Her it is the first 12,000 words of a (very) rough draft of my little novel. I've enabled comments on the doc so feel free to point something out or comment on the doc itself as well as here. I'm not really looking for an "edit" but I would genuinely like to know what you think. So if you would be so kind as to leave your thoughts of it below. Critiques are welcome.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/.....it?usp=sharing