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SHOT OF DAVID RESTORING AN OLD PAINTING.\n\nDavid cap: i was seven when i saw my father restoring a painting, it was a commissioned work from the new your museum of modern art. It was a 465 oil painting, a portrait.\n\n2:\nSAME FRAMING AND LAYOUT AS PANEL 1, BUT NOW DAVID STABS A GOON WITH A SCALPEL.\n\nDavid cap: he taught me my first lesson that day.\n\nDavid cap: ART RESTORATION IS LIKE LIFE. Even the most damaged and dirty painting can be saved, the marks of time will remain, but also the beauty of those years, the patina of time. That's eternal.\n\n3:\nOPEN SHOT. WE CAN SEE DAVID WORKING ON THE SAME OLD PAINTING, HE WEARS WHITE SHIRT, WHITE PANTS AND WHITE SHOES, WHITE GLOVES AND SAFETY GOGGLES.\n\nDavid cap: at twelve, i did my first professional work as art restorator. It was a fresco from 1778. my father was there, behind me, watching me.\n\n4:\nSAME FRAMING AND LAYOUT AS PANEL 3. BUT NOW DAVID IS AIMING A PRECISION RIFLE ON A ROOFTOP.\n\nDavid cap: patience, precision. Those are the main attributes any art restorer must have. My father used to repeat that mantra over and over, patience is key. If you lack patience, you will lack precission. And if you lack precission, you will lack experience.\n\n5:\nOPEN SHOT OF A MAN GETTING SHOT IN THE HEAD. TWO BODYGUARDS BEHIND HIM WATCH IN AWE AS MAN'S HEAD BURSTS OPEN.\n\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 2: 5 PAGES.\n\n1:\nDAVID LOOKS AT THE PAINTING, LOOKING FOR MISSING DETAILS.\n\nDavid cap: my father died when i was seventeen. A heart attack while he was asleep. Doctor said he felt nothing. I am sure he wouldn't have felt a thing, even if he were awake.\n\nDavid cap: i don't mean my father was mean or cruel to me, he never raised a hand against me, quite the contrary, he defended me from bullies until i learned to do it myself.\n\n2:\nDAVID, AS A KID, FIGHTS AGAINST A BULLY, THE BULLY IS BIGGER THAN DAVID, DAVID HAS SOME BRUISES AND A BLACK EYE. IN THE BACKGROUND. DAVID'S FATHER WATCHES.\n\nDavid cap: he stood there, watching me fight vittorio carmine. Each time he landed a punch on me, i felt like each bone in my body shattered. But i never gave up.\n\n3:\nDAVID, AS A KID, LANDS A PUNCH DIRECTLY ON BULLY'S FACE. DAVID'S FATHER STILL WATCHES.\n\n4:\nBULLY IS ON THE GROUND, DAVID IS SITTING ON HIS CHEST TO IMMOVILIZE HIM, AS HE BEATS THE BULLY SAVAGELY.\n\n5:\nP.O.V. SHOT OF BULLY'S FACE AS DAVID PUNCHES HIM MERCILESSLY.\n\nDavid cap: i must admit...\n\ndavid cap: ...i wanted to spend all day beating vittorio until he stopped breathing. He spent almost all year messing with me, insulting me for not having a mother, mocking me because i was an albino lion “COTTON SWAP”, “WHITE FAG”, “ABOMINATION”, i amde him swallow each insult...\n\ndavid cap: ...but i wanted more, i had the advantage. And i wanted him to stop mocking me, or anyone else.\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 3: 5 PANELS\n\n1:\nDAVID'S FATHER GRABS DAVID'S HAND SO DAVID STOPS BEATING BULLY. BULLY IS ALMOST PASSED OUT, DAVID LOOKS AT HIS FATHER, SURPRISED.\n\nDavid's father: it's over. He knows you will fight back, and how far you will go.\n\n2:\nDAVID'S FATHER PUTS SOME BANDAGES ON DAVID'S HAND.\n\nDavid's father: killing is easy, beating a fallen guy over and over is easy.\n\nDavid's father: life is not meant to be easy. That's why the thieves never thrive, cus they made no effort, they just took form someone else. Their wealth is meant to end, and their peace ends with it.\n\n3:\nDAVID AS A KID, LOOKS AT HIS BANDAGED HAND.\n\nDavid: then...we are meant to always take the hard road? What if vittorio tries to mock me again?\n\nDavid's father: then, and only then, you beat him again, and again. Until he learns he can't mock you without getting a proper beating.\n\nDavid's father: and believe me, even the dumbest imbecile learns faster with a beating than with words...\n\ndavid's father: ...but you must always give them the chance to listen to words, before listening to your punches.\n\n4:\nDAVID'S FATHER CARRIES DAVID ON HIS HAND.\n\nDavid cap: for my father, violence was a resource. Not the last, nor the first, violence was the resource to use, when dialogue and reasoning failed, only then, not before, not after.\n\n5:\nON THE GROUND, BULLY'S FATHER, BEATEN UP BADLY, BUT ALIVE, TRIES TO GET UP.\n\nDavid cap: vittorio and his father learned the lesson.\n\nDavid's cap: and so did i.\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 4: 5 PANELS.\n\n1:\nDAVID TAKES A BREAK FROM THE RESTORATION WORK. DRINKS A ZIP FROM A GLASS OF RED WINE.\n\nDavid cap: father teached me many things. He was my mentor...\n\n2:\nDAVID, AS A KID, AIMS A PISTOL, DAVID'S FATHER GUIDES HIM IN HOW TO HOLD THE GUN.\n\n3:\nDAVID AND HIS FATHER FIGHT ON A DOJO.\n\nDavid's cap: he never wanted me to follow his example. But he also knew that we are meant to take our own decisions and make our own choices. The best way to learn that fire burns, is trying to touch fire and getting burnt by it.\n\n4:\nDAVID HOLDS THE EMPTY GLASS IN HIS HAND.\n\nDavid cap: after his death. I made my choices, always with his teachings in mind.\n\nDavid cap: i touched fire, i got burned.\n\n5:\nDAVID FIGHTING A GROUP OF THUGS.\n\nDavid cap: now, i know how close i can get to the fire before burning up. I carry some scars, and some learning from each scar.\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 6: 3 PANELS\n\n1:\nPHONE RINGS. TAKING DAVID OUT OF HIS DAYSLEEPING.\n\nFX: brrrrrrrrrRING!!\n\ndavid: anya, accept call.\n\nFx: BEEP!\n\nDavid: yes?\n\nVoice at phone: SAHARA? We may have a job for you.\n\nDavid: what is it?\n\n2:\nDAVID TAKES OFF HIS SAFETY GOGGLES.\n\nVoice at phone: well. Apparently, some schmucks at little savannah are not aware that we don't like drug dealers and similar scum.\n\nVoice at phone: mister woo has asked me to contact you.\n\nDavid: and how is it that mister woo hasn't dealt with these new guys himself?\n\nVoice at phone: he tried...\n\n3:\nSIX MEN, DEAD, HANGING FROM A BRIDGE.\n\nVoice at phone cap: ...he sent six pacifiers to deal with them. They were turned into rear view mirror decorations.\n\n4:\nDAVID TAKING OFF HIS SHIRT, WE CAN SEE SOME OF HIS SCARS.\n\nDavid: what do we have on these new guys?\n\nVoice at phone: well, for starters, they are very rude, they lack your...tact for the dirty stuff. They are taking over mister woo's zone.\n\nVoice at phone: the old hamster needs you, david. You know how much it costed us to keep this place clean from that crap. These guys think mister woo is weak, only because he is not a blood thirsty maniac like them.\n\nDavid: i see.\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 7: 5 PANELS.\n\n1:\nDAVID WEARS A BLACK TURTLE NECK SWEATER.\n\nVoice at phone: mister woo wants to talk with you about this situation. He knows you, david. He wants to send a message, but, he wants to send it without an onslaught.\n\n2:\nDAVID WEARS A WHITE JACKET OVER THE SWEATER AS HE OPENS A CLOSET.\n\nDavid: so, he wants a clean job, but he also wants these new guys ouit of town,\n\nvoice at phone: yes, and he also wants them to never want to return here.\n\nDavid: tell mister woo i'll do it.\n\nVoice at phone: perfect, i knew i could count on you.\n\n3:\nOVER THE SHOULDER P.O.V. SHOT OF DAVID, WE CAN SEE THAT THE CLOSET HE OPENED IS FULL OF WEAPONS, AMMO AND BLADES.\n\nDavid: tell mister woo i'll be there in one hour.\n\nVoice at phone: ok, see you there.\n\nDavid: anya, finish call.\n\nFx: BEEP!\n\n4:\nDAVID HOLDS A SILENCED PISTOL.\n\nDavid: if the day is sunny, but there are dark clouds in the sky, it may rain.\n\nDavid: my father used to tell me that anytime i thought something was perfect. He knew that even perfect situations can go wrong eventually. It only takes one little detail to change it all.\n\n5:\nCLOSE UP OF DAVID.\n\nDavid: i am always ready for the storm.\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 8: 4 PANELS.\n\n1:\nESTABLISHING SHOT. WOO RESIDENCE.\n\nMister woo off panel: that's the problem, david. These new guys are trying to take over my territory just because they think i am soft.\n\n2:\nMISTER WOO AND DAVID WALKING ON THE RESIDENCE'S GARDENS.\n\nMister woo: i took little savannah back from sutkovich and his gang, many died to achieve the peace we have now. I know i did terrible things to achieve that peace. But even so, these new guys think they can come over. so...\n\nmister woo: ...i think they need a bigger lesson. Namely, you.\n\nMister woo: we grew up together, david. You helped me against bullies in school and college, you had no reason to do such a thing. I was just a nerdy hamster on a predators district. We took different roads, i made some bad choices i must live with now.\n\nDavid: i know. I also know you never forced anyone, i know you managed to get all this, without killing unnecesarily.\n\nMister woo: killing a hundred men is easy, david. But. Show one of them how strong you are, and how in control you are, and that man will tell that to a hundred men, and so will each one of them. Killing is easy. But achieving real control and respect from people, that takes effort.\n\n3:\nMISTER WOO AND DAVID WALKING ON THE RESIDENCE'S GARDENS.\n\nMister woo: i want them out of little savannah, but i dont want a war, i have the men, and the equipment to wipe them out, but, i don't want the collateral damage. Is the least i owe to little savannah, even a criminal like me, does honor his home, david.\n\nDavid: what do we know about these guys?\n\n4:\nZAO TSE, A PANDA, SITTING AT HIS DESK.\n\nMister woo cap: his name is zao tse. He leads the SEVEN HEADED DRAGON GANG, a group of drug dealers from beijing, apparently, they think it's a good time to open a branch in this side of the world, and they chose little savannah because they think i am weak, because i am not as violent as they are.\n\nMister woo cap: the seven headed dragon gang deals with all the things i dont want here, drugs, sexual slavery, child traficcking, illegal deathmatch arenas. Zao tse wants to bring all that filth here.\nI won't allow it.\n\n\n\n\nPage 9: 4 panels.\n\n1:\nUNDERAGE KIDS, CHAINED TO A WALL, NAKED AND WEARING MOUTH GAGS AND BLINDFOLDED, AS MEN IN SHADOWS WATCH THEM.\n\nMister woo cap: they sell children for breeding and mating camps. And they even kill their families to make sure the kids have nowhere to go if they ever manage to escape.\n\n2:\nMISTER WOO AND DAVID SITTING ON CHAIRS UNDER A TREE, MISTER WOO SHOWS DAVID A VIAL OF A BLUE SUBSTANCE.\n\n\nMister woo: this is DRAGON TEARS. A superdrug zao tse developed. Super addictive. It's a stimulant, imagine twenty shots of adrenaline at once. This filth is given to his slaves, that's how he keeps them on a leash.\n\nMister woo: I DONT WANT DRUGS ON LITTLE SAVANNAH. Drugs killed my father..and almost killed me...i know i am not a saint. But, even i have limits. Drugs are where i stand my ground.\n\nMister woo: my men seized a lab on rwanda square, small, but they got rid of two thousand of these things. More than enough to start a business. Zao tse knows the potential of this territory, there are many kids here, a new market for this filth.\n\n3:\nCECIL, A MOLE, APPEARS.\n\nCecil: well, david, as i told you when i called you earlier. The situation demands a very strong message is delivered, and...you are our best mailman.\n\nDavid: i will do it.\n\nCecil: your usual payment has been sent already, and our men are at your entire disposal. So are our resources.\n\n\n4:\nDAVID TALKS TO CECIL AND MISTER WOO.\n\nDavid: and, what i must do with zao tse after i get him?\n\nMister woo: whatever it takes to make him understand that little savannah is out of his reach, permanently.\n\nDavid: ok.\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 10: 4 PANELS.\n\n1:\nDAVID WALKS AWAY, CECIL AND MISTER WOO WATCH HIM GO.\n\n2:\nCECIL HOLDS MISTER WOO'S HAND.\n\nCecil: it will all be ok, david will save us from zao tse. I am sure.\n\nMister woo: i should have gotten rid of that maniac panda when i had the chance!\n\nCecil: you are not a murderer, lao woo. You have done bad things. But...murder, that line you will never cross it.\n\n3:\nCECIL AND MISTER WOO KISS.\n\n4:\nCECIL AND MISTER WOO EMBRACED.\n\nMister woo: i know, cecil. I know.\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 11: 4 PANELS.\n\n1:\nESTABLISHING SHOT. INDUSTRIAL DISTRICT, ABANDONED WAREHOUSE. TWO BLACK CARS PARKED AT THE ENTRANCE, SOME ARMED MEN GUARDING THE AREA.\n\nZao tse off panel: here's the thing. I like it here! Good weather, business opportunities, excellent food...\n\n2:\nZAO TSE HOLDS A NAKED OTTER GIRL, THE GIRL IS TIED, HER HANDS ON HER BACK, A MOUTH GAG KEEPS HER FROM TALKING.\n\nZao tse: and there's something about the scent of girls here...makes me want to be a predator, if you know what i mean.\n\n3:\nZAO TSE LICKS THE FACE OF THE NAKED GIRL.\n\nVoice off panel: STOP!! LET HER GO!\n\n4:\nZAO TSE GRABS NAKED GIRL'S BREAST.\n\nZao tse: let her go? Why? Where? WITH YOU?? you don't seem to be aware of the situation you got yourself in, milton.\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\n\nPAGE 12: 5 PANELS.\n\n1:\nOPEN SHOT, WE CAN SEE ZAO TSE, GROPPING THE GIRL, AND THE MAN ZAO TSE IS TALKING TO. A MALE OTTER, THE MALE OTTER IS TIED WITH CHAINS TO A WALL, HE WAS BEATEN BADLY.\n\nTied otter: LET MY DAUGHTER GO NOW, YOU DAMNED MANIAC!!\n\nzao tse: NO!! SHE IS MINE NOW! I WILL DO THINGS TO HER, THINGS A MAN SHOULD NEVER DO TO A GIRL. AND I WILL DO SUCH THINGS, BECAUSE YOU FAILED ME, YOU MISERABLE PILE OF CRAP!!\n\nzao tse: you had one job, PROTECT THE FIRST CARGO OF DRAGON TEARS! And you failed me, you lost over three million dollars...TO MISTER WOO'S MEN!? ARE YOU KIDDING ME?! YOU LET THAT FAGGOT STEAL FROM YOU...FROM ME!!\n\n2:\nZAO TSE THROWS THE GIRL AWAY.\n\nZao tse: i don't even like otters...but i will rape your daughter so many times, even her grandsons will walk funny! ...if i don't wreck her for good, that is.\n\n3:\nSHASHA, A TIGRESS, TAPS HER WRISTWATCH.\n\nSHASHA: time's up, boss.\n\nZao tse off panel: ok, shasha...as always, you spoil my parties.\n\n4:\nZAO TSE TAKES NAKED GIRL FROM THE GROUND.\n\nZao tse: come here...cherry? Mary? Whatever your damn name is. 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DAVID SAHARA, the restorator




episode 1: DELICATE ART.



PAGE 1: 5 PANELS.

1:
P.O.V. SHOT OF DAVID RESTORING AN OLD PAINTING.

David cap: i was seven when i saw my father restoring a painting, it was a commissioned work from the new your museum of modern art. It was a 465 oil painting, a portrait.

2:
SAME FRAMING AND LAYOUT AS PANEL 1, BUT NOW DAVID STABS A GOON WITH A SCALPEL.

David cap: he taught me my first lesson that day.

David cap: ART RESTORATION IS LIKE LIFE. Even the most damaged and dirty painting can be saved, the marks of time will remain, but also the beauty of those years, the patina of time. That's eternal.

3:
OPEN SHOT. WE CAN SEE DAVID WORKING ON THE SAME OLD PAINTING, HE WEARS WHITE SHIRT, WHITE PANTS AND WHITE SHOES, WHITE GLOVES AND SAFETY GOGGLES.

David cap: at twelve, i did my first professional work as art restorator. It was a fresco from 1778. my father was there, behind me, watching me.

4:
SAME FRAMING AND LAYOUT AS PANEL 3. BUT NOW DAVID IS AIMING A PRECISION RIFLE ON A ROOFTOP.

David cap: patience, precision. Those are the main attributes any art restorer must have. My father used to repeat that mantra over and over, patience is key. If you lack patience, you will lack precission. And if you lack precission, you will lack experience.

5:
OPEN SHOT OF A MAN GETTING SHOT IN THE HEAD. TWO BODYGUARDS BEHIND HIM WATCH IN AWE AS MAN'S HEAD BURSTS OPEN.






PAGE 2: 5 PAGES.

1:
DAVID LOOKS AT THE PAINTING, LOOKING FOR MISSING DETAILS.

David cap: my father died when i was seventeen. A heart attack while he was asleep. Doctor said he felt nothing. I am sure he wouldn't have felt a thing, even if he were awake.

David cap: i don't mean my father was mean or cruel to me, he never raised a hand against me, quite the contrary, he defended me from bullies until i learned to do it myself.

2:
DAVID, AS A KID, FIGHTS AGAINST A BULLY, THE BULLY IS BIGGER THAN DAVID, DAVID HAS SOME BRUISES AND A BLACK EYE. IN THE BACKGROUND. DAVID'S FATHER WATCHES.

David cap: he stood there, watching me fight vittorio carmine. Each time he landed a punch on me, i felt like each bone in my body shattered. But i never gave up.

3:
DAVID, AS A KID, LANDS A PUNCH DIRECTLY ON BULLY'S FACE. DAVID'S FATHER STILL WATCHES.

4:
BULLY IS ON THE GROUND, DAVID IS SITTING ON HIS CHEST TO IMMOVILIZE HIM, AS HE BEATS THE BULLY SAVAGELY.

5:
P.O.V. SHOT OF BULLY'S FACE AS DAVID PUNCHES HIM MERCILESSLY.

David cap: i must admit...

david cap: ...i wanted to spend all day beating vittorio until he stopped breathing. He spent almost all year messing with me, insulting me for not having a mother, mocking me because i was an albino lion “COTTON SWAP”, “WHITE FAG”, “ABOMINATION”, i amde him swallow each insult...

david cap: ...but i wanted more, i had the advantage. And i wanted him to stop mocking me, or anyone else.













PAGE 3: 5 PANELS

1:
DAVID'S FATHER GRABS DAVID'S HAND SO DAVID STOPS BEATING BULLY. BULLY IS ALMOST PASSED OUT, DAVID LOOKS AT HIS FATHER, SURPRISED.

David's father: it's over. He knows you will fight back, and how far you will go.

2:
DAVID'S FATHER PUTS SOME BANDAGES ON DAVID'S HAND.

David's father: killing is easy, beating a fallen guy over and over is easy.

David's father: life is not meant to be easy. That's why the thieves never thrive, cus they made no effort, they just took form someone else. Their wealth is meant to end, and their peace ends with it.

3:
DAVID AS A KID, LOOKS AT HIS BANDAGED HAND.

David: then...we are meant to always take the hard road? What if vittorio tries to mock me again?

David's father: then, and only then, you beat him again, and again. Until he learns he can't mock you without getting a proper beating.

David's father: and believe me, even the dumbest imbecile learns faster with a beating than with words...

david's father: ...but you must always give them the chance to listen to words, before listening to your punches.

4:
DAVID'S FATHER CARRIES DAVID ON HIS HAND.

David cap: for my father, violence was a resource. Not the last, nor the first, violence was the resource to use, when dialogue and reasoning failed, only then, not before, not after.

5:
ON THE GROUND, BULLY'S FATHER, BEATEN UP BADLY, BUT ALIVE, TRIES TO GET UP.

David cap: vittorio and his father learned the lesson.

David's cap: and so did i.









PAGE 4: 5 PANELS.

1:
DAVID TAKES A BREAK FROM THE RESTORATION WORK. DRINKS A ZIP FROM A GLASS OF RED WINE.

David cap: father teached me many things. He was my mentor...

2:
DAVID, AS A KID, AIMS A PISTOL, DAVID'S FATHER GUIDES HIM IN HOW TO HOLD THE GUN.

3:
DAVID AND HIS FATHER FIGHT ON A DOJO.

David's cap: he never wanted me to follow his example. But he also knew that we are meant to take our own decisions and make our own choices. The best way to learn that fire burns, is trying to touch fire and getting burnt by it.

4:
DAVID HOLDS THE EMPTY GLASS IN HIS HAND.

David cap: after his death. I made my choices, always with his teachings in mind.

David cap: i touched fire, i got burned.

5:
DAVID FIGHTING A GROUP OF THUGS.

David cap: now, i know how close i can get to the fire before burning up. I carry some scars, and some learning from each scar.





















PAGE 6: 3 PANELS

1:
PHONE RINGS. TAKING DAVID OUT OF HIS DAYSLEEPING.

FX: brrrrrrrrrRING!!

david: anya, accept call.

Fx: BEEP!

David: yes?

Voice at phone: SAHARA? We may have a job for you.

David: what is it?

2:
DAVID TAKES OFF HIS SAFETY GOGGLES.

Voice at phone: well. Apparently, some schmucks at little savannah are not aware that we don't like drug dealers and similar scum.

Voice at phone: mister woo has asked me to contact you.

David: and how is it that mister woo hasn't dealt with these new guys himself?

Voice at phone: he tried...

3:
SIX MEN, DEAD, HANGING FROM A BRIDGE.

Voice at phone cap: ...he sent six pacifiers to deal with them. They were turned into rear view mirror decorations.

4:
DAVID TAKING OFF HIS SHIRT, WE CAN SEE SOME OF HIS SCARS.

David: what do we have on these new guys?

Voice at phone: well, for starters, they are very rude, they lack your...tact for the dirty stuff. They are taking over mister woo's zone.

Voice at phone: the old hamster needs you, david. You know how much it costed us to keep this place clean from that crap. These guys think mister woo is weak, only because he is not a blood thirsty maniac like them.

David: i see.




PAGE 7: 5 PANELS.

1:
DAVID WEARS A BLACK TURTLE NECK SWEATER.

Voice at phone: mister woo wants to talk with you about this situation. He knows you, david. He wants to send a message, but, he wants to send it without an onslaught.

2:
DAVID WEARS A WHITE JACKET OVER THE SWEATER AS HE OPENS A CLOSET.

David: so, he wants a clean job, but he also wants these new guys ouit of town,

voice at phone: yes, and he also wants them to never want to return here.

David: tell mister woo i'll do it.

Voice at phone: perfect, i knew i could count on you.

3:
OVER THE SHOULDER P.O.V. SHOT OF DAVID, WE CAN SEE THAT THE CLOSET HE OPENED IS FULL OF WEAPONS, AMMO AND BLADES.

David: tell mister woo i'll be there in one hour.

Voice at phone: ok, see you there.

David: anya, finish call.

Fx: BEEP!

4:
DAVID HOLDS A SILENCED PISTOL.

David: if the day is sunny, but there are dark clouds in the sky, it may rain.

David: my father used to tell me that anytime i thought something was perfect. He knew that even perfect situations can go wrong eventually. It only takes one little detail to change it all.

5:
CLOSE UP OF DAVID.

David: i am always ready for the storm.









PAGE 8: 4 PANELS.

1:
ESTABLISHING SHOT. WOO RESIDENCE.

Mister woo off panel: that's the problem, david. These new guys are trying to take over my territory just because they think i am soft.

2:
MISTER WOO AND DAVID WALKING ON THE RESIDENCE'S GARDENS.

Mister woo: i took little savannah back from sutkovich and his gang, many died to achieve the peace we have now. I know i did terrible things to achieve that peace. But even so, these new guys think they can come over. so...

mister woo: ...i think they need a bigger lesson. Namely, you.

Mister woo: we grew up together, david. You helped me against bullies in school and college, you had no reason to do such a thing. I was just a nerdy hamster on a predators district. We took different roads, i made some bad choices i must live with now.

David: i know. I also know you never forced anyone, i know you managed to get all this, without killing unnecesarily.

Mister woo: killing a hundred men is easy, david. But. Show one of them how strong you are, and how in control you are, and that man will tell that to a hundred men, and so will each one of them. Killing is easy. But achieving real control and respect from people, that takes effort.

3:
MISTER WOO AND DAVID WALKING ON THE RESIDENCE'S GARDENS.

Mister woo: i want them out of little savannah, but i dont want a war, i have the men, and the equipment to wipe them out, but, i don't want the collateral damage. Is the least i owe to little savannah, even a criminal like me, does honor his home, david.

David: what do we know about these guys?

4:
ZAO TSE, A PANDA, SITTING AT HIS DESK.

Mister woo cap: his name is zao tse. He leads the SEVEN HEADED DRAGON GANG, a group of drug dealers from beijing, apparently, they think it's a good time to open a branch in this side of the world, and they chose little savannah because they think i am weak, because i am not as violent as they are.

Mister woo cap: the seven headed dragon gang deals with all the things i dont want here, drugs, sexual slavery, child traficcking, illegal deathmatch arenas. Zao tse wants to bring all that filth here.
I won't allow it.




Page 9: 4 panels.

1:
UNDERAGE KIDS, CHAINED TO A WALL, NAKED AND WEARING MOUTH GAGS AND BLINDFOLDED, AS MEN IN SHADOWS WATCH THEM.

Mister woo cap: they sell children for breeding and mating camps. And they even kill their families to make sure the kids have nowhere to go if they ever manage to escape.

2:
MISTER WOO AND DAVID SITTING ON CHAIRS UNDER A TREE, MISTER WOO SHOWS DAVID A VIAL OF A BLUE SUBSTANCE.


Mister woo: this is DRAGON TEARS. A superdrug zao tse developed. Super addictive. It's a stimulant, imagine twenty shots of adrenaline at once. This filth is given to his slaves, that's how he keeps them on a leash.

Mister woo: I DONT WANT DRUGS ON LITTLE SAVANNAH. Drugs killed my father..and almost killed me...i know i am not a saint. But, even i have limits. Drugs are where i stand my ground.

Mister woo: my men seized a lab on rwanda square, small, but they got rid of two thousand of these things. More than enough to start a business. Zao tse knows the potential of this territory, there are many kids here, a new market for this filth.

3:
CECIL, A MOLE, APPEARS.

Cecil: well, david, as i told you when i called you earlier. The situation demands a very strong message is delivered, and...you are our best mailman.

David: i will do it.

Cecil: your usual payment has been sent already, and our men are at your entire disposal. So are our resources.


4:
DAVID TALKS TO CECIL AND MISTER WOO.

David: and, what i must do with zao tse after i get him?

Mister woo: whatever it takes to make him understand that little savannah is out of his reach, permanently.

David: ok.





PAGE 10: 4 PANELS.

1:
DAVID WALKS AWAY, CECIL AND MISTER WOO WATCH HIM GO.

2:
CECIL HOLDS MISTER WOO'S HAND.

Cecil: it will all be ok, david will save us from zao tse. I am sure.

Mister woo: i should have gotten rid of that maniac panda when i had the chance!

Cecil: you are not a murderer, lao woo. You have done bad things. But...murder, that line you will never cross it.

3:
CECIL AND MISTER WOO KISS.

4:
CECIL AND MISTER WOO EMBRACED.

Mister woo: i know, cecil. I know.






























PAGE 11: 4 PANELS.

1:
ESTABLISHING SHOT. INDUSTRIAL DISTRICT, ABANDONED WAREHOUSE. TWO BLACK CARS PARKED AT THE ENTRANCE, SOME ARMED MEN GUARDING THE AREA.

Zao tse off panel: here's the thing. I like it here! Good weather, business opportunities, excellent food...

2:
ZAO TSE HOLDS A NAKED OTTER GIRL, THE GIRL IS TIED, HER HANDS ON HER BACK, A MOUTH GAG KEEPS HER FROM TALKING.

Zao tse: and there's something about the scent of girls here...makes me want to be a predator, if you know what i mean.

3:
ZAO TSE LICKS THE FACE OF THE NAKED GIRL.

Voice off panel: STOP!! LET HER GO!

4:
ZAO TSE GRABS NAKED GIRL'S BREAST.

Zao tse: let her go? Why? Where? WITH YOU?? you don't seem to be aware of the situation you got yourself in, milton.


























PAGE 12: 5 PANELS.

1:
OPEN SHOT, WE CAN SEE ZAO TSE, GROPPING THE GIRL, AND THE MAN ZAO TSE IS TALKING TO. A MALE OTTER, THE MALE OTTER IS TIED WITH CHAINS TO A WALL, HE WAS BEATEN BADLY.

Tied otter: LET MY DAUGHTER GO NOW, YOU DAMNED MANIAC!!

zao tse: NO!! SHE IS MINE NOW! I WILL DO THINGS TO HER, THINGS A MAN SHOULD NEVER DO TO A GIRL. AND I WILL DO SUCH THINGS, BECAUSE YOU FAILED ME, YOU MISERABLE PILE OF CRAP!!

zao tse: you had one job, PROTECT THE FIRST CARGO OF DRAGON TEARS! And you failed me, you lost over three million dollars...TO MISTER WOO'S MEN!? ARE YOU KIDDING ME?! YOU LET THAT FAGGOT STEAL FROM YOU...FROM ME!!

2:
ZAO TSE THROWS THE GIRL AWAY.

Zao tse: i don't even like otters...but i will rape your daughter so many times, even her grandsons will walk funny! ...if i don't wreck her for good, that is.

3:
SHASHA, A TIGRESS, TAPS HER WRISTWATCH.

SHASHA: time's up, boss.

Zao tse off panel: ok, shasha...as always, you spoil my parties.

4:
ZAO TSE TAKES NAKED GIRL FROM THE GROUND.

Zao tse: come here...cherry? Mary? Whatever your damn name is. I want you to see what happens to your dad

5:
ZAO TSE FACES TIED OTTER.

Zao tse: i am going to kill you now, in front of your naked and soon to be raped again daughter. Any last words for her?

Tied otter: mary---i---i am sorry---I NEVER WANTED YOU TO GET INVOLVED IN THIS! ALL I WANTED FOR YOU WAS THE LIFE I NEVER GOT FOR MYSELF! I AM SORRY, MARY—I AM---







PAGE 13: SPLASH PAGE.

ZAO TSE STABS TIED OTTER'S CHEST WITH HIS FIST. MARY LOOKS TERRIFIED

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