to hold up the body. Using regular blood vessels with backflow prevention valves would be likely to result in sharply limited wing mobility. Please correct me if I've misunderstood you! I had noticed the totally inadequate wing size ratio, but I since it's a magic-saturated universe I was going the "a wizard did it" route and postulating that pegasi possess an inherent ability to reduce their effective mass to enable their wings to lift them, and possibly an inertia-cancelling ability as well. The latter comes from the fact that Dash crashes so often without hurting herself, with the exception of "Over a Barrel," when she evidently hurt her head. That exception actually helped me develop the concept; Dash was actually trying to hit Little Strongheart at the time, so she'd probably gotten up to speed, then "turned off" her mass-reduction and inertia-cancelling abilities so she'd hit harder. She missed, then had a split-second before she hit the sign to realize she was about to crash, so she started to re-activate 'em, but didn't have time to bring them up to full power, so she got hurt though not badly so. WRT stiff wings as a sexual response: IIRC, the show's creator has stated that the various pony subtypes can interbreed with one another. (As a side note, I suspect that mixed couples that include a pegasus experience an extremely high stillbirth/spontaneous abortion rate. That third limb set is just begging for major, major genetic problems and birth defects in a mixed offspring) In order for this to be true in the case of pegasi, they couldn't have mating behavior that includes flight, since that would preclude any mixed pairs. In light of that, it would make sense to me for arousal to actually inhibit flight, as stiffened wings would tend to do. As far as introducing problems of autostimulation, did you know that many humans have a particularly sensitive erogenous zone on the inner surface of the upper arm? In most cases, autostimulation of non-genital erogenous zones doesn't produce an arousal response, same as tickling yourself doesn't work. By the Omnissiah, I'm a long-winded bastard. *sigh* |
| AdamNovagen #439447 10 months ago |
@Anon 946 ( For pete's sake mate, get an account! XD ) Hmm... Again, that does make a lot more sense. TBH, my wing-boner theory was just the result of me trying to find a way, any way, to explain fanon, something usually inadvisable anyway. Your explanation as a flight INHIBITOR is far more satisfactory.
As for interbreeding, I wouldn't suspect that to be a problem, in view of the way that all other biology involves magic of some type to make it "convenient" to the four breeds (counting alicorns). More than likely there is a simple genetic "switch" that sets the wing-related DNA code to TRUE or FALSE, to avoid any malformations; the wings would either just form fully, making a pegasus or alicorn, or be totally absent, forming an earth pony or unicorn. We know that temporary gene-alterating spells already exist for such matters, as proven by Twilight when she gave Rarity butterfly wings, which biologiclly made even LESS sense than those of a normal pegasus, so I'd say that birth deformation probably just doesn't happen so much. Mind you, that's just my rationale for the fact that I dowanna think about stillbirths in Equestria's cheerful existence. ;D And don't apologize to ME for being long-winded, it's a pleasure to actually have a decent and intelligent discussion for once. XD |
| Anonymous #439975 10 months ago |
@AdamNovagen, oh I've got an account. As I said earlier, I was (and remain) kind of embarrassed about writing an interspecies romance scene (even if it wasn't all that explicit) and am kind of hesitant to put my name on it, so I have to remember to log out whenever I'm about to post a comment in this particular spot. :-P
Glad you liked my explanation; I've got a biology and genetics background in addition to being a longtime SF fan, so I have fun trying to work out the biology of alien species. (Tyranids break my brain) Also, holy derp I must have forgotten to proofread my last post, 'cause I said 'pneumatic' when I meant 'hydraulic.' That's kind of embarrassing. I know the difference between a gas-operated system and a fluid-operated one, honest! :-D It's entirely possible that E. sapiens has magic incorporated down to the genetic level, providing some additional quality control above and beyond what normal biology does. That's a really good thought, especially given how magically-saturated their environment seems to be. Still, the more potential points of failure there are, the more problems there will be; that's generally a feature of complex systems. (and there are a lot of things that could go wrong there, believe me) If it makes you feel better, the problems might be more likely to manifest as a simple fertility problem; in humans, most embryos spontaneously terminate if there's a major problem during early gestation, and the woman never even knows she was pregnant. I prefer to think of it that way myself; the kinds of birth defects that could result in a creature with one four-limbed parent and one six-limbed parent could potentially be pretty horrific. WRT the wings spell Twilight used on Rarity in Sonic Rainboom, I actually thought those might be magical constructs, created out of pure arcane energy and linked to Rarity's mental control rather than being a transmutation effect. (and probably incorporating elements of pegasus mass-reduction magic, though I suspect that effect was much weaker than a true pegasus could have achieved, since the wings were much bigger than normal pegasus wings, and Rarity couldn't fly very fast at all) That spell sure seemed to drain the heck out of Twilight, who's proven to be a veritable fountain of arcane power in the past, and the wings' dissolution didn't seem to hurt Rarity; she looked surprised rather than pained. Transmutation spells do definitely exist, though; Twilight turned her dad into a plant, after all! And more importantly, turned him back again, which is one heck of an impressive feat when you think about it! This is an interesting discussion. Unfortunately, I'll be offline over the weekend. I'll check back here on Monday, though! (I really am shocked by how amazingly civil these comments have stayed. Faith in humanity++) |
| Anonymous #440243 10 months ago |
I am desperate really to find out who the author was of this story so that I could continue reading his other works. |
| AdamNovagen #440301 10 months ago |
Yeah, I've enjoyed this too. It's funny, if one thinks about it, how much rational thought we try to apply to this cartoon; I mean after all, we're talking about a show where Twilight ends up severely battered, even with broken forelegs, and in a traction wheelchair (Feeling Pinkie Keen, ep15) yet less than two minutes later is running with the others and showing no signs of any harm ever having been done (and lord knows what happened to the wheelchair!). Silly, really, but it's bloody fun, innit? :3
No surprise to me that you've a biogene background, it shows up a lot in your way of thinking, and frankly it's very interesting to me to read. I look forward to reading more stories & such from you ( shouldn't be too hard to pick yours out, even if you use your account name for others ;D ), and thinking about more "magicalogic" and "scienspells." :D |
| Detective_Chmilewsky #440313 10 months ago |
Adam and I are friends on skype. I am the handsome one, he is the hump back. I have a question, do you think it is possible to email me some of your other works if you have them? My email is poyt10@yahoo.com |
| Anonymous #446953 10 months ago |
really good story hope for a continuation or at least learn the authors name to read their other works |
| Anonymous #450995 10 months ago |
Uploader here. Yes, still posting anonymously. :-P
@Anon 440243: I've only got one other story in the MLP setting, and you'd probably be disappointed. As I said earlier, this scene is radically different from anything I've written before. @AdamNovagen: Yeah, trying to rationalize fiction is something of a hobby of mine. Depending on how much effort the author has put into their worldbuilding, I meet with varying degrees of success. And oh, Feeling Pinkie Keen. That was my absolute least favorite episode of the whole season, even behind Show Stoppers which at least had that hilariously 80's musical number. I thought Twilight was way out of character, and the whole tone of that episode was way more cartoony than the others. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but it was awfully jarring and didn't seem to fit. It did have its moments, though. (Twilight stepping up on a literal soapbox did have me laughing) If I had to try and rationalize how Twilight absorbed all the punishment she received there, I'd probably posit that her telekinesis was subconsciously activating to try and mitigate the impacts. As for the evident mutant healing factor? There I've got nothing. And regarding logical magic: Any sufficiently analyzed magic may be indistinguishable from science, to invert one of Clarke's laws. One of my original settings relies on magic as a power source for science-fiction level technology, using it the way we'd use electrical or chemical power, except way more flexible. Magic-based holographic communications, stardrives, factories, etc. You won't find that on the Internet at all, though, I've never shared any of my original work, just a couple of fanfics. @Detective_Chmilewsky: Sorry, man, I'm shy. As I said to the anon above, you'd probably be disappointed. @Anon 446953 (and really, everyone who's asked about a continuation): Um... folks, I've been trying to figure out how this could be continued without turning into an interspecies sex scene, but I'm having trouble. Both characters are thinking about it by the end there, and Dash has been thinking about it for a while now. I'm really not sure I'm up to writing anything like that, not to mention I don't think I'd be comfortable writing it! Plus, I doubt anyone would be interested in reading it; those looking for a fapfic would be disappointed, since I'd be doing it in the same style as this, with a lot of dialogue and cultural/species comparisons, and those who weren't looking for erotic material wouldn't read it 'cause it involves sex! I do appreciate the interest, but I don't think I can do anything further at the moment with this particular piece. |
| Lance #451220 10 months ago |
Aw Anon, you're no fun ;P
Actually, I'd love just to see more interaction, you don't have to write sexytimes. There's no shame in /alluding/ to stuff going down (and eventually in). Hell, when I was writing fiction for my highschool's creative writing club back yonder I had to allude plenty of times. If you feel you don't want to write clop, you can do what I've had to do; just skip it. Go right up until things start getting hot 'n heavy, then jump over it if you have more to write about the actual characters, or just end there if you're done. "Keep 'em guessin', keep 'em wanting more." That is, of course, if you actually have more to the story, how they develop as individuals now, how they develop as a couple, how the others feel, etc etc yada yada. It doesn't have to be porn after all. |
| Anonymous #454420 10 months ago |
Uploader here.
@Lance: Ha, I know I'm no fun. I even once played a character who earned the nickname Funslayer in D&D; a Lawful Evil cleric of Nuggan (I'd been reading Terry Pratchett) who was on a ceaseless crusade against fun, garlic, chocolate, and the color blue. The DM finally caused his death by revealing how much fun I was having to my character when he cast a divination spell, and he killed himself to destroy my fun. Tell you what, I'm currently working on another project, but if I hit writer's block on that one, I'll try tossing in the odd paragraph to a followup to this one and see where it goes. It'll be a way for me to switch mental gears, since my current project involves the originator of the term "grimdark." I can't promise that a follow-up is pending, but I will work on it, and see where it goes. Sound good? |
| Lance #454658 10 months ago |
Sounds dandy :3 |
| Anonymous #454668 10 months ago |
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| Lance #454780 10 months ago |
@4668 Then you missed out on something magical. |
| Detective_Chmilewsky #454845 10 months ago |
Can't wait then Anon/Uploader. |
| Anonymous #477532 10 months ago |
Even if you feel you cant do a continuation you could write ones like it like maybe alternate ones for the other 5 main cast |
| Anonymous #480528 10 months ago |
Uploader here.
@Detective_Chmilewsky: It'll be a bit before it's finished, assuming it's actually worth uploading! Still working on it. @ Anon 532: I'm in the process of working on a continuation that picks up where the end of this scene left off; I've got another project that I'm devoting the lion's share of my attention to at the moment, so I'm just doing a paragraph here and there. It's... heading in a rather steamy direction, which I can't say I'm entirely happy with, but eh. It's a silly hypocrisy on my part; I'm willing to write fairly heinous levels of violence, but a sex scene (even a relatively tame one) makes me cringe. As for alternate ones for the other five: do you mean regular romance scenes or interspecies ones? I'd actually used Dash for this scene for a specific reason; I was trying to keep her as in-character as I could, and the only element of her personality I really added here were the body-image issues. (and even that I could argue might have been suggested; remember Rarity calling Zecora's stripes garish? With Rainbow hovering three feet away and not making a sound of protest?) She's got a hint of xenophilia to her already; she's the only one confirmed to have had a non-pony close friend (Apart from Twilight's surrogate mother role for Spike) and she was really quick to sympathize with the buffalo viewpoint in Over a Barrel. So, I'd need a reason why the other five characters might be drawn to someone outside their own species. Pinkie I could see possibly being interested, and maybe, maybe Twilight, assuming compatible personalities, but not so much with Fluttershy, Rarity, or Applejack. |
| AdamNovagen #481555 10 months ago |
@Uploader: Yeah I'd agree with that. Fluttershy would be far too timid for such a thing, she could get on as a friend/caretaker because that's what she does for ANY species, but interrelations wouldn't stand a chance. Rarity, certainly not, she'd consider it far too "vulgar" or words to that effect, and Applejack would probably think the idea was just plain weird, and a bit amusing.
Listen, if you ever want to collaborate on this sequel installment or just bounce some ideas off me, feel free to get in touch. For obvious reasons, I'd rather not give my contact info on this or any other wide-open messaging board, nor would I ask you to do the same, but if you have a Steam account, mine is "adamnovagen". Feel free to add me, my nickname is (and always has and will be) "Blue Phoenix." Cheers! |
| Detective_Chmilewsky #482397 10 months ago |
Makes sense. |
| Anonymous #487224 10 months ago |
Uploader here
@AdamNovagen: More or less my thoughts. For all their differences, Rarity and Applejack both seem relatively conservative in their social views, and that kind of thing would be way outside the norm. I appreciate the offer, and I'll certainly keep you in mind if I need someone to brainstorm with! @Detective_Chmilewsky: Thanks, when I'm working with established characters, I try to keep them in-character. Glad your assessment agrees with mine! |
| Anonymous #535821 9 months ago |
Seriously? This is the most epic story + comments I've ever read. You simply must keep the story going. I believe you can do it. WE believe in you. We don't need clop. What we need is more of this ^ |
| Detective_Chmilewsky #538972 9 months ago |
I agree. |
| Anonymous #544531 9 months ago |
Uploader here.
@Anonymous 821: Well, we'll see. As promised, I've been tossing in the odd paragraph onto this when my other project stalls, and I'm about 95% of the way to something postable as of today. I just need to proofread and edit, and transfer the text to an image file so I can post it here, so look for it tomorrow or Tuesday. It's a touch steamier than this one was, but not terribly so, and I don't think it'll need an 'explicit' tag. I'm under no illusions that the comments will be as nice as this one's, but I hope the folks that liked this will like the followup. :-) |
| Anonymous #549969 9 months ago |
^Argh, I hate it when life makes a liar outta me. Work bit me in the ass, have part 2 up tomorrow. |
| Anonymous #551254 9 months ago |
Will you post a link to the sequel, here? |
| Anonymous #685077 8 months ago |
I take it that sequel never appeared. Damn shame... |
| Detective_Chmilewsky #695808 8 months ago |
I am still waiting =/ |
| Anonymous #701979 8 months ago |
^Sorry, guys, I just haven't managed to work up the courage to upload it yet. |
| Anonymous #713036 7 months ago |
^Relax. You did great with this.And if you're afraid of starting a flame war, well, the worst you got on this was a few people saying tl;dr. I highly doubt that it's as bad as you think it is.
Just don't leave us hanging forever, please. I think I speak for the majority when I say that we eagerly await your continuation. |
| Anonymous #719040 7 months ago |
I don't really see the problem. Don't worry, nobody even knows who you are. |
| Anonymous #723120 7 months ago |
Part two is posted.
>>92143 Prepare for disappointment! I'm not exactly concerned about someone magically learning my identity, it was more a case of being embarrassed that I'd even written it! This kinda thing is way out of genre for me. |
| Anonymous #724045 7 months ago |
That was in no way a disappointment. Great job man. |
| bj97632 #851414 6 months ago |
Ilove this damned thing...... Love it. |
| Anonymous #940901 5 months ago |
^^ANON WE WUB WOOOOO |
| Anonymous #940918 5 months ago |
I don't usually read fanfiction
but when I do is because of the jiggawats in the tags. |
| Anonymous #1244771 3 months ago |
I originally read this on pastebin (link is on clopfic directory). Pretty good, pretty good indeed. |
| Ponykin #1459940 3 weeks ago |
This fic is now 6 chapters with more to come!
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/27874/Xenophilia |