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‘Bill’s Not-So-Secret Urge’ ‘Double Take’ ‘Elise’ ‘Fire and Snow’ ‘Good Things Cum’ ‘I’m Not a Little Girl Anymore’ ‘Jo and Lexi’ ‘A Letter from Your Worst Nightmare’ ‘My Neighbor’ I enjoy reading your stories. Thank you. I enjoy reading your feedback. It is good to see new stories coming from you. You have been missed and I for one hope you continue to grace us with the fruits of your imagination, especially after your retirement led us to believe that there would be no more. You are very kind. Thank you. You have done excellent work. Readers wonder what happens when good storytellers/writers stop for protracted periods of time. Good to see you back. Thank you! You stole my idea! Wow— stole? That suggests intent, and that has never happened. Also, it’s hard to take an anonymous, generic accusation seriously; if you can be more specific, I’d appreciate it. May I rewrite or repurpose (I love that term, taken from those home improvement shows!) one of your stories? Absolutely! I would ask only that your disclaimer include the source of your inspiration and/or a direct link to my original work. You should really add to [And the Girl Shall Lead]. It just calls for more. Okay, you talked me into it. See ‘Fire and Snow’. A lifestyle that did not appeal to me after trying it. There’s an old saying about trying anything once, and twice if you like it. I hope you enjoyed the story, anyway. It is a nice story. Keep up and continue to write wonderful stories, you got me cumming for more! Very inspiring and hot story. It shows the importance of not having casual sex, as we can call it. Well, great work, keep the good job up. I must confess that I was a bit reluctant to read this work of yours but, having enjoyed your previous works, I decided to give it a try. I like this story because it isn't a lolicon type (one of my favs). Branching out can be tough. Great work. Wickedly written—brilliant storyline—just loved theand they all lived happily ever afterending. Double Takewas excellent! All of your stories are, but for some reason I really enjoyed this one in particular. Funny, my research suggested Rockets’ and Spurs’ fans hate each other ... This is the first time I've ever given any feedback to any author; it always felt like a very risky thing to do. Anyhoo, I want to commend you on your writing. You are head and shoulders better than all but perhaps a few at ASSTR, and I want to thank you for your exceptional efforts. Very nicely done, good sir! Extremely well done. You really do write intelligent dialogue, and I loved the kids’ personalities. Very few authors can write intelligent erotica involving kids. You, sir, are one of them. A great combination of innocence and sexiness. You have outdone yourself. Sweet story, sexy & funny. Good work! Very well written, with very likeable characters. Thanks for writing it. Would make a great movie. I can imagine the young actress in the newer version being perfect for the young mother in your version. Loved the story and the story line. Awesomeness ... and I know where Cypress, TX, is. Great story! Please keep us cumming! :-) As an example of the writerly craft, it has a lot going for it, especially in terms of polished style and plot architecture. I would guess it did not go together in just one or a few drafts. Here and there I did have to backtrack a paragraph or two to be sure which character was speaking, but on the whole it was easy to read, which I always take as a good sign. I think you can be justifiably proud of this work. Double Takeis a masterpiece of erotic fiction. Whoa ... thank you! I just want to say that I love your storyElise, very horny. Well written and well thought out. A great read. Excellent!! Please continue! Damn! Fine writing ... a triumph. This is the very first time that I have ever read a preteen-age story plot, and the turn on was as much of an adultthing. Quite satisfying. Very nice, but a little too short. Well ... it is supposed to be a short story ... Very nice! Neither overblown, nor rambling. Could be the basis for a fine short story. Heh, heh ... never mind (grin). The suspense is killing me, don’t stop now. Sorry ... :-) I must admit I was surprised by the number of readers asking me to expand or continue the original treatment, ‘And the Girl Shall Lead’.
Now that’s a [series] movie I’d love to see. :-) Nice addition to the story. As a literary exercise, I’m impressed with your deft handling of the prose artform. As human drama, easily on a par with what I remember from the days when I used to watch [the series] (of which I was never a great fan, but some episodes weren’t bad). As pedoerotica, it didn’t do much to get my juices flowing. Not likeWorst Nightmare. I can’t get everyone off, I suppose ... ;-) It was an ok story but I kept seeing [the actor]’s face during some scenes. I was thinking, that pompous ass would never do this. Ha! Never mind all the prison sentences for the cast, the crew ... :-) Never saw that [in the episode]. But would have liked to. Might have watched more! Good imagination. Fun story, worthy of your best! Cute, and sexy. I’m not a [series] fan, but I would be if it was more like this. Likeable characters, and very well written. Thank you. Thanks for writing this, it’s perfection. The tone, the emotion, the acts, the wicked sense of humor, all of it. Just perfect. Nice story thanks. Are you going to keep writing? No idea at this point. I suppose I can’t say never again ... Very good, Admiral. I like. Puhleeze, don't stop again!!! Fantastic story, love the idea she was the initiator, and the voyeur idea, as I also love to watch. Damn. That was sexy as hell, and damn good writing. Well done sir. As ever, your work is in a completely different league. Thanks for that—more please! Too kind, thank you! Well written story. Too bad about the sad ending. Thank you—and a lot of readers took me to task for that ending, so I softened it up. Just a bit. :-) A great story with a truly good ending ... with the right amount of wonderment. LOL it would be great to see if she ever does respond. I guess the rewrite worked. ;-) Damn fine writing. Way above the norm. Intelligent and written so one could identify with it if one had experienced the same. Great stuff. The change in mood from beginning to end is unusual in going from a rather unbelievable and vicariously enjoyed fantasy to a rather melancholy dash of reality, which was interesting. I really didn’t like the ending because I like something more optimistic and satisfying, but I certainly liked the tale. Loved the story, the realistic portrayals of events, real considerations. Hope to see more. Nice little story. Good detail work. Great story. Sad in some places, just like real life. I loved it, though. Another good story. Really has thering of truthas Gandalf said to Bilbo. One of the best I have read in a very long time. ‘I’m Not a Little Girl Anymore!’ I was just wondering: were you really 12 when you wrote this? Uh ... no, but thanks for the compliment. A very good story. You succeeded in writing as a 12-year-old girl, but those Dad’s comments didn’t fit well, in my opinion. That was a rather fun, light-hearted story. I liked the Dad’s comments; an excellent touch, and one I hadn’t seen ’til your story. A cup of coffee and a story to start out my day is one of my most enjoyable experiences, and as I followedAnnfrom the bathtub at two on up todaddyat 12, it truly worked for me, and I thank you. Great story! Looking forward to reading more! A very erotic story, told in a very interesting way. Thank you for Ann. She’s darling. Nice, but it lacks pictures or illustrations to make it really hot! Whoa! Great idea! I’ll get right on that, officer. ;-) Brilliant. Bravo. That’s fucked-up shit! Uh ... thanks. I think ... One of the best I’ve ever read. Thetellingfrom the child’s perspective was the key to the story’s success. Holy Fuck! I have not jerked to a story for a while, and this did it! Never seen a story written from the kid’s-view narrative before, very hot!! This is Detective [name withheld]. Whoever you are you both are really sick and I will find you and arrest your dad personally so be prepared. Ah, excellent deductive skills, my dear Detective. You’ve skipped right by the fact that this is fiction, and the fact that it was written by an adult male. Arrest yourself for ineptitude when your other hand is finished! Oh, wait: it’s humor! I get it ... :-) ‘A Letter from Your Worst Nightmare’ A very nice story—an interesting mix of luck, too. The sort of tale that makes you wonder. A wonderfully written story. Although I don’t entirely agree with everything, you make a very strong point. Pretty much true. I don’t know what it will take to fix the laws, although there is a possibility of change—remember crack-v.-coke sentences? Doubtful—final frontier, and all that. But one can hope. A great story—and cautionary tale. Isn’t it funny how the gods always abandon you? You’re retiring? But, you definitely had thatauthorthing down ... you know, getting it from your mind ontopaper—being the actor, storywriter, director, producer, special effects, and editor, all rolled up into one. Thank you! Good plot, premise, and character development. Very erotic—not just the act, but the feel, taste, and texture. Real people with personalities, temperament, quirks. Rather inventive; I don’t think I've ever seen the issue of trust handled quite like that before. If the damned real world would LET me be the person I want to be, then I would be as good and as kind and as loving as the guy in your story, and [I] probably never would have written any stories. It’s for that reason that I consider myself fortunate to have a wide-ranging age of attraction. Excellent, and thought-provoking. Thank you for writing it. Beautifully done, if I can say that about a less-than-happy tale. Truly another masterpiece. You will be missed. Thanks, I really appreciate that. There are (I’m not counting) about a dozen really good writers on this site and about a dozen or so thereabouts. Wow. Praise can go no higher than that. Thank you! Loved loved loved the story. Just enough risk and no one was hurt. I would love to taste pussy like that. Your heroine, Jen, is mature, whatever her age. You’ve relatedyour adventurewith her sensitively and well, however much apocryphally. This story kept me hard the whole way through LOL I felt like your main character at the finish. That was a trip back in time. Good storytelling. Well done. Well written, clever, and absorbing. I would estimate that its quality would rank it easily in the top five percent of the posts in Alt.Sex.Stories. Narrative moves along as easily as water flowing downhill. Plus I like the usual Cartwright clean prose style, which seems harder to find nowadays. I would set this one up alongsideWorst Nightmareas my co-favorite of your stories. Sweet story! Delightful story. Strong action. Great pacing. Well done indeed!! I really enjoyed this story. Thank you for sharing and for all of your hard work. What a wonderfully hot story! Thank you! A person can tell that you are a professional writer. Some stories are written so crudely—not that I mind crude stories [LOL]. I write as part of my job but, technically, I’m not a professional writer. Still, thank you! Loved your story about Jennifer ... just loved it. She was quite a girl. Knowing the little minxes in my neighborhood I could just so find myself ... dreaming again. Fantastic, realistic, and well-paced. One the best stories I have read by far in a few years. Loved the pacing; your descriptions of their exploits were very arousing!!! Very good! I really enjoyed this one! Definitely your best one. All of the others seem to take phrases and copy from this. Sort of ... and you’re the first to mention it. Essentially, experiences—real or imagined—first were introduced in ‘My Neighbor’ and later fleshed out, so to speak, into stories all their own (except ‘Joanne and Lexi’, which had been written years earlier; and ‘Double Take’, which was based on a novel and its more recent adaptations). My thanks once again to all who write! |