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Stop playing around and get those soil readings. We need to make sure this new field is suitable enough for the enhanced crop I intend to plant.”\n\n“Aww come on dad,” The young mouse cries. “Can't we just use the replicator things the wolves gave us?”\n\n“Now Darick,” His father says. “Our families have been the farmers of our village ever since our people escaped the labs. Our people can't put our faith all on technology to create our food, that's why we got the technology to help us advance our farming abilities. One day you'll have to take over the family farms, it will be your job to provide the crops for our village and that task is considered a great honor.”\n\n“I don't want to farm!” Darick sighs. “I want to protect the village, I have no interest in this stuff. I want to train with the other village boys and fight for our people.”\n\n\tGreen wood valley, for generations the village of Cheyton has stood quietly and slowly growing. Generations of rats and mice have worked together creating a thriving community. Generations of Darick's family have sewed seed into the land feeding the community but Darick doesn't want this. Raised by his father Martin because as a baby Darick's mother was found in the fields dead, her lifeless body covering the boy as if she was shielding him from something. Growing up Martin indulged Darick wanting to learn to protect the village with the other boys until last year, his son's twelve year. Martin began Darick's education in farming which his son hated. They with the other families who farmed under Martin worked the land together each harvest granting greater and greater yields. Between the farms, livestock and hunters the community was always rich in food. Soon the Darkfang wolf pack came offering in trade for some crop technology and friendship. A year later they see the results of not only greater yields of crop but larger livestock. The Darkfangs assist them still never forcing themselves on the village but always where quick to help when asked. \n\n\tThan, the day came... Darick was in the field when an uneasy darkness came over the land. The mouse boy looked into the sky just as the cry came.\n\n“Darick!” Martin cries as he runs in the field with a large sword hanging off his side. “Get inside, NOW!”\n\n“Why father?!” Darick asks looking worried. “What was that cry and why is the sky so black?”\n\nMartin looks at his son looking a little sad but expecting this.\n\n“I had hope you wouldn't hear the cry yet.” Martin says. “That cry is from a creature called a Hollow. It's an evil spirit that eats souls, that fact that you can hear them makes you a target for them. Go inside as I've told you, I've placed a barrier around out home to protect you.”\n\n“Dad!” Darick cries. “I can fight with you.”\n\n“No son!” Martin says. “You aren't ready and this is more than one, it's a hoard of them. I need you to go where it's safe.”\n\nAll of a sudden a wound appears on Martin's shoulder and blood sprays from it. A laugh rings all around Martin and Darick as a creature covered from head to toe in a black cloak appears floating above them with a five hollows. Under the blood hood of the cloak all that can be seen is glowing red orb like eyes. The echoing voice of a hollow comes from this creature. Martin stands face the creature shielding Darick.\n\n“No where is safe from me.” The creature says as his hand comes out of his cloak pointing one finger at Martin.\n\nA cero forms at the tip of the creatures finger and fires going through Martin's chest. As Martin falls back his sword drops sticking into the ground and he spits a little blood.\n\n“Dad!” Darick Cries taking his father into his arms easing him to the ground. “Dad! Talk to me, PLEASE!”\n\nMartin's eyes slowly close and he breaths no more as his life force dies out.\n\n“Oh dear, did I do that?” The creature asks laughing. “Don't despair, you'll be joining him.”\n\nDarick didn't respond, he just sat there on his knees but the hollows around this creature where picking up something that was bothering them.\n\n“Devour him!” The creature says kicking a bird like hollow forward.\n\nThe bird hollow looks back at the creature than swoops in on Darick. Just as the bird hollow is inches from Darick his spirit pressure rises as picks up his father's blade and not even looking up at it. The four other hollows swoop in only to each be slashed in half. The creature's orb looking eyes turn even redder as he comes to stand on the ground.\n\n“Explain yourself!” The creature demands. “How in the hell did you turn from an almost powerless child to this? You're spirit pressure sky rocketed the moment you picked up that sword.”\n\nDarick looks up with black and lifeless eyes. Slowly a hollow mask forms over his face and his voice comes with that same echo as the creature only he seems possessed.\n\n“Such a weapon never makes the warrior and you know it.” The possessed Darick laughs.\n\n“I see.” The creatures says. “A possession. A powerful hollow, why not join me and become stronger. You don't belong with lower beings.”\n\n“I think not.” The possessed Darick says with a smirk. “You see, I'd really rather not be known about this early in his life but I couldn't have you killing my landlord. I'd just be happy seeing him happy.”\n\n“TRATOR!” The creature cries. “You're life ends!”\n\nThe creature starts firing ceros one after another very quickly at Darick but being possessed he dodges with ease firing his own ceros at the creature jumping around like he's keeping it distracted for some reason. Flash stepping around like crazy the possessed Darick drops other hollows as he can with this creature not far behind him until the creature Sonidos right in front of him.\n\n“Shit!” The possessed Darick cries as he's smacked in the face causing his mask to crack.\n\n“Fool!” The creature cries glaring at Darick. “Did you really think you could get away? What where you trying to do?”\n\nThe possessed Darick looks up at the creature and laughs.\n\n“I was delaying you of course.” The possessed Darick says. “It seems you didn't notice it.”\n\nThe creature glares down at the possessed Darick reaching into his cloak for the hilt of a sword when wolves dressed in the black solder uniforms bearing the full moon crest of the Darkfang High Guard all drawing swords at the same time. Seconds later more wolves materialize behind the creature with lighted up rifles pointed at it, the rifles make an electronic sound as if they powered up. A large demonic looking wolf with a wolf headed cane steps forward calmly looking at the creature.\n\n“Markus!” The creature cries with fear in his voice clearly addressing the demonic looking wolf.\n\n“What have you done to this village?” Markus says calmly as he shakes his head. “I'm sorry son but you force this. As the alpha of the Darkfang wolf pack I place you under arrest for mass murder, genocide, crimes against the races.” Markus glances around as the dead of the village start rising up as zombies. “and the use of hollows to spread the T-virus.”\n\nIn the mean time Darick regains control of himself to see the wolves and the zombies. The creature laughs at Markus.\n\n“What's more important Markus?” The creature asks. “Stopping me or them?”\n\nWith that the creature Sonidos away. Markus sighs and looks at his men sadly.\n\n“The virus must not be aloud to leave this place.” Markus says calmly. “Send teams to wipe out walkers. I also want med teams equipped them with the anti-virus transported in at once. In the mean time I need someone to take this boy to an airship.”Markus glances around to find Darick gone. “Alright, search for that boy as you search the village for survivors. Anything not showing signs of the T-virus needs to be hit with the anti-virus and transported to an airship in that order. Leave no stone unturned, the area needs to be sanitized as soon as possible. We can't have this become an outbreak.”\n\nIn the mean time Darick scared to death manages to slip into his house grabbing a backpack he packs dad's plasma pistol, triquorder and assorted items to survive on. On the way out of his house he grabs his hover board than quietly slips from the village away from the Darkfangs. He of course knew who they where but he'd never seen one like Markus and the added scare of the zombies was just way to much.\n\nDarick soon finds a cave which after scanning with the triquorder he discovers is empty. Setting up some a few rocks together he uses his dad's plasma pistol to heat them up and provide him with light. He soon lays by the heated rocks with his dad's sword next to him, the only thing that truly meant anything to his dad and soon falls asleep.\n\n", "writing_bbcode_parsed": "“Son?” The older brown mouse says to the younger brown mouse staring out into the field. “Son! Stop playing around and get those soil readings. We need to make sure this new field is suitable enough for the enhanced crop I intend to plant.”

“Aww come on dad,” The young mouse cries. “Can't we just use the replicator things the wolves gave us?”

“Now Darick,” His father says. “Our families have been the farmers of our village ever since our people escaped the labs. Our people can't put our faith all on technology to create our food, that's why we got the technology to help us advance our farming abilities. One day you'll have to take over the family farms, it will be your job to provide the crops for our village and that task is considered a great honor.”

“I don't want to farm!” Darick sighs. “I want to protect the village, I have no interest in this stuff. I want to train with the other village boys and fight for our people.”

\tGreen wood valley, for generations the village of Cheyton has stood quietly and slowly growing. Generations of rats and mice have worked together creating a thriving community. Generations of Darick's family have sewed seed into the land feeding the community but Darick doesn't want this. Raised by his father Martin because as a baby Darick's mother was found in the fields dead, her lifeless body covering the boy as if she was shielding him from something. Growing up Martin indulged Darick wanting to learn to protect the village with the other boys until last year, his son's twelve year. Martin began Darick's education in farming which his son hated. They with the other families who farmed under Martin worked the land together each harvest granting greater and greater yields. Between the farms, livestock and hunters the community was always rich in food. Soon the Darkfang wolf pack came offering in trade for some crop technology and friendship. A year later they see the results of not only greater yields of crop but larger livestock. The Darkfangs assist them still never forcing themselves on the village but always where quick to help when asked.

\tThan, the day came... Darick was in the field when an uneasy darkness came over the land. The mouse boy looked into the sky just as the cry came.

“Darick!” Martin cries as he runs in the field with a large sword hanging off his side. “Get inside, NOW!”

“Why father?!” Darick asks looking worried. “What was that cry and why is the sky so black?”

Martin looks at his son looking a little sad but expecting this.

“I had hope you wouldn't hear the cry yet.” Martin says. “That cry is from a creature called a Hollow. It's an evil spirit that eats souls, that fact that you can hear them makes you a target for them. Go inside as I've told you, I've placed a barrier around out home to protect you.”

“Dad!” Darick cries. “I can fight with you.”

“No son!” Martin says. “You aren't ready and this is more than one, it's a hoard of them. I need you to go where it's safe.”

All of a sudden a wound appears on Martin's shoulder and blood sprays from it. A laugh rings all around Martin and Darick as a creature covered from head to toe in a black cloak appears floating above them with a five hollows. Under the blood hood of the cloak all that can be seen is glowing red orb like eyes. The echoing voice of a hollow comes from this creature. Martin stands face the creature shielding Darick.

“No where is safe from me.” The creature says as his hand comes out of his cloak pointing one finger at Martin.

A cero forms at the tip of the creatures finger and fires going through Martin's chest. As Martin falls back his sword drops sticking into the ground and he spits a little blood.

“Dad!” Darick Cries taking his father into his arms easing him to the ground. “Dad! Talk to me, PLEASE!”

Martin's eyes slowly close and he breaths no more as his life force dies out.

“Oh dear, did I do that?” The creature asks laughing. “Don't despair, you'll be joining him.”

Darick didn't respond, he just sat there on his knees but the hollows around this creature where picking up something that was bothering them.

“Devour him!” The creature says kicking a bird like hollow forward.

The bird hollow looks back at the creature than swoops in on Darick. Just as the bird hollow is inches from Darick his spirit pressure rises as picks up his father's blade and not even looking up at it. The four other hollows swoop in only to each be slashed in half. The creature's orb looking eyes turn even redder as he comes to stand on the ground.

“Explain yourself!” The creature demands. “How in the hell did you turn from an almost powerless child to this? You're spirit pressure sky rocketed the moment you picked up that sword.”

Darick looks up with black and lifeless eyes. Slowly a hollow mask forms over his face and his voice comes with that same echo as the creature only he seems possessed.

“Such a weapon never makes the warrior and you know it.” The possessed Darick laughs.

“I see.” The creatures says. “A possession. A powerful hollow, why not join me and become stronger. You don't belong with lower beings.”

“I think not.” The possessed Darick says with a smirk. “You see, I'd really rather not be known about this early in his life but I couldn't have you killing my landlord. I'd just be happy seeing him happy.”

“TRATOR!” The creature cries. “You're life ends!”

The creature starts firing ceros one after another very quickly at Darick but being possessed he dodges with ease firing his own ceros at the creature jumping around like he's keeping it distracted for some reason. Flash stepping around like crazy the possessed Darick drops other hollows as he can with this creature not far behind him until the creature Sonidos right in front of him.

“Shit!” The possessed Darick cries as he's smacked in the face causing his mask to crack.

“Fool!” The creature cries glaring at Darick. “Did you really think you could get away? What where you trying to do?”

The possessed Darick looks up at the creature and laughs.

“I was delaying you of course.” The possessed Darick says. “It seems you didn't notice it.”

The creature glares down at the possessed Darick reaching into his cloak for the hilt of a sword when wolves dressed in the black solder uniforms bearing the full moon crest of the Darkfang High Guard all drawing swords at the same time. Seconds later more wolves materialize behind the creature with lighted up rifles pointed at it, the rifles make an electronic sound as if they powered up. A large demonic looking wolf with a wolf headed cane steps forward calmly looking at the creature.

“Markus!” The creature cries with fear in his voice clearly addressing the demonic looking wolf.

“What have you done to this village?” Markus says calmly as he shakes his head. “I'm sorry son but you force this. As the alpha of the Darkfang wolf pack I place you under arrest for mass murder, genocide, crimes against the races.” Markus glances around as the dead of the village start rising up as zombies. “and the use of hollows to spread the T-virus.”

In the mean time Darick regains control of himself to see the wolves and the zombies. The creature laughs at Markus.

“What's more important Markus?” The creature asks. “Stopping me or them?”

With that the creature Sonidos away. Markus sighs and looks at his men sadly.

“The virus must not be aloud to leave this place.” Markus says calmly. “Send teams to wipe out walkers. I also want med teams equipped them with the anti-virus transported in at once. In the mean time I need someone to take this boy to an airship.”Markus  glances around to find Darick gone. “Alright, search for that boy as you search the village for survivors. Anything not showing signs of the T-virus needs to be hit with the anti-virus and transported to an airship in that order. Leave no stone unturned, the area needs to be sanitized as soon as possible. We can't have this become an outbreak.”

In the mean time Darick scared to death manages to slip into his house grabbing a backpack he packs dad's plasma pistol, triquorder and assorted items to survive on. On the way out of his house he grabs his hover board than quietly slips from the village away from the Darkfangs. He of course knew who they where but he'd never seen one like Markus and the added scare of the zombies was just way to much.

Darick soon finds a cave which after scanning with the triquorder he discovers is empty. Setting up some a few rocks together he uses his dad's plasma pistol to heat them up and provide him with light. He soon lays by the heated rocks with his dad's sword next to him, the only thing that truly meant anything to his dad and soon falls asleep.

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