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Warning this part gets really dark and the killer shows up.", "description_bbcode_parsed": "I'm splitting this up into 3 parts as it would be one really long read if I didn't. Warning this part gets really dark and the killer shows up.", "writing": "Part 3\nThe Weekend of Hell\nRevisited\nFriday Night\n\nMako just came home from school to start his weekend and Halloween was just around the corner. He headed upstairs to put his stuff away and to grab his swords to practice with. Mako grabbed them from under his bed for safe keeping as no one would injure themselves on them by accident.\n\nHe grabs the blades from under the bed and places them on top of his bed. He slides the blades from there sheaf and takes a closer look at the steel to make sure there clean and sharp enough to kill someone. After a close inspection he notices something on them that shouldn’t be there.\n\n“This looks like dried blood and I wonder how it got there” though Mako while he couldn’t recall the last time he used them recently.\n\nMako just shrugged this off and took them downstairs to go outside and practice like he did almost every weekend. He went outside to practice and was in his own little world at that point where no one could bug him.\n\nOne hour later\n\nIn the front of the house sirens could be heard and Mako stopped what he was doing to investigate. He put the swords back in there sheaf’s and was about to walk around to the front yard when we heard a loud noise behind him. He turned around and saw a dead body on the ground as Mako went over to get a closer look. The body had a bag and a rope around there neck as you couldn’t tell who it was. The rope looked like it was hanging off the tree for a while.\n\n“The killer was here and it’s, leaving a message for me” thought Mako wondering who it is.\n\nMako took the bag of the dead body and recognized the fur instantly. \n\n“It’s Dante, Xerxes dad. He’s going to be distraught when he finds out what happened to his farther” said Mako quite shocked at this development.\n\nMako didn’t touch the body and headed out to the front yard to see what was going on.\n\nAs Mako got to the front yard he saw a couple police cruisers, a van and an ambulance in front of his house. He wasn’t sure what to make of the situation and headed closer to see what was going on. As he got closer he saw a pile of dead bodies in front of his house that were placed in a way to form a word. It read killer with blood going towards the house. The bodies were all cut up pretty badly as some were missing eyes and other body parts from them.\n\n“Who could of have done, this” thought Mako while looking at the bodies to see if he recognized any of them.\n\nHe realized it was all the students missing from school and all of them tortured him two weeks ago. A cop walked up to him and put his paw around him and tried to comfort him with this ordeal.\n\n“I’m sorry you have to deal with this ordeal and see all these kids, dead in front of your house. Do you know any of them?” asked the cop while trying to sound comforting.\n\n“All of them, as they tortured me two weeks ago at school about a few things. I swore I would get revenge on them, one day but I had nothing to do with this. Xerxes dad is in the back yard who fell down right in front of me” said Mako while not telling the cops he’s had huge time gaps that he can’t remember.\n\n“Thank you and if we have anything else to ask we will come find you, so don’t leave town. Also go see your sister she worried about you. She’s standing by the cruiser over there” said the cop pointing to the car.\n\t \nMako headed over to Maria while quiet concern at what was going on and wondered who was doing this to them. They stood there comforting each other until a cop came up to them with a sad look on his face.\n\n“Your great grand farther, Dorian was a great detective from the nineteen twenties who solved one of the worse crimes in Pouncefield history. Your dad died, on the way back home from his car, losing control and crashing right into a transport truck on the bridge. From what we know, someone remotely set it up, to go off at a certain time to kill him. I am so sorry for telling you, kids this as you shouldn’t have to deal with this” said the cop as he looked quiet sad and could only imagine what those two were going through right now.\n\nMako and Maria held each other close as they cried into each other arms while not even being able to form words as the pain was too much bear for ether of them at this very moment. Mako tried to shield Maria from looking at bodies as much as possible as she only could see the cop car in front of her.\n\nMeanwhile \n\nThe killer was looking on at the grey house and enjoying all the carnage that they caused.\n\n“Enjoy, your peace for one day, as the rest of you die Sunday night” thought the killer.\n\t\nCouple hours later\n\nTheir mom and a female fox detective came up to the two siblings. The mom had a look a sadness on her face but also joy at what she still had left.\n\n“You’re allowed to go back inside and we will have this cleaned up by the morning” said the fox.\n\n“Thank you and I don’t know how much more, my kids and I can take this day” said the mom.\n\nThe three of them headed inside and all went into the master bedroom as none of them wanted to be alone tonight. They were all afraid the killer would strike again soon. They all curled up in bed and feel a sleep for a bit.\n\n3:00 am\n\nMako got up to get a drink of warm milk to see if it would help him sleep a bit better. He headed down into the kitchen and heard some other noises but thought it was just the house or coming from outside so he didn’t put any thought to it. Mako began to open the fridge to get the milk out only to get hit in the back of the head with something causing him to get knocked out.\n\n“The boss wants to talk to, this one really bad. He’s his biggest fan after all” said a voice and the last thing Mako heard.\n", "writing_bbcode_parsed": "Part 3
The Weekend of Hell
Revisited
Friday Night

Mako just came home from school to start his weekend and Halloween was just around the corner. He headed upstairs to put his stuff away and to grab his swords to practice with.  Mako grabbed them from under his bed for safe keeping as no one would injure themselves on them by accident.

He grabs the blades from under the bed and places them on top of his bed. He slides the blades from there sheaf and takes a closer look at the steel to make sure there clean and sharp enough to kill someone. After a close inspection he notices something on them that shouldn’t be there.

“This looks like dried blood and I wonder how it got there” though Mako while he couldn’t recall the last time he used them recently.

Mako just shrugged this off and took them downstairs to go outside and practice like he did almost every weekend. He went outside to practice and was in his own little world at that point where no one could bug him.

One hour later

In the front of the house sirens could be heard and Mako stopped what he was doing to investigate. He put the swords back in there sheaf’s and was about to walk around to the front yard when we heard a loud noise behind him. He turned around and saw a dead body on the ground as Mako went over to get a closer look. The body had a bag and a rope around there neck as you couldn’t tell who it was. The rope looked like it was hanging off the tree for a while.

“The killer was here and it’s, leaving a message for me” thought Mako wondering who it is.

Mako took the bag of the dead body and recognized the fur instantly.

“It’s Dante, Xerxes dad. He’s going to be distraught when he finds out what happened to his farther” said Mako quite shocked at this development.

Mako didn’t touch the body and headed out to the front yard to see what was going on.

As Mako got to the front yard he saw a couple police cruisers, a van and an ambulance in front of his house. He wasn’t sure what to make of the situation and headed closer to see what was going on. As he got closer he saw a pile of dead bodies in front of his house that were placed in a way to form a word. It read killer with blood going towards the house. The bodies were all cut up pretty badly as some were missing eyes and other body parts from them.

“Who could of have done, this” thought Mako while looking at the bodies to see if he recognized any of them.

He realized it was all the students missing from school and all of them tortured him two weeks ago. A cop walked up to him and put his paw around him and tried to comfort him with this ordeal.

“I’m sorry you have to deal with this ordeal and see all these kids, dead in front of your house. Do you know any of them?” asked the cop while trying to sound comforting.

“All of them, as they tortured me two weeks ago at school about a few things. I swore I would get revenge on them, one day but I had nothing to do with this. Xerxes dad is in the back yard who fell down right in front of me” said Mako while not telling the cops he’s had huge time gaps that he can’t remember.

“Thank you and if we have anything else to ask we will come find you, so don’t leave town. Also go see your sister she worried about you. She’s standing by the cruiser over there” said the cop pointing to the car.
\t
Mako headed over to Maria while quiet concern at what was going on and wondered who was doing this to them. They stood there comforting each other until a cop came up to them with a sad look on his face.

“Your great grand farther, Dorian was a great detective from the nineteen twenties who solved one of the worse crimes in Pouncefield history. Your dad died, on the way back home from his car, losing control and crashing right into a transport truck on the bridge. From what we know, someone remotely set it up, to go off at a certain time to kill him. I am so sorry for telling you, kids this as you shouldn’t have to deal with this” said the cop as he looked quiet sad and could only imagine what those two were going through right now.

Mako and Maria held each other close as they cried into each other arms while not even being able to form words as the pain was too much bear for ether of them at this very moment. Mako tried to shield Maria from looking at bodies as much as possible as she only could see the cop car in front of her.

Meanwhile

The killer was looking on at the grey house and enjoying all the carnage that they caused.

“Enjoy, your peace for one day, as the rest of you die Sunday night” thought the killer.
\t
Couple hours later

Their mom and a female fox detective came up to the two siblings. The mom had a look a sadness on her face but also joy at what she still had left.

“You’re allowed to go back inside and we will have this cleaned up by the morning” said the fox.

“Thank you and I don’t know how much more, my kids and I can take this day” said the mom.

The three of them headed inside and all went into the master bedroom as none of them wanted to be alone tonight. They were all afraid the killer would strike again soon. They all curled up in bed and feel a sleep for a bit.

3:00 am

Mako got up to get a drink of warm milk to see if it would help him sleep a bit better. He headed down into the kitchen and heard some other noises but thought it was just the house or coming from outside so he didn’t put any thought to it. Mako began to open the fridge to get the milk out only to get hit in the back of the head with something causing him to get knocked out.

“The boss wants to talk to, this one really bad. He’s his biggest fan after all” said a voice and the last thing Mako heard.
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