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Besides, the people over there got it ready for me this time.”\n\n“So what are we doing this time?” \nSaid Fievel. \n\n“-Well this time, I’d like you to fuck me instead.” \n \n“-Really Raichu? I’d kind of like that. Are we going to practice golden showers or anything?”\n \n“-Well if you would like Fievel.” \n\n“-I believe I would like that very much, Raichu.”\nSaid Fievel, a little excited. \n\n“So then what are we waiting for?“ \nBy the time Raichu said this, Fievel was already halfway into the secrete passageway and on his way toward the YMCA. \n\n“-Yikes Fievel, hold up! I’ve got some things to take along. They’re stuffed animals for the bath.”\n\n“-Stuffed animals for the bath?”\n\n“-Yeah, stuffed animals that don’t hurt getting wet. The normal ones are rather small, but these a rather larger then the normal ones.” \nSaid Raichu. \n\n“Well then, I guess I’ll wait just a little longer.“\nFievel did just that, as Raichu went and fetched the oversized bath buddies. One was a no name stuffed bear, the other one was another bear with a cloud on it’s belly. Fievel noticed that the bigger bear, a brown bear had a hole in it kind of like the one in their one favorite room for this kind of stuff. He figured what it was for, and didn’t have to ask Raichu about it. Two of the stuffed animals we’re Mickey mouse plush animals. Also bath buddies.\n“-So Raichu, these are it.” \n\n“-Yep, these are the stuffed animals for abusing we’re taking with us.” \n\n“-Are we going to the same shower room Raichu?” \n\n“-No the people I talked to, got a shower room ready just for us.” \n\n“-Oh cool Raichu, our own shower room.” \n\n“Yeah so you’d better hold up here. I have a separate way to go from where we are.” \nRaichu pointed, there was another passageway through the vents, that were recently added. \n“-Ok I see it Raichu, so we’re going this way through instead.” \n\n“-Right Fievel, we’re going through to another room. It’s also separated from the humans. We’ll have it all to ourselves. Without waiting for the Y to close.” \n\n“-What’s it like Raichu?” \n\n“I cant be sure, won’t know till we get there Fievel.” \nThey got to an opening in the vents, and crawled out of it. It opened first to a stall room with benches. Hooks to hang up towels, toilet stalls. Which were made special for them. Also special tables that had soft padding for sex. And a very large shower room with drain stoppers, and overflow drains on the sides to keep water levels at a certain shallow depth. This way it wouldn’t get too deep to still lay down on the floor and keep your head above water. It also had hand grips at some places, which Fievel figured were for holding onto while being fucked. Vaseline seemed to be everywhere. There was definitely enough Vaseline for sex, if needed. There was also special gay cream, for desensitizing the anus for easier anal intercourse.\n“-Well Fievel, you going to start undressing or what?” \n\n“-No, at least not yet. \n\n“-Well we cant do anything with clothes on. \n\n“Yeah I know that Raichu. I just want to go a little on myself first before we take our clothes off.”\nRaichu raised a brow, then shrugged.\n“-Well, if that’s how you want to start, lets do it.“ \n\nThey took the bath buddies into the showers, but kept all the water turned off. \n\n“No sense getting em wet, till we need to wash them a little anyway.” Said Raichu. \n\n“Yeah, “Said Fievel, “Might as well do some things to them first before we clean up.” \nThey had a quick look at each other, then without ward, they both pissed themselves. Neither of them held anything back either, they just let it all go. They both knew they had enough fluids they would have to go again soon anyway.\n\n“I’m going to go first,” Said Fievel out of the blue, “-I’m going to shit inside the brown bear.” \n\n“Wait Fievel. “\nSaid Raichu in a bit of hurry, but it was a little too late. Fievel was already sitting on the bear trying to shit, with his wet pants still on. At least Fievel had only got the first bit of his shit out before he realized. \n\n“-Oops, I guess it might help to take off my pants off before I do this.” \n\n“Yeah at least you only went a little.” \nBefore Raichu could say too much more however. \n\n“EH! I’m going to do it anyway.” \n\nAs Fievel pulled at his pants to pull them off as he pushed his shit into them. \n\n“-Fievel what are you doing!?” \n\n“EH! Doesn’t that seem obvious by now?“\n\nRaichu didn’t say anything, as he watched Fievel pull at his pants as he left his shit fill his wet pants. Soon after Fievel got done. Raichu was getting himself ready to abuse the bear, Fievel didn’t mount any argument. Instead, he got to a place where he could watch Raichu’s shit slide into the stuffed bath buddy bear.\n\n”-Eh! I’m going to do it.” \n\n“-Do it Raichu, shit in that bear.” \n\n“Yeah I am, EH! I am Fievel.” Grunting and groaning to let his poop slide into the bear, as Fievel watched.\nOne small chunk fell from Raichu’s ass. Raichu suddenly stopped though. \n\n“-Why did you stop for?” \n\n“Cus Fievel. Quick hand me your pants.“\nFievel handed Raichu his pants. \n\n“-Here let me help you with that.” \n\n“Yeah Fievel thanks. EH!“\nRaichu and Fievel helped each other hold Fievel’s pants under Raichu’s ass. \n\n“-Eh!, oh god Fievel it’s a big one.” \n\n“-Yeah it is Raichu, your far from done though.” \n\n“-Yeah I know. You know what, I’m really gonna end up make a mess of em.”\n\n“So, so just add to my mess then.”\nSaid Fievel with a smile.\n\nRaichu took a really big shit in Fievel’s pants, adding to Fievel’s mess. But it didn’t seem to matter much to either of them. They turned on one of the showers, away from the bath buddies so as to do a quick clean up. This way they could still do more to them. Piss of course was next. Or just spitting a load, what ever the case may be.\n\n“-Yikes Raichu, we made a mess of my pants.” \n\n“-We sure did, we can clean that up later. Right now I want to make a mess of you. Lets put on your clean set of clothes first, then stay in that side of the bathroom so I can spit a load all over you.” \n\n“-Oh yeah, please lets do Raichu.”\n\n“-Know what, I’ve changed my mind. I’m going to beat myself off and give you a blow job instead.” \n\n“Ah, I guess that would be ok. “\nSaid Fievel. \n“I sure hope so, I like giving blow jobs from time to time. “\nRaichu started to carefully lick Fievel’s feet. Slowly, as he did. It tickled Fievel a little bit. He slowly started working on his legs as he slowly worked his way up to Fievel’s semi hard, member. He slowly started licking the head of his pines. \n\n“Eh, oh Raichu.” \nFievel started to groan and grunt, as his orgasm’s began to grow. \n\n“Oh Raichu. “\nRaichu just grunted as he worked on Fievel’s penis. Raichu had put on a pair of underwear, and was beating his cock off as he went. \n\n“Eh, oh god this feels good.“\nAs Raichu could only grunt. Raichu’s orgasms were starting to grow too. He was starting to grunt not only cause of the job he was giving to Fievel, but cause his orgasms had started to grow as well. Raichu was beating off into the pare of underwear he was wearing as he went. Raichu was taking his tongue and moving it up and down the most sensitive parts of Fievel’s penis. \n\n“Oh god Raichu, oh. Oh god this feels good.“ \nRaichu’s orgasms were growing at a slightly faster pace now. So was Fievel’s at this point, groaning and grunting. Raichu’s orgasms had grew to a point that he felt almost like he was floating. The work he was doing on Fievel didn’t even seem like work anymore. \n\n“Oh god Raichu. Oh this fe-feel so, ga-good. Ehhh, auh! OHH yeah. “ Fievel was no longer making any sense as he spit his load into Raichu’s mouth. Raichu also was grunting as much as he lost his load, while swallowing Fievel’s semen. It ended up being a little too much for him to handle, he lost a little bit as he tried to swallow it all. He himself cumed twice, and the underwear he had put on were almost wet enough to suggest that he had peed in them slightly. But with the wrong color and texture. Raichu’s semen load was dripping out of his underwear, Fievel spit a 2nd time as he tried to swallow Fievel’s 2nd load which was dripping out of the sides of Raichu’s mouth. He just couldn’t take it all in as hard as he tried. Fievel’s 2nd load was bigger then the first, as well as his own. Dripping one the floor, and making a puddle. \nThe two of them were both a mess. But a good mess at that.\n“-Oh god Fievel, that was good.” \n\n“-Oh yeah Raichu, that felt great.” \n\n“We should do that more often.” \n\nThe two of them agreed, and went to the showers to clean up a bit. Instead of keeping the pants they’d both shit in, they threw them away. They showered, touching each other a bit as they went, not like it would do anything. Their penises were way too worn out at the time to do anything for the moment. So they agreed to do more later, but after they would recover from this time.\n\n“Fievel lets stay here for a while.” \n\n“-Yeah I’d like that.” \n\n“I want you to fuck me then later.”\nSaid Raichu.\n“I’d like that too.” \nAgreed Fievel.\nThey stayed in the shower room too wait it out for their bodies to recover. They shared a kiss or two, as they shared pointless chat..\n\nThe End. Of part 1 anyway. Stay tuned for. (A New Y M C A Bath Part2)\nPossible full fuck in part2.\n\n\nNOTE!\nThese notes were written before I finished fixing this.\nThis thing is such a fucking mess, I’m having to wrack my brain as to actually writing the original so sloppy.\nQuotes do have a purpose, and extra space sometimes helps a lot.\nThere’s very little need for (He Said, or said a character) when they use each other’s names.\nAnd I wrote this fucking mess? It is such a god awful mess.\nThere’s a lot of unnecessary explanations, along with too much reminder at some points who’s talking, while other times, it gets confusing who is actually talking.\nI hope everyone can enjoy the fixed version better, and understand it better too.\n\n\nEnd Notes.\nFinishing fixing this mess.\nLets just say, it was a fucking pain.\n\n","writing_bbcode_parsed":"A New Y M C A Bath.
Characters in this Lemon.
Raichu
Fievel
Side Story, no exact chapter.
Side story to what!? Forget that, and just pretend it’s a new story.
Why?
Because I don’t know what this is a side story of.
Warnings.
One : Sexual in nature.
Two : Golden Showers (On Bath Buddies)
Three : Scat/In pants, stuffed animals and both.
Four : Blow Job.
Raichu’s new bath night,,. Raichu and Fievel were sitting at the table talking about the TV show they’d just watched, when Raichu got an idea for taking another shower over at the YMCA. Fievel asked Raichu what exactly they were going to do this time, figuring on some of what they did last time.
“-We doing this exactly like last time?”
“-Not really, I have some new ideas for this time. Besides, the people over there got it ready for me this time.”
“So what are we doing this time?”
Said Fievel.
“-Well this time, I’d like you to fuck me instead.”
“-Really Raichu? I’d kind of like that. Are we going to practice golden showers or anything?”
“-Well if you would like Fievel.”
“-I believe I would like that very much, Raichu.”
Said Fievel, a little excited.
“So then what are we waiting for?“
By the time Raichu said this, Fievel was already halfway into the secrete passageway and on his way toward the YMCA.
“-Yikes Fievel, hold up! I’ve got some things to take along. They’re stuffed animals for the bath.”
“-Stuffed animals for the bath?”
“-Yeah, stuffed animals that don’t hurt getting wet. The normal ones are rather small, but these a rather larger then the normal ones.”
Said Raichu.
“Well then, I guess I’ll wait just a little longer.“
Fievel did just that, as Raichu went and fetched the oversized bath buddies. One was a no name stuffed bear, the other one was another bear with a cloud on it’s belly. Fievel noticed that the bigger bear, a brown bear had a hole in it kind of like the one in their one favorite room for this kind of stuff. He figured what it was for, and didn’t have to ask Raichu about it. Two of the stuffed animals we’re Mickey mouse plush animals. Also bath buddies.
“-So Raichu, these are it.”
“-Yep, these are the stuffed animals for abusing we’re taking with us.”
“-Are we going to the same shower room Raichu?”
“-No the people I talked to, got a shower room ready just for us.”
“-Oh cool Raichu, our own shower room.”
“Yeah so you’d better hold up here. I have a separate way to go from where we are.”
Raichu pointed, there was another passageway through the vents, that were recently added.
“-Ok I see it Raichu, so we’re going this way through instead.”
“-Right Fievel, we’re going through to another room. It’s also separated from the humans. We’ll have it all to ourselves. Without waiting for the Y to close.”
“-What’s it like Raichu?”
“I cant be sure, won’t know till we get there Fievel.”
They got to an opening in the vents, and crawled out of it. It opened first to a stall room with benches. Hooks to hang up towels, toilet stalls. Which were made special for them. Also special tables that had soft padding for sex. And a very large shower room with drain stoppers, and overflow drains on the sides to keep water levels at a certain shallow depth. This way it wouldn’t get too deep to still lay down on the floor and keep your head above water. It also had hand grips at some places, which Fievel figured were for holding onto while being fucked. Vaseline seemed to be everywhere. There was definitely enough Vaseline for sex, if needed. There was also special gay cream, for desensitizing the anus for easier anal intercourse.
“-Well Fievel, you going to start undressing or what?”
“-No, at least not yet.
“-Well we cant do anything with clothes on.
“Yeah I know that Raichu. I just want to go a little on myself first before we take our clothes off.”
Raichu raised a brow, then shrugged.
“-Well, if that’s how you want to start, lets do it.“
They took the bath buddies into the showers, but kept all the water turned off.
“No sense getting em wet, till we need to wash them a little anyway.” Said Raichu.
“Yeah, “Said Fievel, “Might as well do some things to them first before we clean up.”
They had a quick look at each other, then without ward, they both pissed themselves. Neither of them held anything back either, they just let it all go. They both knew they had enough fluids they would have to go again soon anyway.
“I’m going to go first,” Said Fievel out of the blue, “-I’m going to shit inside the brown bear.”
“Wait Fievel. “
Said Raichu in a bit of hurry, but it was a little too late. Fievel was already sitting on the bear trying to shit, with his wet pants still on. At least Fievel had only got the first bit of his shit out before he realized.
“-Oops, I guess it might help to take off my pants off before I do this.”
“Yeah at least you only went a little.”
Before Raichu could say too much more however.
“EH! I’m going to do it anyway.”
As Fievel pulled at his pants to pull them off as he pushed his shit into them.
“-Fievel what are you doing!?”
“EH! Doesn’t that seem obvious by now?“
Raichu didn’t say anything, as he watched Fievel pull at his pants as he left his shit fill his wet pants. Soon after Fievel got done. Raichu was getting himself ready to abuse the bear, Fievel didn’t mount any argument. Instead, he got to a place where he could watch Raichu’s shit slide into the stuffed bath buddy bear.
”-Eh! I’m going to do it.”
“-Do it Raichu, shit in that bear.”
“Yeah I am, EH! I am Fievel.” Grunting and groaning to let his poop slide into the bear, as Fievel watched.
One small chunk fell from Raichu’s ass. Raichu suddenly stopped though.
“-Why did you stop for?”
“Cus Fievel. Quick hand me your pants.“
Fievel handed Raichu his pants.
“-Here let me help you with that.”
“Yeah Fievel thanks. EH!“
Raichu and Fievel helped each other hold Fievel’s pants under Raichu’s ass.
“-Eh!, oh god Fievel it’s a big one.”
“-Yeah it is Raichu, your far from done though.”
“-Yeah I know. You know what, I’m really gonna end up make a mess of em.”
“So, so just add to my mess then.”
Said Fievel with a smile.
Raichu took a really big shit in Fievel’s pants, adding to Fievel’s mess. But it didn’t seem to matter much to either of them. They turned on one of the showers, away from the bath buddies so as to do a quick clean up. This way they could still do more to them. Piss of course was next. Or just spitting a load, what ever the case may be.
“-Yikes Raichu, we made a mess of my pants.”
“-We sure did, we can clean that up later. Right now I want to make a mess of you. Lets put on your clean set of clothes first, then stay in that side of the bathroom so I can spit a load all over you.”
“-Oh yeah, please lets do Raichu.”
“-Know what, I’ve changed my mind. I’m going to beat myself off and give you a blow job instead.”
“Ah, I guess that would be ok. “
Said Fievel.
“I sure hope so, I like giving blow jobs from time to time. “
Raichu started to carefully lick Fievel’s feet. Slowly, as he did. It tickled Fievel a little bit. He slowly started working on his legs as he slowly worked his way up to Fievel’s semi hard, member. He slowly started licking the head of his pines.
“Eh, oh Raichu.”
Fievel started to groan and grunt, as his orgasm’s began to grow.
“Oh Raichu. “
Raichu just grunted as he worked on Fievel’s penis. Raichu had put on a pair of underwear, and was beating his cock off as he went.
“Eh, oh god this feels good.“
As Raichu could only grunt. Raichu’s orgasms were starting to grow too. He was starting to grunt not only cause of the job he was giving to Fievel, but cause his orgasms had started to grow as well. Raichu was beating off into the pare of underwear he was wearing as he went. Raichu was taking his tongue and moving it up and down the most sensitive parts of Fievel’s penis.
“Oh god Raichu, oh. Oh god this feels good.“
Raichu’s orgasms were growing at a slightly faster pace now. So was Fievel’s at this point, groaning and grunting. Raichu’s orgasms had grew to a point that he felt almost like he was floating. The work he was doing on Fievel didn’t even seem like work anymore.
“Oh god Raichu. Oh this fe-feel so, ga-good. Ehhh, auh! OHH yeah. “ Fievel was no longer making any sense as he spit his load into Raichu’s mouth. Raichu also was grunting as much as he lost his load, while swallowing Fievel’s semen. It ended up being a little too much for him to handle, he lost a little bit as he tried to swallow it all. He himself cumed twice, and the underwear he had put on were almost wet enough to suggest that he had peed in them slightly. But with the wrong color and texture. Raichu’s semen load was dripping out of his underwear, Fievel spit a 2nd time as he tried to swallow Fievel’s 2nd load which was dripping out of the sides of Raichu’s mouth. He just couldn’t take it all in as hard as he tried. Fievel’s 2nd load was bigger then the first, as well as his own. Dripping one the floor, and making a puddle.
The two of them were both a mess. But a good mess at that.
“-Oh god Fievel, that was good.”
“-Oh yeah Raichu, that felt great.”
“We should do that more often.”
The two of them agreed, and went to the showers to clean up a bit. Instead of keeping the pants they’d both shit in, they threw them away. They showered, touching each other a bit as they went, not like it would do anything. Their penises were way too worn out at the time to do anything for the moment. So they agreed to do more later, but after they would recover from this time.
“Fievel lets stay here for a while.”
“-Yeah I’d like that.”
“I want you to fuck me then later.”
Said Raichu.
“I’d like that too.”
Agreed Fievel.
They stayed in the shower room too wait it out for their bodies to recover. They shared a kiss or two, as they shared pointless chat..
The End. Of part 1 anyway. Stay tuned for. (A New Y M C A Bath Part2)
Possible full fuck in part2.
NOTE!
These notes were written before I finished fixing this.
This thing is such a fucking mess, I’m having to wrack my brain as to actually writing the original so sloppy.
Quotes do have a purpose, and extra space sometimes helps a lot.
There’s very little need for (He Said, or said a character) when they use each other’s names.
And I wrote this fucking mess? It is such a god awful mess.
There’s a lot of unnecessary explanations, along with too much reminder at some points who’s talking, while other times, it gets confusing who is actually talking.
I hope everyone can enjoy the fixed version better, and understand it better too.
End Notes.
Finishing fixing this mess.
Lets just say, it was a fucking pain.
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